 |
| http://nimaru.deviantart.com/art/Pinkie-Pie-Stomping-Grapes-FiM-238852494 |
[Normal]
Author: Walkinix
Description: A surprising series of events brings a young mare to Ponyville, and Mr. and Mrs. Cake find their fates intertwined with their pink guest's as they shower her with hospitality.Manec Depression, Chapter One: A Night to Remember Part 1
Manec Depression, Chapter One: All in the Family Part 2
Manec Depression, Chapter One: The Carousel Family Jewels Part 3 (New!)
Additional Tags: "Closed doors guide one's destiny"
66 comments:
Hahaha
ReplyDeleteSeth, you forgot the title
ReplyDeleteWheres the post title? o_o
ReplyDeleteOH MY GOD I DON'T KNOW WHAT IT IS CALLED WHAT IS GOING ON I NEED AN ADULT
ReplyDeletePinkie thinks titles are too mainstream, so she had it removed.
ReplyDeleteI'm a foal and what is this?
ReplyDeleteThere is no title...
ReplyDeleteOh Seth, you so silly.
ReplyDeleteTHE WORLD IS GOING TO END
ReplyDeleteHonestly, I loved it. I can't wait to see more. =)
ReplyDeleteWho's a silly pony?
ReplyDeleteYou is!
Who is?
Sethisto!
Someone done derped on the title.
ReplyDeleteSuper Bandwagon Jump is GO!
ReplyDeleteTitle-hee,
Title-hay,
Title-hee,
Title-hoh,
Hey Mister Title,
Where ever did you go?
Reading story now.
*ignoring lack of post title*
ReplyDeletePinkie comes to Ponyville. Where's this story been hiding?
As soon as I saw the Story title...I got the Jimmi Hendrix Song stuck in my head >_>
ReplyDeleteI like this premise!
ReplyDeleteWaiting for more of The Story That Shall Not Be Named.
Read the story, and I love it. A charming look into Pinkie coming to live with the Cakes, and it made me smile.
ReplyDeleteGood show.
Please , can you fix the title?
ReplyDeleteThe author should probably clarify that the Cakes are trying to adopt. It's confusing at the start. Apparently foals are brought in by the stork??
ReplyDeleteStill no title, eh, Seth?
ReplyDelete"Dad, where do baby foals come from?"
ReplyDelete"The Postal Service."
"Oh."
Still, good story. I'd always assumed Pinkie just happened to know the Cakes, but I suppose she may not have known them before moving to Ponyville.
Oh, Seth, who's a silly blogger? Who's a silly blogger? Who is? You is! Sethisto.
ReplyDelete@Miyajima
ReplyDeleteyeah, I found that to be a bit of a copout. even faust says they reprodice like mammals. not story-ruining but a little annoying nonetheless.
The writing style bugged me for some reason though. felt like I was being "told" things I should have been shown. and the way actions are described just seems... slow. something just interrupting the flow of the narrative.
Seth you Offcially dun goofed... you dun Goofed
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI'M AN ADULT!!!!!!! >:D
*cue Jimi Hendrix's "Manic Depression" here*
ReplyDeleteSTILL NO TITLE
ReplyDeleteAnd the fic was pretty good.
Seth!
ReplyDeleteYou accidentaly the title!
The ENTIRE title!
xD
- The Jack
I like this story. It's just a shame I can't properly bookmark this page till it has a TITLE!
ReplyDeleteAnd that's how Equestria was made.
ReplyDeleteIt's sad how this story wouldn't have had nearly as much attention as it's had so far if it had had a title.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this, and the duality of Pinkie's personality came across quite well.
ReplyDeleteGood story, I can't wait for the next part of it!
ReplyDeleteMOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
ReplyDeleteThat was cute. Always wondered how Pinkie and Dash came to live in Ponyville, based on the backstories given.
ReplyDeleteAlso, nice work with the whole pony stork thing! I grimaced when I thought about the creepy implications of the Cakes wanting a baby, and horrible shipping might have followed, but I couldn't stop smiling when "try again" meant filling out long form requests! just so random and innocent in the spirit of the show!
Great work!
I'm sorry but... HOW do you make a baby in Equestria? Derpy is the stork? And she delivers the foals from what, Canterlot Babies Incorporated?
ReplyDeleteThat threw me for a loop.
Aside from that, nice story, but the implications of just that one thing made me derp all the way through...
*eyeroll* okay, Word of Faust is that ponies are born in the traditional, all natural organic boy-meets-girl fashion. Not by mail order. Non-canon and annoyingly cutesy-pootsy. Even children's shows don't stoop to that anymore....
ReplyDeleteInteresting story; looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteInteresting idea, I always wondered how Pinkie Pie ended up with the Cakes and them being somewhat older and trying for a kid makes perfect sense (even in the show they look a little older than most ponies)
ReplyDeleteWhaaat the fuck.
ReplyDeleteSorry, no. Ponies fuck. That's pretty much canon.
That illustration of Pinkie Pie jumping on grapes made me feel funny... *ashamed*
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry but WHAT? It's creepy for a married couple to want to have sex so they can have a baby? Get out of my universe, please.
I'd also prefer if it was them trying to adopt, and not mail order.
ReplyDeleteI was getting so confused at the start because I was like "They need forms to have kids? What is this, Nazi Germany?"
Then I was like "Oh, the pegasi deliver them like the stork? That's why they need to send a request"
And finally "Wait...WHAT?!?"
Gah! You're going to feed me my Pinkie Pie origin story one chapter at a time?! Curse you!
ReplyDeleteI like it so far. Also, am I the only one who found the whole "mail order babies" thing amusing? Sure, I'm not gonna accept it as "canon", necessarily, but I liked it as an exercise in fan fiction.
Yeah, it's a bit silly. Ponies have babies the normal way. I mean, kids show, and if we are making fics that are in the spirit of the show we don't and shouldn't need to get into the mechanics but foals are made when a mommy and daddy love each other very much. Then, you know, *mumble, mumble* then bam! Baby.
ReplyDeleteThis could be interesting. I'll keep an eye out for chapter two.
ReplyDeleteHey guys, it's Walkinix, and I wanted to check in to confirm that chapter two is on it's way! I'm planning to e-mail it to Sethisto today, so hopefully, you'll be seeing it in a day or so, (hopefully not much longer, I'm kinda excited about it myself,) and I think you'll enjoy it! But there's another point on my agenda...
ReplyDeleteFirst and foremost, I'd really like to thank all of you for reading chapter one! It means a lot to me as an author that you'd take the time to appreciate my work! I wish I could answer all these comments individually, but alas, 46 responses is a bit overwhelming, to say the least, so I'll break it down into three categories:
Those who praised it: I truly and sincerely appreciate it! You are the people who I keep writing for!
Those who scorned it: It's important to hear negative feedback as well, so thank you for that. I apologize I couldn't cater to your liking as well, but that's just part of it. If you gave me criticism, please accept my thanks: I took most of it into account when I wrote Chapter Two, especially what @Adrian Brony said about my lack of showing vs. telling. Thank you for that!
Those who are butt-hurt about foals coming through the mail: Shouldn't you be reading something more intellectual than magical ponies in a far away land baking cupcakes and fruit tarts?
@Walkinix
ReplyDeleteYour logic is that if something is going to be ridiculous anyway, it might as well go on to be fully retarded?
@Walkinix
ReplyDeleteActually, it was a perfect bait and switch. Knowing your audience, they would assume something prurient, and *bam* hit them with the classic cartoon world explanation.
"No shipping, this is strictly a pleasure cruise."
@River Cocytus
ReplyDeleteCouldn't have said it better myself :)
Derpy refusing muffins?! BLASPHEMY!
ReplyDeletePretty good story you have here. Eager to see it continue :)
Hrmph... I'm still hoping the title will come into play in this story soon. I rewatched Party Of One and have a great desire now to see some crazy Pinkie.
ReplyDeleteI know that a lot of people are giving it the poo-poo, but I think that the idea of getting baby ponies through the mail is funny and very story-bookish...in other words, perfectly acceptable under Equestrian logic!
ReplyDelete@Walkinix
ReplyDeleteGreat fic! I really, really enjoy this one. I liked the idea of explaining just where the heck Pinkie came from, given what we were told in the Cutie Mark Chronicles. First chapter was just great! couldn't find an outstanding gamebreaker flaw.
However...
Chapter two, while still pretty darn good (characters fit nicely, you did a great job with pinkie, just great) felt 15 degrees of cool.
It felt so rushed. Chapter 1 was longer and more drawn out, but 2 crammed a lot of happenings into a tight space! it didn't feel as endearing. And why Ditzy Doo? (she doesn't always have to be derpy guys, she has plenty of background time where she's normal)
Seemed out of place, more for a plug of a known meme rather then having a new well thought out character to develop.
I kinda felt like you didn't need a chapter 2, given how 1 ended, leaving just enough to the imagination to tell a good story and let us figure out the rest.
I still would love to see it continue, I just recommend taking time telling the story.
Also, lastly, the baby ponies in the mail thing had me smiling from ear to ear, that was so freakin clever. I thought you were going the gross way, but no, mixin it up. really, why everyone so whiny about cartoon ponies NOT actually bumping uglies to have a kid?
So far this story is pretty sweet. Pinkie seemed a lil awkward at first but you totally got it to work. Also, the mail foals thing was genius! Reminds me of the whole 'Pray to the Stork God' type of thing. Excellent work so far, can't wait to see chapter 3!
ReplyDeleteFun story, I'll continue reading it. I have no problem with foals coming through the mail, it's a cute, classic idea.
ReplyDeleteI do have to agree with the Anonymous that said Chapter 2 felt a bit rushed, however. It did. It wasn't bad or anything, but it wasn't as strong as Chapter 1.
It'll be interesting to see what happens at the party. I'm guessing the rest of mane 6? Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading.
Chapter two was rather adorable. The conversation between Ms Cake, Derpy and Pinkie is slightly confusing though, its not always entirely clear at first who's who. Especially just after Pinkie first cuts in. But that's minor.
ReplyDelete@Walkinix
ReplyDeleteExcept that Word of God has already confirmed they have kids the normal way. And this this isn't a parody fic -- indeed it's pretty serious -- it feels really out of place to have something so silly like that.
I enjoyed all of it, can't wait for the next part. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI'm starting to see the title in the story now. Heh, I guess Rarity and Pinkie met when Rarity sometime after Rarity found her calling. Though I must say that I'm really looking forward to the possibility of the Cake's finding out about the "friends" Pinkie has in her suitcase.
ReplyDeleteI find it hard to believe that Pinkie would be so mean, but I suppose she'll eventually come out of her shell to become the bubbly, vivacious pony we all know and love her as - except when her insecurities creep in, any way. Looking forward to the next update.
ReplyDeleteI'm loving Pinkie's sudden changes in her personality. That's bipolar for ya! I'm starting to wonder if each Pinkie has a different set of memories... Probably not tho.
ReplyDeleteCan't think of anything witty, so I'll just say it outright: That picture is adorable.
ReplyDeleteThis really doesn't fit the characters, nor rarity and pinkie meeting each other, and pinkie got infinite happiness from the rainbow at the farm so how she came over sad, is kinda confusing. unless she walked over as pinkamena instead of pinkie, but she'd be a lot more nicer than she was in the beginning
ReplyDeleteI really hope that there is more of this in the future. If there isn't I don't get how Pinkie knows Rarity.
ReplyDeleteAlso I hope there is some kind of confrontation with "Rocky","Madame le Flour" and the gang.
Also how did she get Gummy?
I MUST KNOW
I also want to find out why did she leave the farm by herself?
Hnnnng!!! I died of a heart-attack because this hasn't updated in FOREVER!!!! Hah, I remember this came out when I was in NYC :) I read chapter one in a hotel room XD
ReplyDelete