• Story: Tilt



    [Normal] Trixie on a Pinball? Oh lawdy

    Author: Passport Clean
    Description: Applejack is hell-bent on beating the high score on ‘Sea Pony Symphony’, her favorite pinball machine. Unfortunately the game has a dangerous twist in store for her. Will an unlikely retired pinball wizard be able to save her from a musical fate that is truly worse than death?
    Tilt Part 1
    Tilt Part 2

    Additional Tags: Actually has nothing to do with 'Tommy'.

    A 6 star Trixie story?! That's  not too common! 

    36 comments:

    1. Really should have something to do with 'Tommy'

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    2. Prediction: this story will end with Applejack punching a hoof through the scoreboard. And then RD will try to play the broken machine in hopes of beating AJ's score.

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    3. And that, my little ponies is how Trixie earned the title "Pinball Wizard Super Extraordinaire Proffesional High Score Breaker".

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    4. Always gets the replay,
      Never see her fall
      That great and powerful Trixie
      Sure plays a mean pin ball.

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    5. Might actually take a look at this one.

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    6. The description kinda reminds me of "The Tale of the Pinball Wizard" from Are You Afraid of the Dark?. I'll have to give this story a read.

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    7. Well now that's interesting. I wrote a parody song about Trixie using The Who's Pinball Wizard as the base some time ago.

      I wonder if that had anything to do with the inspiration for this, or if it's just a coincidence. XD

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    8. 5.5/5 stars

      Best Trixie story I've read in a long time

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    9. This is one of the odder plots I've seen for a MLP fanfic.

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    10. Enjoyed this one a lot. Well written and a wonderful plot for something as simple as beating a pinball game. Hope to see more from you as an author.

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    11. Trixie's a pinball wizard? That has to be a twist.

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    12. The disappointment of those additional tags. >.<

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    13. This is bucking awesome. Loved part 1 reading part 2 now.

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    14. The odd feeling you get when you know this will be star six within a few hours.

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    15. Notice all the references to the original sea pony scene in the first "My Little Pony" cartoon (that's the original Applejack in the bubble too):

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p45XUXM-TAk

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    16. Ponies and pinball. Yep, this one's going on the "will read eventually" list. Sounds awesome.

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    17. o/~ Call upon the sea ponies when you're in distress...

      Amazing.

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    18. Can this please be a game now? Trixie pinball? Anypony?

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    19. I loved this fanfic, five stars.

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    20. Excellent story. The descriptions of the pinball games were detailed without taking away from the story and making it dull. I'd love to see some fanart of this story because this was kind of a freaky plot.

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    21. Wow when I was like 10 I dreamed I was trapped in a pinball and I had to drive it (I sat in a chair that didn't roll with a control panel) to beat the game and save my family and I trapped in the pinball. And now this is happening to my favorite pony!!!... You know what they say weird people think a like.

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    22. Wow when I was like 10 I dreamed I was trapped in a pinball and I had to drive it (I sat in a chair that didn't roll with a control panel) to beat the game and save my family and I trapped in the pinball. And now this is happening to my favorite pony!!!... You know what they say weird people think a like.

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    23. That big boasting Trixie, SURE PLAYS A MEAN PINBALL

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    24. I really hope to see Tilt fanart in a future Drawfriend.

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    25. Funny, well done and strange story, definitely worth five stars! I love Trixie's characterization in this, too.

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    26. Part 1:

      >"And catchy," moaned Apple Bloom while shaking her head sadly. "Horribly, horribly catchy."
      -It IS very catchy... Curse you ‘sea ponies’ and your spellbinding song ! *shake fist while raising the volume*

      >"Oh come on!" she growled, then gave the machine's side a quick slam of frustration.
      -Mmh... if I remember correctly, from some very dusty memories, you could/had the right to hit the sides of the machine a bit... but, if you did it too much, the flippers locked themselves or something, right ?

      >Suddenly her hoof was violently sucked back onto the glass, seemingly by the crack itself.
      -‘Sea Pony Symphony’ : It will deliver an experience SO attracting, with its novel décor and catchy music, that you will literally be ‘’sucked’’ into it. ;)
      *From the maker of Jumanjii and the Necronomicon 9000.*

      >The player who set it had no peer and never will, so it stands to reason that you are a cheater.
      -Great... the machine is apparently ‘’ruled’’ by the ghost-image of a pony with an ego the size of the moon, not much brain apparently, and that is a sore-looser ? (I already can guess what G.A.P. stands for)

      >adding her beautiful voice to the machine's choir. "Call upon the sea ponies when you're in distress…"
      -You know... I think it would actually be interesting, to her Sweetie Belle sing that song. ;)

      >Applejack cussed like a pegasus army veteran
      -Shouldn’t she have said ‘earth pony army/earth army’, since she’s one and most likely to refer to the branch of army more closely related to her ? ...unles, here, ‘’pegasus’’ is supposed to be the equivalent of ‘’sailor’’ ?

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    27. @Nova25
      Part 2:

      >she was able to grab the sea pony outside of it in a fearsome bear hug.
      -‘Bear Hug’, the ONLY hug for manly ponies who don’t fear to break their spine ! ;)

      > "Eyup," said Big Macintosh. "But I got a question. Why put a dangerous security spell on a pinball machine anyway?"
      -That’s my question too.
      That, and... I’m very sure it must be illegal to put a huge security spell that can trap you for YEARS against your will, act as a jury/judge/executioner, and can potentially KILL you (whatever if it was designed like that to beginning with, or if it evolved by itself)... especially on a simple pinball machine ?

      >"No pinball feat is impossible for us! Once we are reunited the amusement halls of Equestria will tremble before our combined greatness!"
      -Honestly, I have seen evil uncontrollable AIs with better plans/goals than that... and 1or2 a bit sillier.
      I mean... her objective is to get super-ultimate-pinball powers, by KILLING other ponies for them ? That’s one dumb ‘’AI’’.

      >"I got that high score by cheating! Your whole existence is a lie!"
      >'TILT!' flashed the machine's screen.
      -Well...? That was very anti-climatic ?

      >but for every Ponyville there's a dozen other towns where they still speak my name with awe. "
      -Yeah, ‘THAT’ is the right idea... The contrary is a thing that is way too common, and slightly annoying when you think about it.
      I mean, most people (and thus stories) tend to display Trixie as if the whole PLANET(not just Equestria) knew about the small problem she had in Ponyville (which, really, wasn’t even half her fault), while also blowing the event completely out-of-proportion (as if she had committed a vile crime).
      The event in Ponyville, *IF* other towns heard about it, may have hurt her general reputation a bit, but nothing like we see in SO MANY stories...

      >Big Macintosh pushed a sizable rock on top of the whole thing afterward just to be safe
      -Was it Tom ? ;)

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      Well, this was a relatively simple idea, yet also a pretty original one. Some bonus points for the ‘Sea Ponies’ too... and, well, the obvious reference to Pinball Wizard Machine.
      It was an interesting story, though I must *raise an eyebrow* at the fact that the ‘’AI-spirit-thingy’’ wanted to kill a whole family, just to drain their ‘’pinball skills’’ and give them to Trixie ? It’s not like the AI-thingy was psychopathic, since she seemed pretty fine/normal at the end ?

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    28. This was exactly the right kind of ridiculous. Definitely one of the funniest stories I've read in a while!

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    29. This was awesome and ridiculous and I love every second of it

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