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Author: Kkat
Description: Fallout. With ponies! Set in an alternate future, one pony must learn to survive in a blasted, poisoned land... and possibly, with the aid of friends made along the way, bring new light into the darkness of post-apocalyptic Equestria.All Chapters after the Page Break + New Side Story From Another Author
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Additional Tags: Fallout, Post-Apocalyptic, Long, OC Ponies, Adventure
Fallout Equestria Animated Comic Chapter 1
Fallout Equestria Animated Comic Chapter 2
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Introduction
Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7
Chapter 8
Chapter 9
Chapter 10
Chapter 11
Chapter 12
Chapter 13
Chapter 14
Chapter 15
Chapter 16
Chapter 17
Chapter 18
Chapter 19
Chapter 20
Chapter 21
Chapter 22
Epilogue
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Prologue: Part 1
Chapter 1: Part 1 / Part 2
Chapter 2: Part 1 / Part 2
Chapter 3: Part 1 / Part 2 / Part 3
Chapter 4: Part 1
Chapter 5: Part 1
Chapter 6: Part 1
Chapter 7: Part 1
Chapter 8: Part 1
Chapter 9: Part 1
Chapter 10: Part 1
Chapter 11: Part 1
Chapter 12: Part 1
Chapter 13: Part 1
Chapter 14: Part 1
Chapter 15: Part 1
Chapter 16: Part 1
Chapter 17: Part 1
Chapter 18: Part 1
Chapter 19: Part 1
Chapter 20: Part 1
Chapter 21: Part 1
Chapter 22: Part 1
Epilogue: Part 1
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Soundtrack 3
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Soundtrack 5 (New!)
[GRIMDARK][CROSSOVER][SHIPPING] Hey! A borderline clopfic for you guys! I think it goes without saying that this is probably not for everyone, but it is technically part of the story!
Author: Pacce
Description: Littlepip spends her first night with Homage and has to deal with a crisis of faith regarding what she's fighting for. Takes place right in the middle of Chapter 20.Fallout Equestria: A Mare Worth Fighting For
Additional Tags: A deleted scene, Kkat approved.
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4,993 comments:
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteWe seem to have broken Blogger's comment pages. All comments above 200 are on the second page. The third page has nothing.
In other news, here's something I thought I'd try:
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They're not the best, but I thought I might as well throw these out there.
@Erthilo
ReplyDeleteHoly WOW!
O.O
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!
@Erthilo
ReplyDeleteMajor applause for ya! I'm.. actually making an FO:E folder for all the amazing stuff people are producing. And of course, the fic itself.. keep up the awesome work Kkat! :)
Wow Kkat, This is seriously amazing.
ReplyDeleteSorry if this has been asked before, I don't really want to search through four hundred comments. But have you ever written anything that has been published?
All the characters in this story seem to be personified so well (*Especially* as of chapters 16 and 17), and that's seriously rare even in professional writing.
Keep up the amazing job.
I feel absolutely horrible right now. Know why? Because there isn't a new FO:E chapter. I mean... my God. I've said this several times in the comments before but... this is one of the best things I've ever read, period. I've never felt anticipation like this.
ReplyDeleteSo... What am I supposed to do until the next chapter comes out? And what about the chapter after that? Ohgod I think you just stole my life.
ReplyDelete"Ministry of Awesome". Okay, this is now the greatest fanfic I've ever read.
ReplyDeleteI have waited 'till midnight in front of bookstores for stuff worse then this.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading this fic I cant play fallout anymore... I just cant... My eyes are open and I now see how awesome it would be if it was party based and Everything was HARDER! I mean I felt like I was waltzing through that game. even the new ones hardcore mode was lacking. I love your story so please keep it up. BTW your character development is amazing.
ReplyDelete@Erthilo
ReplyDeleteWow! really amazing job Erthilo, now i sort of want to see the stable 2 door panel on page of 3 as a wallpaper (without the text of course.)
Kkat, look what you have done! your awesomeness can not be contained and is now spreading to the others!
footnote: level up.
New Perk: Almost Perfect. your story is so awesome it makes the whole fandom 20% cooler as a result.
(P.S. i wanted to use the strike format to strike out the "Almost" in the perk but sadly blogger does not support that HTML code :(
I am not a grimdark fan. That said, THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST FICS I HAVE EVER READ! Seriously, I love Fallout, and this just mixes it with the other best thing ever!To To the author, let me just say that you are a master. Thank you so much for writing this! I can't wait to see what happens next. Oh yeah, and its good to see that Pip found someone, velvets unfair self-righteous attitude towards the poor mare was staring to get me angry. Keep up the good work, this brony will read it with pleasure!
ReplyDeleteI just started reading this story about two days ago. I'm only on part eleven, and I LOVE it. The writing is outstanding, and genuinely as good as some "real" stories I've read. The author has SERIOUS talent and skill and I believe they should definitely consider writing something that is publishable. Maybe a licensed Fallout book? I would buy that so fast.
ReplyDeleteCherchez la Filly finally getting some use, thank goodness that wasn't a waste of a perk choice.
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ReplyDeleteSomeone needs to adapt all the pony mods made for FO3 to also work with FO:NV if they don't already, because I plan on getting NV first and want these mods so badly
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ReplyDeleteThe great city of Monterey, California will not apologize for it's cheeses or ponies holding said cheese as an identity.
ReplyDeleteGod, this story is incredible. I skipped over reading it before because Grimdark isn't really my thing. I kept hearing good things about it but what really made me get off my ass and read it was john josecos art for it. I took one look at that and said "I must read this". Best decision ever. I love the characters, I love the recordings and memory things and flashes back to the past, I love everything about this story. Having spent the entire day reading this from start to the end of Chapter 17 I now know how LittlePip feels when her Mint-als wear off. Ugh, archive binge hangeover... Can't wait for the next chapter
ReplyDeleteim so so soooo addicted to this fic! its so awesome >O< cant wait for next chap! the pinkie pie recording in chap 17 made me get teary xD ima be so sad when this series is over
ReplyDeleteThe new pony creator, http://generalzoi.deviantart.com/art/MLP-FiM-Pony-Creator-Beta-210228500
ReplyDeleteIs neat,
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Constantly look at this next link until next chapter is out: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xEOtMLQMRHM
@Paul
ReplyDeleteI don't own FO:NV, if I did I would've made them work in that game too. That being said, I'd only be spawning the Lil Macintosh Revolver in the closest thing to an easily-accessible Arms Factory or abandoned farm. As for the Zebra Carbine, well that was found in the F:Eq equivalent to L.O.B. Enterprises, which in the Capital Wasteland, so fitting that weapon into NV without straying too far from the inspiration would be tricky.
It is actually very easy to convert weapon mods for F3 into NV, they use the same folder structure - so meshes and textures are easily installed. One would simply only need experience with the GECK to create the plugin to add the weapons.
But really, New Vegas is a lot less Fallout-like than Fallout 3 :|
ReplyDeleteDon't play just NV, FO3 is really a lot better, and has more of the themes that are present in FOE than NV does.
Caught up now. I figure Watcher is either Celestia or Twilight. Celestia would make sense, since she seems to have taken herself out of the equation but is trying to fix things, while Twilight could fulfill a similar role.
ReplyDeleteFic is very, very impressive. Love the plotting and the backstory.
@ 4:18 Anonymous
ReplyDeleteCelestia wouldn't really know what Flutterguy sounds like, that comment makes me pretty confident Watcher is Twilight.
Aw. Shit. Son.
ReplyDeleteYou know I'm actually dreaming about this now. Not a word of a lie, dreaming about scrounging around a ruined bunker for parts to stabilize an unexploded balefire bomb with Velvet, Calamity and Applesn- I mean Steel Hooves. Guess that puts me in Lilpip's hooves. I do tend to play female characters in fallout games, even took the small frame trait in Vegas so that fits even better. Damn engrossing shit right here.
And Pinkie. Oh god. Manly tears.
@Anonymous 4:23
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure if this was said before, but I'm thinking that Watcher is Spike, because dragons could probably live through the time that has passed by, and he also came up with the name, Flutterguy.
@ Anonymous 7:48
ReplyDeleteLe gasp
That makes more sense, but I don't think I would enjoy it as much.
@Erthilo
ReplyDeleteThanks for the great Prologue pics! Their simplicity is perfect for both MLP:FiM and the way Fallout's Vaultboy videos tend to be. This is a welcome addition to the FOE fanart.
@Maeni
I absolutely adore what you've done with the Pony creator and some clever editing! I instantly recognized every pony depicted and had to squeee a little.
(^.^)
Anyway, Chapter 18 is now live. Have fun, everyone! I know I did!
Oh my, I actually had to stop reading for a few minutes to stop laughing my ass off.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work!
You, my good sir, are my hero. Great story and tie-ins, at least from the MLP side, since I've never played Fall Out.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work, I'm anticipating what is to come.
P.S. Ted Nugent wants his M16 back by the way.
-Jace
... What can be said about this newest chapter other than it's a work of art? The great progression from the light and happy stuff in the start of chapter 18, to building action, to one of the most gripping action scenes I've seen in fanfiction in recent memory.
ReplyDeleteI mean, good god! The Team is now one of the most hardcore combat teams ever!
Well, this is a conundrum. On the one hand, I've now spent the last three or four days solid reading every single chapter of this in order to feed my growing addiction to everything about this story. On the other hand...I've now spent the last three or four days using my writing time to read every single chapter of this story. And feeling just ever so slightly inferior as a writer in general as far as plotting goes. But I digress.
ReplyDeleteI think what draws me into this story the most is simply how fantastically and inexplicably believable the whole thing is. Take this next statement as you will, but if you want my honest opinion, I think you write Fallout better than the writers of Fallout do. I know that I never felt this kind of emotional investment in any character when I played Fallout 3; the development and dedication you put into each one is astounding. To quote something someone once said about one of my own stories a while back: your characters are so three-dimensional I think one of them just came out and slapped me. The wit, tenacity, and just all-around liveliness of your main cast has been a constant reminder to me of how badly I miss being able to write in first-person. But silly me, I have to write stories that require the perspectives of several characters, because all of my stories have to feel like movies to me. You give and you get, I suppose.
To elaborate on the palpable Fallout vibe I get from this, everything about this story perfectly captures the essence of Fallout as well. One of the biggest reasons I loved the game so much was because of the black humor that pervaded everything inside it, and you've captured that sense of "the apocalypse can be fun if you look at it sideways and you're toked up on Psycho" to a T here. It's a vibe that, once again, I miss being able to try to write. Which means I may have to give this sort of treatment to Bioshock or Halo or...I don't know. SOMETHING.
All I know for sure is that you have reeled me in hook, line, and sinker, to the point where I'd rather be able to read more of this right now than write my own stuff. Admittedly, the story isn't without its flaws: the random typo juts out every now and then, and the earlier chapters occasionally had a very disjointed feel to them, like you were skipping over parts where you should have gone into more detail. I didn't really notice that at all in the most recent chapter, though, so props for improving as the story continues. And it looks like it's going to continue for a while. And that makes me a very, very happy addict.
When I read something that I love with a burning passion, I usually think of it as something I wish with all my heart that I could've come up with first. I can only remember saying that about two full-length fanfics since I started reading them two years ago; well, Kkat, consider this fic entered into the third spot on that list. Epic story, epic characters, epic adaptation of all things Fallout and MLP. I want moar, and I want it now. Absolutely deserving of six stars.
P.S. - Totally called SteelHooves being a ghoul, though.
P.P.S. - Also totally called the Homage/LittlePip pairing too. On that note, if you break them up I may have to hurt you. Or just sigh deeply, curse quietly to myself, and keep reading anyway. One of the two.
P.P.P.S. - And I'll go ahead and make another call now: Watcher is either Twilight or Spike. Just a feeling.
P.P.P.P.S. - I have nothing else to say here. This is just to take up space.
P.P.P.P.P.S. - Muffins.
So who else has made a character based on Little Pip in any Fallout games? In New Vegas, my Little Pip is currently level 31. I roleplay as her down to the letter. Its by far the most fun I've ever had with a Fallout game, which is saying A LOT.
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ReplyDeleteNope, but reading this has made me roleplay Calamity. It's fun wandering the waste with a cowboy hat, no allegiances, and a need to kill bad things.
The curses Pip say in this fic always leave me pissing myself in laughter. "Solar-flaring orgasms of Celestia". If I was drinking Coke while reading that, I'd be smelling coke for a week.
ReplyDeleteLet me first say that I read a lot. Like a lot, a lot. And it fills me with glee to say that your fic is undoubtedly and unreservedly the best thing I have ever read. Ever.
ReplyDeleteI went out and bought FO:NV after reading an archive binge of your talents just to try to capture some of the feelings your fic made me feel so completely.
The rage.
The loss.
The regret.
And it doesn't even compare. It's like falling out a window trying to know what it's like to fly. it just can't be done.
I'll admit I was skeptical at first. This sounded like the dumbest crossover I'd ever heard, concieved by a fratboy in a drunken stupor. But you proved me wrong.
From the pacing of climactic battle to the heartwarming side moments, from the tightly drawn backstory to the most three-dimensional characters I've ever had the pleasure of accompanying, this is truly a masterpiece of literature. Calling it fanfiction does it a disservice. This, my friend, is fiction at its finest.
I'd be more specific, but right now I just can't stop gushing. Well I enjoyed Fallout 3 and I dearly love the MLP show and fandom, you have surpassed both with your stunning talents.
If I had a medal, I'd give it to you. Please continue in your efforts, this story is currently one of my life's greatest joys.
im currious as to what role if any whatever was following them will play in future chapter, great work keep it up man!
ReplyDeleteANOTHER CHAPTER ALREADY? Dude, you're a freaking writing MACHINE. You spoil us so.
ReplyDeleteI've kept my trap shut on replying to this for the simple fact that I've felt a lot of other ponies have said the piece I needed too. But I finally feel I need to comment.
ReplyDeleteI love this fic. Not because it eloquently blends two of my most favorite things in the world together into a perfect harmony. No I love it because I absolutely adore LittlePip. She is everything I except a main character in a Fallout game would be. And also everything I expect a Pony from FiM would be in the world that Fallout represents.
She is, in a sense, a virtue in and unto herself. A simple uncorrupted being thrust into a world that not only doesn't care that she exists, but wants her gone at the same time. She approaches her problems head on with a sense of problem solving and intellect that allows her to not only discern the best possible outcome for all sides but also leave things better off. She is hope, hope for the wasteland and hope for the ponies that she meets. A shining example of what could be if everypony looked out for one another instead of themselves. Perfect in the sense that she is not perfect herself but understands what needs to be done. And isn't afraid to sacrifice pieces of herself to see good in the world once more. She is hope for the wasteland in every sense that a Fallout character should be to the world that they inhabit. And at the same time she is not withour her flaws that come out at every oppourtunity. Her addictions and personal feelings cloud her judgement but in the end its a burning sense of justice that brings her hoof down on the situation and sets the world straight. So strong is her drive that it has affected her friends in such a way that they have changed their own personal goals just to try and see LittlePip's journey through to the end.
Her companions complement her well and that allows for the story to flesh itself out wonderfully. But LittlePip is the reason I trudge through every word. And why I hang on her every decision and carefully crafted plan. Why I secretly cheer when she gains her little wins and something good finally goes her way. It's worth noting that if her the world she inhabited wasn't so horrible, and if she was allowed to live with the mane cast of FiM I imagine she would fit in perfectly. A sad thought in a way.
Besides all that the writing is well crafted in this story. Being that I fancy writing myself I often try to place myself in the shoes of the author and try to discern what he/she is thinking. What goal they are trying to accomplish. Why they include a character suddenly and leave subtle hints here and there. I've picked up on most and for the most part I've been rather accurate in figuring things out. As such if my thoughts on the favor I'm sure LittlePip will have earned from Blackwing in their daring escape are correct I'll be pleased and clap silently at the careful crafting that must have gone in at that setup. Which is always pleasing to see a Fic author take the time to carefully plan the story out well in advance instead of callously making it up as they go along.
Which brings me to another spat of praise. You've managed to take the concept of the Protagonist to the level it needed to be. In Fallout the main character always seems to show up at the right time for things to happen. As though his/her arrival sudden sets everything in motion. Almost like if they did nothing at all the world would just stay fine. But upon stepping into a town or village they set off the smoldering coals of events into a blaze of action. LittlePip represents that spark of action perfectly. With her incredible luck and happenstance keeping the story flowing wonderfully and never feeling quite like she is surrounded by incredible coincidence. But instead instigating the world around her and kick starting the wheel so to speak.
I suppose that's enough rambling. I'd just like to close out by saying this is the fic I look for every day.
Really good. I honestly not expected that SteelHooves is ghoul. And damn, that alicorns seriously pissing me off!
ReplyDeleteI am still wondering what Li'lPiP's true vitue is. Since the beginning I thought it was honesty which drives her, but SteelHooves(my favourite OC of all time) already took the place.
ReplyDeleteThe way this fic goes, Silver Belle and Derpy will probably join the team sooner or later, filling in Laughter and Generosity.
So I guess PiP will be...magic? Well, hope is magic.
@Raiyn121
ReplyDeleteThank you SO much.
That was... beautiful. I'm touched.
I don't have time to read the newest chapter...
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I feel like an idiot for not figuring out SteelHooves' secret. I thought he was simply being kept alive by the armor and that's why he wanted to remain in it, not.. ya know.
ReplyDeleteWait, people already spoiled? Well, ok, we're only up to 400+ comments now so I guess it's alright.. :)
Oh yeah, and grats on making the FO:E world EVEN SCARIER with the revelations about not only the zebras, but the alicorns too in this chapter (18). I think I had the same "oh crap" look on my face when I read a few parts as LittlePip did..
Chap18 spoilers...
ReplyDeleteWow, the whole part at the beginning, basically the entire time before the Montery issue is brought up again, made me so damm happy.
I don't want the story to go on :( I just want Lilpip and Homage to be together.
I loved the teasing and the innuendoes everywhere. The thing at the place...
But alas, this is a Fallout world, and there's still a plot, so can't hang around all that.
I have just one negative thing, really. It seems that in Chapter 17, the whole drug issue was really flaring up, and then it was completely dead during the happy time of Chapter 18, and then suddenly came back in later on. I guess I would just have liked to know what Lilpip felt about that, I can totally put myself into the situation, and I imagine there would be a bigger touch of shame, seeing as she had just been so happy for a relatively long time, even without the drugs.
She seemed to be somewhat complete when she was with Homage, like she suddenly didn't feel the desire for drugs anymore.
Other than the mention of the drugs tho, I loved it. Although I especially loved the peaceful, good times at the start, good to finally see Lilpip being happy.
Holy flaming orgasms of Celestia, Batman! The way I see fanfics has now been changed FOREVERRR.
ReplyDeleteI am being in love with the whole thing, characters, the plot, the description, "the way she shneezes", you name it, really.
I am actually being interested in the sexual endeavors of a lesbian.
I thought I played far too much fantasy to ever even raise an eyebrow to the mention of dark arts and stuff alike. And now I'm disturbed at the sole mention by a main character of necromancy, and in a friggin' FALLOUT derivative, of all things.
And there would be so much to speak about, honestly. It's all so well done.
The ambiance. Someone said it before me, you write Fallout better than the original writers. With the sense of impending, everpresent danger that penetrates the trait of any wastelander, the fight for survival/adventure that is what drags in the reader along with the protagonist(s), and the beauty that makes everyone live on their lives, like the beauty in friendship, or in a personal virtue (even if it is warped in its conception, like the cheese maker's honesty), or in prowess/pride in a particular skill (like lockpicking, being a DJ, or dispatching enemies even), or all the other little things, like the new recordings for Dj P0n3, or the balefire phoenix dancing above the corpses fire. I mean, it was such a simple, powerful image. The earth may be charred and scarred, death could be all around, even you and your ideals could end up terribly changed from your contact with the outside, but whatever the situation, life goes on in the Wasteland. The will to live, that's another thing that never changes. It was beautiful, I just had to stare at the scene.
And oh my gosh, the characters. If I'd have to point out any piece of work where character development actually shows, it would be this one. It shows in the decisions, it is obvious in the thoughts, it transpires in the curses, and of course it shows in every character. Characters with actual life, personal interests, ideals and things that make them happy.
Plus, the mane cast is so wonderfully blended together, by the need for cooperation on one part, and the simple enjoyment of friendship on another. I swear, I can taste the same goodness the FiM team can transmit when they approach the theme of friendship (and make it totally enjoyable and not cheesy at all, and with MLP, of all franchises! I swear, I wouldn't have believed it possible before all this)
And the impressing descriptions, and the awesome battles, and the equipment management, and all the little details, and the flashbacks, and the character interaction, and the coherency... You know, many of us could write for days about whet they like with your fic, cause it's worth it. You know when you read a book, and here or there you just wonder and say... "Meh, this part, I would have changed something in there, maybe here, it would have made it a little better perhaps", this sort of thing? Well, I can't do it with FO:E, honestly, apart from the (far and apart) grammatical errors, I wouldn't change a single, teeny tiny thing. I mean, there's bound to be some differences in view and between people and all, you know? But no, it's perfect like it already is.
But I digress, and I guess I'll just write about the scenes I liked in the last chapter for a little change.
ReplyDeleteDefinitley the wholething with Homage (like Velvet thinking of Pipbuck, and her and Homage sqealing at the new recordings), then of course the corpse pyre, and the whole combat with the alicorns (the part where he realizes he's actually dispatched that many is so spot-on: in battle, you don't think that much; you just battle.) and how you can manage to convey such powerful images (and sometimes with minimal imagery like "...the griffin’s supergun let out a boom that could be heard on the moon. The fourth alicorn was simply no more."? HOW DO YOU DO THAT?)
So, basically, the whole thing. :P
Waiting eagerly for the next chapter, I swear it's the first time I'm this hooked. Thank you so much for this.
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There is a thing that always makes my jaw drop: every time I spot something missing or something not that clear, in the next xhapter it is explained and exploited...
ReplyDeleteI was asking if there would be a water chip in the story somewhere, maybe as a tribute, and BANG, next chapter the water talisman is the cause of the failure of a stable.
I was asking myelf if the poor raped blue mare would ever come back and BANG, next xhap she saves lilpip's cutiemark
I wondered how in the world a group of griffing could be blocked on a damn roof since the first time P0N3 talked about them and BANG, now I know
Will I ever see again that Monterey guy from the first chaps? here we go, he's back
I mean, everytime I am curious about something this guy somehow seems already to know it! How does he do that!?
Well, I guess I just have to sit on the river and wait, sooneer or later everything is going that way.
And speaking of chapter 18, good one, loved the tenpony tower part and the fight with the alicorns and... is it worrth something if I say that their palette is the same as a mix of Spike and Twilight colors? No, no, I'm going too far...
And last, just an observation about the things that could be foreseen: some of them were quite easy and some others were not, but I think they were all fun, but now I put a BIG stake on this
steelhooves had a memory orb he couldn't see, his voice seemed "flutterguy" to the observer, he now admitted he's a ghoul (still to be confirmed, a power armour still seals the thing to simple words told)... I bet that the cutiemark under that power armor has 3 red apples... just guessing, you know...
I wish I could leave a page long post of awesomeness but then you might spend all day reading it instead of writing! Cause dude you and your story is AWESOME!!!!!!! It's to me what Party-Time Menthols are to Pip!
ReplyDeleteHey, Dreamcatcher here! Normally that would show as my username, but the freakin google account option keeps bumpin me to blogger w/o posting so...
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Love the new one Kkat! I hope that Lilpip finds a way to deal with Monterey Jack that doesn't involve here getting kicked out...
Anyway, I love how this is going. Just wondering, are we gonna see an NCR Ranger at any point? Although, I guess it would be called something else...
New Coltifornia Republic Mustang?
Hey, Dreamcatcher here! Normally that would show as my username, but the freakin google account option keeps bumpin me to blogger w/o posting so...
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Love the new one Kkat! I hope that Lilpip finds a way to deal with Monterey Jack that doesn't involve here getting kicked out...
Anyway, I love how this is going. Just wondering, are we gonna see an NCR Ranger at any point? Although, I guess it would be called something else...
New Coltifornia Republic Mustang?
Hey, Dreamcatcher here! Normally that would show as my username, but the freakin google account option keeps bumpin me to blogger w/o posting so...
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Love the new one Kkat! I hope that Lilpip finds a way to deal with Monterey Jack that doesn't involve here getting kicked out...
Anyway, I love how this is going. Just wondering, are we gonna see an NCR Ranger at any point? Although, I guess it would be called something else...
New Coltifornia Republic Mustang?
Hey, Dreamcatcher here! Normally that would show as my username, but the freakin google account option keeps bumpin me to blogger w/o posting so...
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Love the new one Kkat! I hope that Lilpip finds a way to deal with Monterey Jack that doesn't involve here getting kicked out...
Anyway, I love how this is going. Just wondering, are we gonna see an NCR Ranger at any point? Although, I guess it would be called something else...
New Coltifornia Republic Mustang?
Steelhooves as a ghoul huh?
ReplyDeleteI'm still hoping he turns out to be Fluttershy, stupid as that would be.
But hey, 200 years could change a pony.
Absolutely addicted.
ReplyDeleteI have to say, you've really got the atmosphere absolutely down pat. It's completely bleak and depressing, and I love it.
ReplyDeleteHonestly, you've captured the feeling of a nuclear wasteland much better than I think the actual Fallout games have. All the struggles that LittlePip, Calamity, and Velvet Remedy have to go through just to survive are presented beautifully and serve to portray the wastes as a very harsh and inhospitable place to live. I applaud you, Kkat, because you've managed to create something amazing.
On a side note, if anyone else is finding Fallout 3 and New Vegas lacking in the atmosphere of this story, I'd suggest checking out Metro 2033. I really get the same kind of bleak vibe from both this story and that game.
@anonymous 4:00
ReplyDeletewell, i don't know about fluttershy, but you know, the thing about being a tree... we shold get cutest harold ever, you know....
This is a fantastic story. Personally, I think the most fascinating aspect of it is that you're managing to simultaneously tell two different stories; there's the story of Littlepip, Calamity, and Velvet Remedy being played out in the "present," and there's also the characters' slow discovery of the story of the War, told by the journal fragments and memory orbs they recover along the way. And I'm just as interested in the story of the war and what exactly happened to the original cast as I am the story of the folks in the Wasteland!
ReplyDeleteMarvellously well done! I have a feeling that seeing this story update will be enough to make me smile a bit.
This story has definitely got me hooked. The only thing that really tore at my heart though was that one section in chapter 17. Absolutely heart rending but beautifully done. Hopefully we'll see a little bit more light at the end of the tunnel :)
ReplyDeletePoint Lookout reference, maybe somepony should do a fanfic fanfic about the Dunwich Building and the Necroponycon (please, nobody call it like this)
ReplyDeleteBut there is something else that instill me with a sense of dread. The Ministry of Peace poster, it feels wrong, so very very very wrong.
What's wrong is why was the ministry traffiking with drugs. Sure, the could have been in the business of medicines and health-boosters, but RAGE(=psyco)? This Stampede thing sound like warfare drugs, why would the ever-loving Fluttershy allowed something like that.
But I fear worst, an early thought that I dismissed as unlikely. A while back we seen her into a memory orb, discussing an idea that would (maybe) end the war. The words of that poster: we must do better, we must BE better. The unkown experiments at Maripony base...
What could be better than ponyes that do not fear death or sikness or greed? A new enlightened breed that would reunite the world in a peaceful Unity. A race guided by the unending love of their Goddess
FLUTTERSHY IS THE NEW GODDESS(Master)
Always beware the quite ones, but perhaps I'm just being paranoid...
@Vashar23
ReplyDeleteWell, I can see your point and it really could be, but I see a couple of things that could even make it different.
First of all, Twilight was at Mareposa, not Fluttershy, as long as we know... but this information could be worth nothing if Kkat puts the origin place of alicorns someewhere else.
Second reason... well.. it's more a sentimental thing, but FS wants to be a tree and in Fallout (1, 2 and 3) there is a char that actually is a tree or at least tree related. But I can't see a reason why she couldn't bee the master AND a tree...
Moreover, the alicorns' palette is quite different from fluttershy's...
second thing, I finally realized why I love this fiction this much: last night I was browsing my old music because I had this idea about putting together a good soudtrack for F:Eq and found this song
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0Zzfdlxjx4Y&feature=related
(hope it works)
And now when I listen to it I can actually see the cast singing it to Lilpip. Damn memories, they make everything better...
Thanks for another great chapter Kkat! Keep up the awesome work.
ReplyDeleteI don't know where to start with your story. As a fan of both Fallout and My Little Pony, it's great!
ReplyDeleteI'd go on a rant explaining every single detail of why I love it so much, but people have already done it way better than I could before I started writing this, you have talent Kkat.
I'll be both happy and sad when this story is concluded.
comments work again?! yay
ReplyDeleteHeyo, there. So, I've been reading some into this, and I can say this is going to be fun. Again, with your permission Kkat, I don't wanna go any further till then.
ReplyDeleteAgain, absolutely fantastic. Littlepip coming to terms with what she's been doing to her friends with her addiction and the slow realisation of what the addiction was doing to her sent shivers down my spine, very believable. I'm so glad that everything worked out for the 'best' with Monterey Jack, Littlepip can still see Homage without breaking her moral code, Jack stuck by his own code and his kids are still relatively safe! Masterful story weaving right there! I actually don't have anything bad to say about this chapter!
ReplyDeleteTo sound like a broken recorder, I really loved it.
ReplyDeleteGood character development, Lilpip starting to see that she may need some help, getting betrayed by Velvet, the failure at helping Monterey and the first step to rebuilding her friendship with her friends.
SteelHooves placed in a situation where we really didn't knew how he would react, especially after his bad guy talk.
And more short information from the old world going wrong and what happen with the old cast.
And giving us more questions like what's on that Black Opal, will Homage give it to Lilpip, how will it be delivered to the Watcher (Derpy?), why did Dashie say that Fluttershy betrayed them, etc.
And more hints that Velvet's barn door actually swing that way :P
Anyway, I'm bad at this whole responding thing that you want, but it's the least I can do when you keep giving us this masterpiece.
another great chapter xD im so addicted to this fic, i hope they can keep going till season 2 =D lol or just alot more >O< so awesome
ReplyDeleteI continue to find it baffling how many moments you manage to put into this story that legitimately surprise me. As in, "Oh, shit, I didn't expect that to happen at all, but it totally makes sense anyway." I mean, I pride myself on guessing plot twists before that happens. I don't GET surprised in stories. So I suppose that's just a testament to your storytelling abilities.
ReplyDeleteAnother excellent chapter. Props for finding a way to not screw over the Littlepip/Homage, as well as the final scene. I'll be interested to see the consequences to that in your next update, which I'm sure you'll somehow finish in a week. Seriously, how do you do that? Between school and work, I'm lucky if I can get a chapter done in three weeks...
LITTLE Gilda... right... at least we will get it in the Fallout game on some Talon merc, yes?
ReplyDeleteAnd Lilpip finally got cleaned, but her love for Velvet will never return. Just as Fluttershy she betrayed her friend, at least (both I hope) for a good cause, Funny how near-death experiences give you more insight then drugged-mind-rush.
Still, could Dash accusation be related to my 'cospiracy theory'? The tragic story of Pinkie is closed and the one on AJ seem near his end as well. We have only scrap on the other Elements, and none of them bode well. How many disturbing things still crawl in Kkat mind?
Hopefully at least, Lilpip will finally get layd in the next chapter.
I absolutely loved the Gilda / Eugene reference, especially since I loved Reilley's Rangers in FO3.. ;)
ReplyDelete(although.. Butcher was the medic. Brick was the one with the minigun)
did i already say that i like this story? oh well, down to business.
ReplyDeleteFirst thing, great work with the characters, as usual, I don't know how addiction works in real world, but how's dealth in this story it fits with fallout universe really well.
Second: Steelhooves gets some coolness, yeah! but from one of his sentences i can live the dream no more, he's not AJ TT_TT sad me.
Third, here we go animal companion? it seems that the phoenix will be back when needed, i guess? Not exactly the average dog, but it will do...
well, the list is long and i don't want to spam, I just want to say again that how the character move, grow and interact is really well done (in my opinion) and I still have to find a single passage in this fiction where i went "boooooring" and skipped some parts.
As always, good job
Keep fighting the good fight
Wild Mass Guess: Spike is Watcher.
ReplyDeleteMORE Wild Mass Guessing!
ReplyDeleteSteelHooves is Fluttershy. I somehow think the whole EVERYONE YOU KNOW AND LOVE IS DEEEEAAAAAAD Thing would do just fine for making her the way she is, eh?
For actual praise (for it can't be a comment without it) I love how these characters work. I really do. Now I'm hungry for a Team-Based fallout game. Preferably ponies, but I'm not picky.
Also? Alicorns as the Super Mutants? Hell Yes.
What would the the feasibility of a mod to make Fallout 3 or (preferably) New Vegas ponified?
If anyone here has ever read Penny Arcade and been to the FO3 website, you've probably seen the comic PA did for FO3. Basically it was a quick story about some poor vaultie who's experiment consisted of him, the vault, and a box of puppets. Long story short, the Pip-boy puppet turns him into a psycho-killer.
ReplyDeleteWhat I'm saying is, it would be cool(Or interesting at least) to have Littlepip come across other Vault survivors. Whether they'd be as crazy as puppet man...well, that remains to be seen.
Also, I'd rather fight super-mutants then alicorns. Super mutants will go down if you pump them full of bullets. Alicorns pull up a hax shield and stop your heart(Then probably piss on your corpse, given their general attitude).
WOW, 19 up already? You are a machine Kkat.
ReplyDeleteWell, you better not kill off Homage Kkat. That ending has me worried. I'd probably never forgive you.
ReplyDeleteFor a minute there, I thought you were giving her the Grim Reaper's Sprint perk at level 19, then I realized that each chapter number is what level she is it the BEGINNING of the chapter. Also, I'm geussing you're writing one chapter for each level, so there's going to be 30 chapters, or 35 if you go by the New Vegas DLC max level.
ReplyDeleteI've been keeping my mouth shut about fluttershy but come on, the only pony entirely free of sinister motives AND we have no idea what shes been doing :/
ReplyDeleteThe best we can hope for is that she regrets it.
Anyway this
@mimezinga
is amazing!
I will start by saying I like this. I like this a LOT.
ReplyDeleteThe characters are great and surprisingly original; at face value, they seem a little archtypical, but they each have twists and turns to their personalities that give each one its own unique stamp on the story.
The dialogue is genius. And not just the way the characters interact. The references you make back to the games are perfect; they're subtle and they flow with the story, something that can be difficult to do properly.
And the world you've set up is dead perfect. You've obviously spent a long time setting up the nooks and crannies of Post-Apocalyptic Equestria. Hats off to you for dedication.
My one complaint is more of personal opinion than a direct problem with the story: you're taking a while to cut to the chase. It's nearly twenty chapters in, and we still have almost nothing on Red Eye or Watcher. And they are, basically, the crux of Littlepip's escapades. Again, though, this isn't something I think that's wrong with the story itself, just something that's not clicking with me, personally.
So, a plethora of wonderful things with one little blip that's more of my problem than anyone else's. That's a 5/5, mi amigo.
Its difficult as always to surmise exactly what I loved about this chapter, the twist at the ending, the comment about running out of a certain "type" of friends, the believable account of events, but what makes this an actually worthwhile piece of literature as opposed to yet another *thing* on the internet is that you make sure not go easy on your character which prevents them from becoming the spoiled brats we're so used to seeing among OC characters. The story wouldn't work as well were it simply about fallout because a hero from fallout would be too different from a MLP one, that you can still tell it in convincingly fallouty tones is a testament to your skill. I am noticing lil'pips been getting awfully close to messianic lately, or more that she has been doing so *successfully*, what happened was necessary if not pleasant and I think I should point out that I love her not despite, but because of her flaws.
ReplyDeleteOverall the writing style is great, the plot is always tidy, the characters brilliant, the setting has ponies and the combination of which makes me put my life on hold every time you update.
Just remember: the moment you run out of meaningful conflict is the one where you should stop writing and close the window.
I don't understand the ending to the newest chapter... I'm scared D:
ReplyDeleteHow many chapters can we expect before Lil'Pip reaches the level cap- 30, 50(the level cap of New Vegas after all the DLC's are complete) or is there a cap at all? Just what is her Skill point distribution, did she hit the the limit on Science or are you using the 300% scale and how are her other skills coming along?
ReplyDeleteArrgh!....I have so many rudimentary questions that I can't properly express my undying affection for this brilliant piece of art.
At first, I didn't think much of it because for some unfathomable reason you had two chapters just to introduce the (brilliantly realized) setting. But ever since you have impressed me greatly. I feel you need to know that the story is superior to Fallout 3, it felt like how Bethesda would have wrote it if Obsidian was consulting. It takes a great deal of artistic talent to seamlessly blend such disparate elements and you,sir, are most definitely an artist.
@guitarskills2
ReplyDeleteHe said he would not allow all the innocent ponies in Tenpony Tower to perish
This evidently did not include Chief Grim Star who hired the Talons to wipe out Sheriff Rottingtail's group, to the last ghoul.
Since he had to go down to that backdoor to make sure it will stay sealed forever anyway, he brought Grim Star with him and killed two birds with one stone.
As he said, he is not a better pony.
@guitarskills2
ReplyDeleteObviously Steelhooves felt it necessary to educate Grimstar on the finer differences between a ghoul and a zombie pony. I like to think that before shoving Grimstar through the door, Steelhooves told him about being a ghoul.
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteI have already asked this, and feel like a major dick for asking this again. Can I set a fanfic of my own inside you fanfic, away from all of your characters, plot lines, ministries and settings? I will avoid everything that you have already established, like where the Pegasi have gone. If you don't want me to thats fine. Please respond, if you don't mind. (See what I did there.)
Anypony think this should totally be a radio show. when I read, Calamity sounds like John Marston from Red Dead, Ranger is obvious, maybe Velvet is something similar to Bayonetta but I have zero ideas for Littlepip, it would have to convey youth without being too childlike and screechy.
ReplyDelete>Calamity sounds like John Marston
ReplyDeleteBugger, now I'm going to be imagining that, too! I just hope Calamity doesn't share Mr. Marston's fate.
I like how Lil Pip contemplates the absurdity of finding bottle caps - the currency of the Wasteland - in almost every container.
One thing I wonder is whether Lil Pip is supposed to be having numerous epiphanies like she did when she discovered the Element of Laughter. Because I'm not sure if she's to discover all of the virtues herself or if she is destined to be just the bearer of Laughter, in which case would make her party the bearers of the other Elements of Harmony.
I also wonder how the Elements will tie into the story if the are to be important in the plot.
I'm not too fussed about the chapter/level cap 'problem'. It's a fic that crosses over Fallout and MLP. One could just as easily say a level cap doesn't exist because there's no such thing in the MLP as another could there is a level cap because there is one in Fallout. The author is free to choose if he needs to. It does appear that he will at least be keeping skill caps and loosely following SPECIAL stats.
I wonder what the motives Watcher has are, I'm not sure if Watcher is getting involved with LilPip to advance some evil plan or help bring relief to the Wasteland. Watcher doesn't want to be discovered, that has been established, so there are individuals that want Watcher gone, but for what reasons are currently unknown.
I think Red Eye is going to step up hid influence soon, shit is going to hit the fan soon.
I think the next chapter is going to be last time LilPip stays in Tenpony Tower, at least for a short while. He and her crew might be forced out if Steelhooves' actions are discovered by other residents, or LilPip may simply decide to head in whatever direction she thinks she must go. There is that Black Opal device that Homage possesses, perhaps if Homage doesn't mind to part with it (though I bet there is a reason she has it), then Watcher's quest is going to become the current task at hoof.
Let's not forget Calamity's wish to fix one of the sky chariots. If Watcher's quest can't be fulfilled, then Calamity's idea to fix an unstable flying vehicle will probably become a temporary goal.
I'm worried about Velvet, she's getting a bit too handy with firearms now. Though one can argue that she's either defending herself or something she deems worthy of saving (like the Balefire Phoenix, who is making quite a few appearances), I think she's losing her pacifist side to the Wasteland. She really needs to sit down and sort herself out. She's supposed to be a follower of Fluttershy, a believer in Kindness. And she's connected to Generosity through blood relation to Rarity's sister, Sweetie Belle. If anything, she should be an extremely kind and giving individual, but now it seems she's becoming a bit more unphased by excessive violence...
So many questions... I simply must wait for the next chapter in about a week or so
This chapter...
ReplyDeleteSo god damn emotional.
I really felt with Lilpip, and Calamity, and Velvet...
Once again it was fucking amazing, and this time completely full of surprises for me.
I mean, the title "Betrayal" made me think "Oh shit...", but then that was explained by the memory orb. The subtitle, "Addiction." made me go "Oh this is it", but that too was explained right at the begining.
Then suddenly it came back in a torrent of holy shit. So damn emotional. I basically want to rip Velvet apart like Lilpip, but at the same time I can see it from her side ;_;
@Kyle
ReplyDeleteWell a lot can happen in 6 days cant it.
First off i wish to say thanks for takeing time to address my one and only concern.
In fact i wish to say you inspired me.
you see, me and my brothers are some of the largest fallout nuts you will meet. in fact we went to the point of creating a D&D bioshock/fallout campain.
out side of ponies i write storys for out schools magizen.(i use word spell and grammer check alot.)
so i came to thinking" what if some one wrote pony shock." sence that point i have been working on it in my spare time and am now writting chapter 2. hopefully ill get it uploaded by next week.
i will not copy you in any way but i would just like to give you a thanks.
hope everyone likes bioshock and ponys
@Dr.Vangard
ReplyDeleteok
i know its duble posting but
i f***ed up
(note to self read names fully)
i apologize
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteThank you for the insightful comment. Don't worry, for there is some chase-cutting coming soon. The Mane Quest is going to start picking up within the next five chapters. Part of the reason it hasn't come yet is because I am setting up things. (Chekhov's gun is my best friend.)
Part of it is because I am writing the story in a manner similar to how I play Fallout games. I am a huge fan of open sandbox games, and will often start with random exploration, not picking up the Main Quest until very late in the game.
(In F:NV, I was level 26 before I stumbled across Novac. And in F3 I often hit max level -- even after getting Broken Steel -- before finding Dad.)
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThank you for the excellent advice. I know this chapter starts drawing the curtain on some long-term subplots regarding Littlepip's character development, but I feel convinced that there is still more of her personal growth to tell. And, as mentioned above, the Mane Quest is about to start bucking into high gear, so there is plenty of other sorts of conflict on the horizon.
@Anonymous
Either this chapter or the next--depending on whether the next twenty plot points will take more than twenty pages to write -- will feature an excellent "jumping off point" for anyone who wants to give the fanfic-of-a-fanfic idea a try.
The reason for this is that vital elements of the FOE world will be established in the next chapter (or two) which I feel are necessary for any writer to know about before making an attempt to write in this world.
Once that point has been reached (and trust me, you'll know it when you read it), then anyone who wants to is more than welcome to try writing FOE fanfiction.
I am honored (and excited) by your interest!
--Kkat
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteWait just a goddamned second. You're twenty chapters in, you probably have at least a hundred and fifty thousand words down...and you haven't even gotten to the Mane Quest yet? Or the "vital" elements of the FOE world? Good lord, you're more long-winded than I am!
And that's a compliment, by the way. There just aren't enough ficwriters around willing to write really long, really good fanfics anymore. Glad to see I've found at least one kindred soul around here.
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteTo be completely honest...I play my sandbox games almost the exact same way XD. It's just reading it in a story just felt a little 'okay...okay...okay GET ON WITH IT.'
Exaggerating of course, but you get my point. Still an amazing story!
P.S. Chekhov's Gun? If any of my interest has escaped this story, it is now captured in full.
P.P.S. Just making sure I've got it right: Chekhov's Gun is when 'a gun shown in the first act goes off in the third,' right?
@KatalusTalrius
ReplyDeleteMy favorite trope to use.
Chekhov's Guns in this story range from Velvet's red wagon (passingly mentioned in Chapter 18 only to return in Chapter 19 for an interesting role) to the more literal "gun" of the Junction R-7 plasma cannon (mentioned in Chapter 10 to go off in Chapter 12) to more subtle and conceptual Chekhov's Guns like the cutie mark of Littlepip's mother (mentioned in the Prologue but it's significance revealed in this last chapter).
I've written a veritable minefield of Chekhov's Guns and Red Herrings in the last nineteen chapters, many of which are still waiting...
^.-
Kkat, I'd just like to say that I am OBSESSED with this fanfic.
ReplyDeleteIt drove me to actually trying out the Fallout games which I never really had an interest in playing before...even going as far as naming my character Lil'Pip, lol.
I absolutely love every character and look forward to the chapters to come. <3
Please keep up the good work.
Not to shower you with praise again so soon but I feel I need to interject one more time here.
ReplyDeleteThis last chapter was a brilliant pinpoint of events all coming together in a minor explosive outcome. The little tidbits of information all finally revealing themselves out to be a huge plot point for which has catapulted LittlePip's character development forward. She has tasted defeat for the first real time.
This is, from what I can recall, the first time she has set out to do something that has completely failed. And in a sense it is all her fault by result. Her initial reaction to Monterrey in the tower was a result of her mental state from crashing on PTM and as such that alone sparked his incarceration and death sentence because of his standing by his virtue to his last. As a result of her self inflicted addiction and refusal to admit said problem before it was too late all of this was put into motion completely out of her control and yet all because of her choices. Including her friend's reaction to the whole thing. Velvet's decision to spring her "Get Littlepip Help" plan into action early and so aggressively was because Littlepip hadn't shared her decision to seek help until after she had tried to help get Monterrey out of jail. Again a poor choice she made due to illness and the fact that her withdrawal was causing her mind to feel clouded.
Because of all this and the fact that LittlePip is brighter than the average mare so to speak I expect her to use this chain of events as fuel to burn away her psychological addiction to substance abuse due to the fact that she will never want to feel the sting of failure again. At least not of her own accord.
Also I suspect that after all she has been through and the terrible things she has put up with that the first thing she is going to want to do is kick in Homage's door and wrap herself up in that little unicorns arms for at least a day. At least that's what I would do after so much mental stress. Nothing clears the mind better than a good tumble, so to speak.
Also as a side note: (and potential spoiler warning)
If I've been picking up on your hints correctly, and I feel I have. This last chapter all but confirmed my suspicions to the Mysterious Watcher. Although the "I've studied friendship line" was more than a large enough hint you've done a splendid job weaving doubt into the story. However, the line "Do I look like a courier to you?" Finally clinched it all and made the pieces fall into the place. I had my suspicions that the Mare in charge of the Ministery of Magic would dabble in some kind of life prolonging spell a la a certain Casino Owner who manipulated security bots in F:NV did with technology. So if my suspicions are correct I applaud your clever hints and hope I didn't connect the dots TOO quickly. But again hats off to you for the courier line. :P
Second Side note: (Damn the Character limit. Also POTENTIAL SPOILER)
ReplyDeleteIf my above statement is correct then I have a suggestion that I wouldn't be surprised you have already thought of. And if so then please go ahead and disregard said statement.
You revealed Pinkie's last message to Twilight being that she wanted to seek help not only for herself but for the sake of her friends. I feel at this point LilttlePip has more to sympathize with that poor mare than anyone in the whole of Equestria. As such, the knowledge that Pinkie Pie's last message was never broadcasted means that Twilight never knew Pinkie's last effort was to reach out to her friend pleading for her help. So Twilight would have ridden the Apocalypse out without knowing that Pinkie wanted nothing more than for things to go back the way they were. Her bitterness from the last time they spoke would have stayed in her heart all this time. So if the information about the Black Opal causes LittlePip to gain anymore insight into Watcher's identity and she needs a way to confirm it. I think replaying Pinkie's final message to Twilight would be not only the right thing to do. But a way to lift the veil so the speak on Watcher's Identity permanently. Not to mention allow for a very touching moment of self reflection.
There's something wrong with the whole 'Montery Jack' thing...
ReplyDeleteNot the ''execution'', which is something more complexe involving a 'system' and society and many ponies, no... The problem is for it to even be initiated and make sense.
Even while considering the whole 'excuse' of the use of ''overzealous honesty virtue'' from him, there's a big thing that just doesn't work. His 3 foals.
He must have hated his life and hated his 3... THREE! children so very much, to simply go ''stupid'' and don't care about what would happen to them... at all ! (not even a mention of worry, not a single request to somepony,or Little-Pip, to hel/take care of them)
And we can't say ''oh, he thought the residents would take care of them''... he LIVED THERE for several years, it's impossible he didn't know what the residents would do with them.
-minor thought: buying/bribing his liberty wouldn't have been a far fetched idea... Him and his THREE foals could still have been transported to that other place.
So, the reasons that ''led'' to Montery Jack's death are rather empty and nonsensical, in the end. It feels way more like a cheap tool to create a small amount of ''artificial emotion'' for Little-Pip...
Not really an interesting point/use of something that was built up on SEVERAL chapters, let's just say.
Chapter 19 had the best end of any chapter so far. Thats really all there is to say on the matter.
ReplyDelete@Nova25
ReplyDeleteWell he did, for a long time he broke his "overzealous honesty". And he did that exactly for his foals.
I think you're right in one thing, that he hated his life. As he explains himself, the wasteland just rips you, and he had been ripped of everything except that honesty. And when he no longer had that, he was pretty much on his way to suicide anyways.
But I agree it's strange that he never made any requests to make sure what would happen to his foals.
And to be honest I don't think the people of Tenpony takes bribes. Besides, why would they, when they can just take all his stuff when he's dead anyways?
I'm curious, has any other reader seen anything about what ever happened to Luna and Celestia?
ReplyDeleteI know Celestia stepped down at some point, and Luna led the war, but besides half the world's stuff being named after them, they just sort of vanished.
Unless I missed a paragraph somewhere. Or something better coming up. They're magical unicorn deities. I figure even with the Fallout filter applied to MLP it would be pretty hard to kill them.
Ramble, but I'm more curious as to what Celestia did moreso than Luna. Probably involved in evil Alicorn plots to kill all ponies.
@Nova25 and Maeni:
ReplyDeleteAbout his foals, remember that the person who he admitted this in front of was the same savior of the wasteland his children had been admiring. He knew that she'd take care of his children for him somehow. Add that together with the hating his life thing and the fact that foisting this off on Lilpip is also revenge (it seems likely that, though his predicament is entirely his own fault, he would try and shift blame off of himself and onto Lilpip), and I think that it does make sense.
Spoiler Alert!
ReplyDelete@Nova25
I definitely understand your concern. I ask that you hold your final judgement on the Monterey Jack subplot until next chapter. There is one more hoof to drop.
After that, if you still feel the same way, please let me know. And, if so, I apologize for inadequate writing.
Keep up the outstanding work, Kkat.
ReplyDeleteYour namesake approves.
This story makes me miss the days in my own fallout universe...You sir author have have moved me. I shall continue to enjoy your writing.
ReplyDeleteFor some reason in the story archive this shows up as a 5 star, however one of the labels on this is 6 star. I don't know if thats a issue, (for example it is a 5 star) but regardless this needs to be a 6 star if it isn't already.
ReplyDeleteSpoilers
ReplyDeleteI don't think I can accurately express how much I loved the two most recent chapters without typing up a few pages worth of fangasming ^.^. Since you said there is still a final hoof to drop regarding Monteray and his foals I'll reserve my comments on it until then. Not sure how I feel about Alicorns being the supermutant stand ins, but Im nitpicking. Far too much amazing to explain it all, the pacing, the charecter development, the way you've made me actually feel and care for your ponies ^.^ keep it up Kkat you're better than most of the published writers I've read recently.
Wow, chapter 19 really had my heart racing and my eyes darting down the page faster than they have in a while.
ReplyDeletePlease keep this going. Thanks again!
@BriPhilly
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't use the term 'stand in'.
but that's just me.
ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh
ReplyDeleteChapter 20 was amazing! I really can't wait for the next one. Like, seriously. I think I'm full-on addicted to this story.
that quest perk at the end
ReplyDelete>mfw
>mfw i cant post pics
so awesome
FOE, It was under E!
ReplyDeleteI can not fault anything about this story, I was so excited to see a new chapter today and it completely lives up to all the previous awesome chapters and more. I completely face hooved with the fluttershy revelation, though it horiffyingly fits.
One question though, what about Monterey Jacks kids, maybe I missed it but couldn't Pip just give them everything or is that not allowed.
I love how you actually reveal things instead of just giving more unanswered questions.
CAN not wait for the next chapter as always.
SPOILERS:
ReplyDeleteYesyesyesyesyesyesyes finally we get a bit of action for Littlepip! Made my face light up!
>One question though, what about Monterey Jacks kids, maybe I missed it but couldn't Pip just give them everything or is that not allowed.
ReplyDeleteI think she'd already sent them on their way with the griffins.
Oh man, the last part of the chapter blew my mind! Also about time Pip got some ever needed attention.
ReplyDeleteOne cannot gush about this story enough. Nor can one discuss it without giving away an unforgivable amount of spoilers away to those who haven't yet had the joy of reading it.
ReplyDeleteKkat, You are a credit to fanfics as concept, and indeed writing itself.
Ok, comment.... well, let's say...
ReplyDeleteFirst thing first: great reading as always, a lot of memories and dialogues, this made me go yay.
Second thing goes 2nd: I felt a bit bumped here and there, on chapter 20. I'm not sure if it was just me, but there were way more "fast forward" tha usual. Not a bad thing, but I had actually to read twice a couple of parts before getting them (hopfefully) correctly.
Third thing is third: emotions still drive the char, I approve this. I like this idea of a far from perfect protagonist that needs to overcome the odds: the ending part of fallout is usually a goku style bloodbath in the PC/console, but in this story it seems that this will be avoided, so again... yay.
Fourth thing is the wooden cup... maybe I'm just plain stupid, could somepony please explain me how Monterey tricked Lilpip?
Last thing gets a draw with AJ and RD. Overall I liked it a lot, as usual, but I had to read it quite fast because I had a holl of a work to do, so I think I'll read it again these days, maybe I'll leave another comment then.
Good work as always
Keep fighting the good fight.
For Chapter 20
ReplyDeleteWow, I thought the last chapter made waves. This chapter just created a worldwide tsunami. I remember a while back that you said that in a few chapters there'd be a point where fan works would have a jump of point from your story. With the way all the pieces are starting to come together, I have a feeling it's very soon.
As for the chapter itself (and the whole story for that matter), I just love how you're able to make these moments so...so...EVERYTHING! In this chapter I felt:
Saddened: "Poor Lilpip...she feels so bad about it all and now she has to pay, literally. Granted I would've probably felt the need to do so too."
Mad: "Wow, he actually played Lilpip and basically set her up into the biggest guilt trip of a lifetime! What a jerk!"
Like that thing on the unicorns head -- if you get my drift: "Wow, I kinda wish Homage's barn door swung back the other way again. I'd totally want her as my waifu -- Oh snap! Clopfic, yes!"
Touched: "D'awwww Homage, you're so adorable." *reads the part about the Twilight and Pinkie statuette* "D'awwwwwww" *Cue tears and sniffles*
Horror: "That orb is bad? Whatchu talkin' bout Steel Hooves?!? Oh no. Oh no. Fluttershy tried to immitate the cold war? With REAL weapons? What's worse is she FAILED?!? Noooooooooooooooo!"
Surprise: "What? We're actually going to see Watcher? Omgomgomgomg yes!"
Excitement: "Dragon Cave? Oh my goodness it can't be...'Hi I'm Spike'...I KNEW IT!"
This is part of what was going through my mind while reading this chapter. And this is only from what I could remember! You've done a good thing with this, regardless of how many hours it's taken from me. It's okay though, because those hours were (and still will) be given freely and without reluctance. Here's to 20 chapters and more to come!
P.S. Take your break and enjoy it. See you next week or however long you wish to relax.
*spoilers why are you reading comments anyway, read the story*
ReplyDeletei lost a bet. i thought Twi would find a way to survive. ah well, Spike was probably the more obvious choice anyway. go me for complicating things too much.
anyway, all my fives are belong to this.
I really wasn't expecting who Watcher was. I can't wait to see more. The Alien Blaster has reared its head as well as a taste of 'DLC'. I wonder what other nods are going to be in the story. The Mysterious Stallion perk, maybe? The gang wandering in a ponified version of the Dunwich Building?
ReplyDeleteOooooh, I've been WAITING for the ending to Chapter 20 since, oh, around Chapter 8 or earlier. Well played, KKat, well played indeed. -:D
ReplyDeleteI'm not counting Twi out of this as watcher just yet, If she's alive it'd make sense that Spike would guard her, more so if she's locked in a CRUSADER type computer or hooked up like House.
ReplyDeleteIt's almost a given that if Twi was still alive somehow, Spike would be there...
Damn you Kkat, this story just keeps getting better and better!
Closed some holes, created a few new holes and left us with more questions than before.
ReplyDeleteIt felt nice to have a pretty calm chapter without any fighting, even if Lilpip had to work hard.
Hey Nappa, how many caps did Monty owe the city?
Over NINE THOUSAAAAANDD!
Whata tweeeest!
ReplyDeleteChapter 20: And then there was clopfiction. I swear in like, a week or so theres gonna be 5 shipping/clop fics telling of LittlePip/Homage's night.
ReplyDeleteOn another note, I knew someone had to survive. I was in the thoughtwave of Twi with a Supercomputer, but this is good to. Was wondering when Spike would show up.
ALSO, NEW FOLLOWERS. WHOOOO
Awesome as always :) I loved the part when Lilpip was about to flush out the last of her PTM's, I kinda know that feeling...
ReplyDeleteAnd Homage. I think I have a crush on Homage. Derp.
I think some people might not like how far the sexual content went, (even though it cuts off right after it starts) and I can imagine some might complain. Personally I have no problems with it *me gusta*
The perk at the end.. :D
Oh yeah, and as a late note, I also really loved Helpinghoof's attitude. He was so goddamn down to earth and matter-of-fact like :) Reminds me of Dumbledore in a way.
Wow, just wow.
ReplyDeleteThis really helped to make this shitty day I was having to something much better. :D
Fluttershy, NNNOOOOOOOOO!!! ;_;
ReplyDeleteMy Fluttershy would never k-
ReplyDeleteOk maybe...
Yeah, that sounds about right.
Anyway, cool story bro!
I commented on this fairly early on,just after chapter 7 I think, and I said that this is one of the best stories I'd ever read.
ReplyDeleteThis remains the second greatest thing that has ever graced my monitors (the first being the show itself).
Brilliant Chapter (20) (and I was right about the Watcher's identity) waiting patiently for more :3
ReplyDeleteI KNEW IT!!! I knew that something was horribly wrong with Fluttershy. But... the MoP as creators of the Megaspells/Balefires? Is very believable actually, that Einstein fellow was a very nice guy...
ReplyDeleteYou are a real bastard Kkat, I salute you
And Rarity created the Enclave-Antagonizer armor, 20% cooler than the original
Spike guarding a crio/computerized Twilight would be nice, but a Spike solo is more likely. Did anybody wonders HOW Homage (clopfic, yay) stole the Black Opal?
Fillydelphia sound like The Pitt
@Echoed Wails
That seemed more like the Firelance, the super-secret weapon of FO3. Somebody must write a story about alien abductions now. Hey, maybe some of the mane cast will be on the ship too.
And then spike was phone.
ReplyDelete@End of Chapter 20: CALLED IT!!!
ReplyDeleteKKat, you might as well have titled chapter 20 "This is the one where I drop a load o' bombs!"
ReplyDeleteThe Watcher's identity (Kudos to those who got it right. Looks like I was wrong, but Spike was my second choice) and that utterly shocking revelation of what happened with Fluttershy and the M.O.P.
Also, I'm not surprised at all to hear that the Chekov's Gun is one of your favorite literary devices. You cunning bastard. I look forward to chapter 21
far too good to have a favorite part. perfect blend of emotion and action. i wish every fan fic i read could be anywhere near this good.
ReplyDeleteWhat can I say about ch.20, it blew my mind, especially the end. I had my suspicious about Watcher but now that we know his identity, its obvious, like when you trying to figure out something but the simplest answer is the correct one.
ReplyDeleteThe perks you put at the end of chapters are always cute, especially when you use Perks from the game and ponify them, making me go "Oh you :3".
Its good to see Pip get a bit of R&R after all the shit she's been through in the...oh since she got out of the Stable. Blown up, addicted to PTMs, blown up again...I swear, Velvet must have her hooves full with Little Pip alone, but then she also has Calamity to care after and he isn't exactly the most evasive, he takes as much hits as Pip but I think his Endurance is a bit higher than Pip's.
FUCKING. CALLED. IT. I R JEANYUS.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, as I mentioned to you in the Google Doc chat, I approve wholehearted of Homage/Littlepip. And...that perk. Or rather, DAT PERK. That'll definitely make things...interesting. To say the least. XD
I'm intrigued by the twist you threw in with Monterey Jack, although it kinda felt like you left it in the dust where you found it once it was brought up. I mean, is Pip just gonna figure out what to do with the kids later, or what? I don't know. It felt a bit random, is all I'm saying.
The twist with Fluttershy, however, is...well, I don't really know how I feel about that. I can see her taking that sort of mentality, but it seems to me like it'd be somewhat of a stretch for her to actually take that kind of a step. Or maybe that's the point: maybe you're just showing how the war changed everypony. If that's the case...I want to see more about this. In addition to, y'know, LittlePip and Homage. *ahem*
Good chapter. Looking forward to my theory being officially proven in a few days. XD
Since you like specific comments, I'll do my best here. Um..
ReplyDelete**Spoilery, stop reading comments before the chapter etc. etc.**
Definitely surprised by how easily SteelHooves pulled off his little stunt there, along with convincing everyone it was a sacrificial act of heroism. I figure after living that long and dealing with the Wasteland enough you probably pick up a few things though. Curse him for being a riddle wrapped in an enigma.
The part where the lawyer-type describes the current situation with Monterey Jack's estate and foals to LittlePip, and the realization dawns on her that she was set up up is a little confusing. I had to read it over once to make sure I understood everything, and from the chat it seemed other people didn't quite grasp it either.
Flushing the enormous stock of PTMs and then fighting with her psyche until Homage came in made me think. Not about any specific situation, but having to deal with that on the whole. It has to be difficult, and you nailed it pretty well.
Definitely agreeing with Winter on the Pinkie/Twilight statuettes. Definitely a D'aww moment considering their last conversation. It's the small things like that which make you feel sorry for the end result (that we know so far) about the mane cast.
Mind = blown moment when it was revealed the source of the research on creating megaspells was Fluttershy. I can understand her 'ends justifies the means' thought processes, even if it turned out nothing short of horrible for the entire world. You can only imagine what must have gone through her mind the day the bombs fell when she realized it was all her fault, and the thought alone is really, really sad.
Lastly, between the memory in the opal and arriving at the map marker, it seems pretty obvious that Spike is Watcher, but you don't outright say it. I want to see where that goes.
Great job as always Kkat; can't wait for the next installment whenever you get around to it. Kudos for blending these universes so well and costing me hours of my life that would otherwise be spent doing something a lot less interesting!
"That memory: that is the beginning of the end of the world. Ultimately, Fluttershy killed us all.”
ReplyDeleteMy jaw hit the desk so fucking hard that I'm not even going to bother bleeping out my words. OH MY FUCKING GOD.
I'll admit when First saw this story pop up I figured it wouldn't make it past chapter 3.......
ReplyDeleteI am so glad you proved me wrong. This is a perfect example of how to make a good fan fiction, that it should be published.
nagging question ( sorry) : If Scratch died in the vault (can't remember the number) and the vault was sealed how did the next DJ PON-3 get the "Pinkie Pie" Statuette?
I apologize in advance if I have made a mistake in assuming this is indeed an inconsistency in the story and if I'm right then it's really no big deal this story is too awesome for that to matter.
@northerntoe
ReplyDeleteNever explicitly stated. However, it's been mentioned (in Chapter Six) that Vinyl Scratch had a nephew who was in Tenpony Tower. You can make some assumptions from there. -.^
Oh, and Kkat, I have to say... That scene where Pip flushes her Mint-als... Thank you. That was JUST what I was hoping for to really drive home that Pip's done with the stuff, and you put all the emotional difficulty and cleansing into it that I could have hoped for. Kudos on you good sir.
ReplyDeleteThat Someone Who First Mentioned the White Towers
ReplyDeleteHey! I don’t know your gender, so it switches every time. Here comes a lame story!
The door slammed, and the two men picked themselves off the floor. Their rough chains scraped the rough ground, and it was some time before they could fully stand up, by which their eyes had finally gotten used to the darkness.
It was a tenebrous, dank room, somehow smelling both of flowers and stanks. Their eyes could make out three green flames in the far distance, mere pinpoints.
No! Two of the flames moved, much too rapidly to be fire. They were eyes! The creature moved into the third flame's light—
“Oh, look,” said one of the men. "It's a horse."
"No, Bob, it's a pony."
"Oh, and you'd know? What's the difference?"
A terrible roar jarred the men and shook the room. The pony spoke up in a small voice.
“I’m sorry, you two. But the Master needs Her sacrifice.”
“Holy crap!” yelled the first man. “That horse just talked, Fred! That PETA guy was right! This changes everything. Just the other day I ate five chickens—”
“I think we’ve got bigger problems, Bob, than—”
The Master roared again from the back of the chamber. “FOUR-TEEN HOURS…ON NINE THOUSAND WORDS ALL LAST NIGHT! FOURTEEN HOURS…AND ONLY FIVE GOOD COMMENTS!” It seemed that the world would shatter and the stars would fall from the sky, such was Her voice.
The pony winced. “It is Time.”
“Well, Bob. It was nice knowing you.”
“Now wait just a minute, horse. We are living human beings, and—”
“I am sorry. But in order for the Master to keep writing Fallout: Equestria, She must have Sacrifice—comments and blood for her throne…namely, in Her sacred words: ‘a nice, detailed post on what you thought of it and which parts you liked best.’ “
And the two men looked at each other (or at least it seemed they did, such was the murky light), and one said, “What. That’s it? That’s—”
“Oh, sweet! I freaking love that story. Let’s see, the most recent chapter? That’s the final part of the Tenpony Arc, right Bob? Well, there was the final part about Watcher.”
“You know, Fred, I think that was a little rushed. The trip goes by in a blur, and then they enter the clouds (though the constant danger of pegauses—pegasi?—whatever—was a nice touch), get some recording (what’s up with that?), and—lo and behold—out waddles Spike the Dragon. I think there was some lost potential there—”
“Shut up, Bob. You don’t know what you’re talking about. The Pegasus talk, the motion sickness (plus another mention of the stars! Gotta love aliens), and the recording were good enough. People want the story to move on!”
“No. She should have gone on more about the feeling of the new vehicle itself! Seriously, they have a freaking plane now. I love riding in planes. The sudden burst of acceleration on the runway, the jerk when the plane tilts up and turns in the air, I love all that. And seeing the landscape below! Why didn’t the author mention any of that sort of thing? Wasted potential, Fred.
“And another thing? The Balefire Phoenix joining them. That’s a big freaking deal, Fred: they now have a supernatural-ish, powerful pet. Why isn’t it described more? How does it behave? This is the first time they’re seeing it up close. It should have a bigger impact on everyone, especially Remedy and Pip.
“No, I felt that the last quarter of the chapter was too quick, too light on its feet. Wasted potential.”
They glared at each other, as well as they could in the dark.
“MOOOORE!” screamed the voice in the back. Their eardrums were going to burst.
ReplyDelete“That’s great, guys!” said the pony. “Keep it going!”
“Okay, Bob. Why are you being a jerk? Why aren’t you mentioning the good stuff? The scene with the Mint-Als going down the toilet was great—it almost was too melodramatic, but as far as I’m concerned she never crossed the line (which is arbitrary anyway!). It made sense, and it led into a tender scene—Homage carrying Pip.
“And the scenes after it? Great. The evil stars part made me shiver. Neither of us have played any of the Fallout games—” (Bob snorted) “—but I guess there are aliens in them? I certainly wasn’t expecting it, and it suddenly made me very small. Plus, the zebras are mentioned again. And the massage scene afterwards? Implicitly, subtly, tactfully” (Bob snorted louder) “done.
“And the scene before it? Great! The awkward police scene was really funny and sad. I am very glad that the author mentioned Pip’s earlier seductions of the police. Actually, I’m always very glad whenever she mentions something she set up in a previous chapter.”
“No, Fred,” said Bob. “That scene confused me. I still don’t really get how Monterey Jack really tricked Pip more than she already thought he did before she talked to the police. She already knew that his kids were going to be alone. Either way, the law is what’s kicking them out of Tenpony Tower. And what was up with his claims about his wife getting killed? I thought that part implied that he was actually lying about his wife’s death, and he got really guilty, and he never lied again afterwards…but I’m not so sure. I wish that was clearer.”
“You complain too much, Bob. I want to talk about how great the fic is. It’s really one of the best stories I’ve read in a while.
“The way she draws in elements from My Little Pony and Fallout and synthesizes them into something new is good.
“But that’s not what’s most important. What’s most important is her execution of the story. Her prose, her emotions. Her dialogue. The imagery and mystery of the wasteland: its past, its present, and its future all are represented in a poignant yet still joyful congress.”
“Yeah, yeah, Fred, that’s all great, but you’re just giving empty air: clichés and boiler plate, trying to make yourself sound smarter. You’re a parasite on Khat. (And seriously: ‘represented in a joyful congress’? My God, you’re full of it.)”
“Hey, Khat needs to hear this. Even if what I’m saying is cliché, it’s still all true.”
“You could at least express it better. You’re a horrible writer.”
“I’m going to ignore that and reiterate how cool the zebra-slash-evil-star part was; it was something that I was not expecting at all. I wish that we could have learned more about that zebra from Homage, though. Zebras in general, actually. We need to know more about them. (Hey, I’m suddenly wondering what happened to Zecora from the past.)”
“Another confusing part was there, Fred. ‘Four evil stars.’ The text mentioned that Pip heard that before. Huh? Where?”
“I don’t remember where either, Bob, but we’ll find out someday when we reread. Or in a future chapter. As long as when she first heard of them is clear…when it matters.
“Plus, we got more mention of Red Eye and the Alicorns. I’m starting to think that Twilight Sparkle is their ‘Goddess,’ being at Splendid Valley, a high mutagenic site.
“Plus, the actual confrontation with Watcher was great (though I think the pacing should have been even slower to draw out the tension). And SteelHooves’ revelation that he knew about Watcher for a long time.
“Plus, SteelHooves’ cover story was great. Frankly, I expected a civil war in Tenpony, but this is fine too. (But did Pip not tell Homage the real story? That seems kind of weird. Why wasn’t it mentioned?)
“Plus, Fluttershy. Oh my goodness. It makes sense now why Dash called her a traitor earlier. But we still need more information.
“Oh, and the Balefire Phoenix was not rushed. She’s been setting it up for the last few chapters. It appeared again before it joined them.”
ReplyDelete“Um, guys? I think that’s enough Sacrifice,” said the pony.
“It still wasn’t described enough, Fred! They’re seeing it up close for the first time! What does it look like up close? What is its behavior? Why is it following them? Why aren’t they even wondering?”
“Well, Khat can deal with that in the next chapter.”
“Khat is great, but I doubt that the phoenix issue will be ameliorated like that.”
“Guys! That’s enough.”
The lights turned on with a bang. On the other side of the room was a gigantic idol, like from Africa.
On top of it were an IMAX audio system and a sheepish-looking human holding a megaphone. Well, that explained the voice.
“Guys,” said Khat, “thanks for the long comments, but this all is now too long. People will get annoyed.”
“What,” said Bob flatly. “Are you kidding. I had to give ‘Sacrifice’ for a guy with a voice modulator?”
“So you’re not an angry ghostwriting Old One who demands to eat the viscera of its subjects?” asked Fred.
“Oh no,” Khat said, dropping the loudspeaker. “It’s just that it’s really hard to get people to comment, and it’s kind of frustrating, so we’ve hired…certain people to kidnap our readers in their dreams. We’ve got that technology nowadays.
“Maybe that wasn’t such a good idea. But I’ve got a day job, and I’ve really worked hard on this! Good comments are the fuel that drives my writing. ‘Everything was great’ comments are nice, but they’re kind of…”
“Vapid?” supplied Fred.
“I’d never say that. That’d be ungrateful.”
“But these aren’t even blog comments!” yelled Bob. “If this is all a dream, then no one will remember this! This isn’t on a blog!”
“Oh, don’t worry, Bob,” said the pony. “That’s already been taken care of…”
If Steelhoof thought she was off her rocker giving the weapons to both sides....
ReplyDeleteFor her sake, I hope she perished. Her mind would have simply snapped like a twig if she survived to learn what happened.
Late chapter 19 comment (phoenix yaaay! wait this is not what I was supposed to write) - I totally fell for the Velvet ambush, I actually thought that she was being kind and mentioned that workshop to help Lilpip meet up with Homeage before they get kicked out of Tenpony Tower, which made the "betrayal" that much more powerful
ReplyDeleteOn to the now one! I read the chapter, and I was like Whoaaa! And then you said that this was NOT the big reveal, it's actually gonna be in the next chapter???
By the time this is posted probably everyone is talking about the truth behind that Fluttershy memory (paved with good intentions *indeed*...) and the denizen of the Cave, but I don't want to forget about all the little moments without wich the story would not be this good, yet they get no credit!
The back-and-forth mindgame with the last tin of PTMs was a nice way to close that storyline, but it also stealthily managed to *not* close it, we did not get to see what Lilpip would have done with it by herself... Could she do it without help from a friend? But the friend was there, so she didn't need to
It was under E - yay heartwarming (damn I just thought about how Pinkie Pie ended up ;(. Homeage however misjudged Pinkie Pie, she *did* break her PTM addiction -well would have if only she had more time- and Lilpip knew that, why didn't she say so? I guess she didn't want to ruin the moment?
The unfortunate maintenance pony in the base ment. Why? I don't know! But it's the perfect example of how you add life to the story, walking up from the basement and passing a corpse turned into a reminder about the destruction of Manehattan, and gave us some more insight into Lilpip's mind
The insight into zebra beliefs was chilling and... Waitasecond I just noticed this.
“In particular, they tell of four malevolent stars with hearts of cruelty and chaos which yearn to taste our pain and destruction, wrought by our own hooves.”
Four stars helping destroy Equestria. Now why did that sound familiar.
< I totally missed what you meant when I read the chapter :/ I was thinking about the 4 stars releasing Nightmare Moon...
It's not raining... I loved that scene in Ticket Master, and loved it here. And it was immediately followed by...
Pyrelight! I have been hoping for exactly this ever since the party spotted the first balefire phoenix (was it also the same one?)
When I got home today, I was feeling down because the weather ruined my chance of flying. But then I found out you updated FOE, and that turned my frown upside down! I thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for consistently doing so. I'm looking forward for the next chapter!
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteI am in love with this fic and have been thinking about background lore and such, and was wondering if you would mind me and possibly a few others writing a "Fallout Equestria Bible" of sorts, similar to the wiki pages for the games, but on googledocs, listing the happenings of pre-war Equestria, and the events up to and after the Stable Dweller leaving Stable 2.
If your interested, lemme know a good way to contact you so we can collaberate and set things up properly.
Also wondering if there will be an opening for writing "dlc" fics, i'm really wanting to do one for Mothership Zeta or Operation Anchorage.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteOMG!
Huge megaspell-level supercomment!
ROTFL! That was... wonderful! You win all my internets!
And thank you, both for pointing out why detailed, thoughtful comments are so appreciated and necessary to keep me going...
...and for providing such good feedback. The criticisms were all good points, and the compliments were all very encouraging!
You have my deep appreciation!
Oooooooh... my. Fluttershy is not only Oppenheimer, but also the Rosenbergs? Um. Wow.
ReplyDeleteTotally called who Watcher was a couple of chapters ago, nice to see that my read of the foreshadowing was accurate!
Ok... in the flashbacks, we've gotten a fair bit of detail on Pinkie Pie (and we know what happened to her, a scene which was beautifully done) a decent amount of info on Applejack and Fluttershy through a combination of Steelhooves and memory orbs, and a bit on Rainbow Dash. I confess that I'm quite curious about what was going on with Twilight and Rarity, and I'm *really* curious about what happened to Dash after the pegasi abandoned the world.
I'll be waiting with bated breath for the next chapter!
Wow.. this story has just giving me hope back for fanfics.. first time i've giving a fanfic a chance ever since i read cupcakes.. i and gotta say i've missed out (thank you very much Sergeant Sprinkles)
ReplyDeleteI started reading the story yesterday after having had it recommended by a fellow brony (and partly because i love the fallout universe)
i just finished up chapter 20 and i gotta say this is probably one of the best stories i ever read (dunno if it's because of ponies but it really rocks)
I have laughed and was several times about to fell a tear (the parts with pinkie pie was really sad)
I find it a really well written story with looks of details and cool references from the series
I like the characters in the story a lot and think that the character development is super.. you really get to know them all.. not just the main character
And although the story might be somewhat more violent than the rest of the universe I still think there are plenty of elements in the show from which you can learn from
As a gamer i love the many elements from the fallout universe you have managed to get in to the story and the same with the other way around how you have managed to get the original characters into the story and still making it sound credible.
Well gotta say i can't wait for chapter 21 (why do we always have to wait for good things get made? it the same thing with season 2 :P)
Keep up the good job and thanks sharing the story :D
tl;dr: thanks for an awesome story and can't wait for next chapter!
This...This is amazing. You are truly a master of your craft, and I find myself tempted to write a fanfic-of-a-fanfic.
ReplyDeleteYou said there was going to be a good jumping off point for such, yes? Is that still coming up, or was chapter 20's end meant to be it?
This story shows well just how screwed an earth pony really is.
ReplyDeleteThey can't fly, they can't levitate, and when other creatures wield rifles and cannons being hardy and strong doesn't make too much of an impact. The only earth ponies who've significantly contributed to the plot are either dead and gone or just dead.
Really, I feel sorry for them. It's like they were deliberately screwed over during creation.
Okay, there are a few ponies and bronies that seem confused by Monterey Jack. I'll try to put the pieces together for them:
ReplyDeleteTry to imagine being Monterey Jack.
The harsh realities of the wasteland have put you in terrible situations, forced you to make choices that erode any morals, virtues or sense of self-worth beyond the few things you have been able to cling to.
The things you cling to in life, the only things left that really mean something to you, are your wife (whom you love very dearly), your children, and your one claim to self-worth: your honesty.
Financially, things are not going well. You live in Tenpony Tower, run a store, and yet you have less than nine-thousand caps to your name. You and your wife are driven to Wasteland scavenging to keep a safe home for your children.
Your wife is killed. The love of your life ripped away. You watch her die, on a failed expedition no less. And to rub salt in the wounds, you are forced to use the one dose of anti-venom you have on yourself rather than her.
You miss her deeply, painfully, every day. But you must go on. For your children.
You and your wife were a capable scavenging team; you alone are not. Without her, you are sufficient, but you cannot stop because your children need you. You are captured by slavers.
You make a choice to rob a pony of supplies that you believe may make the difference in getting home to your children.
And you return to find your children have fallen in love with the pony you tried to rob -- the very symbol of how far you've sunk.
You can't tell them, you can't say anything, because you would be executed. And your children -- who by this point in your mind are massive chains -- need you.
Every day, that one part of you that gave you any sense of self worth is brutally eroded by the secret you are keeping. The loss of your wife has still left you broken. And you can't even turn on the damn radio without your failures being thrown in your face.
That little pony has become the cross you've been nailed to. Every day you live in hell. And you can't even end it.
Because your children need you.
And then, one day, that little pony who has become the icon of your misery and wretchedness, trots up and points a hoof at you.
Suddenly, you can be free of everything. Free to be with your wife again. You can arrange your own legal suicide in a way that would shift responsiblity for your children on somepony who, from the words being beaten into you every day by the radio and even by your children, is the sort of goodie four-shoes who wouldn't let them come to harm.
And all you have to do is tell the truth.
@Kkat
ReplyDelete... It's one think to know all that from the readings, but it's another thing to see it all laid out nice and flat like that... I never thought of Jack as an actively mean figure, but to see the full length of his tragic life lined up like that... It breaks your heart.
@Kkat: Excellent. It would be a shame if this explanation didn't get into your actual story somehow; it's great prose itself.
ReplyDelete@Kyle
ReplyDeleteYeah. The story is from Littlepip's perspective, not an objective one. Everything above was in the story, but in pieces scattered over several chapters, left up to the reader to piece together. Having it all laid out like that...
...I am tempted to put that into the story, but it would be hard to do so from Littlepip's point of view. And since the information is already in the story, it might be too much of a rehash.
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteOnce you're done with the story, you can always just compile such explanations in an extra file.
Or someone can just write a separate fanfiction around that story. There's lots of room to flesh out Monterey's life.
As a side-note, I've been meaning to translate that Number 12 story as a sort of experiment, but since your story is even more difficult to translate... well, don't be surprised if something pops up in the near future.
Okay, I just read the latest nine chapters in one sitting. This story has officially surpassed RubyQuest in awesomeness levels.
ReplyDeleteI'll make sure to Fedex you a cake, Kkat.
Overanalysing time again.
ReplyDeleteSpike is not the Watcher.
Yes, I said that.
I put my caps on Twilight being the Watcher.
First of all, remember when the Watcher told Lilpip that he had kinda written a report of friendship?
Sounds more like Twilight than Spike.
My theory is that Twilight is hooked up to some computer / ranger system, maybe even have her brain in a jar, hiding in the dragon cave.
Think Vault 112 in Fallout 3.
Spike would stay by her side and protect her from danger, they are after all in Pegasus county. Since Twilight can't move, it's just natural that he greets their guests.
As for what the Watcher have done since the war, I think that Twilight is searching for ponies that can use the Element of Harmony. She probably found a way to use it as a Garden of Eden Creation Kit (G.E.C.K.), if we talk Fallout terms.
@RedCore
ReplyDeleteYeah, I agree. Spike just doesn't fit the bill as Watcher. Very likely that, since Twilight is a of a higher priority, he's standing in for her. Safety reasons are the obvious bet.
But, the story is Kkat's, and we have not been disappointed with the results.
@RedCore
ReplyDeleteIt could still go either way. I can't remember the exact words but Watcher said something like "you could say I have done some research on friendship" that could still apply to Spike, who was there the entire time and he heard every report, since he sent them.
Oh, also form chapter 19. "Little Gilda". Priceless! I must know the story behind that one. Was she a famous Talon, the founder perhaps?
Also I noticed that lately(?) Calamity didn't get much screentime and attention, but I presume that's about to change now that they broke cloud cover? I give it 2 chapters because a dark secret of his is revealed
@RedCore
ReplyDeleteThis makes a remarkable amount of sense, hoping for Twilight making an appearance.
ALSO, FLUTTERAGE KILLED US ALL, MADNESS.
@RedCore That'd be just like Kkat, wouldn't it?
ReplyDelete"Oh, hey guys, Spike greeted the others outside of where Watcher is. See, looks like the dragon is actually Watcher-BUT IT'S REALLY TWILIGHT IN A COMPUTER PSYCHE!!!"
Spoiler alert, Twilight Sparkle is Watcher.
ReplyDeleteWell, chapter 19 made me decide to quit a seven year alcohol addiction.
ReplyDeleteSo, you know, thanks.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteIf you've played any fallout game you'd understand perfectly.
Yes, There's an intro (which describes the end of the world) AND a prologue (which explains the beginning of the specific game) in all of those games :-/
will be making a tabletop game
ReplyDeleteMaybe, just maybe, if I keep refreshing the page, Kkat will update the story faster.
ReplyDeleteHey guys. So, I just made this quick little blurb thing for y'all, if you're willing to check it out. Many thanks. I hope I can put this together well!
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6VyyEDlc5LM
Kthx.
Wow, the irony that Fluttershy was responsible for the apocylpse is too much to bear.
ReplyDeleteAs is finding out she gave this megaspells to both sides.
Fluttershy, y u so good natured?
Surely someone else would have made the megaspells eventually anyway...
Also thrilling installment, can't wait for more!
Chapter Twenty-One just went up. And for those of you who asked me about writing a fanfic of Fallout: Equestria, this is the chapter I wanted you to wait for. ^.-
ReplyDeleteEnjoy!
I want to see Fluttershy's version of the 'Now I am become Death, the destroyer of worlds.' moment.
ReplyDeleteQuestion for one who wants to get into this fic how long on average is each Chapter in terms of Time?
ReplyDeleteThis story is so epic beyond belief. IMO its the best MLP fanfic there is. period. it should never end.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteNot quite sure what you are asking. Elaborate?
Damn, damn damn damn, threw me off the track Kkat....you threw me off the track, well played sir...
ReplyDeleteIf Lil pip's group isn't it...who is?, and this talk of fluttershy having lived thru the war makes me think things...Richard Grey things...
@Kkat
ReplyDeleteI can see why. Lots of room for speculation on what happened to Fluttershy.
And I hate you for giving us that little snippet on Dash at the end, and then cutting it off. We'll never know, will we?
Anyways, another ZOMFGEPIC chapter. Can't wait to see the confrontation with Red Eye!
This last chapter made me, a 23 year old war vet, cry.
ReplyDeleteNo story has ever been so good as to do that to me (Balto came close when they had the tiny coffins, damn man tiny coffins!)
Anyway this chapter was awesome! I still think Pip is one of the elements I just don't know which one!
I really hope Fluttershy is a tree, cause I would love to read about them finding her....poor Velvet
Aw man, thinking about Spike up there alone almost made me tear up. Great work as always!
ReplyDeleteThis whole experience is an excellent representation of how a central character with flaws is an opportunity for riveting story...as opposed to a hindrance. Why Not Being a Mary Sue is Awesome.
ReplyDeleteOkay, leaving a comment here for the...21st chapter now.
ReplyDeletePhew to start, I...I feel really bad for Spike. To have been doing this for how long now all in hopes of keeping Twilight's last dream alive? I'm completely saddened now. I honestly think this story has far more than enough tear jerkers to designate a [sad] tag by now.
As for the "goal" that's an interesting twist and I have to admit, would definitely take more than, "oh I just need to go into this radiated vault here to pick up the program and we'll just put it in this computer and we're done!" I can also now see where the "pick up point" for all the fan-fan fiction now.
Stepping away from that for a moment, I'd just like to mention all of the parts in this chapter that made me feel anything.
-I was ready to cry or start tearing any moment in Spike's conversation
-I was expecting a complete denial of betraying Calamity to the enclave (That was great)
-I loved the Suited For Success analogy
-If I didn't like Hommage so much and Lilpip were straight, I would definitely be rooting for Calamity and Lilpip now.
-At least we got a little more of a view into the lives of the other ponies pre-apocalypse
-OMG that last part with Dash and Gilda had me squeeeing. She's not a very high pony on my rankings of the mane cast (granted they're still all awesome and I love them all), but I still now accept her as the resident badass/rebel who can still be a good guy. Basically what Gilda failed to be.
-As a side note, I wonder if Lilpip will ever realize that she very well may have killed the successor to the element of honesty by opening her big mouth in Tenpony Tower
Back to the new "objective" introduced, I love how we get the feel now that "yeah, Lilpip is awesome, but she's still not the main character that's going to save everyone, at least in the front lines." I like that you showed that she's not one of the elements to keep this from feeling too much like overdoing it.
Normally I don't say this (at least literally) but I now want a Fallout: Equestria MMORPG where we all wander the wastes making a living and try to become one of the element bearers for the ultimate end game content. I'd pay hundreds a year for an amazing mmo like that. With that said, I bid you a rest unless you wish to bestow upon us another surprise. ^.^
P.S You should probably just take the break anyway, you deserve it.
Spoilers, yadda yadda why you read comment before story. :P
ReplyDeleteOh my god, the ending. I hate you for it, so much. We'll never know, will we?
Bah. What am I saying? Dash won... she had to have... I... *manly tears*
Jr. Speedsters... Oh, I might actually break down here. I hate you so much, but I can't express how much I love you for this. Seriously, this has impacted me in a way I didn't think possible.
Also, Calamity. I love that one of the characters we've known the longest is one that in many ways we know the least about. I can't wait to see where these developements lead!
Not to mention, I really want to see what all the Ministry of Awesome had it's hooves in. Seems implied it wasn't nearly as useless as has been let on.
And before I forget: All of my monies goes to anyone who could draw Dash in the enclave armor. Seriously, all of it. Just throwing that out there.
You want us to emphasize what we liked the most... Well, here's what I loved the most about the chapter.
ReplyDeleteSpike's revelation to Littlepip about the role she does, or doesn't, play in his ultimate plan. To have a scene where the protagonist has the keeper of the ultimate plot climax look them in the eye and say "You are not the chosen one", and for it to be done in a way that hope is not immediately drained away... THAT takes good writing. But it still wasn't the part that got me the most. There were several tear-jerking moments in this chapter. I think the one that got me the most was Spike's breakdown.
I can't imagine the pain he felt, to wake up one day and find out that your best friends are long dead. That the world they loved and wanted to save is dead, and that all you have left is the last legacy of your surrogate mother. I had to take a break for a moment there, just to regain my composure.
Kudos Kkat. You convey more in words than the sum of the letters should be able to. A true artist at this craft, giving me actual emotional experiences throughout this story.
I eagerly look forward to chapter 22, because I know now that you will never disappoint on this story.
I thought I posted last time I was on here but I guess I didn't. I just wanted to say you work is amazing! You make me miss my own fallout adventures...Anyway Thanks this is really awesome and I can't wait for more and I'm hardly past chapter 5! also @ sgt scubnoob I AM SO DOIN IT!
ReplyDelete@Fallin'Winter
ReplyDeleteMonterey jack as an element of honesty? he never struck me as some one embodying the concept of honesty. he felt more like a drowning man (pony?) desperately holding onto a lone piece of drift wood amid a sea of darkness. remaining honest because thats all he though he had and to lose that would be to lose everything. now Homage, i'd bet a fair amount shes the element of honesty. "No matter how bad it hurts" indeed.
as for the rest of the story. dear god kkat. how can this masterpiece keep getting more and more epic with every chapter?! how! at this rate this story will reach such levels of awesome Equestria Daily will have to have to add a "Fallout" to the front of it's title... actually thats not to bad an idea for a banner... Some one please get on that! my drawing skills are as bad as littlpips medical skills, rudimentary at best and woefully lacking when it counts.
Chapter 21 was powerful.
ReplyDeleteSpike's attitude was just as one would imagine it, given the circumstances. And his little secret (no spoilers) was delightfully unexpected, yet so painfully obvious to anyone who's played the games. I should have seen it coming, but I didn't.
More exposition on Calamity and the Pegasi. FO:E DLC, anyone?
I'm really happy with the twist this story has taken, mainly in its "main quest." I feel like it's a new page for both the story and the fallout universe. I'm excited to learn who Littlepip thinks the six are (she names two in this chapter) and how that ends up.
And that ending sequence, just wow.... *tear*
I would really like to know more about the one pony project, and why Dash was involved. I'm curious to see who "The Master" of this one is. (Join...DIE...Join...DIE!)
There's one thing I absolutely adore in this entire fic is the tiny little tidbits from the actual show is incorporated into this fic. "Well, it's really more of a cave. But I've fixed it up enough that it feels like a house." Every time I see one of these I can't help but smile, even on my absolute shittiest day, and trust me I had them.
ReplyDeleteIn ch.21, my mind was blown to see how Spike was all grown up and can be a total badass when the occasion arises, like roasting an Enclave pony from the INSIDE of the armor so it fucking BAKES. Although he has grown and can be aggressive, you still managed to make him the little babby dragon Twilight love ever-so-much. When he was talking about the Mane 6, its like he never grew up at all, thinking of all the happy moments from the show before the war.
Of course not only do I love tidbits from the show, naturally I love the homages (heh) from the Fallout games as well, like the G.E.C.K or G.o.E. in this case. It makes me imagine Spike as James from FO3 when he explains it to Pip.
I really don't know what else to say about this chapter, I'm a terrible commenter. I'm more of a lurker. But regardless, seeing this fic update and is just exploding with almost over 600 comments at this point, this fic is appreciated immensely. Keep it up Katt, but don't over exert yourself.
*Spoilers, yada yada.*
ReplyDeleteChapter 21: absolutely heartwrenching! I have to admit that I teared up just a little bit when reading about the Gardens of Equestria project, and how Twilight failed in her last gasp. I can't remember the last book I've read that got me so invested in the protagonist's emotions. I honestly feel both depressed and elated in correspondence with Littlepip's emotions.
As the story progresses, the mane cast's descent into despair has been revealed with excellent pacing. First Pinkie Pie, then Fluttershy, and now Twilight Sparkle. Rainbow Dash's exile is sad enough, but Twilight's ruination is downright depressing.
I am glad, however, that you left a glimmer of hope at the end of Twilight's tale. Maybe she still has a chance to right Equestia's wrongs...
One of the best aspects about this story is how you set up so many side stories that are sometimes just hinted at, without feeling the need to explain everything to its conclusion. These "monuments in the fog", so to speak, flesh out the world and give it an air of real-world mystery. (Also, Dashie *totally* showed Gilda what's up. I don't need to hear the end of the recording to know that! Please! *Sniff*)
Here's what I'm currently looking forward to reading about the most:
- Twilight's fate (Master Twilight? Taint-corrupted Alicorn Sparkle?)
- Fluttershy's final resting place ("I'd like to be a horribly mutated treelike creature in eternal agony.")
- What's going to happen between Spike and his enemies! I'm honestly afraid that we'll come back to a smoldering crater where Twilight's last Crusader Maneframe used to reside.
Of course, I'm very interested to see how the imminent throw-down with Red Eye goes, and more importantly, *who* Red Eye is. I'm pooling for Red Eye to be an agent of Twilight Sparkle, who is also the Alicorn's master.
I love how many "Computer RPG" elements are translated into FOE. Most importantly, you've done an excellent job of capturing Fallout gameplay: we've been very aware of the main questline (Red Eye) since the beginning, but we're more interested in character development and side quests at first, during which we learn tidbits about the main quest from many different viewpoints. This has lent itself well to the story and to the world, and helps present a living, breathing world.
Keep writing! But take your hard-earned vacation first, if you need :)
P.S. Here's my ongoing list of Corrupted / True Elements of Harmony:
Corrupted Kindness: Red Rider's Ghoul Doctor (The torture of the few can save the many. This one may be a bit of a stretch...)
True Kindness: Velvet Remedy ("Tough Love, Baby!")
Corrupted Laughter: Silver Bell (Her quest for laughter just caused pain. Way to go, Pinkamena Diane...)
True Laughter: Ditzy Doo (Uninterrupted laughter in the face of severe adversity)
Corrupted/True Generosity: I'm not sure about this one. Nopony's really gone out of their way for another so far. Silver Bell might be close...
Corrupted Loyalty: Gawdyna Grimfeathers (Loyalty to contract with bare disregard for friends is counterproductive to the Magic of Friendship)
True Loyalty: Calamity (What's there to say? He's been unwavering in loyalty to his friends.)
Corrupted Honesty: Monterey Jack (Clinging to honesty like a drowning man clutching for driftwood, Monterey only used his honesty as a crutch and a weapon)
True Honesty: Homage / DJ PON3 (Sharing the truth... even when it hurts!)
Corrupted/True Magic: Not sure about this one, yet. We haven't really met any named characters with impressive magical abilities, yet. Littlepip is pretty limited in this regard.
Corrupted Magic would be the alicorns, or whoever is behind them.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to go ahead and predict a Fawkes analog is going to pop up. An Alicorn who, for whatever reason, is not controlled by the master. Should be interesting, if it does indeed occur. Hell, it'll probably be one of the elements.
ReplyDeleteOh man, this is too much. Spike guilt and burden, Dash last fight with Gilda (I think they killed each other, rumbling down the mountain), Fluttershy fate...
ReplyDeleteMany would like to think she is become like Harold/Bob, maybe trying to heal the wasteland, but you kwow what? My theory has't yet been disproven. She could have stepped into a Taint field and, instead of dieyng, got trasformed in the Goddess/Master (a larvar stage at least). The horror SHE have created drive her insane and after two centuries she is ready to repent her sins by creating a new uncurruptable race (alicorns) that will bring new peace. Or maybe she just want to be loved again...
@Anonymous
Yeah, I was thinking of that too, since alicorns are the stronghest spellcaster around (and we got a lot of unicorn characters already)
I have an idea as to who Steelhooves might be, but I think I might withhold it.
ReplyDeleteI once again (in review form this time) Say that including some sort of pip buck timestamp could help to let us keep track of time better, but it's not strictly necessary.
I question what the reaction to spike toasting that soldier is going to be as well, because he can;t exactly just up and leave the cave, but it doesn't seem like he will get off that easy either.
The comments on the everfree being even crazier than before really makes me hope that the party will eventually have to trek through said place; Who knows, maybe go to Luna's old castle?(or whats left of it :P)
Finally, I would assume that last soundbyte was from a machine in spikes place. Putting it there without anyone else hearing it however implies a plot twist in the future.
Overall, great work!
Lastly, don't burn yourself out Kkat!
This story is one of the greatest I've read in a long time. The characterisation and emotional content within is top notch.
ReplyDeleteI've been trying to think of what to type here. Which parts of the story I've liked the most or how much it's touched me, and I'm stuck; so please keep going the way you have.
Immersive world setting. - Check
Characters that truly feel alive. - Check
Plots, sub plots, Chekhov's guns, cliff hangers etc. - Check
Dying for the next chapter and the story to continue. - Check
The descriptions of what the characters feel and think throughout the story has been so passionate that I don't feel like I'm reading a story, but experiencing it.
I felt Calamity's remorse after shooting Littlepip. I felt Littlepip's anguish at being so close, after doing so much to get the world back on track, but falling short. The recording at the end of ch.21, I had a massive lump in my throat... That's just come back after thinking about it again. I can see Dash so clearly, sitting there, knowing what’s coming.
It's all in the details.
Kkat: Thanks for writing this story. It’s an amazing read and the connection I feel to the characters is so potent.
I'll admit.
ReplyDeleteI was skeptical when I first saw this.But it's quickly turned into a brilliant story.Even if i am only at chapter twelve.It's brilliant.
The next Fallout after New Vegas better have 3 player online co-op.
The benfits of Third Shift: Reading Fallout:Equestria hot off the presses.
ReplyDeleteI don't think I posted it after reading ch20, so I'm going voice that reation now...WAIT WAIT WHAT. Fluttershy did WHAT.
And on to the present.
That reveal of the Gardens of Equestria was powerful. I swear I could hear the Main Theme echoing mournfully off the cavern walls, with just a glimer of hope carried by the melody. Now I just fear Spike is going to pick up the role of FO3's Dad where Velvet left off.
I'm not entirely convinced Pip and her friends aren't the Elements of Harmony. Twilight wasn't the Element of Magic simply for being a powerful mage; she was the glue that held her friends together, a focal point of sorts.
And is it just me, or are the comments derping?
Hey Kkat!
ReplyDeleteApart from the part where I tell you just how awesome your stuff is, and how you, somehow, manage to KEEP it awesome, there is a thing or two that's been bugging me for a while.
Like... fallout caused mutation. I am aware that magical balefire bombs =\= nukes and therefore the results may vary, but still, I am surprised that you made no real mentions (apart from ghouls) of radiation caused 'changes' to the regular post-apocalyptic ponies, like 'Little Ponies' (remember the few 'dwarf-like' characters from Fallout 1 & 2?) or ponies with distorted features, lack of a mane\tail (as standard rad-sickness thing or a in-born mutation) in-born illnesses (anaemia, organ dysfunctions), albinism etc etc up to lack of\atrophy\distortion of certain limbs\bodyparts. ...unless the reason there's none of that stuff is uhm... one of those really nasty ones you get sometimes here and there..
Also, any tip on how pistol\rifle grips look like, considering they're designed to be held by magic or mouth\teeth\tongue? I can imagine a gryphon-rifle or a combat shotgun may look similar to Earth-stuff, but the rest is a mystery to me.
Now, there's one more thing. I did see and read my fare share of nasty stuff, both fiction and real life (historical and modern) some of it even happened to myself, and still, I have to admit, I was and still am shocked by Spike's behaviour regarding that Enclave mare. I can understand using all sorts of nasty weapons in battle, and I am aware that in games\tv flamers are about as cool as it gets. Still, doing what Spike did, to a living being not engaged in combat, technically defenceless and for a prolonged time (I'm pretty sure he could've just vaporised both her and her armour in one go) IS horribly cruel and monstrous. There are quite some other ways, that look about as (or more) horrible and terrifying as frying someone in her armour and yet technically being more merciful and humane. So I can but wonder when will Spike snap and end up with a perforated skull. Anyhoof, what he did was extremely sick and I think you just made me really dislike that character.
...which also proves you're a damn good writer considering you can inspire emotions in your readers ;)
And the last thing, it just so happened that I did a wee-lil' pony-plushie (12 cm with ears) for one fanfic (Number 12), I am currently working on one mane-cast plushie and... figured out I'd really love to make a Velvet Remedy. I've got some designs prepared, saw the fanart etc and here's the question regarding that, I will most likely keep to how she looks on John Joseco's interpretation, but:
"Velvet Remedy, the gorgeous charcoal-coated unicorn with streaks of color in her white mane"
Charcoal. And unless there are some really silly differences between charcoal in US and Eu most Velvet artworks show her dark-grey ;) So... You OK with me using black-black materials like cotton, dyed soft suede or, if I get it, velvet? And... what colours are there in her mane?
And again, you wrote something that affects people. That's rare. Keep up the good work!