[Shipping]
Author: Tchernobog
Description: A short trip to Canterlot with Rainbow Dash and Applejack is the perfect opportunity for Twilight to test out her new long-distance Teleportation spell. But a nasty cold dashes the hopes of a quick trip, and makes the spell disappear in smoke: instead of arriving in Canterlot, the three find themselves in the nearby Everfree Forest, and discover that their location is not the only thing that went wrong.Those Blue Wings (New Part 15)
While Rainbow has exchanged her wings and tail for a straw blond frond, Applejack has acquired a rainbow tail as well as a pair of strong, blue wings.While Twilight attempts to find a spell to return the body parts to their rightful owners, the others must attempt to deal with this situation... and with their changing feelingss
Additional Tags: Spell gone wrong, sneezing, mixed bodies
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124 comments:
Could be interesting... will read
ReplyDeleteAhh appledash, so cute.
ReplyDeleteAppleDash?
ReplyDeleteShould I assume the spell mixup is Twilight's fault?
ReplyDeleteOne of these days somebody is going to write a fic where Twilight casts a teleport spell WITHOUT sending everyone to an alternate dimension/swapping bodies/etc. etc.
ReplyDeleteLol t his being the post after Of Two Minds :MMiM comletes.
ReplyDeleteHa! The day where all twilight's speels go correctly... can anypony say 'Twilight Zone' (sorry couldn't resist)
ReplyDelete@Infinite Black
ReplyDeleteSpeels = spells, stupid spelling errors
well, that was good.
ReplyDeleteI'll have to read the updates to get a true feeling for the rating, but 3/5 for now.
Pretty good so far. Trevor is intrigued as to how this story will progress... (Not to mention the disappointment of having missed the Wonderbolts, letting family down by not showing, ect.) Can't wait for the next chapter! 8D
ReplyDelete~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
The last sentence has me wanting more :D and the story as a whole of course. Looks good so far 4/5 right now, will have to se how the story progresses :)
ReplyDeleteThis is an interesting premise for what I assume is an AppleDash, but something about the way the events in the story progress just seems off in some way. I can't place it, though.
ReplyDeletemy only real complaint is that it's appledash, which is the most overused pairing in the history of this fandom.
ReplyDeleteINCOMPLETE! Why you do this to me! D':
ReplyDelete@wackyteen
ReplyDeleteYou say that like it is a bad thing.
@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteIt's not... really...
I love shipping, but seeing this same pairing over and over gets old.
@wackyteen
ReplyDeleteThe best pairing never gets old >:C
@NinesTempest
ReplyDeleteI like AppleDash but TwiDash takes top for me.
AppleDash would come in... like... 3rd for me, cause I've read like one AppleDash fic that I really really really liked. the others i liked.
every TwiDash I've read I've enjoyed, thoroughly.
sorry. =|
Of two minds is what I was thinking. But Applejack and Rainbow Dash switching bodies would be fun.
ReplyDelete@wackyteen
ReplyDeleteMy otp > all otp
@NinesTempest
ReplyDeletewhat was your favorite AppleDash fic?
How is this shipping?
ReplyDeleteDammit Twilight! You need to get Trixie to cast a remove curse spell on you if you plan on using big spells in fanfics!
ReplyDelete@Unknown
ReplyDeleteit's an incomplete and I suspect the author is going to use the downtime between Twilight resting, the fact Dash was staring at AJ's flank, and various other reasons to ship AJ and Dash together...
Isn't this *why* she learned a failsafe spell? Although if her magic's still going haywire maybe casting it isn't the best idea.
ReplyDelete...and it didn't work against Discord.
...and she couldn't get a bead on Smartypants to use it in Lesson Zero.
I think she needs a failsafe grenade or something.
@terrycloth
ReplyDelete...I am now writing a Monty Python pastiche in my mind... O_O
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ReplyDelete@NinesTempest
ReplyDeleteHear, hear!
to be honest, the writing style in this story seems a little sub par for EqD to post. Over all the story needs a bit of refinement. Personal opinion of course.
ReplyDeleteIncomplete? Sadface.
ReplyDelete*sigh*
ReplyDeleteYet ANOTHER who somehow thinks you can get a cold so easily by it being, well, cold.
This will probably be AJ x Spitfire and RD x Macintosh.
ReplyDeletei had this same idea for a season 3 opener @[email protected]
ReplyDeleteTittle: Those blue wings
ReplyDeleteImage: looks Suspicious...
mmh...
*le rasins face* WINGBONER!!!
It has a few cliches, but I like it! I did not notice it was incomplete, though. So just another story to wait on. T_T
ReplyDeleteLAWL Rainbow Dash staring at her own flank... hilarious. Then again, I go "dat flank" whenever I see Fluttershy, so... RD's is probably more tone. Whatever!
ReplyDeleteHello all! Author here. Thanks for the comments :)
ReplyDeleteI'm pretty much writing this as I go (though I do have an overall idea of what I'm doing with the story. Just need to work out some finer details).
That certainly isn't an image I'd have chosen for this story, but short of getting something drawn by someone, it'll work :D
Now for a few responses!
I fully admit the setting may be a bit "contrived". Not sure it could be resolved without resorting to a Fallout-equestria length fic (and I just don't tend to write that long :P). Yes, the "spell gone wrong" and "dash loses wings" thing is a tad overused, but I'm hoping that the differences here are significant enough to garner interest!
@ Mint Jelly: I'd argue I've seen "worse" on some posts here, but likely more due to lack of prereaders/grammatical errors in them. As mentioned above, I fully agree that the story may seem a tad contrived. I pretty much came up with this a couple days ago and jotted down what came to mind :) I might do revisions later on, though. Feedback always welcome :)
So, anyone know an artist willing to make a pic for this? XD
Thanks all for reading!
Am I the only one who likes AppleDash stories because I like the pairing? I've seen alot of "most over-used pairing in the fandom" comments, and I don't really catch their drift?
ReplyDeleteGreat story by the way, can't wait to see how this turns out!
@Tchernobog
ReplyDeleteI'd say you should use this existing image:
http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-pk9TvHjoMIg/TcBR6CrkzxI/AAAAAAAAEEs/0x1FcSuPuy4/s1600/AppleDash_Rainbowjack.png
Not sure who the original creator was since Ponibooru is f*NEIGH*de right now.
Sneezing tag?
ReplyDelete@DPV111
ReplyDeleteDamn, that's indeed much closer! Though still not quite the scene I have in mind :x
Maybe seeing the image first contaminated my view, but from the descriptions in the story that top image seems to be exactly what you described - Applejack with blue wings and a rainbow tail and Rainbow Dash with Applejack's tail. Either way, it was the image that drew me.
ReplyDeleteI don't read much shipping so not sure how much I'll like it once this story hits that point but so far, so good!
Whatever niggling feeling had been bothering me for the first chapter is no longer there (in fact, the second chapter seemed to be the superior one in many ways), so I'll add this to my list of stuff I'll keep my eye on.
ReplyDeleteI believe that "Twilight messes up a spell" should have it's own tag and also be considered it's own genre now.
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely... a bit more interesting than the first chapter. 3.5/5 stars, if this was on fimfiction. 3/5 here.
ReplyDelete@Hagil
ReplyDeleteI commissioned the image (which turned out even better than I imagined) as I felt people could have gotten the wrong idea from the initial one. Seems like it was a good idea :)
@TenchiFreak5
I agree chapter 2 is superior. #1 is more of a setting of the, well, setting. #2 expands on it further :)
Thanks all for reading! :D
The picture is what really caught my eye here...very well written (it seems body swap stories are usually written with AppleDash for some reason).
ReplyDelete*Gets to the end of chapter 2* Well, that's Trollestia for you...
@DPV111
ReplyDeleteThat one was already used for "To Trot a Mile In Another's Hooves".
The writing was a bit plain for these first two chapters, but the promises seem interesting, so I'm definitely eager to see what happens next!
ReplyDeleteA solid 4 star, for interesting setup, overall good characterization, and nice pace of events.
Dear Twilight Sparkle:
ReplyDeleteI'm a Biatch that likes asking of others like bananas! Therefore, I leave the task up to you, knowing that it'll be days or longer before you're healthy enough to actually cast anything, and until then, your friends will have to suffer! Your mentor, Princess Trollestia.
p.s. Trolololol. U mad, pony?
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
just finished reading this story and i think it is very good i have not read a body swap fanfic yet and i think this was a good one to read as my first... it was a very good storey and i toughly enjoyed it good job :)
ReplyDeleteyou say this like its a foreign concept. SHUN THE NON [email protected]wackyteen
ReplyDeleteWhat Trevor said.
ReplyDeleteI approve of the direction of this story.
ReplyDeleteyay an update! ^^
ReplyDeletei just want to read moar now >_>
ReplyDeleteSo... Twilight's teleportation uses wormholes?
ReplyDeleteI thought it would be she grabs a chunk of space
and exchanges it with the space she's occupying.
It's worth reading, not mind blowing, but still good. Hope the next chapter comes out soon.
ReplyDeletePretty fun read and enjoying it quite a bit. Would have preferred and actually expected more focus on RD and AJ shenanigans. And hopefully once the shipping comes in it keeps pace with the overall light tone of the story, rather than turning into a mush fest. I don't mind shipping one bit as long as the shippy parts don't clash with the overall story. It's about the story after all.
ReplyDelete@DPV111
ReplyDeleteI think you'll enjoy the next chapter, then. I just don't feel like jumping right into things works well for pacing, and I guess a bit of..explanation? Backstory? Is in order. I think that's what chapter 3 ended up being.
Thank you for using google docs n.n I can't wait to read this n.n
ReplyDeleteOh man, this is a great story! I can't wait for the next chapter!
ReplyDeleteAnd in reference to Twilight's findings in the third chapter: DRILLING HOLES through SPACE AND TIME? How does that sound familiar? XD
@Tchernobog
ReplyDeleteI think you're doing a great job at actually putting a fresh spin on AppleDash.
Personally I have to slightly struggle to keep this storyy cohesive in my head since I have lately had all my headcannon for these characters completely consumed by http://askapplejackandrainbowdash.tumblr.com/
@DPV111
ReplyDeleteCan't say I blame you there, that tumblr is beyond adorable :)
@Gallant Vision
@Gallant Vision
Honestly, considering unicorn horns? A drill isn't much of a stretch ;) I wasn't particularly trying to refer to anything though.
This should be an actual episode
ReplyDeleteheck yea! an update!
ReplyDeletebest chapter, until now :D
ReplyDelete@MaSc
ReplyDeleteConsidering it's a bath scene, how can it *not* be? ;)
*squee*
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ReplyDeleteThe latest chapter had me grinning from ear to ear. RD's tickle revenge was hilarious (For some reason I never thought of someone taking advantage of knowledge about their own body for a body swap story before). Also, yay wingboners.
ReplyDeleteThe end to chapter four... I couldn't help but stop laughing. Really, that was just hilarious!
ReplyDeleteFunny!
ReplyDeleteWingboner Amanda. Wingboner!
ReplyDeleteBATH TIME SHENANIGANS!
ReplyDeleteAnyway, great chapter although it seemed a little bite sized.
I wonder if RD's discovered AJ's prehensile tail yet?
This was the best chapter of the story, if only because of the Apple family reactions in the very last seen (and there was so much more to like about it as well. Tickle revenge!).
ReplyDeleteThis is getting better and better as the chapters roll one. You really seem to have gotten into the groove, so to speak.
ReplyDeleteGood character development.
ReplyDeleteLiking this story more ever chapter.
I'd personally prefer a slightly lighter tone and a bit more comedy but that's just me.
When was this last uypdated? Because I love it. But I love most fics.
ReplyDelete@RisingStar
ReplyDeleteYesterday, as a matter of fact!
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ReplyDeleteYou have inspired a new term for MLP:FiM fics updates: Eeyupdates!
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for the next update :D
ReplyDeleteoh shhh yea! an update
ReplyDeleteI don't know about the rest of y'all, but it seems to me that chapter 6 was cut short :S
ReplyDeleteIt didn't seem to have much of a chapter closure at all. Am I crazy?
@SuperUnknown1O1
ReplyDeleteMaybe a bit. I admit I'm totally coming up with most of this as I go along, none of this is really planned. I'm pretty much ending a chater where I feel it *can* be ended. In this case, I wanted to keep stuff for the next one!
Seems funny but there is no comedy-tag O_o but there IS a "sneezing"-tag xD explain that or I will be FORCED to read this >8(
ReplyDelete@RaenBoow
ReplyDeleteRead it, young padawan, and all shall be explained >:D
@Tchernobog
ReplyDeleteEven thou you posted that only about 15 min after my comment I'd started reading the first chapter almost immediatly.... the force of curiosoty being my guide already -_-
Now quietly meditating in awaital of chapter 7...
*does a voodoo rain-dance for chapter 7*
ReplyDeleteIt occurs to me that Rainbow Dash might have grounds to complain about Princess Celestia's ruling on this one. Sure, lesson for Twilight, great, but isn't it a bit unfair for Dash to suffer for the sake of Twilight's lesson? It's the sort of thing that deserves a mention in-story. Even if it's just to say why nopony is doing that, it's still good writing to at least acknowledge it.
ReplyDelete@Imrix
ReplyDeleteI was actually thinking about this myself today. I think what I have in mind will be satisfactory ;)
Cutie Mark Failure Syndrome anyone?
ReplyDeleteI actually kinda figured that was what was going on with Rainbow, but I didn't think that it was so bad. Hm. Interested to see what happens there.
ReplyDeleteI was dissatisfied and frustrated by this chapter. I feel the last 2 chapters could easily have been combined into 1.
ReplyDeleteI still love the story and will continue reading. But if you are stretching small scenes like these into full chapters you may need to sit down and brainstorm a long term outline for the story so you can give it more meat.
@DPV111
ReplyDeleteThey may have been, yes. But I'm pretty much coming up with these ideas as I go, not writing things out in advance.
In fact, for this chapter, I had an initial plan that was very different and possibly would have ended the fic at chapter 7. But I changed it (I think for the better) to what we have no.
Plus, it's just my writing style. I find it rather hard to write really lengthy chapters, and I tend to stop a chapter where I feel a pause works best. I might tweak that when editing it once the fic is done, though :P
Oh shit. Pinkie's going to fix it?
ReplyDeleteInto her own hooves? Uh oh!
ReplyDeleteCan't believe I haven't commented on this yet. Been tracking for awhile and just gotta give you some props for this story. It's a nice read.
ReplyDeleteI also have to wonder how many ponies have written on teleportation if there is a wall of texts behind Twilight on the subject XD.
Awesome new chapter.
ReplyDeleteStill my favorite AppleDash story, which is saying A LOT considering I don't really like AppleDash.
I love it! please release part 9 asap, I want to know what happens!!!! :D
ReplyDeleteGood, god, who's what element now? Pinkie seems to be honesty, Twilight seems to be loyalty, Fluttershy's generosity, Rarity's kindness, nopony's laughing and magic is what caused the mess in the first place!
ReplyDeletePinkie... you... I... What the buck?
ReplyDeleteLovely Pinkie writing in this chapter.
ReplyDeleteTchernobog, a small, teeny tiny, insignificant correction:
ReplyDelete"Fluttershy, ever the caring soul, had tried to breach the subject of... Applejack."
You breach a wall; you broach a subject.
@silentcarto
ReplyDeleteGah! Thanks, that slipped through D:
pinkie the shipper... who would have guessed?
ReplyDeleteAfter seeing the effects of Twilight's experiments, I had a brief vision of Dash getting disintegrated in the repair attempt and coming back as ponified Dr Manhattan. Reading fanfics must have twisted my mind...
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeletePlease don't give him ideas. Tcher's cackling now.
-- Mac, the Prereader
On chapter 10: Oh Luna, you're terrible... (Trolluna for the win !)
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteSee what you did now?
-- Mac, the Prereader
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteI normally don't take random comment ideas, but... it was entirely too hard to resist, and fits really well regardless xD
Been a long time. A long time, since I've read a chapter in a story that gave me a big stupid grin as much as this one did.
ReplyDelete@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear it :D
I'm still loving it. The repressed feelings. Twilight trying oh-so-hard. And Luna having to struggle with her duties. Can't wait for the next chapter!
ReplyDeleteAwesome update. This is still progressing wonderfully.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely loved the new chapters. I made a longer post on FimFiction but I'll say again, the events were a little cliche, but you put so much symbolism, fanon logic and actual sensible IC (as IC as possible considering shipping) characterization into it that it comes of way more believable than it has any right to. Great job.
ReplyDelete@Undercover Brony
ReplyDeleteWell, no teleport mishaps in Dresden Fillies so far...
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeletehttp://www.fimfiction.net/story/2944/Twilight-Performs-a-Spell-That-Goes-Just-Fine
Yay! Not only did they reconcile, they got together, and Twilight might have a cure ^_^ Can't wait for the next chapter!
ReplyDeleteStill entertaining, so adorable. And so is Luna. More please! Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDelete@metapsionic
ReplyDeleteSoon! :D
And so it ends. Thanks for taking us along for the ride. This was a lovely story, and I loved the situations and characters you crafted in it. My only regret is that I can't think of any better way to praise it.
ReplyDelete@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteD'aw ^^ Thank you! And thanks for reading! :)