• Story: The Other Side of Friendship

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    [Normal] [Adventure] [Comedy] OC ponies!  Apparently they are done really well though!  

    I'll give it a new image if someone draws something with them!


    Author: The Riph
    Description: A group of five ponies come together to learn the ways of friendship in their own way, through much trial and error they learn the Other Side of Friendship.
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    Additional Tags: Humor, Friendship, Adventure, Magic, Love
    Friday, July 1, 2011 op
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    11 comments:

    1. DaffodilJuly 1, 2011 at 11:11 PM

      Can we stop with the "First" thing? Please?

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    2. moerkoetJuly 1, 2011 at 11:18 PM

      Don't worry, being second place is not as bad as you'd think.

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    3. Aquaman52July 1, 2011 at 11:18 PM

      @Daffodil

      This is the Internet. We're lucky we went without it for as long as we did.

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    4. AnonymousJuly 1, 2011 at 11:22 PM

      Comments, you've told me absolutely nothing about this story so far. Now I'm gonna have to stay up late to know whether or not it was worth the read

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    5. AnonymousJuly 1, 2011 at 11:28 PM

      First

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    6. AnonymousJuly 1, 2011 at 11:33 PM

      This story looks interesting. I early await more!

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    7. KyleJuly 2, 2011 at 12:14 AM

      I tried reading it. It was alright, I guess? Nothing really grabbed me, and I felt like I was being assaulted by a stampede of only vaguely-defined characters. Maybe they need time to build, but I think this first chapter would have been better spent focusing more on a select few characters and spending more time elaborating on them than having a massive barrage of characters with little character building moments overrun the reader.

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    8. AnonymousJuly 2, 2011 at 6:52 AM

      I agree with Kyle.

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    9. AnonymousJuly 2, 2011 at 11:28 AM

      Good as a prologue at this point. Doesn't feel like anything has actually happened unfortunately. I like the characters, and will definitely read the next chapter, but as it is right now the story hasn't really begun.

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    10. KyleJuly 4, 2011 at 12:35 AM

      @Kyle To build on what I said, if you decide to rework the first chapter... Try focusing on the first character you introduce. Starbuck. What's he like? What're his motivations? Follow him throughout a day, maybe give little explanations for people he's familiar with already.

      Or, if you want examples on how to make stories about multiple different encounters between different groups of ponies, I believe there's a fanfic on this site that does it well. I believe the title is "The Melting Pot" or something to that effect, focusing entirely on side ponies while the main six are in Canterlot.

      I've nothing against OCs as long as they're done well, and while I don't hate the ones in here, as mentioned before, I don't really KNOW them.

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    11. WierdplatformerAugust 17, 2011 at 8:49 AM

      I'm on the fence here. It's a decent start, but it needs more flavor and an update pronto.

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