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[Sad] Neighsayers will be sent to the moon.
Author: Trinary
Description: Princess Celestia finds a would-be thief after the Elements of Harmony. His reason for wanting them though, strikes close to home. A sad story, I'm sorry to say, based on real-life events.Brotherhood is Magic
Additional Tags: Short, Sad, Loss, Mourning, Comfort
48 comments:
Seems sad. Well, it.s based off of real life events, isnt it?
ReplyDeleteIf it's based on real life events it should portray emotion fairly well, will read.
ReplyDeleteGOD DAMN IT WHY SAD? WHY SAD?
ReplyDeleteAh, fanfiction.net......
ReplyDelete.....we meet again
ReplyDeleteWe've had a quite an influx of sad fanfics recently...
ReplyDelete@naahdude are you saying that that's a bad thing?! If any fanfic can grab your emotions, its a sad fic!
ReplyDeleteI... tears bro. Tears.
ReplyDeletethis... just.... 'bawwww' take all of my tears
ReplyDeleteManly tears were shed this night.
ReplyDeleteIt would be an honor for me to read this fic since you have taken the time to write it. It's very hard to open yourself up to the world, especially when it's based on real life events.
ReplyDeleteThe feeling of being rejected, of feeling like no one cares, or the feeling of loss. As long as you're writing for yourself, that's all that matters. Even if you're criticized for your writing, at least you can say that you have accomplished something.
Alright, I'll stop my blathering and actually read the fic now. More comments pending afterwards.
Well that was a sad fic...
ReplyDeleteI felt tears welling in my eyes as I read this, and was almost unable to contain myself as I reached that last line. This was beautiful. I'm sorry for your loss. I hope only for the best for you in life, and for your brother in the afterlife. You have a talent for writing, and I hope to see more from you someday.
ReplyDeleteManly tears have been shed.
ReplyDeleteThis looks to me like another typical OC Pony sadfic. *sigh* meh, not intere-what? Based on real life events? That means the events in this story should be easier to relate to. That's what make lots of sadfics fall flat. I must read this.
ReplyDeleteRead this last night. Very touching and def worth the read if ya don't mind tear-jerkers.
ReplyDelete@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeleteBad thing? No.
Negative thing? Yes.
Grabs your emotions? Yes.
Grabs the emotions that make you feel good? No.
But that doesn't apply to this.
This may have the Sad tag attached but it is not a story written for the purpose of making others sad. It is not written for the purpose of eliciting emotion for the author's self-gratification. This is a story written for the purpose of honoring a life and for coping with personal grief.
It's not sad. It's beautiful.
Thank you, Trinary for having the courage to share this.
This hits pretty close to home for me.
At first I was skeptical. I was a little iffy on the character and writing technique.
ReplyDeleteBut then I realized that that isn't the point. The point of this story wasn't to write the next My Little Dashie or Past Sins or Fallout: Equestria. This story was written for nothing more than a tribute, as a brother's love to his brother. And in terms of that purpose... it's done it's job perfectly.
My condolences, sir. Five stars.
All right, I finished it. Sad story indeed. I feel like an asshole for pointing out inconsistencies in this story so I'll only point out the one that shone the brightest to me. The protagonist, who I'd assume to be you(the author), has a cutie mark of three five-pointed stars. Mentioned in the story is that each star was for a brother. What I don't understand is what that means the special talent would be for the protagonist. That's the only thing I care to critique. Otherwise, it was a fantastic story. Doing my best to empathise, but I don't think I'm capable on such a level.
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ReplyDeleteAn amazing tribute to your brother sir.
ReplyDeleteI feel that he would have been proud to be remembered in such a way.
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ReplyDeleteThis was a beautiful tribute.
ReplyDeleteFunny how there seem to be ripples all around me. I guess tears do that when you honor someone. They let you see the ripples.
The sad feeling that this fic brings cannot hope to compare with the amount of sorrow you experienced first-hand. Since you made this fic as a tribute, we can only salute and honor your fallen brother. I wish I had more to say but I agree with the above comments. This story was simply beautiful.
ReplyDeleteIf the author happens to be reading these comments:
ReplyDeleteThis is a very fitting memorial for your brother, one that will spread his memory far and wide; you've done an excellent job in using your loss to create something that will comfort and challenge others. Kudos.
;_;
ReplyDelete@Jelfes
ReplyDeleteI did not mean to come across as such or suggest you were anything other than mildly bemused. I have deleted the offending comment and apologize for my insensitivity.
Damn, that feel.
ReplyDeleteReally touching tribute from one brother to another. Great read.
It feels a little out of place as a pony fic. But maybe I'm just reading too much into it.
ReplyDeleteOC ponies with family-based cutie marks bother me for this very reason. If your purpose is to live for your family, then when your family dies does your life become meaningless? Hopefully, no. It seems silly to have a cutie mark based on a specific other pony because it implies that you have no purpose without them, which is especially inappropriate considering the moral of the story.
Geh, pet gripes. As to the text itself I have no complaints.
@DPV111 No problem, I tend to be misunderstood in my comments fairly often, I'm sort of used to it now.
ReplyDelete*brohoof*
Great tribute to your lost sibling, author. I feel for you to my best ability.
Sorry to hear for your loss, Author.
ReplyDeleteSometimes clarity and catharsis comes from the strangest of places, in your case, writing.
I am no different, I love to write, but my self criticising nature prevents me from wanting to write out in the open because I reckon people won't like it. I often delete most of my writings after a few days. It's amazing how therapeutic writing your own prose can be.
This story was amazing. As soon as I finished it I called my brother to let him know how much I love him and he was happy to hear it. I'm sorry for your loss...
ReplyDeleteAn absolutely lovely read.
ReplyDeleteI feel honored to have read this. My brother's had a few close calls himself and now all I want to do is drive to his apartment and give him a hug.
ReplyDeleteThanks for baring your soul like this, I doubt I or most other people would be strong enough to. I'm truly, deeply sorry and I wish you all the luck and happiness in the world.
What's gone is forever lost, now all we can do is live...
ReplyDeleteDear Tyler,
ReplyDeleteI never got to know you, but I have a younger brother who's your age had you still been around. He and I are pretty estranged, we still live under the same roof but we hardly ever spend time together because we have our own lives to lead and interests to pursue. In terms of character you could say we were universes apart. We thought differently and big fights had broken out between us before. But after reading this story your own brother wrote in your honour, I feel compelled to reach out to him at the nearest opportunity and tell him how happy and proud I am to have him as a brother, and to let him know that I'll always be there for him if he needs me, and to thank him for all the small deeds he had done for me in the past. Rest in peace.
Trinary, whoever you are, Celestia bless you for writing this story. You have made me stop for a minute to contemplate the fragility of life, the sorrow of losing a loved one, and how much my family truly loves me and depends on me to carry on living. I have a lot more value in my life than I had before after reading this. I sincerely wish all the best for you and your family.
I say this all the time, and I can't say this enough. Ponies have changed my life for the better.
I cried.
ReplyDeleteWonderful tribute.
Now I must play Dark Souls until I can stop tearing up.
As a fanfiction, this isn't really that good.
ReplyDeleteNow as a tribute to someone you care about? to that I have nothing but praise for the author.
@Specter Von Baren
ReplyDeleteAs a fanfiction it's perfectly fine. Generally speaking, stories get at least 3/5 of their stars from me based on their writing, spelling, and grammar. This story easily earns 2 of those 3 stars (lost about a star for a few grammar slips and style). The other two stars are reserved for content--the story the fic tells; what it says and how it makes me feel.
I had no trouble awarding two full stars on that front.
As a short story piece of fanfiction and a tribute this story is successful.
So, 4/5. I might give it a 4.5 if I could.
I'm reading quite a few nice vignettes in fanfiction tonight. I'm enjoying it.
@Nine
ReplyDeleteSays the dude about a show who's MAIN CHARACTER Twilight sparkle shares 5 small stars surrounding her large central star, representing both her magic as well as her 5 friends.
This made me tear up a bit. To go through that loss, to see someone you love dearly pass into their last moments right in front of you... it's a pain I know too well, and that I wouldn't wish on anyone.
ReplyDeleteI lost my best friend, and even though he wasn't blood, he truly was my brother. It's been 9 years, and he died 4 days before my nineteenth birthday. I spent my birthday being the pallbearer for my closest friend, my brother, Mike. I think about him all the time, even now. The hurt never goes away, but it does soften over time. My heart goes out to you, and even though I'm not a religious person, I like to think that Mike, and your brother Tyler, are in a better place, not suffering anymore. If I could, I would give you a hug and let you know, it gets easier, but it looks like you don't need it as much anymore. You're a strong person, and I think you may have helped me deal better. I've never thought of death in the way that you described the ripples on the water.
Thank you, and stay srong. Our brothers are honored just by the simple act of putting that foot forward, and living our lifes, inspired by the love we have for them. We all owe it them to be better than we ever thought we could.
I am a younger brother and we do love our big bros as much as you love us. Gonna give my big bro a call tonight, even though he's in China. Thank you for the lovely (albeit heart-wrenching) story. :)
ReplyDeleteCongratulations Trinary (the author) for getting that out of your chest, and for sharing your personal story of brotherly love with us. 5 stars for you, my good sir.
ReplyDeleteDammit now you made me cry right before going to work. Someone give this author a hug.
ReplyDeleteIt is a story like this that made me fall in love with this fandom.
ReplyDeleteIt takes a lot of strength, more than some people could know, to open yourself up and share your story. I have nothing but the highest respect for you Trinary. It took me close to a decade to tell even my closest friend the things that left me with wounds that would never heal completely
Your story is a good example of why I like sad fics. A lot of people are sick of sad fics flooding the fandom. You shouldn't have to tell people this is based off of real events; anyone who reads this should be able to realize that. Unfortunately, many readers would skip right over this work because of a simple tag.
People complain that the ease of writing sad fics is what's flooding the fandom with them, and I'd have to agree, but the difficulty of writing a truly powerful story (especially without any of the mane 6 as the protagonist) is great. Your story is written from the heart, and those are the ones that hit people hard.
No matter how often you write, you've moved a lot of people, myself included. That's a huge accomplishment in my eyes; you should be proud of your work.
@Equinenox
ReplyDeleteSo I got around to reading this. Like most of the other comments, I didn't think much of the writing. Frankly, if this were a typical sadfic, I'd give it a 3 with the writing quality (means not bad, not good). But this is no typical sadfic. This is a factual story using MLP as a medium to tell your story, and it was beautifully done. You used real-world diseases, descriptions on how your brother just faded away, and described his personality before he got sick. Stories like this touch home easier than most sadfics, and that is what people look for in a sadfic.
I don't usually shed tears when reading sadfics (not yet), but I do know when I'm close. Then I read this line: "overheard my mom asking Ty to promise to visit her in her dreams. He said he would." This passage got to me. You chose the perfect line for when even Celestia's heart would break as mine did just that.
My condolences to you and your family. As I said earlier, I would have given this story a 3, but this is no ordinary fanfiction. This is a true story of a death in the family, and it doesn't need to have good writing quality. It told the story of the loss of a loved one, and we learned how he lived before he was gone. Stories like this remind us all to cherish our loved ones. I'm giving this a 5 star.
*reads most of fic. Doesn't cry*
ReplyDelete*reads last two sentances and ending note. Cries*
Manly tears, they have been shed.