• Story: My Funny Sister

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    Author: Pascoite
    Description: When Scootaloo wonders why Rainbow Dash has been avoiding her, Dash decides to tell a story from her youth, about friendship gained, and friendship changed, in order to explain why seeing Scootaloo has been making her sad.

    My Funny Sister

    Additional Tags: Guilt, Reconciliation, Happy Ending
    Sunday, October 30, 2011 op
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    52 comments:

    1. Crimson_WingOctober 30, 2011 at 10:02 AM

      Yah! Scootaloo And Rainbow Dash!

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    2. wackyponyOctober 30, 2011 at 10:11 AM

      i swear if i actually read sad stories, my sad-o-meter would break.

      I would partake, but I'm sad enough from my dog dying last night. =|

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    3. Pinkamina Diane PieOctober 30, 2011 at 10:13 AM

      Will read later…

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    4. Pinkamina Diane PieOctober 30, 2011 at 10:16 AM

      @wackyteen

      Sorry to hear about your dog.

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    5. Topsy KrettsOctober 30, 2011 at 10:21 AM

      @wackyteen

      Really sorry to about that, cause I know that feel man.

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    6. DublioOctober 30, 2011 at 10:22 AM

      @wackyteen

      Is that why you were in a bad mood last night? Aww. -hugs-

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    7. Over the RainbowOctober 30, 2011 at 10:23 AM

      Want to read now.

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    8. keneticpestOctober 30, 2011 at 10:23 AM

      Aww, we really need a "heartwarming" tag, or do we already have one of those? If we don't, somepony please make one!

      *spoilers*
      I actually did not expect for Ditzy (Or Derpy, if you prefer) too be RD's friend, but it was definitely a good use of writing keeping her anonymous until the end. That was a subconscious motivational factor that I enjoyed. Good read.

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    9. Adam CrockerOctober 30, 2011 at 10:24 AM

      @wackyteen

      Aaaahhhh...I'm really sorry to hear about that. Losing an animal companion can be tough. You have my condolences and sympathy. :(

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    10. Ergo CogitoOctober 30, 2011 at 10:29 AM

      That crashing scene was kind of jarring. That was the kind of description I expect from [grim/dark]. Still a pretty good story.

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    11. Emperor JewelOctober 30, 2011 at 10:31 AM

      That was great. I loved this story. It makes me weep with happy sad tears.

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    12. AlanJCastonguayOctober 30, 2011 at 10:32 AM

      Sad Scootaloo and Dash with happy ending? mmm...

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    13. Spikely WhiplashOctober 30, 2011 at 10:34 AM

      I thought it was going to be Surprise. But I like who it turned out to be.

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    14. Wisdom ThumbsOctober 30, 2011 at 10:37 AM

      Thumbs all the way up.

      I only wish I knew how to comment on the website where the story is archived (is it possible to comment there?).

      I love good sadfics. And of all the ones I've read over the last few months, this ranks among the best.

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    15. AnonymousOctober 30, 2011 at 10:44 AM

      This is annoying. I have an idea for a sadfic right as every new story out there is sad... maybe I'll wait until the trend passes *hipster glasses*.

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    16. derpy dash typhlosionOctober 30, 2011 at 10:48 AM

      yay it all makes sense now

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    17. Apple BloomOctober 30, 2011 at 10:48 AM

      Ah' didn' even read thuh genre tags b'fore Ah' read it. Ah' don' wanna read an'eh more sad stories, but this one's'more bittersweet than sad. So long as ya ignore Dash's comment in Winter Wrap-up, it all works-out fine.

      It feels like her parents brushed-off the crash a lil' too easy, though. It was mos'ly Dash's fault she was even out there, so they should'a had some anger with her.

      @Applebloomismywaifu
      Ah'm very disappointed with you. And disturbed.

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    18. HrwkingOctober 30, 2011 at 10:57 AM

      That was awesome I didn't figure out it was ditzy until the part about winter wrap up and her daughter. Very nicely done

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    19. DublioOctober 30, 2011 at 11:01 AM

      I'm glad the author did a revision on the story before submitting it to ED. They made the story better. :D

      It was a heartwarming and sad story, but at least Rainbow's friend doesn't hate her for it.

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    20. iAndsterOctober 30, 2011 at 11:08 AM

      The moment Rainbow said "My personal weather team" I immediately knew it was Ditzy.

      I have no idea why.

      Anyways, I loved this story o.o

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    21. derpy dash typhlosionOctober 30, 2011 at 11:15 AM

      honestly this should be the official hasbro explanation for dash/derpy/scoot relationship because it pieces all 3 together that actually makes really great sense!

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    22. DreadedCandiru2October 30, 2011 at 11:16 AM

      This does explain a lot, doesn't it? Ditzy's random black-outs as well as Dashie's need to watch out for her during winter wrap-up and her zooming through life to avoid the feared confrontation all seem to proceed from this.

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    23. Rainbow_FlashOctober 30, 2011 at 11:23 AM

      God, I love this story... And for some reason, it seems like it should be in the show anyway... It might be a little to dark to actually put in there, but it would be so touching...

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    24. RinellaWasHereOctober 30, 2011 at 11:24 AM

      @wackyteen

      *sympathy hug* I know the feeling, man.

      Damn, this story was god. Not perfect, but very good. I'll admit , it didn't realize it was Derpy until you mentioned the daughter.

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    25. SgtGarandOctober 30, 2011 at 11:26 AM

      Happy Ending?? Pfft xD .....ok, enough with the jokes, this one is added to my reading list.

      @wackyteen Sorry to hear about your dog, I can totally relate

      @Applebloom lol, you got a creeper. And, I don't think i've seen you around here much. Glad to see you have internet at the farm.

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    26. Sketch ScribblesOctober 30, 2011 at 11:49 AM

      right up until the story snapped back to the present, my mind kept going, "that's Surprise isn't it?" and then RD started talking about what she'd done after coming to ponyville, and i was like "Buh? Her? SRSLY?! how the hay did i not even think of her?!"

      though looking back, it being Ditzy answers so many unanswered questions, and there's so many hints that now I'm wondering how I thought of Surprise in the first place.

      Also I like how you wrote it in such a way that it fits canon and manages to explain Dash's attitude toards Scoot and in general, Her reaction to Ditzy in winter Wrap up, As well as Ditzy's general derpyness. Not to mention why Ditzy was a contestant at the best young fliers, despite seeming odd to me given her canon portrayal.

      5/5

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    27. Apple BloomOctober 30, 2011 at 12:04 PM

      @SgtGarand
      Nah, we don't got thuh internet back on thuh farm. Granny Smith always says it's som'thing evil an' that it'll ruin the crops.

      So Ah' use it at Sweetie Belle's house.

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    28. RiskyOctober 30, 2011 at 12:09 PM

      I would love to be able to review this positively, but I have this thing about poorly written stories...

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    29. GaruuSpikeOctober 30, 2011 at 12:14 PM

      Happy ending? Will read. IT'S ABOUT TIME WE'VE HAD ONE.

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    30. RinellaWasHereOctober 30, 2011 at 12:27 PM

      @RinellaWasHere

      "good", "I"

      Ah, iPad typos, how I love you.

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    31. Val YuniOctober 30, 2011 at 12:33 PM

      Very nice story, I liked it. *wipes away tear*

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    32. MuffinShyOctober 30, 2011 at 12:42 PM

      Around sentence where it said Dash had wrote a reference for her to adopt a filly I was like...DERPY?

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    33. JimperatorOctober 30, 2011 at 12:52 PM

      Good story, I quite enjoyed it. It was bugging me at first that there was no description of Dash's friend but by the end it all made sense and came together nicely.

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    34. SgtGarandOctober 30, 2011 at 12:57 PM

      @Apple Bloom haha, thats too bad. Oh well, at least Sweetie Belle has it.

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    35. CitationNeededOctober 30, 2011 at 1:11 PM

      As soon as a I read “Her name’s Ditzy Doo." in the story, I almost wanted to cry.

      This was a good read, although the ending felt kinda rushed and stuff.

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    36. PascoiteOctober 30, 2011 at 1:46 PM

      I actually spent some time researching this. There's usually 3 colts, but in "The Cutie Mark Chronicles," the football one's not there yet as of the race. The basketball one's already got his cutie mark, but Dash said in "Call of the Cutie" that she was the first in her class to get one, so they're different ages. I figure he'd brag more about getting it first if he was younger than Dash, so he must be older. Also, Ditzy appears in the background in "The Cutie Mark Chronicles," and already looks older, so I put her in the older class. Thanks everypony for reading.

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    37. ThomasOctober 30, 2011 at 1:51 PM

      It took me so long to realize it was derpy/ ditzy.

      this really exhibits a different personality in her than is normally seen.

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    38. BronymousOctober 30, 2011 at 3:41 PM

      I figured out who it was when she referenced that "dancing light" being represented as her cutie mark. I have no idea how that equated to bubbles in my head, but its ok because i guessed right.

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    39. Wisdom ThumbsOctober 30, 2011 at 5:34 PM

      @Pascoite

      It all fits together tighter than any other explanation ever could.

      I've already commented, but this story has just stuck with me all throughout the day. I have to comment again.

      This sadfic completely redefined Derpy Hooves for me. I will never look at her again, and using the name "Derpy Hooves" might be problematic. Ditzy is just so much better a name.

      I went through the whole gamut of emotions when I read your fanfic. Masterful control, Pascoite.

      In the future, I want this to be accepted as the fanon explanation for Ditzy Doo. I'm already working on convincing the bronies on my home forum to read this and do the same. And if I ever write a fanfic where Ditzy makes an appearance, you can bet I'll go out of my way to make a reference to "My Funny Sister."

      And you also dealt with the horrors of memory loss amazingly well. It's deeply saddening that Ditzy lost the beginning of her life and had to start all over again, especially since it cost her and Dash all the things that made their friendship special. How hard must it be to look into your friend's eyes, and for them not to even recognize you anymore? How terrifying to know that they'll never be the same person - the person you knew is effectively gone forever, dead.

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    40. PascoiteOctober 30, 2011 at 6:56 PM

      @Wisdom Thumbs Thanks for your kind words. It worked a little in reverse, but I wrote this to feel like when someone you love has Alzheimer's, or some other kind of dementia, and the person you know gradually slips away. I've had a couple of grandparents like that, but thankfully never where I had to see it firsthand.

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    41. AspenOnFireOctober 30, 2011 at 7:33 PM

      This story made me feel sad in a sobering, uncomfortable way that I can't accurately describe. I liked it, but it was more depressingly sad than beautiful sad and left me not with a bigger heart but with a bit taken out of it.

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    42. MelodiaOctober 30, 2011 at 9:14 PM

      One of those stories where it HAS to be text for the mystery to be effective. Not a bad thing, actually I wish there were more of those.

      I liked it ok, but even the final version still seems somehow lacking in....I dunno. But it's all good.

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    43. JolttixOctober 30, 2011 at 9:26 PM

      This was so well done and it made me cry a bit at the end. Bravo!

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    44. AlondroOctober 30, 2011 at 10:48 PM

      @Wisdom Thumbs

      Doesn't it though? Maybe now people will stop making fun of poor Ditzy! And making her wear paper bags for a costume! Shame on you all! ;3

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    45. Joey the JoeyOctober 31, 2011 at 6:41 AM

      An excellent story, good sir. Sort of a bittersweet ending, but more sweet than bitter =3.

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    46. UnknownNovember 1, 2011 at 8:32 AM

      Awww... What a sweet story! It did seem a little odd that RD would want to have "that talk" with Ditzy Doo while Scootaloo was around, or that DD would have chosen that moment to finally bring it up. But other than that, this was fantastic, and not too OOC. And, to be honest, I didn't realize who the "other filly" was until almost the point where you said it. Great storytelling! Thanks for sharing this! :)

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    47. BareeNovember 2, 2011 at 5:12 AM

      Not much to add to what has been said already. Enjoyed the story enough, didn't blow me away but definitely fun to read. Its as good an explanation for Derpy as any. Have to say though, Derpy's parents were very easy to forgive.

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    48. YetAnotherBronyNovember 2, 2011 at 6:57 AM

      The reveal of Rainbow's childhood friend hit me right here (in the heart). Truly great, five stars.

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    49. PascoiteNovember 2, 2011 at 4:25 PM

      @Baree Seeing as how I've gotten this comment a few times, let me say that I like to leave a few things up to the reader to decide, but my feeling on this is that the parent's don't necessarily know the whole story. Only Rainbow knows for sure, and maybe the colts could piece it together, and none of them would have much motive to be forthcoming about it. Dash is loyal, but not always honest.

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    50. DPV111November 4, 2011 at 11:03 AM

      Well this was a really good story. I didn't really have a sad at all. I DID nearly lose it at the "I don't blame you" part. That was powerful, but in a very positive way.

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    51. HagilNovember 8, 2011 at 5:31 AM

      @DPV111 I did lose it at that point. Flashed back to the mental image of her being tended by the medics, desperately trying to say something and started crying right there.

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    52. The CommanderDecember 11, 2011 at 3:30 AM

      When I figured out Ditz's identity, I gasped audibly... It was really really well written.

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