[Adventure][Grimdark][Comedy]
Author: Vehlek
Description: Some kind of illness has swept across the land, infecting every pony alive or dead with a bloodlust never seen in ponies' history. Canterlot lies burning, but the fates of Celestia and Luna are unknown. Society lies altered, a new culture having risen from the loss of a central government.Rampant (New Part 8!)
Twilight Sparkle wakes up in a tomb nearly twenty years after her burial, and she's told she and her dear old friends are the only ones that can do something about the bloodlust. They've also changed, however, and Equestria by now may be irredeemable.
Additional Tags: Voodoo zombies, violent ponies, conspiracy
57 comments:
I dont read this, but FIRST
ReplyDeleteBut may start reading it.
ReplyDeleteViolent Zombie Conspiracy Comedy, huh? I think I've seen that movie, but let's give this a try and see if it has some redeemable qualities.
ReplyDeleteZombie ponies? Hell yes.
ReplyDeleteA Grimdark... comedy? Not sure how I feel about that... But I'm curious enough to check it out, I guess
ReplyDeleteInteresting. You have peaked my curiosity. I'll give it a try
ReplyDeleteInteresting. You have peaked my curiosity. I'll give it a try
ReplyDeleteSwearing killed it for me, nicely written though.
ReplyDeleteWell, I love zombies, so I shall read. It may be dangerous. If I dont make it out alive, tell my wife I said 'hello'.
ReplyDeleteIt really doesn't feel like grimdark despite fitting the requirements.
ReplyDeleteIt's going to be an interesting story, I can tell. But I feel like it's kinda slow getting off the blocks. I don't want to say boring, 'cause it wasn't that, but something else feels...missing somehow. Still good, though. I'll be following this one.
ReplyDeleteThings have been ok for me except that i'm a zombie now, I really wish you'd let us in.
ReplyDeleteHmmm... Well... How to put this lightly... Nah, I guess I dont need to. I did like the idea, and it was pretty creepy, but... it was a little off. Maybe just a little too slow for me, like Invincible said. I'm not sure what it was, but I'll read another few chapters to see, and maybe it'll change pace. Well, that's all for today! carry on!
ReplyDeletePretty interesting, and I'll look forward to more chapters. I kinda got this mix of Zombieland and 28 Days Later vibe from this, with a little bit of The Signal dashed in.
ReplyDeleteZombie ponies don't exist, right?
ReplyDelete"Twilight Sparkle wakes up in a tomb nearly twenty years after her burial" dafuq?
ReplyDelete@Celestia:
ReplyDeleteAll we wanna do is eat your brains!
We're not unreasonable,
I mean noone's gonna eat your eyes.
Definitely getting a 28 days later feeling off this one. Slow pacing, but any good horror story is deliberate. Left a lot of questions open to keep me reading, ill be following this one
ReplyDeleteZombie ponies?
ReplyDeleteYou have my attention.
Especially that "Twilight Sparkle wakes up in a tomb nearly twenty years after her burial" part.
No remorse and laughing at death. Dangit, I have this infection already.
ReplyDeleteMUST HAS CHAPTER 2
ReplyDeleteI look forward to more, regardless of its grim dark for boding. Its a good Read!
ReplyDeleteVoodoo Zombies? Grimdark AND Comedy tag?
ReplyDeleteWANT WANT WANT
I don't read comedies and zombie ponies are so... uh...
ReplyDeleteBUT
I used not to read shipping fics and the best fic ever turned out to be about vampire ponies going lesbian on one another all the time.
Off to my to-read folder. It will be like no.20 there... Need a clone. Or two. One only for pony related purposes.
PS.
The post lacks complete/incomplete label.
Grimdark: YES!
ReplyDeleteComedy: wat
Anyway, I love me some zombies so let's give this a shot.
@Bugsydor
ReplyDeleteIncoming attack!
Ellis: Get ready!
I liked how it started, but the swearing and random laughing at the end kind of killed it for me (for the record, it's not that I'm against dark humor--it just felt forced to me in this case--as for the swearing, it just felt random and out-of-character). It is an interesting premise, so I'll stick around and give it a chance.
ReplyDeleteHmmm... I'll have to check this out I think.
ReplyDeleteThis looks like it's be nuts.
ReplyDeleteMaybe just nuts enough to be good!
All i can think of is wow!!
ReplyDeleteI will start reading when more chapters are out.
I'm probably not going to read this, but I will say one thing about the synopsis:
ReplyDeleteIt sounds a lot like Yahtzee Croshaw's "Mogworld" to me.
Can anyone confirm my beliefs? Might give it a shot if it's what I think it is.
So, none of them cares about what happened to Spike? Or Big Mac? Or the CMC? Seriously?
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting, Seth!
ReplyDeleteTo readers, seems that the main concerns raised so far are pacing, swearing, and plotting. Damn.
I agree that my pacing is imperfect and noticeable; the first couple of chapters are a balancing act of which questions to answer first, and when to bring up what happened to some ponies. I actually enjoy incorporating cursing into my stories, though. It doesn't feel obscene to me, just more colorful.
And thanks, mostly, for giving me this input. Writing is practice for more writing.
Okay - I liked this. Quite a bit. Didn't seem slow or boring or whatever, it seemed like a perfect way to start in my mind. Bear's comment put me off a bit, but since I read it and understand the context, I'm totally behind this story. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
ReplyDeleteMore a question than a comment. What do these Ponys look like after 20 years in a crypt? Due to their status as the Elements of Harmony, did Celestia 'embalm' them at the time of their respective funerals with her magic or is Zecora's 'enchantment' at work. It will be interesting to find out.
ReplyDeleteI... what did I just read?
ReplyDeleteI do like the way you dodged Zecora's pain-in-the-flank accent. Clever boy/girl. The imagery's all there, and the setup is there. I don't see how people could call it slow when the story flings itself right into the middle of Non-Context Land. The story itself is pretty well-written, though my main gripe is two-fold:
1) a 2nd chapter would do wonders for context and plot presentation,
2) the premise, setting, actions, speech patterns, everything - would work just as fine as an original, non-fanfic story. I don't see why it has to be ponies when this could work just as fine as a regular, original piece. (Nothing wrong with this as a fanfic per se, just saying.)
wheres my fluttershy ;__;
ReplyDeletewheres my fluttershy ;__;
ReplyDeletelets hope its not the way similar to rarity or something
ReplyDelete@Kenzamaka
ReplyDeleteThat was my first thought too, and what made me read it, but so far it isn't too similar actually. There isn't enough in the one chapter to determine how close it will be.
Anyway, this was pretty well written and fairly interesting. Will keep my eye on this.
I'll follow. Sounds pretty interesting.
ReplyDeleteReading this last night around midnight, right as I was at the part where they were fleeing from the angry cannibal ponies, and about to climb into the sewer, my power suddenly went out. Thought that was kinda funny timing.
ReplyDelete@-TheSignPainter
ReplyDelete>wheres my fluttershy ;__;
Heh. Whelp, there's ya Flutters.
I saw 'Rampart' the first time.
ReplyDeleteFluttershy slaughtering animals? Sorry, I just can't take that in a story. Moving on to other things.
ReplyDelete>Ending of part 2
ReplyDeletedafaq
Not sure I want continue reading this, the "OOC disease" is definitely a new one though. Same goes for Zecora being all "who do you voodoo."
I fail to see how this qualifies as "comedy".
ReplyDeleteStill, a zombie apocalypse where the protagonists are themselves zombies is a bit unique.
Looks like this is shaping up nicely. Looking forward to how Flutters has changed in the interim, and finding out what happened to others in the time skip.
ReplyDeleteZombies = comedy...how?
ReplyDelete...not sure if want.
Scratch that. I don't want. Period.
Laters.
Argh, you ended this single chapter on not one, but TWO cliffhangers. Who the hell is that pony Applejack's assaulting? The mayor, maybe? And why is Fluttershy slaughtering a chicken? Are ponies being forced to eat meat without Sweet Apple Acres to feed the town? I don't see how ponies would be able to eat meat, but I guess I'll find out. Here's to hoping for an end to the deluge of questions and the drought of answers in Chapter 3.
ReplyDeleteI love the story so far, but the swearing seems out of place for MLP. I know I know, it's a horror fiction, but still. Do know I want to know what happens later, but it would be much better without the obscene wording from Rainbow.
ReplyDeleteIt's been a while since this has been updated...
ReplyDeleteDear author, Y U NO UPDATE?
ReplyDeleteHow exactly this is comedy?
ReplyDeleteAlso, a "watchman" means watchpony?
Oooh, they lead the rage-virus ponies back to Ponyville? I sense some actual progression in the next chapter.
ReplyDelete.. when next chapter it been ages and i mean ages since last one
ReplyDeleteNEED MOAR!
ReplyDeleteI need to know what happens next. :)