• Story: Stranger in the West (Update Part 2!)

    [Normal] "At the end I was disappointed, but only because it meant there was nothing more to read... sequel please!"

    Author: Mister-Hand
    Description: In Appleloosa, a stranger sits in the saloon, brooding. When the Apple siblings come for a visit, they find that some ponies are best left alone.
    Stranger in the West Part 1
    Stranger in the West Part 2 (New!)

    Additional Tags: Short, Western, Aaaaaaaaaaappleloosa, OC, Cutie Marks

    25 comments:

    1. More Appleoosa stories? yes please.

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    2. Excellent work here. Very atmospheric.

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    3. You could really feel this one. Quite a nice read.

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    4. Complete? Please, no. There's far too much left to explore with this character!

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    5. Good story, although it's considered poor form to continually jump between different characters' thoughts and perspectives when they're in the same room/area.
      Still, nice and atmospheric with room to build on the character.

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    6. Hmmm, Yes, A Sequel would be nice, since it seems like hes headed to Ponyville.

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    7. Flint...Flint... I swear that I want to think that this is a crossover story. But I can't think of what it'd be a crossover of.

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    8. Awesome read
      Couldn't help but to read Flint in Riddick's voice.
      A sequel would be great with a big shodown or maybe the mane six convincing him otherwise.
      Looking forward for more.

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    9. Loved it. I did not expect for him to take Applebloom. I agree with Select Few, a sequel would be very nice.

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    10. I love Flint, such a cool charicter. The whole time I was reading his lines in Sam Elliott's voice.

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    11. Oh god I had that old westen tune in my head... You know the one. And gods did I LOVE it. We NEED a sequel where Flint finds eaterh death or redumstion.

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    12. I want Flint Journals :D

      He's a character that I'd like to see more of, plus your writing style is very nice. Te stories are rather short, but you've got the Quality over Quantity.

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    13. Awesome. I, too, would like the Journals. My brain screams to know more about Flint!

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    14. @Cador_2004
      Dragonlance?
      http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flint_Fireforge

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    15. Add one more vote in favor of 'Journals,' please. The way you've managed to blend western ethos and MLP is quite simply incredible, and I know I'm not alone in wanting to see more.

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    16. Sequel was...worse than the original.

      I really liked everything about chapter 1. Great characterization of Flint and Applejack, interesting plot, good pacing. But chapter 2 made no sense--Flint's actions are irrational, even for him. And the ending was unsatisfying, with a certain character appearing just in time to deliver the moral. I'm disappointed.

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    17. Flint! NOOO! Why did he have to die? Why did Applejack have to live?




      I would have killed off Applejack, then focus the rest of the story on the manhunt of Flint

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    18. My goddes Celestia, you HAVE to write a "journals of Flint" story. It's not even an option, it's mandatory after ending it like that.

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    19. I would've liked it more if Flint found redemption, but since it isn't like that, journals please.

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    20. I would have liked this a whole lot more if Flints character made ANY SENSE AT ALL.

      I get the western atmosphere and ethos of the story, hell, I loved it! Reminded me of the Bad Apple fic series. but Flints character made no sense!
      He was just bad? why was he a criminal? for the sake of it? but he certainly wasn't evil (hell, he was pretty kind to Applebloom) and in general seemed like a fine ol' fellow that had nooooo motivation to do crime. Why come after AJ? why did any of it have to happen? Flints character seemed only half made, with the only explanation being that it was his special talent to do wrong, which he apparently hated enough to try and get himself killed.

      If there is a "Flints Journal" reading, I hope there is a HELL of a lot of insight in to why this all happened. (otherwise... I enjoyed your writing to no ends author. keep writing, you'll make good stuff)

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    21. I suppose Flink just wanted to die. I don't think he would even go ahead and kill any of the hostages. But then, I could be wrong...

      Very good writing nonetheless, chapter 2 felt somewhat rushed (not enought time to build up tension), but it was a good read. Would really (REALLY) enjoy the journals.

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    22. The second part seems kinda forced. But I knew that Flint would want to go that way, and he wouldn't make a fuss of it (He was removing the bullets from his gun, after all). Too proud for suicide, no will to live.

      Flint's Journal sounds like a good way to fill in the gaps of Flint's past.

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    23. I have to chip in with the sentiment above that the second chapter wasn't as good as the first.

      Story jumped around a bit. Events seemed kind of forced. Flint was acting rather randomly. Pacing was all over the place. It seems like there was a story in there that had the potential to be just as good as the first, but not as much care was taken crafting it.

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