Author: KatalusTalrius
Description: Ponyville would be so boring without your favorite six ponies (and Spike) there to spice things up, right? WRONG. It's like taking the blueberries out of a muffin; you've still got a delicious muffin, now it's just a different flavor.Google Docs
The Melting Pot: Day 1
The Melting Pot: Day 2
The Melting Pot: Day 3
The Melting Pot: Day 4
The Melting Pot: Day 5 (New!)
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The Melting Pot: Day 1
The Melting Pot: Day 2
The Melting Pot: Day 3
The Melting Pot: Day 4
The Melting Pot: Day 5 (New!)
Additional Tags: Background Ponies' chance to shine
157 comments:
Aww...poor derpy..I do like what you did with her speech, you mixed well what most people think of how she speaks, I approve good sir and plan to see more! Finally something good with the back cast!
ReplyDeleteInteresting... I love Lyra an Bon-Bon stuff.
ReplyDeleteThat picture's got some duplicate ponies in there: Applejack & Fluttershy show up twice.
ReplyDeleteCute. But poor Derpy...The speech thing was cool, but why!Why, did you do it to poor Derpy!
ReplyDeleteSeemed a little short, but I'm sure it was written that way for a reason. Good to see some interest in the background characters.
Too many people are viewing this document.
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@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteWell, I was wondering what she'd be like having to be gone from Dinky for the first time (for more than just a few hours, of course). I did feel a little bad making her so sad, but I figured it would make things interesting for her.
And it wasn't intended to be so short, it was just as long as I felt it needed to be. And thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
@Kenrick
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed! I started out with just full-out random Derpy speech, but then changed it to what you all see.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteAs do I, brony. As do I.
Great read!
ReplyDeleteIs this going to be continued or is this it, because I love this plot and how you used BG ponies!
Once again, great job.
Too many ponies, I guess I'll have to read it later.
ReplyDelete~Scratch
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI certainly intend to continue this, though the hardest part will be creating enough plot filling (nothing superfluous, of course; I would never stoop THAT low) for seven chapters (not counting an epilogue, or maybe a bonus chapter or something). I don't plan on abandoning this, though! Expect more, even if it takes a while. Thanks for reading, and glad you enjoyed it!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI never thought there could be such a thing as too many ponies...
I loved it, keep up the good work!
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThanks!
♪ The great Equestrian Mel-ting Pot! The Great Equestrian Mel-ting Pot! ♪
ReplyDeleteOh School House Rock, I always seem to reference you every day...
As for the story, all I can say is that it is a GREAT read! I hope to see more in the future!
@Chris
ReplyDeleteIs it bad that I misread your comment as 'School of Rock' at first?
And glad you enjoyed it!
I think this is my favorite rendition of Ditzy Doo to date. People have done Competent Ditzy with speech impediment before, but usually really heavy on the speech impediment. Here, I like how she can speak coherently with effort, and even when she does speak in her normal way, it's not hard to get what she's saying. Hooves-down the best interpretation.
ReplyDeleteNow if only Ditzy would have more blonde moments. XD
Oh and, rocking start to a story. Definitely looking forwards to the next installment!
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that my Ditzy Doo interpretation seems to be liked, I was a little unsure of it before. Glad you enjoyed the story!
Great concept and characters but the narrative could stand to be more... unified.
ReplyDelete@Adrian Brony
ReplyDeleteHow so?
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteWell, the narrative flowed well with great transitions but it got tripped up when it stopped to try to make a joke on it's own. like the "cake is a lie" thing or that whole parenthetical part about whatever happened with spike.
stuff like that isn't well suited to narrative as it trips up the flow of it.
Oh, THIS is going to be good. Background characters don't get no respect. Well, not in the first season, at least. Give them time.
ReplyDelete@Adrian Brony
ReplyDeleteOh, I see. Well, sorry they tripped you up, I'll make note to change them. The 'cake is a lie' thing was just a random slip I put in there, so I'll probably edit it out. The thing with Spike was an attempt at humor, though I'll wait to see if anyone else complains about it before removing (not to say that you're simply being nitpicky). I appreciate the feedback!
@ToonNinja
ReplyDeletePart of the reason I wrote this, actually. To be truthful, I was half-inspired by an episode from The Simpsons I watched (forget the title; somewhere in Season 7, I think, I watched it on DVD) that focused almost solely on the background people.
Really enjoying it so far. I like stories that revolve around the background character's daily life. It's a nice change of pace compared to the other fanfics
ReplyDelete@Paperpony
ReplyDeleteGlad you think so! I really enjoyed playing with the possibilities, and I've got more I plan to use. I'm actually wondering if I can somehow scrunch Dr. Whooves and Vinyl Scratch in there :3. The fact that it's seven chapters long (at least) is both a blessing and a curse. It allows for different threads to space out over different days, but I have to be careful so as to not close off too many threads too early.
Great stuff! I love seeing more background and secondary characters. Seems like this will be a great series! Looking forward to the next installment.
ReplyDeleteA scrapbook of shipping without a mane character in sight! This should be interesting...
ReplyDeleteAyep, this works nicely. Very entertaining. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
ReplyDeleteWhen reading this I was caught between a lazy weekend feeling or Harvest Moon. Either way, it was a fun little read. I'm curious what other events would happen as the week goes on.
ReplyDeleteIf you're looking for plot ideas, I noticed a lot of the ponies were sectioned off in pairs, only taking notice of each other when the story was about to switch rails. Perhaps there's some dispute or problem that causes one pony to seek advice from others, kind of promoting interaction since we see how multiple ponies view a situation?
I apologize if this is a lot easier said then done (I know how complexity in writing goes...) but hopefully it'll give you an idea.
I really liked the rotating camera thing you have going on where the characters pass along the spot light. I can't wait for chapter two.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of those stories I'll rush to read each new chapter of...it's always nice to see background ponies fleshed out, and the entire town's worth in one story? Well!
ReplyDeletesuperb, smooth transitions between characters and lovely diversity among the issues they face, reminds me of the simpsons episode when they talked about the extra characters and their day. awaiting your next installment
ReplyDeleteI think this is my favorite fic now.
ReplyDeleteAmazing job with this. I absolutely love the background ponies, and it was a breath of fresh air to read something revolving around them.
Looking forward to reading more from you.
WHY MUST EVERYONE TAKE DINKY AWAY FROM DITZY!? FFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
ReplyDeleteI don't normally read ship fics, but this one was nice. The Lyra and Bon-bon stuff was especially heart warming and of course, I gotta know what happened with Dinky now.
Love the story so far. Personally I feel you were a little strong with Derpy's stutter, but outside that this is my favorite interpretation of Derpy I've seen.
ReplyDeleteLove your characterization of Derpy/Ditzy. Her "Phantasmal!" response cracked me up.
ReplyDeleteBest. Derpy. To date.
Very cute and lovely story. Also, I have to agree with a previous brony in saying this fic has my favorite rendition of Derpy. REALLY like this version of her character. Keep up the good work! :D
ReplyDeleteAnyone else reminded of '22 Short Films About Springfield?' only, y'know...with ponies?
ReplyDeleteAlso, the Ditzy buisness got me going 'd'aaaaw.' Dammit!
Either way, well done!
@KatalusTalrius I actually like jokes in the narrative, provided there aren't too many of them. Reminds me of Pratchett's style.
ReplyDeleteAlso, you had me from the opening. As if there weren't already a dozen other fics around here that I'm waiting on. ;-;
Such great characterizations!
ReplyDeleteEspecially Derpy, who speaks utter nonsens, but still everybody understands her, even I.
But I would like to see a happy ending for her.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteDon't worry, she'll get one. Dinky's only gone for the week, remember?
A very nice start. It reminds me of that Simpsons eps. that spotlighted all the other characters that occupy that zany town.
ReplyDeleteNice to see them all get noticed regarless of how akward or funny it got. I also like your take on Derpy/Ditzy, I've read many versions where she's either competent but non-understandable, has a mental handicap or is just plain nutty, it's nice for a different change of pace. Though it's sad, I do like this "kid's 1st trip away" mom moment you've set up.
Looking forward to your next installment.
@ultra8
ReplyDeleteThat was part of my inspiration, to be honest.
And glad you think so! I really ended up choosing this version of Derpy for two reasons:
1) It seemed like it would make the most sense.
2) It's the easiest to write.
This was an adorable story that was a delight to read! The way your narrative focus flowed across each of the characters reminded me of a leaf carried on the breeze, pausing here, rolling there... Never stagnant and often a surprise exactly where it will go. <3
ReplyDeleteI'm looking forward to seeing more of every single character arc you've set up here! Keep it up. :D
@CupcakesNom
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'm glad you think so!
In terms of your metaphor, I'm currently deciding where the leaf's gonna go in day two. It may be a little while, but probably not more than a week.
You could stand to lose the opening segment. It's overly expository and not necessary; and please don't say I in a third person story. The narrator does not exist.
ReplyDeleteJust edit pinkie's first line to say "I get to go to canterlot with Twilight and everypony for a whole week!"
Oh, and "halo-shaped pastries" made me want to instantly close the window and gvive up on the whole story. That's trying waaaaaaay too hard. They're doughnuts. Say so.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteSorry you feel that way, but considering that you seem to be the only one complaining about any of this out of some 20-odd people, it's not changing.
Melting Pot Derpy is Best Derpy. Its good to see some ponies other than the mane cast get their chance to shine in the spotlight.
ReplyDeleteGreat read! I'm not normally into fic's that go beyond 1 part, but this is by far the only exception I'll have to make! Can't wait for parts 2 and beyond. Very eventful and a fun way to mix up all the stories - a great way to shine light on the everyday events in Ponyville. If there's anyway to quench one's curiosity of the BG ponies, this is it.
ReplyDeleteIt's perfect as it is and I would like to see the story 'nurtured' rather than forcefully grown, like many other continuing story-lines. Pretty much, don't stride too far away from this main idea and just show progression in what's already been told!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThanks! That's what I plan on doing. That's actually kind of why part 2 is taking longer than I hoped it would - I'm trying to keep the story flowing in the same vein, though it's more difficult than I thought.
I'm also having to resist the urge to create unnecessary storylines, though that doesn't mean the existing ones won't branch out a bit and intertwine with the others. By far, the biggest obstacle is making sure I'm not stretching them out superfluously.
OH CELESTIA I'VE BEEN WAITING SO HARD FOR THIS
ReplyDeleteAND IT WAS WORTH IT
ReplyDeleteI bloody love this story, I do.
@krypqe
ReplyDeleteHyped up on pizza, chips, soda, and other crap the day right after school let out as me and my friends watch Die Hard and play Xbox 360, I can only express my gratitude to your support and enjoyment in this way:
F*** YEAH.
Second chapter was great fun. And hey, I can totally see where you are coming from. Rather have four good chapters then four good ones and 3 lesser ones.
ReplyDeleteAgreed with what Baree said - again, great read! Quality > quantity. Can't wait for parts 3 and 4.
ReplyDeleteI realized the ending. *spoiler* Poor Applebloom :(
ReplyDeletewtb moar lyra and bonbon
ReplyDeleteFor a few seconds, I have to say that I feared that the author would have done something to Dinky (the war Ditzy was reacting)... but she's just visiting somepony on Manehattan, so it's all good. :)
ReplyDeleteOn the one hand, I'm disappointed that there will be only 4 chapters, and not the 7 I was anticipating. On the other hand, I'd rather have 4 great chapters than 7 pretty good ones, and I can understand not wanting to pad the storylines unnecessarily.
ReplyDeleteRegardless, I'll be looking forward to the future installments.
So good to see a triumphant return! I can predict a little bit of interaction in the next part, looking at this... but I won't voice my suspicions!
ReplyDeleteWas neat to see the Doctor show up in this. And of course, I'm on the edge of my seat at how Lyra and BonBon will resolve this awkwardness between them! Definetely hanging around for more!
First of all, pure gold.
ReplyDeleteSecond of all, I know that gold is... untarnishable, but the Joke that Cloudkicker told Lyra was pure cheese, and It hurted my spleen badly to read it. Its a major problem, but the only one I had so far!
Plenty of awesome moments here - dialogue between Caramel and Big Mac is Like Raining Silver. Derpy double-checking the muffin make me chuckle. Awkward Lotus Petal is Awkward.
Love it. Moar.
LOL "Tranny Smith!"
ReplyDeleteOh, Ditzy Doo
Caramel smirked. “Touche, Mac...speaking of Rarity, what’s with her and your sister?”
ReplyDelete“Hrm?”
“Don’t play dumb. The way they always act around each other, their incessant flirting...and those camping trips haven’t exactly gone unnoticed, either.”
SWAYBACK MOUNTAIN REFERENCE
HAHA!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI know, that was my intention. I follow ButterSc0tch's stories almost religiously.
The background ponies deserve some love, too!
ReplyDeleteSo, your take on Ditzy/Derpy is that she stutters badly, but can speak smoothly if she stops thinking about it and just barrels on with the malapropisms? Neat solution, I think.
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
@Lurks-no-More
ReplyDeleteI thought of it more in the reverse: in casual conversation, she speaks regularly, but with the malapropisms. But if she's talking with someone she actually cares about and wants to be 100% clear with (i.e. Dinky, Whooves), she can use the right words, but she stutters as she fights off the malapropisms. Then again, not much difference either way, is there?
And I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Probably should have said that first.
I think it's absolutely fantastic. You're doing such a great job with it. "Who's the lusty stallion?" I LOL'd hardcore.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing that bothers me is the lesbianism between Lyra and Bonbon, and the implied lesbianism between Applejack and Rarity. I mean honestly, did you have to write it that way? I'm sure there are plenty of people, myself included, who would like it more without those parts leaving a bad taste in our mouths every so often.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it!
As for the lesbianism, I'm going to put it this way: sorry, I appreciate your feedback, but no. I'm a huge Lyra/Bon-Bon shipper. As for the Rarity/Applejack, that was more of a reference to one of my favorite MLP fanfic writers.
Loved the reference to Swayback Mountain. I got a good chuckle out of that. Also, I am TOTALLY stealing that joke about the 'whole truth.' My friends would love it.
ReplyDelete@ToonNinja
ReplyDeleteSweet, another ButterSc0tch fan. And go ahead; it's my personal favorite joke.
I actually shouted 'YESSSSS' when I saw this was up.
ReplyDeleteIt's 5 to midnight where I am, My Neighbours will now be awake.
*reads day 3*
ReplyDelete*bon-bon says hoobastank*
is that a tim and eric reference?
@krypqe
ReplyDeleteThat reminds me, some dude living next to me woke me up by yelling 'YEEESSSS' at 5 AM.
Wait...
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteHot Rod, actually.
@krypqe
ReplyDeleteWhoops, I meant 11:55. Just ruined my own joke.
Way to bring life to ponies sometimes overlooked. The more description and interaction authors create with them, the more all fanfics will have similar characterizations of background ponies.
ReplyDeleteAssuming that authors read works by other authors.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThey usually do; that's often how one gets inspired to write their stuff in the first place. And thanks!
Well, I must say I'm impressed by the way the writer uses scenes to jump in between the characters, amazingly fluid. Not to mention the characterization, all of them were well built, and believable.
ReplyDeleteA pity they're so short.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThanks a bunch! I'm glad you think so.
And I'm sorry; I try to make them as long as I think they need to be.
Awesome story, a fun (if very silly) look at what everyone else in Ponyville gets up to when our heroines aren't stealing the spotlight. I loved it!
ReplyDelete@Twix
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
At this point I desperately want to see Lyra and Bon-Bon in the series proper. Soo freaking cute, those two!
ReplyDeleteCaramel's joke was comedy, period. I felt the urge to write on my monitor, "Wink, wink, nudge, nudge, say no more."
Dinkie is so lovable here with her perfect characterization.
But maybe it's just me but does anyone else want to read more Applebloom stuff? It just feels as she's an afterthought.
@Yahooeny
ReplyDeleteI agree, thanks, thanks, and she was, kind of. But she's actually the crux of a lot of what happens 'tomorrow.'
I will say no more and leave you with that tantalizing teaser.
The applebloom bit broke my heart! That said, this is a really great piece of work. I really enjoy how you segue between their lives and everything is very well written and in-character for a bunch of essentially background chars. :) I really am looking forward to the next installment.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteIt was fairly heartbreaking to write, let me assure you.
And thanks! I'm glad that everypony is liking this so much.
Dawg, I've added you onto the TV Tropes Fanfic Rec list. http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanficRecs/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic
ReplyDeleteThank you and you're welcome.
@Yahooeny
ReplyDeleteThank y- Oh.
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteso when are you going to poSt the day 4? soon i assume :D?
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteAs soon as I can without making it a total crock of s**t on toast, my brony.
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteit will be aweomse as always
Yeayyyy Part Three!!
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteyou're being much too overly critical. also, the story is a 2nd person to third person, told more from the viewpoint of a body transferring entity, so "I"'s are legitimate. "halo-shaped pastries" could easily just be part of his writing style, and especially something that is descriptive can have any number of unnecessary adjectives and still flow with the story, as that clearly does.
@Anonymous Mmmm... Still can't take "halo-shaped pastries" seriously. But that's not that big of a notch down.
ReplyDelete@Yahooeny
ReplyDeleteYeah, I was playing around a bit too much about there.
INB4 >9000 messages saying the links are the wrong way round.
ReplyDeleteAlso, WHY WOULD YOU POST THIS JUST AS I'M ABOUT TO GO TO SLEEP?!?!?!
/readsanyway
quick question, 5 days plus epilogue or 4 days plus epilogue?
ReplyDeleteYAY! DAY 4 IS HERE!
ReplyDeleteThis was excellent and heartwarming. This entire story truly moved me and I hope it attains a much deserved 6 stars. Can't wait for the epilogue.
ReplyDeleteThe links for the latest chapter are backwards: the Googledocs link goes to Deviantart and vice versa.
ReplyDeleteThe links for the latest chapter are backwards: the Googledocs link goes to Deviantart and vice versa.
ReplyDeleteThis was a fantastic story, right up until they started pulling DVDs out and watching TV. It's still a good story, but the DVDs and and TVs seems a bit advanced for known Ponytech in the show and there was nothing previous in the story establishing that Equestria had any kind of advanced electronics.
ReplyDeleteAn update! There's only 2 possible ways to celebrate, and Pinkie Pie isn't available, so *takes deep breath* Yay.
ReplyDeleteHowever, the part 4 links need to be switched, Seth. You got them mixed up.
only the epilogue left? D:
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with the anonymous above. Having Caramel pull out some DVDs feels like an anachronism. Oh, well. I'll just pretend is set in the same universe as the "Luna VS X" stories, where TV exists. It's a small concession that can be made to a fun and well-written series.
ReplyDeleteGosh, I'd love to borrow that Ditzy/Derpy... best characterization of her, ever.
Uh, Seth? You've got the DA and Google docs links the wrong way round for chapter four.
ReplyDeleteYou mixed up the links for Day 4. Google Docs is in the DA, and the DA link is under google docs.
ReplyDelete@krypqe
ReplyDeleteBecause me and Seth are secretly working for Princess Celestia to keep you all sleep-deprived before we invade your puny world.
Another 100 years!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteFour plus the epilogue.
This comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteGlad you're lovin' it so much.
@EpsillonXD
ReplyDeletePinkie Pie is ALWAYS available, EpsillonXD. Especially for making cupcakes with you.
@DoubleMallow
ReplyDeleteYes, only the epilogue.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteWay I figure it is the only ponies whose houses/rooms we've actually seen have reasons for not having TV's. So...yeah. Still, I admit that it may be a little odd.
@Darth Equus
ReplyDeleteI love that series, so go ahead.
And glad you think so!
We get it everyone, the links are the wrong way around. Next person who has to point that out gets sent to the moon.
ReplyDeleteHey Seth, the links are the wrong wa- [/gets sent to moon]
ReplyDeleteI kinda felt the same about the dvds. I can just about accept a tv, because they do have some really odd schizo tech in ponyville (like for instance a fridge, a helium tank, mixing turntables, and hip replacement surgery, but no apparent electricity and writing with quill pens), which gets even odder when you look at manehattan skyscrapers. But dvds do seem to be taking it a little more into modern technology.
ReplyDeleteOne could theorize that they have a technology level around late 30's or mid 40's but with very limited electricity availability (thus the use of victrolas, candles, and othe nonpowered tech) and little use of combustion engines (which kind of makes sense when you have lots of horse-power and unicorn magic to back it up).
For the record, I think they probably get what power they do have from carefully tended stormclouds.
@Escher
ReplyDeleteI thought the DVD's might have been pushing it a little bit, but I figured it would be a minor enough to slide by.
Honestly, the DVD thing didn't take me out of the story so it's fine. In fact, about the only thing that's not fine is the fact that this fic is going to end soon. 3:
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to see what the conclusion will have in store, hoping to see the mane cast involved somehow.
Wait, scratch that, there is something that bugs me. What's with the relationship with Ditzy/Derpy and Whooves/Woof? It's never explained. Yeah, yeah there's always that "it's the fan-preferred couple" shtick, but that's the same with LyraXBon-Bon and you took some time into them. Yes, Ditzy and Whooves feels enough like an actual couple to feel plausible, but I just feel as if there's something missing.
...Or is that just me?
@Yahooeny
ReplyDeleteIt's never directly explained, yes, but there are bits and pieces I dropped around that can paint something of a picture between them. Whooves said they'd been together three and a half years. That lets you know that he and Ditzy are serious, possibly engaged/married. The fact that it looks as if he lives there (considering how he's always there whenever Ditzy is) supports this. The three and a half years, though, also hints that he's not Dinky's biological father.
...I scare myself with how much thought I've put into this.
Big Macintosh beeing ironic... EPIC
ReplyDelete@Anonymous Thank you, thank you.
ReplyDeleteI already dropped you a comment over on dA, but I thought I'd support you over here, too!
ReplyDeleteIt was awesome!
@krypqe Thanks a bunch!
ReplyDeleteStory: The Melting Pot or friendship is magic (Update Complete!)
ReplyDeleteBest fic ever.
ReplyDeletedavenbreezy?
ReplyDeleteoh pinkie, you so silly
@Rainboomdasher Hrm? Not quite sure what that meant...
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThankya kindly.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeletePinkie is truly silly. And diabolical.
I've been a fan of this fic ever since the first installment. I absolutely love the concept of the intertwining storylines between background ponies, and you managed to pull it off pretty well.
ReplyDeleteJust finished the ending. It was nice and bittersweet, and just the right thing to top the whole thing off.
Anyway. Great job with this.
Looking forward to reading more from you.
Am I the only one who got the weirdest feeling that Ditzy was actually the TARDIS made pony, a la The Doctor's Wife? Only, you know, she managed to maintain the form?
ReplyDeleteAnyway, absolutely fanTAStic series. Look forward to more from you!
Awesome finale!
ReplyDeletePinkie Pie- Hostess/Party Coordinator/Mastermind and now Matchmaker.
And yes to the pony with sixshooters idea.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, glad to see that I have such dedicated fans!
And I look forward to writing more, brony.
@Shimmerstrike
ReplyDeleteWell, I haven't watched lots of Doctor Who, so I - wait, Oblivion reference finally coming across from your name...
@ultra8
ReplyDeleteThank you! And chances are that it'll, in fact, be my next project. Maybe as a little REDEMPTION for my small blunder with the DVD player in Day Four. Hint, hint.
Just read all of these. Liked them a lot. Dangerously low amounts of Rainbow Dash though!!!!!!!
ReplyDelete@Interrobang Pie
ReplyDeleteI guess you could say that there's...
*Shades*
20% less Rainbow Dash.
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteHaha. I'm on a Skyrim-prep Oblivion binge =] And the new season of Doctor Who is fantastic. Once you see it, you'll get why I said that. Again, great series!
@Shimmerstrike
ReplyDeleteWell, like I said, don't watch a lot of it. Not out of dislike, more out of general apathy.
And so am I; when it comes out, I'm just gonna drop off the grid. Come back to school three months later with a thick beard, musty clothes, pizza and soda stains on my shirt, and a thick layer of dirt spread all over.
Just as Pinkie planned.
ReplyDelete...Somehow, I'm not surprised that Pinkie would have a hand in things. lol
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI think you mean 'hoof.' It's okay, common enough mistake.
@Vimbert the Unimpressive
ReplyDeletePrecisely; if Pinkie plans it, it happens.
Katalus, can I please, please, pretty Pinkie Pie please with sugar and a cherry on top, borrow your characterization for the RPG me and my team are putting together? It will be basically a cameo, but I love her light stutter and her word-switching.
ReplyDeleteMy address is darthequus (ATSYMBOL) G mail dot com.
If not, it's fine.
Thanks for a fun and funny story.
@Darth Equus
ReplyDeleteI'll email you.
Lovely ending to a great story. I really liked the author's note at the end. Made me feel all fuzzy c:
ReplyDelete@KonaKonaFan
ReplyDeleteKinda like my bass drum...I mean, what?
Anyways, thanks a lot! I figure that not every brony's gonna go to DeviantArt to read the thank-yous, so I might as well give one to the docs-only crowd.
...it's like one of those fancy multi-character stories you rarely get in film...but with ponies.
ReplyDeleteNow I know what MLP would be like if it were written by Paul Thomas Anderson.
The end of the epilogue… *shakes head* what a twist!
ReplyDeleteOh, and the links for part four are swapped…the link in the Google Docs section points to a DeviantArt page and vice versa.…
OH MAH GAWD! I've only read the first day and im amazed its so great how you kept the different stories good time to develop yet tight and linking to each other. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteTHis really was a great fan fic the different stories flowed seamlessly together and i loved the characterization of the ponies that we do know and especially the ones we don't know, I especially loved derpy's story as suits her so perfectly.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work!
Well i'm going to start you off with some criticism. Which i'm not very good at considering i don't write myself but thats the beauty of the internet right? Anyway the ONLY criticism i have is the pacing seemed to quick for the most part. Lots of rapidfire dialogue. Seemed like the characters were rushing there speaches, but that may also be me teying to read to fast just to get to the next part.
ReplyDeleteThat being said i loved the story and what you have done with all these ponies, especially big mac. I liked that he's capable of being somewhat of a prick, yet still being likeable at the same time.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
(And yeah, like i said i am by no means a professional writer, or even a writer at all, so unless someone seconds my opinion i wouldn't worry about it)
Numbers four are switched (between google docs and dA)
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