Author: Doctor Scraps
Description: Twilight is incited to begin a persuit of love and romance as a part of the magic of friendship after Rarity goads her about never having fallen in love before. Misadventures ensue.The Romancing Quest (All Links)(New Part 13!)
Additional Tags: Twilight, friends, romance, dating, derpy
233 comments:
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI just wanna throw out there that the one Celestia is talking about is OBVIOUSLY Dr. Whooves.
Actually, now that I think about it, In this sentence, Pegasus should be plural, Pegasi.
ReplyDeleteLyra and Bon Bon were on their way to the pond to feed the ducks, as was their ritual on days such as these, when they paused by the road to the Library, observing the four stoic white and **GOLF(gold)** **Pegasus(Pegasi)** stationed outside.
Also spotted an incomplete sentence. I didn't think There were 2 more Celestias on either side of the couch Celestia was sitting in!
"Oh, and here's Twilight eating her first plate of alfalfa!" Mrs. Sparkle giggled as she sat between Twilight and Celestia, the couch flanked by two of Celestia **('s guards)**, an old photo book open in her lap.
It's kinda fun finding these. It'll be more fun if I can't find any though! I'm way too lazy to find the little errors, nor do I care to bother with them. I'll admit, each of these halted my reading for a second as I had to take a moment to process them. I still don't care though, cause I fill in the error and read on, and enjoy the story anyway! Though feel free to fix these! :D
Now I can't wait for Chapter 13! Lucky chapter 13! All hay breaks loose as AJ learns Twilight, Trixie, and her own dear big bro decided to try to act out the fanfic Luna vs. Threesome. Luna then goes ballistic after learning someone wrote such unsavory words against her character. And then Ponyville exploded, twice.
Or something else happens! :D
-face hoof-
ReplyDeleteI really need to stop doing my pre-reading after work...Texticle tourettes seems to fit, doesn't it?
...I need someone I can send these to for editiing...
-Puts hoof on shoulder-
ReplyDeleteDon't feel too bad, we all do it frame time to time.
umm...
Doctor Scraps. Let me be very clear. This is trash. This garbage is just as bad as any filthy clopfic. There may not be any explicit content, no, but there is no doubt that this is the product of the same kind of horny, perverted bastard who writes pony sex scenes.
ReplyDeleteI cannot express in words how much I despise works such as this. Ponies are not lesbians. Ponies do not. Have. Bisexual. Love triangles. They are ponies. They are innocent and wonderful, and if for the sake of telling a good story you feel compelled to include realistic, sexual relationships between them, you do not have to write them all as being horny- ass lesbos and bisexuals.
Why am I so upset about this? Because I seem tone part of a shrinking minority if people who value family over indulgence. I seem to be one of the only ones who can see that there are fewer and fewer real families anymore. No, instead, anybody who's not gay is deciding to fuck everything that moves and hope they don't have a baby. And if they do have a kid, so what? They can just have the child murdered before it's born.
Take a look around, folks. The fact that even fanfics derived from a cartoon made for little girls are swamped with stories of everyone being a goddamned homosexual is a symptom of the larger problem: Noone believes in sexual morality anymore. Well, you know what? I'm fuckin sick of it. I wash my hands of this bullshit. Homosexuality is SEXUAL PERVERSION. It is not an "alternative lifestyle". It is not something a person is born with. I know from personal experience that you can convince yourself to love anyone, regardless of gender. So don't give me any horseshit about loving and tolerating everything, you sick bastards are just fellow humans making a conscious choice to fuck each other in the ass. I'm out, PEACE.
may i ask when can we expect to see a part 13?
ReplyDeletePolygamy? In my little ponies?
ReplyDeleteIt's more likely than you think.
I must admit, looking at Trixie's behavior from the point of view of an entertainer's standard self-promotion makes her much more sympathetic compared to the first time I watched Boast Busters.
@RainbowDat
ReplyDeleteWhatever you say, parasprite. Whatever you say...
Anyhow, author, could you at least leave an epilogue of sorts?
At the very least, the thought of a straight Rainbow Dash does tingle my interests...
Whoa, does that end piece of left out ties becoming whole stories possibly refer to Lunashy?
ReplyDelete@Angel Heart
ReplyDeleteWell...Not to get peoples hopes up, but here's the list of stories that I'm planning to do next...
Doctor Whooves: Daughter of the Sun
Soarin' High and Fallin' Fast
Creature of the Night
and maybe an ongoing serial of goofs and silliness within this stories frame of Twilight, Mac, and Trixie in a Three's Company sort of settup. Something to write when I can't think to work with the others.
@RainbowDat
ReplyDeleteQuick question: Where does this "sexual morality" come from? How do YOU know it's "moral"?
Let's have a little bit more love and tolerance, shall we? Just because you don't live one way doesn't mean others can't.
Uncommon does not always = immoral.
@Doctor Scraps
ReplyDeleteOk, so what about Pinkie? :P
@Baree
ReplyDeleteGive me time, and I will no doubt think of something. Pinkie Pie is actually amazingly hard to work with in an effective manner.
@RainbowDat
ReplyDeleteYou're funny.
Not in a puppy chasing it's tail kind of way though, more of a "Timmy got his head caught in the toilet trying to get a drink... again" way, sadly.
@RainbowDat, The funny thing is, my good sir, that homosexuality (and bisexuality) is perfectly natural. As a minor example, giraffes are predominantly bi or gay, as roughly 70% or so of their sexual encounters are same-sex. To say that homosexuality is unnatural is to say that the God you worship screwed up, since He clearly made the various animals love those of the same sex, as well as making quite a few of your fellow humans not be heterosexual.
ReplyDeleteIn fact, there's nothing morally wrong with any of the situations presented (aside from the horrible original chapter 10 with its random Molestia). Sure, polyamory is unconventional, but it certainly isn't some horrible thing that must be banished to the dark.
Finally, your assertion that "from personal experience" you "can convince yourself to love anyone" is utter bollocks, and you'd know that if you were ever actually in love. You can be happy and married to someone you don't truly love. But you cannot make yourself love someone whom you don't love. Trust me, if it were possible to force yourself to love someone, I would have found someone before I was 20. And I wouldn't have found my soulmate in someone I barely get to see because she lives in a different state while I'm scraping by to make my tuition payments, and can't afford to travel.
Well that was a fun fanfic with an interesting twist. And now I'm interested in Fluttershy/Luna.
ReplyDeleteI liked this fic and I'm glad everypony ended up happy, but I'm going to pretend it ended at Chapter 9. I don't quite buy the whole "happy trio" at the end; it just didn't jive. Also don't like Twixie. I must say you spin an interesting yarn, regardless of my agreement with your pairings.
ReplyDeleteChapters 1-9: ****
Chapters 10-13: ***
That was great, and I loved the ending. Looking forward to whatever you do in the future.
ReplyDeleteI read to the end of chapter 3. It seems to be declining. Should I continue?
ReplyDelete@RainbowDat
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Nice story, Doctor Scraps! Quite honestly didn't expect it to end as early as it did, and even more disappointed in myself for only getting into it in Chapter 9. But I will look forward to more of your stories, your FiM Universe reminds me of the Progress/Luna vs. series in a good way, your subtle jokes always manage to make me crack a smile.
I liked it. I looked at it askance for a while because I adore Twixie and I haven't read much with Big Mac, so I was a bit suspicious. But all in all, it was satisfying. A lot of spelling mistakes in the last chapter though. Rather, typos. Not that big a deal but it detracted somewhat.
ReplyDeleteA satisfactory ending, however. I was all sad that Trixie was alone, and then she wasn't. Big Mac is a lucky stallion, though, I tell you what.
@Garrett Jones If you're already starting to dislike the story I'd say quit while you're ahead. Chapter 5 was the last good chapter in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteSpeaking of which, now that the ride is over I have to put my criticism pants on. In terms of shipping fics (of which I read an embarrassing amount) I think out of the gate this was a pretty darn interesting one. I particularly liked the relationship that Big Macintosh and Twilight built up between the two of them; they were genuinely sweet and dawwww inducing.
Then there was the competition between Trixie and Big Mac. It was... awkward to see the two of them fight over Twilight. The alarms weren't going off quite yet, but the added element of fighting for Twilight's love definitely felt like something you'd read in a trashy romance novel. Still, I had enjoyed the previous chapters so I read on...
After the race for Twilight's "love"... things just seemed to fall apart to be honest. Twilight sharing lovers? Was never funny or romantic. Lunashy? Didn't even make sense. It was shipping for the sake of shipping. At this point I wasn't emotionally invested AT ALL when previously I was anxious for a new chapter.
It was okay, I'll admit. But was it a good ship fic? No.
@7-Tor, I was actually somewhat expecting the cliche romance-novel parts, what with the repeated mention of Rarity's Harlequin novels.
ReplyDeleteAs well, I thought that the Trixiemac Sparkle ship was one of the better bits of polyamory I've seen in any fiction.
Lunashy was somewhat out of nowhere, but that makes sense with it essentially being a rebound for Luna.
Is it the best shipfic? Nope. But it was an enjoyable one.
@Doctor Scraps
ReplyDeleteTime you shall have. I do hope you think of something though, no matter how long it takes... Poor gal. That is some wall she has build there.
And THAT is why Lyra is the best pony.
ReplyDeleteI think the only part that surprised me, is that I didn't expect your story to end on this chapter. *shrugs* It was cute though.
ReplyDelete-Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria
Lyra and Bon Bon at the end was the best bit in the entire thing. And I must have missed the beginning of the LunaShy arc, because it seemed pretty dang random. Not that it wouldn't have been otherwise, but even so.
ReplyDeleteSo many things just stopped making sense after the race ended. LunaShy out of nowhere? Not a single pony raising an objection to Macintwixie? It turned into shipping for the sake of shipping, and it wasn't even in a humorous way. More like a train wreck way.
ReplyDeleteMy biggest criticism isn't the weird direction the plot took, but the sudden lack of humor. Every chapter through the race had at least one laugh at loud moment, and a few quotable gems. With the conclusion of it, the lightheartedness abruptly stopped and was replaced with a more serious tone. If the series continued being funny, I would have been much more satisfied than I am now.
Giving a grade to the now finished product, I'll have to give it 3.5/5, 4.5 if it ended at a better time.
"Macintosh, consorting with both Trixie and Twilight, together? The very notion nearly made her thought process shut down. How shameful! How inappropriate! Twilight was already neglecting her duty to her studies in the endeavor that led to this, and now she was bordering on the precipice of an entirely delinquent relationship with more than one pony!"
ReplyDeleteHmm, I thought herds kinda WORKED like that? One stallion, many mares? ;)
well to tell the truth, i hate romance novels, but after reading the first few sentences of the first chapter, you've actually captured my attention in a type of novel that i really don't like. congratz for that. i love your use of vocabulary. your use of imagery and metaphors ETC. is what made me read this enthralling story. i loved chapter 11 when you started with twilight "...was awoken by the sun spilling in through her window, warming the room pleasantly...", i also love the hilarious moment in the same chapter when spike said "...Twilight, if Macintosh is gonna be spending the night, give me word in advance so I can…i dunno,move my bed into another room? You guys kept me up half the night…" i love your writing. i loved everything about this story. from its gooyness, to its lesbian moments, you sir/ma'am deserve the title "The great and awesome-st writer" Doctor Scwaps
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P.s. ill be certain to look for any other cleverly written novels by you while i spend my time on this site.
@RainbowDat
ReplyDeletenow now theres no need to start a war about that, yhea i can understand about homosexuality and you being bothered by ponies doing it and all but cmon, 1 this guy put a lot of hard work to his story and had to guts to post it for all of bronykind to see, so kudos to him
and
2 why take the time to post a vulgar comment? if you really hated it so much you would have left and look at other things, now thats the smart thing to do =D
im not at all bothered by him involving ponies to this kind of subject, (no im not a furry, dont even think about that disgusting shit) i like reading what every person has to offer, you never judge a book by its cover.
XD That was AMAZING! Trevor eagerly awaits said sequal for Dashie!
ReplyDelete(Is that even legal?
A lesbian Fluttershy?
No, a straight Dash.
Priceless! XD)
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
I don't know when I started enjoying this so much, but I really did. Thanks for writing and sharing :-)
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