• Story: Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. (Update Part 5!)


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    Author: Lord Psychos
    Description: A quest for knowledge sends Twilight Sparkle back to the old palace deep in the Everfree Forest. Can she learn the secrets of dragons that history forgot, or will she stumble onto something deeper?
    Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. Part 1
    Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. Part 2
    Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. Part 3
    Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. Part 4
    Project A.L.I.C.O.R.N. Part 5 (New!)

    Additional Tags: History, Secrets, Magic, Dragons, Elements of Harmony

    28 comments:

    1. Hmm seems interesting i shall take a read.

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    2. All I can think of while looking at the title is that youtube video...

      "H.A.R.M.O.N.Y Control Centre"

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    3. Also it seams i am the first to take notice of what is sure to be a masterly hoofcrafted piece of literature.

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    4. Hmm, this has potential. Clearly that room was meant to service Dragon Dignitaries, so one would naturally take up residence in the chamber.

      Project ALICORN huh? Perhaps the rise of the sisters had a clear purpose besides sun and moon. The threat of dragons is a very real one...I wonder what dark shadows of the past are going to be revealed.

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    5. Pretty good so far, I hope we see more soon. Reading part of a story and being unable to continue is a regular annoyance and pain that this site brings me.

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    6. Damn you cliffhanger!!

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    7. This is the kind of story I'd like to animate.

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    8. I'm hoping the title didn't give away any huge surprises. Gonna be extremely disappointed if it did. =\

      Very interesting start, I can't wait to see more.

      6/5 stars

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    9. Dagnabbit, I hate it when I find a story that I like, because then I have to read it, and wait for the next installment, and then read that, and... and....ugh.

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    10. Is very nice start. Looking forward to future updates.

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    11. One tiny suggestion: the chapter should end with the sentence "It was the largest mass of teeth, scales, and claws anypony had ever seen." The sentence that follows takes away from the impact of the cliffhanger.

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    12. A rather fun read, good length for something in "parts", with hopefully fairly regular updates.

      Decent dialogue, in character, maybe a couple too many "remember this line from the show?" references.

      I give it a solid 4/5 and an assurance that I am eagerly waiting to see more.

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    13. You got me hooked. I really wish someone would do more with that old castle.

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    14. Good but a little bit forced and quick.

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    15. Darn you, making me wait like this! What's gonna happen to Rarity?

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    16. Hmmmmm... I don't know...

      Would Rarity, the element of Generosity, be so greedy as to steal from the dragon?
      I know she was enamored towards the dragon's gems in Dragonshy, but it looked to me as though she was trying to persuade the dragon to give them to her rather than steal them. THen again I can see how it could be interpreted differently...

      Still, given the situation, would she really be so greedy _and stupid_ to steal from a dragon in a case like this?

      Okay, otherwise it was a pretty excellent story. Still, given that it looks like Rarity's current situation will now be a major plot point, I'm forced to consider the validity of the actions that led there... :\

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    17. It's written well, Im just confused on one point. What does the dragon have to do with the cast exploring historical areas? I mean, yeah, it might easily tie in later but right now it seems like two completely different stories are being told.

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    18. Chapter 3 was... kinda disappointing. I loved 1 and 2, but this one is poorly paced, too short for the amount of content being presented, and suddenly there's a massive pot twist, or should I say plot deviation.

      So, the dragon is waiting for the return of either Celestia or Luna, and I'm guessing Luna, yet Twi somehow calls her there, and they go to search for books? Rarity and the Dragon suddenly seem less important.

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    19. Does Luna have that many dragons that owed her a favor that she doesn't know which one this one is? He's in her castle due to that favor.

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    20. I'm pretty sure I had the gist of this figured out from the title. Still gonna be interesting. I've got a little unfinished Avatar: The Last Airbender story with a similar premise.

      Can't wait to see more!

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    21. when is the next part? i really want to finish this :)

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    22. Sorry, this is just updating far too slow and chapters far too short to keep Trevor's interest. Sorry, but Trevor gives up on this fic. One shouldn't have to re-read the previous chapters EACH TIME you update to remember what happened, but that's what it's taking because of the slow updates. Just not worth one's time, sorry. Good luck though!

      ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

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    23. oh my goodness! its not dead! yay!

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    24. "Show, don't tell," is the advice to most writers. The narrator telling me that Luna has duties elsewhere and so can't save the ponies (very end of chapter 2) is...just not interesting to read.

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    25. An interesting story. Looking forward to reading more. I do hope it comes sooner rather than later though

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