Author: Chartreuse
Description: Twilight and company are asked by a regretful Princess Luna to assist her, leading them on another eventful adventure. Along the way, however, Twilight and a few of her friends begin having an adventure of their own on a quest to find love, happiness and solace.Solace Part 1
Solace Part 2
Solace Part 3
Additional Tags: Long
16 comments:
Pretty good, but the oomph was at the end of the 3rd part.
ReplyDeleteReally awkward to read because of the formatting. The author should take note that whenever a new person speaks, it's a new paragraph. There are also other errors that'd be easy to fix, but as it is I just can't enjoy it.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI shall try revising that! Thanks for the feedback! I truly appreciate your honesty!
That was the best PinieDash shipping by far. Spike needs his answer woman! Write more! (please).
ReplyDeleteWhat anonymous 1 said. Based on part one it seems to be pretty good, but I'm the spawn of two copy editors, so...
ReplyDelete@Chartreuse
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking it so graciously! I look forward to reading it after it's been revised!
Very nice work!
ReplyDelete(epicplatypus from the stream)
Im glad to see its up.
@Chartreuse
ReplyDeletePersonally, I found that formating for the conversations to be interesting...
Different, yes, but the conversations were small enough and followed each other in a way where it made the ''blocks'' easy to read and to understand.
Stylistically, I found the prose just a little purple; the text feels stilted a lot of the time, like you might be trying too hard to find obscure adjectives. Write the way you speak. I'm petty sure you wouldn't say "argent sunlight" normally. (Not sure that's the right word anyway. Argent means silver, and sunlight is usually described as golden.)
ReplyDeleteThank you all for taking the time to read and a super special thanks to those who come back to give honest feedback. It helps me grow to be a better writer. And being a better writer means I can give you guys stuff you'd enjoy more and that means the world to me. So, thank you!
ReplyDeleteJust finished Part 3 here. I've been reading this story over the past few days since I don't really have all that much time to do it all in one sitting.
ReplyDeleteCan I just say how disgusted I am at Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara? God, eww. I knew girls like that back in high school, and as much as I hope they grew out of their adolescent need to mask their own insecurities by pointing out the same in other people, it still gives me the wiggins to think about how these kids can be so cruel. Here's to hoping those two fillies eventually do something to redeem themselves.
Great story! Can't wait to find out what Luna's super secret plan is!
I just finished reading it and I am loving it so far. Are you still working on this? Not to rush you or anything but I eagerly anticipate the next part.
ReplyDeleteloving it so far. easy to follow and excellent flow. much better than my writings on FanFiction. can't wait for more
ReplyDeleteGod, this is better than most shipfics. I love the plot to this, especially. Will you be continuing it?
ReplyDeleteOHMYGOD WRITE MORE
ReplyDeletePLEASE
*reads pinkie pie and rainbow dash's Heart-to-heart, no, soul-to-soul, conversation*
ReplyDeleteD'AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW