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Author: PerilousPrinny
Description: Pinkie Pie and her little sister Inky have reunited for the first time in years, so naturally Pinkie wants to round up all her friends for a huge party to celebrate the occasion. But the younger mare seems less than enthusiastic about the idea, and as she explains why the reasons for Pinkie's estrangement from her family
begin to be revealed.
Inkblot Part 1
Inkblot Part 2
Inkblot Part 3
Inkblot Part 4
Inkblot Part 5
Inkblot Part 6 (New!)
Inkblot Part 7 (New!)
Additional Tags: Family, Minor Characters, Drama, Secrets
73 comments:
First!
ReplyDeleteHad to do that at least once in life. Sounds like a good premise, so I'll read it.
Is there something missing in the description? I feel like a key part of that last sentence was forgotten.
ReplyDeleteNormal? BOOOO-RING! The author should totally like, give Pinkie Pie HIV or something. :D
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ReplyDeleteBOING Yay Pinkie being Pinkie and true to form.
ReplyDeleteWow, tough crowd.
ReplyDeleteI got to the end thinking, 'That's it?!', but then I found the 'incomplete' tag and was saved from what would've been a school year of disappointment. Somehow, you manage to get large paragraphs of information written without boring people or rambling, unless the character IS rambling, which is something I love to see.
Everything seems to fit nicely with canon and fanon, and there's nothing that seems out of place or outrageous.
5/5
Drat, was happy to see something normal pop up on equestria daily only to realise i'd already read this before it popped up here. I liked it, Pinkie was very well done in this.
ReplyDeleteWill be interetsing to see how it goes.
I look forward to more!
ReplyDeleteThis definitely sounds promising. Can't wait to see more. The writing is stellar, up to now.
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ReplyDeleteI feel sorry for Rainbow Dash, when Pinkie's family find out that it was her Sonic Rainboom that turned Pinkie into the mare she is today... I'm not sure what they'll do, as from some of that first chapter it is obvious that at least "Inky" thinks Pinkie is absolutely clinically insane and possibly dangerous.
ReplyDeleteI also think the Sonic Rainboom has a magic component but that's neither here nor there and is only a possible explaination for Pinkie's development of certain abilities (reality bending, pinkie sense, etc.), and not her mental state.
Edit: and the comments section needs an edit button so posters don't have to delete their posts every time they edit them.
Secrets and lies, huh?
ReplyDeleteGreat start. Premise sounds interesting. Want more.
Fantastic writing
ReplyDeleteif the style is kept up like this I will definitely look forward to more from this story. I like that this looks like it's going to be a psychological read-in to Pinkie's mind without involving depression or some other such dreary topic.
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ReplyDeleteIt's InkIE, not InkY, just like her sister's name is spelled PinkIE and not PinkY.
Rage aside, the first chapter is very good. More please.
Yay for [normal] and double yay for Happy Pinkie!
ReplyDeleteI like it, it's intriguing!
ReplyDeleteMust have more.
I like this. I like this a lot. Looking forward to the next chapter.
ReplyDeleteAlso - I could almost picture the cloud of doom hanging over the head of Inky as she recognized Pinky's voice. I wonder if she'll share the trick for getting Pinky to be quiet with the rest of the Mane 6.
This was good. Very happy to see a story where Inkie is not Octavia. Not that it's a bad thing for fans to connect the two characters as one, but it's nice to see it done this way. She's more or less an OC pony in this story and I'm interested to see this plot unfold.
ReplyDeleteJust wanted to say that I cannot wait for the other chapters of this story.
ReplyDeleteIt's awesome.
Keep up the good work!
I liked it! a looot. (teehee, oh rainbow)
ReplyDeletethis was just great. a bit short, but hey! chapter oriented ongoing story to look out for! Can really pick out no flaws, save for the fact that pinkie may ramble a little too much, to the point of excess (well, excessive ramblings), but this looks real promising. the little "she's crazy" interludes are gettin me all excited for whats to come. ah, Bliss is ignorance. Superb writing.
I would like Inky to meet Rainbow Dash down the lines. I mean she made Pinkie Pie like she is, crazy, breaking the 4th wall and CUPCAKE MAKING.
ReplyDeleteI like it. More, please?
ReplyDeleteThis is cool. I will be keeping tabs on this story. It seems enjoyable and shouldn't get grim because it doesn't have a GrimDark tag or anything.
ReplyDeleteOh man, the only thing wrong with this fic is the lack of a comedy tag.
ReplyDeleteSeriously, almost busting my gut the whole way through here. Hehehehe.
This is a really, really good looking story here. I'm intrigued by what's going to happen next, the writing is splendid, the character of Pinkie is spot-on, and all I can do now is wait eagerly for the next part!
ReplyDeletelol, haven't realized how long its been since ive read a story with a "normal" tag. this one was really interesting actually. hope theres more soon!
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'm confused: the letter makes me think that they want Pinkie Pie to come home. But then the final line of narration says that they want her to be done with the farm.
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Can't wait for more.
ReplyDeletePinkie is being Pinkie, for that reason alone I enjoy. The mystery and the nice characterization are just icing on this cupcake. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteUm... anyone know when the next chapter will happen?
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ReplyDeleteYes! Interesting developments.
ReplyDeletefirst there was Pinkie, then Inky, now there is a Blinky...I'm just waiting for a Clyde
ReplyDelete@Platyps Clyde is their dad. (And their mom is Sue.)
ReplyDeleteShit it took a long while for this to update. I hope its worth a 3 month wait
ReplyDeleteTwo months actually. Didn't realize it's been so long.
ReplyDeleteThis fic is great though. It does really need a comedy tag, as Pinkie and Inky have a clear classic funny man and straight man thing going on.
But the last bit....oh lord...
If you could hear it, I just did a gasp that would rival Pinkie's.
ReplyDeleteI completely forgot about this story!
I remember reading the first chapter and enjoying it, not sure why I had forgotten to bookmark it. Still, awesome to see I had three new chapters waiting, and they did not disappoint! For a second I thought this would become another 'force Pinkie back to the farm' fic, but that doesn't appear to be case, at least not completely.
Those three chapters of humor did not prepare me for the fourth. It seems we're finally getting to the meat of things...
With that said, allow me to say... OH DEAR CELESTIA, "she's" back! Nothing good can come out of this!
Finally, somepony else is unwilling to put up with Pinkie's inane shenanigans!
ReplyDeletewell it seems to be the case with the other element holders, Applejack seems to be not incapable of lying so much as really horrible at it. When Rarity is being selfish she seems to feel horribly guilty, to the point of mental torture over it. Twilight trying to NOT use magic seemed to be amazingly stressful for her. Rainbow Dash seemed horribly stressed when trying to get the turtle who kept trying to give up, she respects loyalty even if the actions fail, the intent is there. Really only Fluttershy has seemed unafflicted, of all of them she was the only one to need to be directly overridden by discord's personality shift, the poor thing can't NOT be kind. The same can be said for Pinkie Pie. When she could not laugh, she went fucking nanners.
ReplyDeletetldr version: all the element holders seem to find it hard to not follow the example of their element. it causes them mental distress.
Look forward to the next chapter, I love Pinkamina stories that don't involve murder... not that I minded cupcakes but the same old shit gets old "one of the mane six goes nuts for (insert reason here) and butchers friends" is as played out as "oops twilight fucked up another spell derpity doo".
ReplyDeleteIt's still incomplete? I could have sworn that was a perfect cadence to this symphony.
ReplyDeleteWell, in that case, I wait with great interest to see where you are going with this!
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ReplyDeleteOh dear Celestia, thou has screwed up.
ReplyDeletewell done, but how is this not complete? I am befuddled and a tad bemused.
ReplyDeletegood stuff :) I didn't notice any grammatical errors either! Loved the way you described the "amplified" elements and how each pony received her cutie mark and why
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ReplyDeleteOh no wait it /is/ complete. I see.
ReplyDeleteso celestia just needed to apply a dampening field on pinkie pie to prevent her from seeing the fourth wall?
ReplyDeleteI was starting to wonder why the complete tag wasn't there. This was a seriously good read. I've actually gone over the whole thing at least two times since the last two updates were posted. That's my mark of a good fanfiction: when I want to read it over and over again.
ReplyDeleteI agree. Having people enjoy your work is one of the most incredible feelings ever. I remember the first review I ever got on FF.net... best day ever!
ReplyDeleteAnd about the whole rejected writing thing... I've always thought you should write what you know. The fact that so many people like your work means that you probably take ponies a lot more seriously than whatever it was you'd tried writing before.
That having been said, if you've got more ponyfics, they'll likely be at least as good as this.
@Multiversity Wow, that was unusually verbose of me, wasn't it?
ReplyDeleteMy god... I firsted, then read only the first chapter?
ReplyDeleteI can't let this happen!
Wait... how is this the end?
ReplyDeletePinkie loosing her 4th wall connection, and the subsequent freakout, seems like it would have been another chapters worth of story.
Thought this would at least be resolved before completion.
Oh boy, Celestia goofed big time and I do mean big time.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure how I feel about Pinkie being put on the magical equivalent of Prozac. It's good for her health, of course, but breaking the fourth wall has always kind of been a thing for her. Ah well, I suppose it's reversible.
ReplyDeleteInkie is silly pony. And have visions of Blinkie with whip and fedora, or fleeing from tyrannosaur.
Wonderful read.
ReplyDeleteI have to say, Celestia could have done with dampening Fluttershy's cuteness a bit. I shudder at the thought of how many people have diabetus
@Ragneki5880
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure you can dampen cuteness. Although it does make me wonder what would happen to Rarity, Applejack, Fluttershy, and Rainbow Dash if their Elements were dampened for whatever reason.
It also makes me wonder what would happen to Twilight if her Magic wasn't dampened.
Wait wait wait. If I'm reading your author's note right, you wrote the first chapter of this story whole drunk.
ReplyDeleteIf that's what happened, my jealousy at your writing skill knows no bounds.
@RinellaWasHere
ReplyDelete*while. Damn it, iPad.
Great story, I really enjoyed reading it. As for your A/N, "sometimes the solution to your problems can come from where you least expect it." I am glad that your interest in writing was rekindled. No writer is perfect, but if this story is any indication, you certainly have talent for writing fiction. While I don't know any of your previous works, perhaps you just needed the right medium to hone your writing skills--in this case, ponies. I'm sure your skill and confidence will grow with practice and experience. Who knows, maybe your next NaNoWriMo attempt will be a success!
ReplyDelete...Still have no idea why the Octavia tag is up there, though.
@Pikari: It's because of the popular Fanon that Inky is Octavia.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I like the reference in chapter two - "I'm an inch taller than you." Nice little call back.
Well, actually, it's only PROBABLY because of that.
ReplyDeleteAnd that reveal at the end was just...fantastic. That's not something I would ever have expected - it's not because she's crazy that she breaks the fourth wall - it's because she's aware of the medium that she's crazy. It all makes sense now.
"Celestia, joo got som 'splainin' to do!"
ReplyDelete"WAAAAAAAAH INKYYYY!"
Actually, I liked this story up until the very end of the last chapter, where Celestia's appearance and actions sort of ruined it for me. Up until that point, it seemed to me, it was a heart warming story of how a family can come apart when it's members don't understand and can't accept each other for who they are. Pinkie Pie was Pinkie Pie and Inky had to accept that and not keep trying to blame her sister's personality on mental upon mental illness. And then, Celestia comes in at the end to explain that Pinkie really had been "ill" all along, waving her horn and making her "normal," after which point Pinkie actually freaks out because she is cut off from the 4th wall. This arguably sets Pinkie up to be even more mentally traumatized than she was before.
ReplyDeleteI apologize for the above comment coming out harsher than I had intended, and for the spelling and grammatical mistakes contained therein.
ReplyDelete@Write Anon
ReplyDeleteI apologize for that, since while that wasn't my intent, I can see where you're coming from. In hindsight, I wish I had elaborated more in that final section, clarifying that Pinkie was exactly the same as she always was- including her inherent cartoonishness- except for suddenly being unable to break the fourth wall (which was the "irrational behavior" Celestia spoke of). In other words, she's still not normal; she's Pinkie Pie.
Also, if I had to continue the story out from there, I would imagine that Celestia did indeed rescind the dampening, with the notion that if Pinkie ever does completely lose it (much like Twilight's magic overwhelming her), Celestia will be there to help.
So, in closing, I agree that the ending could've been written better. This is what happens when you lose touch with your editors, I suppose.
Dear PerilousPrinny,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your response! Again, I'd like to appologize for my rudeness earlier. I must have been in a mood while I was writing my response. Your story was well written and I definitely enjoyed it, but I'm glad you can see where I was coming from. Please keep on writing!
- Write
Lovely end to a lovely story! And of course, every good Pinkie story needs to end with an epic fourth wall breakage, and you delivered! To be fair, it breaks the mood a little bit but I love fourth wall jokes too much to care. :P
ReplyDeleteUh....am I the only one who thought the end was practically fridge horror? She's seriously freaking out, Celestia is shocked....and this is supposed to be a GOOD thing?
ReplyDeleteWhat the hell?
This is the first fanfic I've ever read that ended with an iris wipe. This is the first WRITTEN WORK I've ever read that ended with an iris wipe. That was genius.
ReplyDeleteIt was entertaining, but the "Ending" came across much more as a chapter cliffhanger than an ending, given that it introduced a situation in which Pinkie basically lost one of her senses and is completely freaking out.
ReplyDeleteit all makes perfect sense now
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