Monday, January 9, 2012

Story: Fallout Equestria - Pink Eyes (Update Complete!)

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[Grimdark][Crossover][Adventure] Rule Breakan Games


Author: Mimezinga
Description:  Puppysmiles is on a mission to find her mom. Too bad she lost her two hundreds years ago... this is the story of a little pony that tries to find out why everything around her is so different.
Fallout Equestria: Pink Eyes (New 11!)


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176 comments:

Overlong Analysis Cobalt said...

Ze rules, zhey have been broken!?

Jelfes said...

I really ought to get around to reading FoE...

Now with 20% more carrot said...

What the hay is this why ain't it in the side story post.

MintyRest said...

It's been a long road
Getting from there to here
It's been a long time...

Anyways, congrats on getting posted. I hope you have a great ending planned out.

Mightystripe said...

interesting. ill get to reading as soon as i wake up from this dream im having.

Silver Aura said...

ok, i gotta agree with "Now with 20% more carrot" when I asked permission from KKat to get my story separated from the side story post, which was a while back mind you,KKat told me NO more side stories would be splitting off, meaning project Horizons was supposed to be the only one.

Spell Nexus said...

Good Lord, another one?
I'll consider reading this once the original and Project Horizons have finished

Altercation said...

...wait, I'm so confused right now.

I guess I'll get to reading, but wasn't Project Horizons supposed to be the only one to split off? And because it got so popular, at that.

acksed said...

Anyone on the fence about FO:E can start reading; it's pretty much standalone.

SteampunkBrony said...

this is so adawable, but at the same time it still has that fallout feel, love it.

Natzo said...
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terrycloth said...

I'm guessing this one got split off too because it's FREAKING HUGE (and good reading) and also because the side-story post hasn't updated in forever and ever. Although fixing that might also have been an option.

I ran across it randomly on fimfiction a couple days ago.

Natzo said...

The more stuffof FoE that come out, the less inclined I'm to start reading it...It's too long...too much...

Sethisto said...

But guys

The oc pony

Shes so cuuuute

Razputin the Ponynaut said...

@Sethisto

Well, that's a justification if every I heard one.

Silver Aura said...

@Natzo

Nobody can blame you really, total length of all the FoE stuff put together is probably longer than several Harry Potter books.

CTVulpin said...

@Silver Aura
Dude, FoE is longer than the Lord of the Rings. And that's not counting Project Horizons, only Kkat's original.

PH isn't for light readers either for that matter.

Greenf0x said...

@CTVulpin

I took a gamble, i was bored, nothing to do on a rainy day, gears was pissing me off, i decided, what the hay, lets read atleast one chapter of FO:E, next thing i know im at chapter 10 and im addicted.

It also make me want the next Fallout Game to come out.

Krass McWriter said...

I support this seth, a fic should seperate from a collection if its good, not if its the 'best' in the collection or even just really long.

I say if it can make it through the pre readers, it should get a seperate post.

Natr1x said...

This totally deserved to get its own post :D mainly because how different it is from all the other foe stuff :D

Cyril said...

This story... I found and read before this post (also wondered why it never made its way into the side story posts) incrediblizes me.

It's so mixed-bag of emotions. Mimezinga needs to release a new chapter. Like... today.
;-)

Thanks Sethisto, for breakin da rulez.

The Jack said...

Whaaaat? It got it's own post?
Damn, now I HAVE to read it!
Oh well. I wasn't going to sleep tonight anyway. xD

Timber said...

Sure. I write a story about a robot, not even looked at. Someome writes a sttory about a foal,, ot gets its own post.

BlueBird said...

@Silver Aura

there was a post on the FoE Wikia that after chapter 38, FoE officially surpassed the Lord of the Rings Trilogy in word count.

Casper said...

How can she be alive 200 years after her mother disappeared? O_o

CoffeeGrunt said...

I would read this if Fallout: Equestria itself had smothered any hopes I had for the crossing over of Fallout and MLP...

I gave up on Chapter Four, will this story be any easier to get through?

Suzzle said...

Fallout Equestria Daily!

acksed said...

Let's see if I can pin down why this is so different:
Fallout: Equestria - Toaster repairpony becomes a heroine whether she wants to or not. Epic scale.
Angst level of main character: Lesson Zero

Project Horizons - Dumbass Stable security guard gathers the most dysfunctional party this side of Farscape. More personal scale.
Angst level of main character: Party of One

Pink Eyes - Cute filly in advanced rad suit wakes up and goes to find her mother. Follows the reactions of the people around the main character.
Angst level of main character: Call of the Cutie

And yet they're all still recognisably pony-flavoured Fallout, with all the ghouls, monsters, radiation, robots, liars, guns, money, mercenaries, and normal folks getting by that implies.

mycutiemarkisagun said...

This side-story is getting its own post because this side-story KICKS FLANK MOTHERBUCKER. Quit hatin!

Roundshades said...

No, just no, last time I read 10 FO:E chapters in a row I got shot by a raider pony in a dream and this has 13?!

...But she´s so cute! and is she hugging a bloatsprite?

Fine, recluse mode activated.

Somepony Else said...

I think this might be a slipup, considering that it's barely even started and likely shouldn't be out of side stories.

Arcane Scroll said...

@Casper

You'll have to read it to find out :)

Velvet said...

I rather liked this one - I'd already read it fully before it popped up here though.

It's not quite as... serious as the other Fallout:Equestria stories.

Alchat said...

@Somepony Else

Did you even click the story link 13 chapters mate 13 CHAPTERS!!!!!

Somepony Else said...

@Alchat Alright okay my bad. I jast saw one link and 'Incomplete' and jumped to conclusions.

Lag-y said...

Wait a sec a pony in a advance rad suit....hnnnnng "dies" ... oh the memories in that suit. I shall read it !!

mycutiemarkisagun said...

I mean, just look at the beginning. The set-up is awesome. An aDAWWWWabble lost child, a high-tec radsuit, and Pink Cloud, arguably the coolest of Kkat's inventions. A FIM fanfic author couldn't fuck that up if they tried lol.

Arcane Scroll said...

@Somepony Else
They aren't short chapters either :)

Hio590 said...

I bet if I only read FO:E related fanfics I'll be good until MLP ends

Sir Leadhead said...

more FO:E?

guess what im doing tonight... :DDD

NeverKnown said...

@Silver Aura Gratz on finally making it in.
also for anyone who doesn't know Pink Eyes has been on fan fiction for a wile and has gathered quite a following
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/931/Fallout-Equestria%3A-Pink-Eyes
NeverKnown

LlamaLlumps said...

EveryLlama that Llikes FaLlout Equestria and Lloves dawwwwwww at criticaLl LleveLls needs to read this and read it now. In fact Llama is going to read this again from teh start just because. This kid knows how to teLl a story and make you Llaugh, weep and Llove aLl at teh same time.

Somepony Else said...

@Arcane Scroll Alright alright, mea culpa, give me a break.

DarcySupremest said...

Son of a flank!
Damn it Seth stop making want to read another flippen FOE
I Read this I'll get hooked and I can't play Battlefield 3 until I'm done it!

DJ Kat said...

Goddamnit Seth, I'm trying SO hard not to read the FOE series on here. I haven't even played the game.

Why are you making both so hard now?

Aesahaettr- said...

And another FO:E side story....

WEll, I must say I was pleasantly surprised by this. I LOOOOOVE FO:E and PH so seeing more Fallout is always a plus.

The description drew me in and before I know it, 3 hours are gone. It's definitely a well-written story and a nice change of pace considering it's from a filly's point of view! WAtcher didn't seem OOC at all and the Big 52 definitely feels like a slice of the Equestrian WAsteland.

5 stars, now gimme my next chapter. gimmegimmegimmegimme! :D

Colm/Rippedshadow said...

It is safe to say this story has me in tears throughout every chapter. It's jus too freaking sad, but diabetes incarnate at the same time.

jackpotpony said...

everytime i think i have a day where i can relax and not read FoE another chapter or in this case side story pops up....D*** YOU EQD! *then goes and reads FoE*

EonMaster said...

Just finished chapter one, and something tells me all those points in luck are going to come in handy later.

Sindri said...

More Fo:E getting its own post? An absolutely adorable protagonist in a well-written and thought provoking adventure?
yay~

@DJ Kat
You don't need to have played any of the games; the stories are completely self-contained. Though if you rear first and play the games later you might be disappointed by the lower quality in the originals...

Sindri said...

@Mimezinga
What flavor of feedback do you prefer? It'll be a while before I have time to finish the story, but I'm wondering if I should start a reading commentary thingie like I do for Somber's new chapters...

NeverKnown said...

Storys like this, FOE PH and fallout makes the game fell daul without mods :D

mimezinga said...

@Sindri

Anything will do, really, I write because I have fun writing, you should comment in the same way, do as you feel and have fun while doing it ^_^

Sorry for having replied so late, I was working with the editors, next chapter will be ready for wednesday, but if everything goes smoothly it could be also ready for saturday. I'll be at lucca comics and games from sunday to monday, so don't expect anything in those days.

Thank you for all the comments about the story, I am sorry that the rules were broken, but I was as surprised as you with that =P it must be the power of kyoot and let's face it, Sip is a hell of an artist, I'm a lucky writer.

Mimezinga

PS: Please if you are interested in FoE side stories check the Ponychan group, we are trying to create an active community so that every author can have feedback and give or recieve help, sharing experience and some time with the other writers.

have a link

http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/res/58852.html

YetAnotherBrony said...

@CTVulpin

Someone on Youtube printed and bound the entirety of "Past Sins". It's fairly thick.

If Fallout:Equestria was printed and bound as well...it would take several books. Or one giant paper brick like the Ultimate Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy.

P. Pony Ponyson said...

It's good to know that there's still a chance for my yet-to-have-a-first-chapter side story.

Side note: I've never had this many Story tabs backed up on my iPod all at the same time...

Strobe said...

FO:E is, as of chapter... 40(?), I think, over half a million words.

That's all four of the first Harry Potter books. And then some.

Add Project Horizons, and you can probably cover the next one and a half or two.

It's ridiculously long. Amazingly, gloriously, wonderfully ridiculously long.

tyler said...

A lotta classic rock tracks on here.

sbm1992 said...

woh, another FO:E side fic? cool
should tide me over till the other big stories update
also glad to see that the side fic post has also been updated

Kkat said...

@mimezinga

I am so thrilled to see this got it's own posting. You've more than earned it!

Can't wait to start reading this as soon as Fallout: Equestria is concluded.

Alex said...

Ah crap. Not another FO:E story to follow D:

No One said...

Nopony deserved their own post more. Congrats mime, you are credit to team. Also awesome. Cheers.

R10t Pol1ce said...

@Kkat

Kkat! Question: Is Homage dead yet? Need to know this.

Jazz said...

Dawww.... I love this story :)
its goofy yet still maintains that good ol' Fallout feel.

pmcollectorboy said...

Fallout Equestria. Now manlier than The Wheel of Time.

Sgt Muffin said...

Gratz on your own page.

Meganerdbomb said...

Another Fallout Equestria story with its own page? *Goes to read*

BigMacintosh said...

Well they let Project Horizons have its own page and look how that turned out (I love it even more than the original!) so I guess I have to read this too.

TheMagister said...

This story makes me both Dawwwwwwww and cry. I don't think I could stand it if this doesn't have a happy end for Puppy :(

BigMacintosh said...

Well fuck its thirteen chapters long! How do you expect me to play Battlefield 3 now?!

Unknown said...

;__; this one makes me sadder than most of the main FoE side stories because Puppy is so innocent. It's gonna suck when someone breaks it to her

madponyhobart said...

Oh you have got to be kidding more fallout, I'm taking a stand that all this side story stuff should hold off until....

kkat gives her congrats? well there goes my argument, oh well its better than whales

Sindri said...

@R10t Pol1ce
Almost certainly no. I won't say more here because there are clearly people here who haven't read the main story yet and I'd like to avoid spoilering.

Incidentally, you're unlikely to find Kkat in the side story comments very often, since she isn't reading any of them until she finishes writing the main plot and would like to avoid spoilers. Ask any questions about the main series in it's own comment thread: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/10/fallout-equestria-comment-post.html

notmyday said...

This comment is long and dumb and silly to boot is meant to the author of this story. You are better off reading the short version if you aren't the author. Read at your own peril


This is pretty much my raw reaction to finding this fan fic:
No these cannot be this most be some kind of mistake. This fan fic should be with the rest of the side story's.

My reaction at the picture:
She is adorable...is she wearing a space suit. What a coincident the protagonist I am working on also wears a space suit. OK,so I wasn't the first to think of a protagonist that wears a space suit. This brony just got started we will just read his first chapter.

My reaction to seeing this is not your first chapter.

My God you destroy my would be fan fiction to pieces with a picture and a description. You are scary good. I mean you didn't just destroy the origin of my protagonist. You found a way to make readers care for your protagonist before they even hit the first chapter.It took two chapter for me to really feel for Lilpip and eight for Blackjack.

You did all of that and more with a picture and a description. I was having a hard time finding a way to make readers give a damn about my protagonist. Because it doesn't matter how good the character, dialogue, setting is if the readers lose interest half way through the first chapter. You gotta have them hook as soon as possible before they lose interest and simple move on. You even solve the space helmet problem.

I was beginning to question how in all of hell would my earth-pony protagonist was suppose to use a rechargeable pistol with a his space helmet on. The protagonist was suppose to be a unicorn but then I realize that both Lilpip and Blackjack are unicorn. So I change it to an earth-pony.

Short version

Damn you for making me change my fan-fiction. Ill try to give feedback and even take notes. Know if you excuse me I have to stop typing and actually read the damn thing.

Whitbane said...

So much fan fiction, I REALLY need to read more Fallout. More Fallout is good Fallout!

But there's so much of it. Ohgodmyfreetime.

Flub said...

Oh jeez not again. Last time i went all nighter with FoE, i went partially insane during my PreCalc class. Let's do it again!

Whitbane said...

SPOILER
-------


She's Ghoulified, right?

God damnit, why!?

At least the A.I of the suit is cool.

mycutiemarkisagun said...

@R10t Pol1ce

troll ಠ_ಠ

LILPIP N HOMAGE ARE GONNA GROW OLD TOGETHER AND HAVE LOTS OF FILLIES AND GRANDFILLIES, ISN'T THAT RIGHT KKAT ^_^

joetraincool said...

This was Amazing. Seriously. Read all 13 chapters in one sitting. Nearly cried multiple times.

But you know, the thing that made me most sad, besides the 200 year crevasse between Puppy and her mother, was the presence of the Nightmare. Honestly, I can take flesh eating zombies, horrible de-ponyized raiders, evil Hal-like AIs bent on taking over the world etc without batting an eye. But to know that Puppy has the Nightmare in her? I actually got pissed at that stupid purple cloud. You leave her alone, Luna dammit.

This story is just so awesome. Can't wait for more. Keep up the good work.

Meganerdbomb said...

@SindriBlasphemy! The originals are and always have been incredible.
The fanfics may have better character development, but that's just the advantage of the written word over a videgame.
I actually dislike how grimdark the fics are compared to the games, but that's not to say I don't love the fics with all my heart, the original and Project Horizons anyway, and possibly this one.

Meganerdbomb said...

After reading 6 chapters, my reaction is that this is refreshing. Puppysmiles' naive attitude towards everything is a nice break from the angst-ridden hero complex that Littlepip and Blackjack suffer from (and wow it sounds really bad when I put it like that, but no insult was intended), and yet, it is even more tragic.
It's darkly humorous how Puppy goes from place to place searching for her mom and inadvertently fixing problems and saving ponies while not even fully grasping the true nature of the horrors she encounters.

Derek "open_sketchbook" Chappell said...

Aaaah I finished all the chapters and now there are no more chapters and I need more!

But hey, by reading three FO:E stories I'll get updates 150% faster than before!

dyslexicfaser said...

Ah, this is great. It's not really less dark than FoE, but Puppysmiles just refuses to understand that bad things are happening to her. That kind of denail of reality deserves props.

Definitely worthy to stand beside Horizons and Fallout: Equestria.

mimezinga said...

wow, it's quite a lot of coments to succeeding in in giving at all of them ç_ç

first of all, thank you for the cheers and super thank you to Kkat for her encouraging words ^_^

first, for notmyday, don't worry it's not a space suit, it's only a radsuit ^_^ i'm more than sure that the two characters won't be that identical, go for it anyway!

for joetraincool: it's not nightmare moon, it's something similar to the corrupting power of necromancy, you know, A nightmare, not THE nightmare... call her nightmare noob if you wish

thank you for all the commentsagain, I'll try to reply a little better next time, in the meantime have this ETA for xhapter 14: saturday night or wednestady night (i will be away from internet til tuesday, this is whiy it could be delayed that bad)

Mimezinga

P.S. Puppy is arguing with a mirror since this morning, should i tell her?

Suzzle said...

Dear Mimezinga

One of the most amazing things about this piece is that it is great in an entirely different way than FoE and PH. That you've done this well with English as a second language is simply spectacular. Can't wait for more!

kirbuu said...

@mycutiemarkisagun pink cloud was part of an expansion in fallout new vegas

cousin it said...

This is awesome. Mr. Voice is my favorite character in any story ever.

sbm1992 said...

sorry but P7 is better than mister voice

i like this story, alot, but not as much as the other two 'biggies'
sorry

still plan to see it through to the end though, little puppy is growing on me

mycutiemarkisagun said...

@kirbuu

oh

but still

"You made it a hot line, I made it a hot song"

Sindri said...

Not done reading yet, so I won't be able to stay and chat for a day or so, but I gotta say:
Cutest. Weapon of mass destruction. Ever.

LordLolTastic said...

Expected to read 3 chapters then go to bed
read all 13 and stayed up till 4:30
so much D'awwww
I love this story
And I want more :D
5/5

mimezinga said...

hi there, you asked for more? here's more, chapter 14 is ready

for chapter 15 it will take some time since i'll be ocupied with a lot of things in this week, please be patioent and don't lose hope

thank you for your attention and all of the feedback

Mimezinga

P.S. I won't be able to answer for 3 days, please be patient with that, i'll be back in front of a PC on wednesday

Sindri said...

This story is a trap. I started reading a little before midnight, intending to do a chapter or two and go to bed.
The next thing I knew I was out of chapters (and had refreshed twice to make sure), looked out the window, and realized that it was daylight.
No regrets.

Arcane Scroll said...

I just got through reading the latest chapter. I love Puppy not getting what was going on during the battle. When she started to realize the link to her mother... it was heartbreaking. Also, I appear to be developing a hatred for Robocolt.

Keep up the great writing!

Jonathan said...

@Silver Aura im just glad that he allowed the story to be published,,,, way to good to pass up

Jonathan said...

@Timber uumm dude? robot or kick ass filly that cant die and has super powers? idk im sure your story was good but just sayin

Jonathan said...

@Casper did you even read the damn story?

Gozer the Equestrian said...

Interesting. Puppysmiles seems to have tasked herself with the impossible, and is crushing anything that gets in her way, or points out the futility if her mission. This story sort of reminds me of "Falling Down".

Jordan said...

@Kkat

AHA! There you are; been trying to get ahold of you to seek approval for my own side story concept. I wanted to chronicle (through a series of short stories) the adventures of Ditzy Doo in the time between the War and Fo:E. I dunno if everypony seeks your approval before trying a sidefic, but I wanted your blessing before getting started on the project, since I'd be playing around with your brainchild.

Now then, for this story. Ahem... CUTE! Puppy is almost too cute to exist in the FoE universe. The story is fairly well written, and (whether it meant to or not) is rather humorous. Black comedy at its finest, sometimes even straying into Dead Baby Humor, and yet it doesn't make you feel bad about laughing at it. It does this by counterbalancing the humor with real emotional reactions to the bad stuff going on, even if it is played for laughs. Kudos!

Nyerguds said...

Why doesn't this page list the GDocs versions? -_-

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BFXFvkhcBln3BrsOAjF3KERPgx7GwdbJh9MP264T_MI/edit?hl=en_US

Whitbane said...

This story makes me equally happy and sad. Damn the undeniably awesome and adorable protagonist!

TerraH said...

Chapter 11... Saddest thing EVER! I was crying so much...

sbm1992 said...

chapter 14: wow, puppy lost her only toy weapon, and got broke'ed for a bit
nice chapter, here's hoping more power-armoured ponies appear in the story

madponyhobart said...

I am still reading and I am enjoying it greatly, But I have a question for you mimezinga.

Puppy's mom, Rainy Days, sounds very familiar to me. Did you take her from FO:E or is she OC to your story?

I've just worked a long day so I might be going crazy, so some confirmation would be nice. I hope I am wrong, but if I am right...

mimezinga said...

@Sindri
I never tought that Pink Eyes could be an all night read, but I'm happy you liked it ^_^

@Arcane Scroll
Beware, Gauss is Not-Robocolt... Cold Shower is Robocolt, at least for the name designation from Puppy =P anyhow, Henry uses names quite erratically but we all know that Henry never had a grasp on names ^_^

@Nyerguds
The Gdoc version was more a Editing ground and since this story was asked to go with the common Side Stories post, I made the submisison as short a possible, cutting every link and on the synopsis... sooner or later I'll submit a revamp for the story, with a link to a Gdocs index, some more art and a better synopsis

@sbm1992
well, hero blue screen of death seemed the most puppy-like reaction to that situation... really, whho neeeded another rage scene after just 2 chapters?

@madponyhobart
Rainy Days is an OC, I'm sorry for that but I really tried hard to not involve characters from other fics, so that the story doesn't ruin somepony's else canon or gets spoiled by that. Obviously you can just invent a close number of cool names for your characters, so itt's more than possible that a lot of ponies in the end will have names of other ponies.
I'm almost certain to have read a Rainy days pony that was responsible for weather control in a story where Celestia had her usual kingdom management issues.

Thank you for all the feedback and for your attention

Mimezinga

Arcane Scroll said...

@mimezinga
I don't know how I got those ponies mixed up, I guess I'm not good with names either XD

Overlong Analysis Cobalt said...

Well, I was going to read the whole thing before rating it, but you had to go and quote Iron Maiden in the start of Chapter 12.

Take all my 5s. Take them now.

Nyerguds said...

@mimezinga
Ah, thanks. I'm looking forward to it.

See, I like to download and archive all of the stories I read, preferably as pdf (since I tend to read them on the train to/from work), but fimfiction, while showing full HTML markup, only has a .txt download function. This means that to properly save it, I have to save the actual web pages and then clean up the HTML code in them to get rid of the fimfiction layout around the story part.

As for the name "Rainy Days", I've looked around and didn't find any existing pony with the name :)
Sunny Skies / Sunny Day Skies (aka, Sunny Disguise) was used as alter ego for Celestia in some stories though :p

Anyway... I'm totally addicted to this story, and can't wait for the next part. I've tried some of the Fallout Equestria side stories, but in terms of quality, few come close to this (besides Project Horizons).

crazyredemu said...

I love this story, I wish Puppy and Pip could meet, that would be so awesome!

Arcane Scroll said...

Latest chapter, 15, was posted a little while ago. IMO, one of the best chapters yet :)

Sindri said...

Oh dear. Puppy is going to end up accidentally getting the 52 conquered by an insane AI and have no clue how it happened. She buried/destroyed the weapon stores that SolOS is trying to get to at the moment, right?
On the plus side, all the pretty ponies at Ironworks are going to have their siege broken soon...

tonyday said...

Is this a trap? Is it? Is it is it is it? Just tell me if it's a trap. I read FO:E and Project Horizons, they are excellent and I'm considering reading this one but I need to ask... Is this a trap? Am I going to cry? My heart strings are thin enough...

Nyerguds said...

@tonyday
Not really. It has some tragic moments, but they are mostly compensated by the fact the main character is totally oblivious to them 90% of the time. This does occasionally produce a brand of humour that's quite morbid though.

Besides that, there's the fact this is about a girl looking for her mother, who most probably died about 200 years before, which is rather tragic in its own.

But overall, the story is really upbeat, especially considering the fact the main character still tends to make friends with people after they shoot her on sight... through the head :p

Oh, there are also a number of AIs of varying levels of intelligence, craziness and malevolence involved in the story. Her conversations with them are hilarious.

Nyerguds said...

@Sindri
SolOS is going to be soooo mad when he finally gets into P7's data and finds out about that, lol.

Merc312 said...

So much cute! So many memes! So much.. I don't know.

Well one thing I'll tell you.. awesome story bro!

ps- also noting, ironically, out of the three major Fallout stories this one is the most likely to have a very sad ending.

Poptard said...

I liked this story so much, I just had to make a trope page for it here.

mimezinga said...

@overlong analysis cobalt

thank you ^_^ I wasn't sure about using songs not from the show, then I decided that a good song is a good song and gives a good mood, so I went for it, I appreciate a lot when ppl notice my musical soundrack choices, thanks again ^_^

@Nyerguds okie dokie, i'll give you a link for the Gdocs version, just remember it's a workshop, so you could find different solors into the text and comemnts from the editors
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BFXFvkhcBln3BrsOAjF3KERPgx7GwdbJh9MP264T_MI/edit?hl=en_US#

rainy days could be a secondary character in the first chapter of my little alicorn, not sure

i'd say you to give a xhance at least to heroes, i liked it a lot, also probed, a one shot, is not half bad

@Sindri
Puppy usually does everything unintentionally, but yes, SolOS won't be happy to discover that the storages have been sealed and that Ponymedes is gone for good ^_^

@Tonyday
I can't honestly say you that the story isn't sad, but i tried my best to get a d'aw and a lol from every possible situation and i'm trying hard to keep that mood no matter what, at least to the last chapter...

@Merc312
well, rhe story is bound to go sad, i know, but it's also a story of hope coming back in a palce that was slowly dying, so maybe it's not all black... sure, Puppy is in a bad situation, but she is a good filly and only good things can happen to good fillies and... fuck, i'm depressed now ç_ç

@Poptard
Woah, Puppy got troped! thank you! have all my internets!
/)^3^(\

nao, something else? yes! i made a TUMBL account and created a ask puppysmiles page! not sure if it will really work, but so far i'm having fun with it, have a look if interested ^_^
http://askpuppysmiles.tumblr.com/

Thank you for your feedback and your attention

Mimezinga

P.S. Puppy tried to charge 5 cents for every reply but i scolded her, now the service is free ^_^

DRTJR said...

@madponyhobartI was under the distinct impression that Rainy days was the Backgroung pony that dressed as a viking

Gozer the Equestrian said...

@Merc312
Don't say that! Rainy Days is a ghoul, Puppysmiles is going to find her, LilPip is going to fix the wasteland, and Puppysmiles is going to be happy.

EonMaster said...

P7 is so boned. Good job Puppy.

Sindri said...

Pony hazmat suits are now canon.

Ozymandias said...

My only complaint about this story is that I can not five star it twice.

NovaTheFireBolt said...

I believe that if a story such as this one exceeds 4 stars, then it gets it's own post. This one got separated from the Fo:E Sidefic dump because of it's 5 star.

Unknown said...

Its....so....damn...cute

TB3 said...

Erm, guys...

Has anyone considered what will happen if LilPip actually suceeds in triggering 'Gardens of Equestria'...

I mean, it's designed to rid Equestria of all traces of taint and radiation...

And at this point, Puppysmiles is just an ambulatory cloud of taint...

...or does the Pink Cloud / Littlehorn Agent count as something different?

Sindri said...

@NovaTheFireBolt
On EqD the side stories are all one post, so they don't have individual ratings. Seth broke Somber's Project Horizons away a few months ago because the author had written a bunch of 6 star stuff in the past and it was already past 50,000 words, but then swore that it would never happen again in order to avoid being swarmed with people trying to get their story broken away as well. Fortunately for us, Seth has a surprisingly low cuteness threshold and thus Puppy was able to convince him to break the rules.

@TB3
Taint is the Impelled Metamorphosis Potion, the rainbow goop that makes alicorns when used properly and monsters/tumors when not. The Pink Cloud is a very powerful necromantic toxin thing; the Gardens might remove it as well but they've never been mentioned to. I believe that the Gardens, like the more localized Taint removal spell at Tenpony, will remove the sources of further corruption but not affect changes already made, but I don't think it's been specifically stated as such. Likewise I think it's been implied that ghouls require some amount of radiation to survive, so the total removal of radiation would probably cause them to gradually decay, but I can't find a place that's explicitly stated either. And of course Puppy isn't a normal ghoul; not only does her fusion with the suit mean that, if the stories about the Wild Herd are correct, she won't even be killed by the standard decapitation unless you simultaneously destroy all the suit's talismans, but her relationship with "creepy voice" seems to have given her Nightmare level power. I really have no idea whatsoever what will happen to her when the Gardens are activated.

Bemmo said...

Haven't read any of this, but was looking through the FOE comment page and heard it mentioned as one of the main three FO fics along with the original and PH. Got to this page and my thoughts proceeded along the lines of: huh, a bit pink for FO, but so cute! Looks interesting... "tags: silly protagonist". Alright this sounds really good, just look at the fanart... OMG SHE'S HUGGING A BLOATSPRITE! I MUST READ THIS NOW!

Arcane Scroll said...

@Bemmo
I think that's how most of us got into this story :)

TimeForSP said...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BMNCNTsgONo I has decided to record myself reading this awesome fanfic...of awesomeness, I can has feedback?

Merc312 said...

Awesome chapter as usual! :3 No doubt one of my favorite stories.

Pretty Ponies! Y U SPANK PUPPY?

Nyerguds said...

Woah. Seems puppysmiles ended up in the middle of it, and at the wrong side. I'm getting kinda worried...

@mimezinga

Yay, thanks :)

mimezinga said...

@ gozer the equestrian
well, puppy is going to be happy for sure, she is always happy...

@Eonmaster
P7 is easy to fool, the problem was talking SolOS into computer love

@Sindri
yup, yhr hazmat suits going canon made me dance the poney pokey on my bed ^_^
And in case the Gardens of Equestria will be activated, Puppy will meet the seame fate a cloud of pink gas could meet, as soon as I find out what it is =P

@TimeForSP
Thank you for doing the reading ^_^ I already comemnted it on youtube some time ago

@Merc312
Well, pretty ponies spank Puppy because she was a bad pony making prank calls. She deserved no mercy =P

@Nyerguds
Puppy is as usual oblivious of who's who, but yes, nao she is a raider! A super dangerous eeeeeevil raider! beware, Big 52!

Blood For Blood said...

... I am so confused... I'm thinking of trying my hand at writing my own Fallout crossover fic, but I have no clue exactly who I'd need to get in touch with about it... any help is appreciated.

mimezinga said...

sure, start joining the side stories community on this link

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KaoFWVlFlMjYR2KmTWxwCYnvTZQcjEULO9YHSaqqk9U/edit?hl=en_US#

the group is a little chaotic but there are ppl willingto read and to pre-read, a lot os other stories and some collaborations, and at worst, some mall talk about fallout topics ^_^

nettick said...

Wow this story is pretty dam good!

Meganerdbomb said...

I just realized Puppysmiles is pretty much the definition of a Mary Sue, and I am OK with this.
Somehow, having the main character be a walking plot device really works for this story.

BassPony said...

This is my favorite fanfic :)

TimeForSP said...

I finally read more
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IKj4SRoQieo

mimezinga said...

This will just be a fast message, sorry, no answers but in these days I'm doing a lot of xmas things

First of all, merry Chrismas or whatever you are celebrating, have a nice time with your families or your friends, I wish you well and hope all of you are happy.

Second, I'm sorry for the delay with the last chapter, but things got messy. It was too long and we had to split it in 2 separate chapters, that needed some more (a lot more) work. At the moment the status is: chapter 19 okay and under editing, expect somewhere during the winter break, as soon as it is edited (could take a while, so I'm not stating a day). Chapter 20 is written but needs work and will be out when it will be ready and clean. Afterwords are still inside the pencil, there is a general idea but I didn't write down anything so far.

Okay, that was all. Once again, happy holydays to everypony annd have fun ^_^

Nutjob said...

Oh, god, last chapter?

...

...

I'm almost terrified for Puppy now.

Nyerguds said...

Well, this is shaping up pretty much as expected... Still hoping for a somewhat happy ending here, so, now let's see how she gets rid of Creepy Voice. My guess, the Magic of Friendship will have to get involved, no Elements needed :P

Hawkeye92 said...

Chapter 19 was just... Wow. Puppysmiles slowly realising her mother is dead was heartbreaking.
I'm curious to see where stuff goes from here.

Sindri said...

...
[buy some apples!]

CTVulpin said...

Already finished this on FIMFiction
;_; Those last chapters...
Well done mimezinga.

Thunder Run said...

I hope this isn't connected to the original Fallout Equestria.I'm barely on Chapter 32!

Derptastic_w00t said...

Wow, absolutely just wow, this turned out to be so much better than I imagined when I first started reading it. What seemed to be a lighthearted fun joke turned out to be a really powerful story, and I enjoyed every word! Thanks Mimezinga, you are awesome!

mimezinga said...

i storngly recommend you to finish reading FoE original, first, thunder run

And thank you everypony for all the feedback, it had been quite long since i started this one and i'm happy that i could finish it.

Thank you for reading Puppy's little story, she won't be alone anymore ^_^

Mimezinga

Hawkeye92 said...

That was a very powerful ending. A fitting end to a great story.
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.

Jazz said...

q_q
awesome story, awesome ending.

Arcane Scroll said...

Two of the side stories I was reading have finished, and both with wonderful endings. You did a great job Mime, it's been a pleasure helping proofread them for you the last few chapters and I can't wait to see what you write next!

beyondxhorizons said...

DAT ENDING. Oh man, such a big smile on my face from it.

DXLelouch said...

well yet another side story to add to the FOE stuff i gotta read

Takon said...

Great ending, love it.

MadponyHobart said...

It has been a while since I commented here... Great ending for a fun yet depressing story. I have a big smile on my face while I fight off tears. You have a knack for drawing out my emotions unlike most of the other stories I have read since joining the community. Thank you and I look forward to your next story.

Suroguner said...

This story left me hugging my Twilight plushie, Only Past Sins Chapter 10 (Original version) could do that to me at first. But the reason for it this time was Puppy finally finding her mommy rather than being taken away.

Architraz Warden said...

Wow, awesome last section on that afterward, and a very unique and appealing hereafter.

I agree with what the others said, you created something in the FOE universe, but absolutely made it your own.

I'm very happy to have read it (and will read again).

Blackbelt said...

The ending made me cry like a little girl, and I am not ashamed to admit that.

nettick said...

@Blackbelt I know that feel bro. I cried many manly tears.

crazyredemu said...

Puppy Smiles makes me want to be a better person...

swicked said...

Gaaahaaaha!
MAN this story lays it on thick!
They were sipping tea all the way to the afterlife! And its a happy ending that so many ponies died!
This definitely had me grinning all the way through. Good job :)

The Great Llama said...

This story may be the best combination of silly and serious and tears I have ever seen.

shadefox said...

I'm not one for tears, but even I had slightly damp eyes at the ending.

Excellent finish to a good story. You did the original FOE proud.

Congratulations.

cjwcjwcjwcjw said...

F**KING DAMN IT, EVERY TIME I PLAN ON FINISHING A FANFIC, IT FINISHES!!!

BAAAAAAAAaAH

Kanzuke said...

Post needs complete tag

Jonathan said...

Good bye Puppy, I will miss you.

flutterborn said...

love story pink eyes is a bosss like how she is dead but alive but isnt either alive or dead this hurts my brain.

Doubleclick said...

Oh my gosh, I just finished reading this. In short: Excellent!

Now as one of Kkat's proofreaders from the very beginning, I am a bit biased when I say that it is extremely unlikely any fanfic will ever top Fallout: Equestria. That said, Mimezinga didn't try to top it. Instead, he wrote a story in a completely different direction - the scale is much smaller and seldom aspires to anything 'epic', but what it does, it does with flair and gusto. The humor might not fit everyone, but I spent easily more than half of my time reading with anywhere from a slight smile to having to fight off outright laughter because I was in the quiet car of the commuter train. And then, out of nowhere, after pages and pages of humor and excitement, Mime will sometimes sucker punch you with a really poignant moment. The sadness never lasts though - how could it with one of the cutest protagonists I've ever met in a story meant for adults? And yes, this story is meant for adults, but it's fascinating to see the world through the eyes of a foal who refuses to give up her innocence.

It is my personal feeling that if you are at all interested in the mix of Fallout and ponies but are daunted by the size of Fallout: Equestria or Project Horizons, or you're worried about the grimdark, you need to read Pink Eyes. You are doing yourself a disservice if you do not read Pink Eyes. It is good! Puppy promise!

mimezinga said...

Lotta love is supereffective, nao Puppeh cries out her joy TT_TT

crazyredemu said...

Im going to read it again!

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