Author: Sir Ginger
Description: A short story set many years after the adventures of our favourite ponies. Spike and Rarity remember the god old days, but Spike still has a lifetime ahead.The Last Element
Additional Tags: Short, Sad, Future, Changes, Sparity
50 comments:
Gawrsh...
ReplyDeleteI simply cannot compose myself while reading into the "futures" of our cast ;-;
But great read, most definitely. 1,000 words of sad is right.
It is sad...
ReplyDeleteSolid four star.
While good, it didn't quite hit home like other sadfics.
"Sparity"
ReplyDeleteOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH.
I quite liked it. Nothing groundbreaking, and it did use that annoying little trope of "EVERYONE DIED SO ITS SAD", but it didn't drag it out for too long. Good job.
And manly tears were shed by all.
ReplyDeleteweird how this made my eyes get wet and made me really sad
ReplyDeletebut the ending made me smile i reaaly liked this
Oh gawd, I almost couldn't finish. I started crying half way through - dang it. Had to take a break and come back. Confound these ponies, I never had thoughts like these about fictional characters before.
ReplyDeleteWhy would you write this ;-;
ReplyDeleteYeah, like Cotton said, been done many times before. But it was done well enough. Short but touching, and not badly written.
ReplyDeleteThis one just didn't do it for me.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure why, either. It is well written and paced. But for some reason this on just didn't pull at my heartstrings like I was expecting it to do.
That was nice, and I don't usually go for sad stuff. It's weird how the only Spike/Rarity fics I've read tend go for the bittersweet.
ReplyDeleteThis fic succeeded. It got my eyes moist. That's generally hard to do when it comes to fictional material.
ReplyDeleteNow i has a sad :(.
ReplyDeleteWho wants to live forever?
ReplyDeleteWho wants to live forever?
There's no chance for us,
It's all decided for us,
This world has only one sweet moment set aside for us.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteAhhh, Queen.
Couldn't have said it better myself.
Pucha, no lo quiero leer, me va dar penita y ya es muy tarde pa' eso.
ReplyDeleteI was worried about reading this, but it was actually very sweet. Touching enough to make me feel sad, but not enough to bring tears. I am content with this.
ReplyDelete4/5 stars, as I feel it's too short for its own good.
This one got to me, as all sad Spike fics tend to. Listening to "Dead Can Dance" while I read this didn't help any, either.
ReplyDeleteThe Carnival Is Over, indeed....
Even though it uses the familiar element of "Everybody passed away, and I'm the last one." I believe it still managed to achieve its goals. Like most of the sad fics, the message here is clear.
ReplyDeleteSolid writing and good composition. Words are indeed powerful.
IwillnotcryIwillnotcryIwillnotcry....
Who am I fooling? Sorry trees, I'm gonna have to kill a lot of you now.
Cried hard. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteI'm a very emotional guy so I'd be kidding myself if I said my eyes didn't get a little watery.
ReplyDeleteBut that's just it, it was only a little and was over in seconds. For someone like me, well it didn't work on the level I expected.
I couldn't possibly explain how to make it sadder though.
I'd say the best part in this story is the one related to generosity.
Forever young,
ReplyDeleteI want to be forever young
Do you really want to live forever
Forever
Forever...
Bluh. I'm pretty sensitive so I satrted crying hard about half way through :/
ReplyDeleteD:
ReplyDeleteI was doing okay with the story, then I read these comments. Who wants to live forever? Freddie will always get me with some of those, every time.
ReplyDeleteGood story, short and to the point.
A little too short for my liking, but touching nonetheless. Solid 4/5.
ReplyDeleteGot my eyes a waterin' and I did enjoy it. Touching to say the least. Nicely done
ReplyDeleteSo sad, almost manly tears sad.
ReplyDeleteAnd this is why it sucks to be Spike. Yes, I know he can theoretically go on and be thankful for the time he had with Rarity and the others, but unless he's just a paragon of emotional strength, that stuff starts to weigh down on a guy. And even if he makes new friends, what happens then? The same thing.
ReplyDeleteDeath is scary, but it is (somewhat) eternal life that is painful.
Q_q That's not fair... that was too sad. Also would've expected for magic to enhance longevity but I guess I'm wrong. I don't even know them personally and yet I still feel such sadness for fictional cartoon characters in a fan-made fanfiction.
ReplyDeleteVery Sad and Well written. Thanks for making a great work of Fiction.
ReplyDeleteARGH. ;_;
ReplyDeleteConfound these ponies, they drive me to tears. ;.;
ReplyDeleteOh Pony apples... I'm not crying.. I'm NOT crying! TT^TT
ReplyDelete@TotalOverflow
ReplyDeleteManly tears indeed! The scope of this story is relatively tame, and a bit mediocre, but its power is outstanding.
aww wow, just about missed the full emotional crotch kick but it was effective given the length
ReplyDeleteSO SAD! I died a little inside, very well written! TT^TT
ReplyDeleteim so weak for this type of fics. the ending made me shiver. bad.
ReplyDeletecan't really 5 star it. but a solid 4.
Keep it up!
This is way too short to be this sad!
ReplyDeleteSOUL CRUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUSH
ReplyDelete"I have lived and loved, but more lived than loved. That's my friends is but the greatest curse, and nothing I do will ever change that."
ReplyDeleteFrom the background, at least all the Mane Cast got to live out their lives.
ReplyDeletewow, please write more of these short sad stories.
ReplyDelete5/5 tears
Manly tears were shed.
ReplyDelete"Then Legolas built a grey ship in Ithilien, and sailed down Anduin and so over Sea; and with him, it is said, went Gimli the Dwarf. And when that ship passed an end was come in Middle-Earth of the Fellowship of the Ring."
ReplyDelete-- J.R.R.Tolkien
I wanted intensity, so, I played Americas "the last unicorn" in the background. Huge mistake. I had to listen to nyan cat for 3 hours to brain bleach.
ReplyDeletesad indeed, though not as touching as i thought it would have been. great character choice though, and written fairly well
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteWhat is that quote from? I have to know. This was suck a sad story, and god did that really drive home SOMETHING, and I just have to know, so I can go read what its from.
5/5
Anything that can make you cry, especially when its a fanfic about magical cartoon candy colored ponies from a children's cartoon, is one of the better stories you've read.
Manly tears were shed.
ReplyDeleteReally great and touching story!
ReplyDeleteI haven't read any "sad" stories before 'cause I normally can't get... "in touch" with them, but this one nearly made me cry. (Would've been the second time in my life I had cried because of sadness.)
Also I#M glad I didn't listen to the "Last unicorn" song one anon mentioned above, that would have made me cry for sure D:
Manly tears were shed :(
ReplyDeleteSo she dies at the end T_T