[Shipping][Comedy]
Author: Arkensaw Pinkerton
Description: Big Macintosh had a perfectly good reason for taking Twilight's doll; he wanted to use it to finally start a conversation with her. But Applejack's having none of it, Rarity's getting the wrong idea about everything, and the Cutie Mark Crusader Matchmakers are about to really throw a spanner in the works! A comedy of errors launching a full fleet of ships.Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 1
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 2
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 3
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 4
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 5
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 6
Fixing Up Miss Smartypants Part 7
Additional Tags: Farce, Confusion, Romance, Miss, Smartypants
[Sad][Shipping]
Description: Twilight's cutie mark is fading, and Celestia sends her a series of lessons to rekindle her passion for magic- and for friendship. Twilight must study the magics her friends possess, as well as casting a serious eye on her own gifts.Three Magics (New!)
This is technically a sequel to "Fixing Up Miss Smartypants", but you don't have to read that to enjoy this one. It's set five years later.
Additional Tags: Sequel, Redemption, Bittersweet, Magical, Theory
180 comments:
yeah. Cool thing :S
MLP, more ships then the spanish armada!
Shipping tag. Twimac?
@Ten_Tacles that´s a good one
Hetro-ship and star wars reference in the description?
*adds to reading list*
But in the episode big Mac didn't know the doll was Twilight's. He shows up after the CMC start fighting over it.
First Hetero Shipping I've seen here.
Just have to say that this is one of the best stories I've read in a while. The characterization is almost flawless and the description is colourful and vibrant without being too exaggerated. Five stars from me, and looking forward to the continuation.
@Ten_Tacles I laughed out loud at that one, CLEVER!
@John M.
It's worth noting that Twilight personally asked him to get the doll back. Of course, he also fell under the spell at that point.
Still a good read, though.
This story is hilarious but it's only the setup. Can't wait till the next chapter gets written so that we can find out what happens next. :)
I've been awake for about 27 hours now, so I'm in no condition to go about reading much of anything, but I'll definitely be checking this out once I've gotten some rest. I loved the whole Big Mac and Smartypants thing, and it seemed to me like the perfect Twimac setup, so it's good to see someone making good on it.
So far:
Big Mac used to like Fluttershy, was rejected.
Big Mac now likes Twilight.
Applejack and the CMC think he'd be better of with Fluttershy.
Rarity and the CMC think Applejack likes Twilight.
CMC think Rarity likes Rainbow Dash (Possibly true, remains to be seen).
This is great so far, I like the whole misinterpretation process you've got going with Rarity and the CMC. The next chapter should be pretty hilarious with all this ensuing chaos. Nice job.
@Vargras
Yeah she asks him to "Help me get THAT doll away from those girls." She never says MY doll. Seems like the whole "Big Mac taking Smarty pants means he has a crush on Twilight" thing is a bit unfounded. Its Fanon though so I guess thats not too unusual.
Eww heterosexual shipping.
... You know, this isn't nearly as chaotic as it could be just yet. We haven't even seen Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy and Twilight, and who THEY would like to get fixed up with, and Pinkie Pie is still lurking somewhere waiting to throw the whole thing into complete pandaemonium. I love it.
This was amusing. Characterization is spot-on, and the setup is all there for one heckuva pairing mashup in the second chapter. 5 stars!
This is the best shipping story EVER.
@John M.
I don't think it's fanon at all, it's just using a canon event and making a story out of it. Two very different things.
This aughtta be GOOD! 8D GREAT chapter! Not many grammar mistakes that one could see, though you constantly used 'people' rather than ponies, though that's easily solved by a ctrl+f for people, and replace with ponies. Can't wait for chapter 2! 8D
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
@Magical Trevor
Oh blast! I honestly thought I'd caught them all. Fixed. Thanks for feedback!
Simple, cute. Chaos to come in future chapters. I look forward to the rest of the story.
This, I approve of. We require moar pony.
A comedy of errors indeed; I am quite looking forward to more of this. Any bets on Appleshy?
@O. Hinds
16.5 bits!
@O. Hinds
I've only just started in, but Applejack's thoughts on Fluttershy certainly open up that possibility. (Especially since it screams 'projection' on her part.)
These foals have rather destructive sounding hobbies...
Now I know how that town managed to deplete the disaster relief fund three times in a single year. The inhabitants ARE the disaster they need relief from...
Hmmm.
This is going to be good. I have to ask, though - what was Rarity's costume? Because I don't think a unicorn-Shadowbolt would make much more sense with a pegasus-Shadowbolt than alone, and anyway Rainbow's costume didn't look Rarity-quality.
I'm with Kd7sov. I was confused on how exactly the CMC decided that Dash and Rarity should be paired up.
Otherwise, this looks like it's going to be really good so I'm looking forward to more chapters in the future.
@Kd7sov
Maybe it was a nightmare Moon outfit, would work. All she'd need is some fake wings and it'd work.
As for the story, color me a reader.
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS CRACK SHIPPING GENERATORS, YAY!
This looks to be shaping up to be hilarious. I don't think I've read any stories with so many shippers on deck. Will be watching this one.
Also, since Miss Smarty Pants is the doll that launched a thousand ships, would that make her Helen of Troy (or a trojan pony)?
This was a wonderfully done work of literature.
@Bugsydor
Oddly enough this is only the second story I've read where the CMCs take it into their hands to to try match-making.
@Adam Crocker
It's my third or fourth.
I try to avoid shipping but this is almost funny enough to work. As long as Flutter/Mac is the ultimate outcome (shakes fist at computer screen menacingly).
I'm Commander Shepard, and this is my favorite shipping story on the Citadel.
Great story so far! Keep it up!
I was expecting a quick & fun one-shot, then I got TONS OF ABSURD SHIPS. Awesome!! :D
I predict FS being interested in AJ.
Where's the Comedy Tag?
This is really entertaining, I'm happily awaiting updates.
Wow, this should be good I hope the next is 20% cooler but its gonna be hard because this one is already so cool!
@ponydoraprancypants
Ooooohhhh...can you name the others? I know of 'Cutie Mark Matchmakers' being posted over on Deviant art.
This does need a comedy tag. It's so hilarious and it's leaving me in anticipation for more.
Ok, this is a very promissing start let's see if you can keep it up^^
"one more update, maybe two" makes me a bit sad panda. This could be epic.
Awww well, love it so far anyway.
*sigh* And I was really into this story too. But then it started having the Crusaders talking about slash pairings like it was the most obvious thing in the world. That stretches my believability. *sigh*
I really, really enjoyed the first chapter. Everypony, Applejack especially, was written very well.
But my ability to enjoy the story in future chapters depends entirely on how much the CMC derail the storyline, because I find stories where they take a role in the story like they are in this one to basically be idiot plots. Justified idiot plots, to be sure, but still quite frustrating to keep track of. This isn't a comedy first and foremost like The Romancing Quest was (at least it doesn't seem to be set up to be one), so I'm skeptical to say the least about whether their role in this will come off as anything more than annoying.
This is excellent. The build-up is fan-freaking-tastic and I can not wait until everything hits the fan. Also, it needs the comedy tag, because I aughed so hard while reading my roommate thought I was choking to death.
*laughed
Oh boy, this gets better and better. And more convoluted.
Big Mac likes Twilight.
Applejack thinks Big Mac likes Fluttershy. (And the CMC agree!)
Rarity thinks Applejack likes Twilight.
Spike thinks Rarity likes Twilight.
Rainbow likes Rarity. (CMC are right on this one.)
Rarity hinted at also liking Rainbow, unconfirmed.
Rainbow, Twilight and Ditzy think Sweetie Belle likes Rainbow.
Ditzy thinks Scootaloo likes Rarity.
Ditzy hinted to like Big Mac.
O.o
Woah! I forgot this fic existed.
I love this story more and mroe as it goes on very funny and well written, but I would like it with it being so similar to 'Midsummers Nights Dream'
and then the resulting chaos summoned Discord, and he got all the mares.
Happy ending!
Oh god, this is shaping up to be a glorious trainwreck.
This is starting to look like a real Gambit Pileup here. I'd hate to be the dockworker that had to clean up after all those ships colliding...
Just read part 2.
And suddenly, love triangles. love triangles everywhere.
@KingOfTheRubberDucks:
Midsummer Night's dream? Reminds me more of Twelfth Night.
I agree with others that this needs a comedy tag, at least for the sake of warning. I had to put down this fic and read another one when I found I couldn't keep a straight face in public.
Alert
Alert
Shipping has reached critical mass
Please evacuate the Internet
"okay the nexus appears to be rarity her interactions with smarty pants is causing massive amounts of "ship" radition to flood the Internet. We need to slow the shipping rads down or we could have a core meltdow
Woohoo, update! :D
Oh wow. I'm going to need a flowchart to keep up with all these ships before this is through.
Loving it, though!
Good god.
Twilight math is best math.
Did I mention in my last post how much I fricken love this story?
I mean, no it's not top tier but it's just amusing as hell and I can't wait to see what sort of shenanigans ends up going on.
There aren't a ton of comments here and that's a mistake! KEEP AT IT.
I read part 1 as soon as ED posted it, and have been waiting for this update ever since. FINALLY! READING MATERIALS
*yay*
@Rocket to Insanity
Captain! We have a shipping core breach in progress! We've got to evacuate now or everyone will be totally shipped!
I bet discord's behind it all.
I'm not too big into shipfics, but this is without doubt, the best one I've read so far, and also the funniest. Keep up the good work!
Just finsihed chapter 2, and I'm really looking forward to the next! :D
Definitely one of the best fics I've read. I love your characterizations, and eagerly await your next update!
D'awww, you lot are brilliant! I'm about 2/3 of the way through part 3, so expect it within maybe a week or so. The positive comments for what certainly started out as just a bit of fun are really marvellous, and now it's turned into a LOT of fun I can't wait to see what you all think of where it's going. Update coming sooooon!
-Arkensaw
PS I may ask to add a comedy tag. Because this is a comedy in the traditional sense, in that that's the shape of the story. And also because I keep giggling whenever I injure Spike.
Lol Father Jackal, I love this story. It's incredible how each and everypony is getting all mixed up in this. What is this now, a love dodecahedron? Looking forward to more, and soon!
I love this story, the writing is awesome and realstic and so very confusing. So far, the only things we know for sure are:
RD Likes Rarity
FS Likes AJ
BM Likes Twilight
Lyra and Bon Bon are getting married(duh!)
Spike likes Rarity(duh!)
aaaand Ditzy maaay have a crush on BM
And then everypony else thinks everypony else likes everypony else.
And:
Where the hell is Pinkie Pie?
I'm not a huge shipping guy, but I enjoy a classic comedy of misunderstanding, so I'm having fun with it. And the kids pelting Twilight with apples alone is worth a comedy tag.
I'd say the biggest drawback of the story is the length of time between chapters making it hard to remember all of the twists and turns that are underway. I need a scorecard to recall who is sweet on who, and who they *think* is sweet on someone else.
Looking forward to the next update!
well my favourite shipping its Fluttermac but this story its to much fun lol :D
i could see that twilight maybe has a crush on big mac, the things messing up its just hilarious and the part with Aj mad at fluttershy telling her "dont comeback" its really heartbreaking :(, lol and dash with rarity also confunding beacause of spike LOL
oh and i want more of this NOW
SO lets have a quick round up here:
Big Mac Likes Twi, but currently think's she's fallen for Rarity
Twi herself appears to be interested in Big mac, but is going on a blind date with a mysterious pony, who Is actually Rarity
Rainbow Dash likes Rarity.
Rarity likes Rainbow.
Fluttershy likes Applejack.
Applejack's romantic intentions are unknown. However she seems to have discovered that Fluttershy likes mares, particularly AJ herself, but she's mad at fluttershy, although we don't know whether or not AJ's PO'd because Fluttershy likes mares, or because Fluttershy's been keeping it a secert that Bigmac and her were not a couple.
The CMC have been wreaking havoc mainly by setting up a mystery date, and by throwing apples at twilight.
It really is complicated, isn't it? My attempt to sum it all up:
Big Mac:
Likes: Twilight.
Everyone save Twilight, Fluttershy and AJ think he and Fluttershy are a couple. AJ refuses to accept that they're not.
Thinks: Rarity likes Twilight and is setting up a blind date with her. Also that Twilight must like her back, as she had a love letter to Rarity in her saddlebag.
Twilight:
Likes: Probably Big Mac, though she wasn't considering it while she thought he was with Fluttershy.
Knows: Dash likes Rarity. Fluttershy Likes AJ.
Thinks: Sweetie Belle has a crush on Dash.
Rarity:
Likes: Apparently Dash
Thinks: Applejack likes Twilight (and is setting up a blind date for the two.)
Dash:
Likes: Rarity
Thinks: Rarity likes Twilight, and is setting up date with her.
Also thinks Sweetie Belle wrote the love letter to her.
Applejack:
Likes: No pony specified?
Thinks: Mac and Fluttershy were perfect for each other. Fluttershy was wrong to turn down her brother. Twilight was interfering somehow (possibly seducing Fluttershy with smutty books?) As a result, she's furious with both of them.
Spike:
Likes: Rarity (duh.)
Thinks: Rarity likes Twilight and is setting up a date with her (and supports this because he loves them both.)
CMCs and Dinky:
Like: The idea of being matchmakers.
Know: Rarity likes Dash.
Think: AJ wanted to fix the doll up because she's sweet on Twilight.
Decide: To pelt Twilight with apples (making her think about and be open to a member of the Apple family) and write love letters for Dash and Rarity to fix the two up, giving them to Ditzy to Deliver.
Ditzy Doo:
Likes: No pony specified, but close to Big Mac.
Thinks: The love letters given her by the CMC's were written by them, and therefore Sweetie Belle has a childhood crush on Rainbow Dash.
Loses: The other love letter for Rarity in Twilight's library, where it ends up in her saddlebag.
Fluttershy:
Likes: Mares only (and AJ specifically.)
Thinks: Well, she's about to be told what's going on, but from the CMC's perspective.
I *think* that covers it all... so far.
@Harwick
Wait... I forgot, Rarity was delivered the love letter that the CMC's wrote (supposedly from Dash) and was thrilled. She might have seen Big Mac deliver it.
@Harwick
one last thing, Rainbow knows Big Mac and Fluttershy are not together and so does Spike now
also, to the author, keep it up this is awesome!
XD This is getting CRAZY! XD THIS IS SO AWESOME! 8D
One Flew Over the Griffon's Nest?! XD WIN! /]
... XD I'm dying! XD This is a Soap Opera, isn't it? ISN'T IT?! XD GOOD GRIEF! So much going on in so little time! My mind! It has been blown! And I'm not even done READING yet!
We're barely HALF-WAY DONE?! I don't know how much more of this I can take! I WANT MAH MACINTWI! *Fumes*
~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria
p.s. Take your time... This is REALLY good, but it just... XD
All jokes and mismatched understandings a side, it's nice to see the story develop a bit of seriousness to it with the hurt feelings between the characters. Big Macs feelings seem to go into more depth though, which is something I'd like to see between the other characters as well. Otherwise, looks good!
My god. Poor Big Mac.
My brain hurts in the best way possible. This is the Fed-Ex of shipping fics! Well done, sir!
Wow, I mean wow...
I found this fic a while ago, but I never bothered to read it, and holy cow what a mistake!!!
I mean, the whole premise, although done to death in the media, has so far felt fresh all the way trough; I mean, every twist is so great, so surprising, so interesting I didn't want it to end, and even if I found Applejack's (so far) final reaction abrupt, I still want to find out how that one goes, its that good!
Oh, and the ships themselves, they are just so fun to read, even more when I try to figure who is gonna be in love with who next, and who is going to get in the way!
One last thing, I actually drew my own chart in order to have a clear image of this whole mess, and I just had this stupid grin in my face while doing so. Good job my good sir, have all my attention and 5 stars!
I quite enjoying this so far. Although I would like to see atleast ONE thing go right sometime soon...
I cannot believe how completely screwed up this fic is. It's hilarious how bad things get, it's getting so complicated that it's hard to keep track of. So for the first time in forever I had to make a folder for notes on this fic, so that I don't forget some of the things that happened. Never thought I would have to do that. At least not with a genre as (Usually) simple as Shipping.
@Bellum_Civille
Where the hell is Pinkie Pie? Hahaha! So pleased somepony finally asked this. Hold yer horses, she'll show up sooner or later.
Comedy of errors is the best comedy.
This story is brilliant, simple as that.
One weird request I'd have for it though is to have a quick summary of who each character currently believes the other characters like and all that at the beginning of each chapter; the time between chapters causes me to forget and I have to skim through the previous chapters to remind myself.
@TimbukTurnip
There have been quite a few requests for that- at the beginning of the next chapter, I'll put in a little summary of the day as far as each character is currently perceiving it. In my defence, it got a lot more complex than I thought it would!
@Harwick
Harwick, can I use your masterful explanation of the current state of play at the start of the next chapter? I'll only leave it up until the story's finished- once it can be read all at once I think it'll be less neccessary- but it would be really rather useful for everypony at the moment!
I really liked the part 4 but something that i felt its that everything suddenly got solved like if it was too fast... that doesnt mean it wasnt good i loved it but i was waiting for a little bit more trouble before the clarification of everything you know what i mean?... anyways looking forward to see more of this :) keep up the good work you are doing :D
@Juancho.-
I know exactly what you mean, and I'll admit I was tempted to ratchet up the tension more rather than have a few things come to light- but that would have required a few characters to really hold the idiot ball. There's still a couple of chapters left, however- and a lot of characters who've still entirely got the wrong end of the stick. Fear not! Shenanigans are incoming!
Looks like the love dodecahedron is gonna sort out. Happy endings for all...
Neigh I say; let's throw another tetrahedron at that bitch! C'mon CMC, you have to try harder to ship these ponies. I need more misunderstandings and chaos. Make Discord proud of you, just like last time
So much fun...
Omg... soo good! I totally wish there was more like this. And now I'm gonna be all antsy and excited as I wait for the next chapter!
I say that this could still get worse. The moment Pinkie pie gets on the scene, this is all gonna go straight to hell.
ship ALL the ponies!
Why isnt this an episode?
@Father Jackal
Well, I'm obviously a bit late but I certainly didn't mind its use at all. Of course, a great deal of that got sorted out with this latest update as the truth started to trickle out to various ponies. I too was sad to see some of those misunderstandings defused, but I look forward to seeing how things unfold from here.
This a great story that NEEDS a comedy tag. I was doing some work when reading this when I got to the intro of Doctor John 'Whooves' Smith because O just finished those two episodes of Doctor Who a week ago. Also I really hope that this love triangle(dodecahedron?)gets resolved soon.
@Harwick
Thanks! I'm so pleased you weren't annoyed, I'd have taken it down straight away if you were. I think it's made things a lot clearer!
And yes, I have tidied things up a little in part 4, but I promise you they're not entirely resolved yet. PINKIE PIE INCOMING
Gaaaah i need these fics to be churned out quicker! I hate not being able to read on!!!
Looking forward to part 5 :D
“Missus Cake? We need t’see Pinkie Pie.”
Oh boy here we go
“TRIXIE! GET IN HERE!”
OMFG WAAAAT!!! LOLOL
lol almost die with those parts... well i could say that 45% of all the problems are solved in some kind of way lol... thats beacuse you added some more in the 4th part and more in this part so its really interesting to see how this will develop... cant wait for the next parts keep up the good work :D
PS: update FAST! lol just kidding take the time you need lol :)
Whaaaaaat?
Octy And Vinyl broke up?
And Octy is with Trixie, who clearly needs Pinkie's influence to make her show better, while Octy herself needs Vinyl's influence in order to lighten up?
You bastard.
Fix this now, or being sent to the moon will be considered merciful when compared to your punishment. (Hint: Its never-ending G3!).
You get a cookie for writing this
I, for one, and just so happy that we get to add octaviaxvinyl to this shipfest.
Whoa. Chessmaster Pinkie Pie? I'd say a revelation like that is almost as unnerving as discovering, say, that Angel Bunny is actually a powerful warlock with a British accent... Almost.
...Proceed.
This whole thing is turning into chaos with all these characters appearing out of seemingly nowhere... Whatevs. Still quite enjoyable, even if rather random :)
Lady Scratch of the Canterlot Scratches?
Mind = Blown O_o
@statoose
You expected anything less than random when Pinkie finally showed up in the narrative?
In all seriousness, I wanted Pinkie's arrival to be a bit of a gamechanger, introduce my last handful of characters- except one particularly important one- and make everyone a bit nervous about exactly what she's got planned.
I'm sure it'll all work out!
BAKING CORNCAKES CH5 IS AWESOME! Great writing and even better storytelling. Keep up the awesome work, I can't wait to see the conclusion!
Trixie ham is the best ham.
And "Lady Scratch of the Canterlot Scratches"? Brilliant.
“I thought we were just making out! Were we planning a party at the same time? That’s my best invention ever!” .... roflmao
Awesome. I absolutely love this story. It's truly one of my favorites.
wow, cool, I want moar
Well, the wait for Pinkie turned out to be worth it, as she was (fittingly) a lot of fun. I feel like she maybe gets a little too much credit in fanfics in general for always being in the know, but then in this particular story somebody had to have their act together if things were going to work out so I can overlook that.
Quite a few fun characters were injected into things with this update, and it's looking like the big party will be a blast!
I normally tend to shy away from the ship fics, but this one is... Adorable. Really light-hearted, which I really need after having a hard dose of Project Horizons.
Also, I enjoy the double entendre of a title you have going on there.
What a tangled web has been weaved.
@Ten_Tacles Ok that one was pretty funny xD
Hey I know you've been all wonky an all that rying to figure out your times, but your build up has been great. I've enjoyed this sooo mcuh!
Do...not....want...this story.....to end....
Anyone else want to smack Applejack in this fic? It feels like she hasn't let anypony finish a single sentence to her throughout the whole story, and she spends the entire time trying to control everypony else's behavior to an annoying degree. Grr, Applejerk.
Anyway, that's not a real criticism of the story or anything; it's been a pretty entertaining read. The sudden introduction of Octavia, Vinyl Scratch, and Trixie so late in the game seemed slightly odd, but no big deal. And possible incoming MoonPie? That might be amusing, if it turns that way.
I wonder if this story going to finish in time to beat the upcoming Valentine's Day episode.
Pinkie... How can you set up a surprise date for yourself?
I have a feeling everything is going to go horribly right.
Twilight revising her schedule was brilliant.
@Crunch Nugget
You ain't the only one wondering that- I'm really trying to beat the clock on this!
Given Octavia's blatantly getting back with Vinyl and alas it looks like there's no chance of Twixie here, how about setting up Trixie with Luna?
This story is so totally awesome, I've loved every word.
I'm bracing myself for the whole Twilight/Big Mac/Luna thing. That'll be a doozy. Also, do ages matter in this story? I only ask because the CMC are younger than Spike, and when I read shipping I picture the cast as humans. So I've got 16 year old Spike going on a date with like 10 year old Sweetie Belle. Just wondering if anything romantic will actually happen there, because then I'll have to make the CMC a little bit older. Fantastic story though.
@Alex
That's a fine question! To clear the point a little- I see Spike as, in human terms, maybe 11 or 12, compared to the CMC at about 10. The little date that they're on is more a bit of a cute thing than the start of a genuine romantic encounter, I think, because both of them are too young to really consider a relationship as much more than holding hands and maybe *gasp!* a kiss or two.
BANISHED TO MOON
And that would be where I totally lost it. XD
This story is fabulous. Definitely the story I look forward to reading most in this fandom. Just... it's really sweet, and funny, and awesome, and I love it.
@Father Jackal
Cool nuggets. I assumed it was only going to be a little thing like that, mostly just Sweetie Belle getting to hang out with her crush in a date setting and stuff. I'm still unsure of what ages to picture them as, but I usually picture Spike as a teenager. We'll see what goes down.
Awww! I loved this whole story. Sad to see it end, but man it sure went out with a bang!! Excellent work, truly fantastic, and I hope to see more by you soon! 8D Love all the random throwaway ships and details too. Everypony happy!
I love this story. I am sad to see it go, but this conclusion made everything all right. And I especially lol'd at the "and then I thought we could maybe make out!" part. I have to wonder, though:
Pinkie smiled, her face suddenly becoming serious.
Is that just Pinkie logic? A serious smile? I don't really get it. And;
She felt Rarity’s arms locking around the back of her neck,
Nopony has arms. Legs, yeah, but no arms.
Even with those two little tidbits I loved this story, and you should get a FiMFiction account so I can watch you.
Lol, at the A/N at the end...
I'm pretty sure that hearts and hooves was released early by "accident" just so they could beat you to the punch
That was excellent, Jackal. Excellent. It's been a pleasure following this story, and, as Celelorien said above, I'm a bit sad to see it go (even though I loved the end). What are you gonna do next?
this isn't even a little bit like a midsummer night's dream. not a bit.
I like the story, but chapter 7 . . . these ponies move fast.
And: awesome. Just awesome Father Jackal. I loved this story and can't wait for more of your work. Please upload this to fimfiction.net so I can favorite it and share it with others easier.
Awesome, awesome job. I look forward to more soon
Aw i can't belive its other :( that was amazing ! I loved it ^.^
Abouslty amazing job my friend!
@Bellum_Civille
Fixed!
Also, thanks everypony. These comments have been a real source of joy.
@arthurthekittenslayer
That's because... *removes energy mask* I'm not Shakespeare at all!
In all seriousness, it's not so much. It WAS trying to be a nod to the sort of confusion-based romantic comedies Shakespeare liked to write, though; maybe more like Much Ado About Nothing?
But, y'know, without being an immortal writer of staggering talent.
That was incredible. Way to tie in everypony together at the finale! I have to say though, the last pairing at the end, it seemed unfulfilled. I suppose love grows unexpectedly but maybe have some details on how they felt at that moment? Or their thoughts for each other. I think closing on the note of her thoughts on love would have been perfect, but your ending is satisfying enough. 5/5! You should post this on FIMFiction :D
Per requests, has been uploaded to FimFiction!
well loved the whole thing really awesome the ending was cool i think that everything worked out really well hope to see more stories from you :)
Fantastic. Simply Fantastic.
Great story! I'm so pleased with how it turned out! I've been looking forward to this completion since it really started getting crazy in chapter 2! Definitely in my top 3 fanfics! (after Out in the Cold, and Dawn of a New Day)
So much shipping in one story. That was hilarious!
Great story, I loved it! :) I am a sucker for a good ending
Ya, I don't know how I feel when 80% of the plot is a series of misunderstandings. I still like t though. 4/5
And it ends :-(
Awww, what a beautiful ending, so much fun to read!
Flutterjack? To heck with that!
Probably my favorite fan fic so far, I simply love the writing and the stories you have come up with! It has been a pleasure to follow this story from the beginning and I love the way everything wrapped up in the end. You are a very talented writer, thank you for such an amazing piece
lol
i love your story bro
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That was hilarious and adorable.
This.
This is a triumph of MLP shipfics.
I don't think anyone could ship so many characters, in such little time, with such amazing results and with such a great comedy flair.
I take my hat off to you, sir author.
How you kept this entire fic in your head at one time is beyond me. Bravo. Also, absolutely none of this would have happened if Big Mac had just stallioned up and given the doll to Twilight in the first damn place. Just sayin' :P
Bucking good and exciting... well done!
wow. just finished reading and I've gotta say, I've never read and MLP fic where everyone was so in character, especially when you consider the near armada-size of your ships! just a bucking good read, all 'round.
that was amazing, i love it and have thoroughly enjoyed the whole story from start to finish. and some of the hilarity was just genius hahaa! good job and i hope you write more that is just as good, if not better
I love this series its my fav series ever
Love it, from start to finish!
Yet I have to say, part 6 has to be the least reader-friendly of all, I mean, I do like long stories, but in this one I felt its length various times, going so far as making me unable to finish it in one go.
Another thing I need to say is the change in the atmosphere between each chapter. I mean, at first, and up until the 3° or 4° one, It seemed to be a serious type shipping story (kindness reward type), even with all that misunderstanding, yet slowly but steadily became more and more a light hearted type, and even though in the end I didn't mind much, I believe It could have been an even better story if you stuck with that. This is all a personal opinion of course.
Anyway, bitching aside, thanks for sharing this amazing story with us!
This story managed to take a bunch of ships that I could never in a million years see working (with the exception of TwiMac and perhaps Appleshy even if I don't personally ship Appleshy, I can see it work) and make them believeable and *enjoyable.* Rainbow/Rarity? Even that was pulled off convincingly and I wouldn't think that could be done. ;) Everypony was very much written in character. I liked the somewhat confusing plot line. For me it made the story a very entertaining read. The only part I didn't like was the "Octavia is Pinkie's sister" bit but that's just personal head canon preferences, rather than evidence of flawed writing so I can't really complain there. I loved the parts with Trixie, Sweetie Belle's letter and Twilight's to-do lists. And last but not least, Pinkie and Luna....oddly enough that makes sense to me. Who knew?
@FlutterWhimsy
Oh yeah, p.s. 5 stars!
Thank you, my dear, for reminding my why I love farce comedy so much.
A priceless moment around every corner of this ridiculously complex thrill-ride of a plot. From start to finish, an utter treat.
PS: I'd like to see anybody else come up with an insult that could top "Spectrum-haired hussy."
I truly enjoyed your story. Not only was it a fun, lighthearted reprieve form Fallout Equestria: Horizons, but at many points throughout, I found myself drawing unwanted attention by breaking out in fits of laughter (closet brony, didn't work out too well when I tried to "come out"). You are a talented writer, with a knack for intricate plot weaving. I gladly give your story 5 Stars and am surprised that it has yet to obtain a Star-6 rating. Thank you, again for sharing your talents with all of us and hope to be able to enjoy many further literary work form you.
@eenor5000
Thanks so much! I'm really pleased you enjoyed it- and to all whom I'm not replying to personally, I appreciate each and every comment I get, whether it's unqualified support or unmitigated criticism.
As far as Star-6; I don't think this is a Star-6 piece. It's good, I hope, but it doesn't have the universal appeal or flawless writing that characterises a Star-6 story. I can do better- I intend to!
I really enjoyed it! Although it did seem quite random at times, it was still very nice. I love how Pinkie had everything worked out all along. I'm still amazed one can write a detailed, seven-chapter fic about the events of a single day. I'm not sure how I feel about Trixie ending up with Smartypants... But hey, that's a just a minor personal complaint.
Anyway, I'd love to see some sort of small side story about how the relationship between Twilight and Macintosh plays out after the events of the fic. TwiMac is quite an untouched ship, and I'd enjoy seeing more of it. :)
Oh joy, what a combinatorial explosion of misinformation! How thrilling!
Love the way you disentangled it.
Probably my fav. fan fiction of all time.
That was a great fanfic! I couldn't stop reading! :D
I really like the...plot? Bahaha That was a hilarious and heat warming, and I'm really sad that it ended, but everything does have to end no mater how good. yay dont stop writing!
Hehehe, The shippiest shipfic ever!
Rereading as I download it.
Just finished chapter 3, I'm tooked!
Please tell me the story is finished, I want a conclution to this AWSUMness
Sequel!? Love this fic, glad to see it back!
Ow. I think I hurt my heart when I read the sequel... Truly, sadfics are not for me.
While I'm glad that I read it, and I'm doubly glad for the happy ending, if I ever decide to reread FUMSP, I think I'll skip the sequel. It's not bad - in fact, it's amazingly well-executed - but it's not what I was expecting, and not my personal preference.
ummm, guys this story was marked completed two days ago, actually I think...wait no, technically by time standard it was two days ago... any way on FIMFiction this story is done! and i mean three magics
Wow, I was uncertain about giving Three Magics a shot, but it definitely paid off. One of the best bittersweet fics I've read in some time. Very reminiscent of all the good parts of 'It Takes a Village.'
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