[Comedy] Comedy time! Well, dark comedy at least! (Zomg finally an update!)
Author: AnonymousMaterials
Description: Mort, the Pale Pony of Death, suddenly faces his greatest challenge: free time. With no idea of what to do, Celestia sends him to her student to be taught the wonders of friendship and have a holiday. He just has to keep his true nature a secret, and that shouldn't be too difficult...right?Mort Takes a Holiday (New Part 13-14!)
Additional Tags: Long, Humor, Drama, Supernatural
138 comments:
haaa spinal clop.
ReplyDelete>Death
ReplyDelete>Friendship
This can only be good.
First thing I thought of when I was this was 'Terry Pratchett'.
ReplyDeleteFirst three words of said fic?
"From Terry Trotchett's"
I'm gonna love this.
This is awesome. Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteHah, this one's going on my watched list.
ReplyDeleteOh man, this made me think of Dead Like Me. That was an awesome show.
ReplyDeleteAnd this is an awesome story! Love the premise, and the dark humor. Can't wait for more!
The author does a good job of mimicking Pratchett's style, masterfully capturing the charm and humor of his writing. I was wary at first, but I approve.
ReplyDeleteOh, my...
ReplyDeleteThat was awesome for a first chapter, the writing is fluid, characterization is interesting and has a great sense of humour, almost comparable to Terry Pratchett's own. Besides, I loved the gags. Keep it up!
I am digging this. I know people like Mort, so this makes it a lot funnier. Also, Spinal Clop was funny, but, well... "clop" is in the name, and I simply can't take it seriously.
ReplyDeleteWhy do I get the feeling that one of the ex-drummers was turned into cupcakes?
ReplyDeleteThis story is a delight to read! I love the style, and can't wait to read more.
Discworld combined with Ponies? (again)
ReplyDeleteInsanely epic stuff right there.
~Scratch
Ponies by Pratchett.
ReplyDeleteHow can it get any better?
Even though it doesn't really fit with the descriptions given, I read his lines in Adam Corolla's voice. I just think it sounds so much better.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteOh, excuse me, I meant Norm Macdonald.
Needs moar Moist von Liptrot.
ReplyDeletejk, Terry Pratchett is awesome, and so is the author of this fic for writing such a great homage to his style. Love it!
Death is the best pony. And I say Death of Rats should be Death of Parasprites.
I look forward to the next part
ReplyDeleteThis has maximum potential.
ReplyDeleteLove the Trotchett style too.
Loved this story, despite having never even heard of discworld.
ReplyDelete@Sir Leadhead
ReplyDeleteMoist von Liptrot you say? *Starts planning*
Also, amazing story. It's a shame it isn't complete.
This was excellent and very much like the works it is trying to emulate (and succeeding!).
ReplyDeleteFunny, engaging, an excellent + believable character and the setup for a great plot. That's all you need! Get to it!
It's so wonderful. It's got a similar style to Pratchett's writing, and has some great humour.
ReplyDeleteA pony reaper, hmm I like the concept of it...that and this story does have potential.I'm gonna bookmark it for upcoming future updates.
ReplyDeleteAlso, spinal clop may wanna invest in better protection for their drummers
My god this was brilliant. I don't read a lot of fics but this one caught my eye and did not disappoint, somepony already mentioned it but this really did remind me of Dead Like Me, cannot wait to read more. Also makes me want to see some fics in this same vein regarding Famine, War, and Plague.
ReplyDeleteAs a fan of the DEATH series of Discworld novels, I must say that I am eagerly awaiting the next chapters of the story. Favorite moment? Probably Celestia connecting 1 and 2 to get -_- about who died. :D
ReplyDelete*ahem*
ReplyDeleteMOAR!!11
(Epic Win, btw)
Great Fanfic! Death always needs a friend!! :D
ReplyDeleteBut...Spinal Clop? Really?? *Facehoofs*
Oh blast, it was only a first chapter! Well, it was certainly cute, and I like the idea that there are other supernatural entities in Equestria that only the princesses can see.
ReplyDeleteI actually found this surprisingly entertaining, in an intentionally dry sort of way. Reminds me of British humor...which I'm guessing is what you were going for.
ReplyDeleteHope that cliffhanger gets elaborated on soon.
Where is the rest of this???
ReplyDelete>Mort
ReplyDelete>death
I see what you did there: do you speak a derivative of latin like Spanish, Italian or French?
in French there's also an awkward double meaning: "le petit mort" or something... Yeah... I'm not going to elaborate on that...
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteMort is also a Terry Pratchett novel about death.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI'm french and I don't remember anything about a "le petit mort".
You're sure about that?
La petite mort is a euphemism for an orgasm. I don't know if it's actually French; so many phrases are in French just because it makes them sound fancier. 'Mort' is unlikely to be confused with that though.
ReplyDeleteAnyway this is a great imitation of TP, and I can't wait for more!
You missed a good chance at the end of chapter 2. You should have had Luna pull out The Game of Life
ReplyDeleteAnother chapter? Awesome, I really like this story. Looking forward to what happens next.
ReplyDeleteWe're going to candy mountain charlie.
ReplyDelete~Scratch
I'm a huge Pratchett fan and I have to say, you imitate his style pretty well. Can't wait for more. Also, at some point, MORT SHOULD TALK LIKE THIS. Just saying lol
ReplyDelete@WTBrony
ReplyDeleteDeath talks in small caps.
Otherwise he would be shouting constantly.
So...hilarious. Need more please!
ReplyDeleteYes, because the pony that's been trapped in the Moon for the last thousand years is the best choice to teach somepony etiquette.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE IT :D
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for the first sucker in Ponyville to realize who they're talking to. Also: Mort has some great lines here. I love this so much.
ReplyDeleteBoy, did I need this today.
ReplyDeleteMort is surprisingly lovable for being the Angel of Death and all.
Awesome story!
ReplyDelete@Narwhals' Bend
ReplyDeleteOH GOD IT HURTS; MY RIBS; My eyes! I'm Crying for laughter now
Anypony else spot Charlie the Unicorn in that chapter? :D
ReplyDelete@Crimson Valor
ReplyDeleteIt's just so blatant, I almost thought it didn't need commenting on.
On the other hoof, I can't believe the dig at those hideously deformed-looking G1 ponies went over my head the first time I read it...
Hoping the updates start arriving faster.
ReplyDeleteAlso the G1 pony nod was hilarious.
This is easily one of my favorite stories. I just wish it updated faster, as it is so enjoyable to read.
ReplyDelete@Crimson Valor
ReplyDeleteThat's exactly what I thought when I first saw this.
Seeing this just made my day... I was actually just thinking about what a theoretical Discworld related MLP fan fiction would be like.
@Aquaman52 Why shouldn't Mort be a nice pony? He doesn't kill ponies, sickness, other ponies, and giant fake skulls kill ponies. He just collects the souls after the fact.
ReplyDeleteTried posting a comment on DA, didn't work :P So, awesome 3rd chapter! It had me grinning from the first paragraph to the last word!
ReplyDeleteThis is an excellent comedy, got me laughing a bit.
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to reading this
ReplyDeletethis is VERY GOOD ... i'm amazed ... i like it a lot ...can't wait for part 4 :D
ReplyDelete"Pale Pony of Death"? Is he one of the 4 hourses of the Apocalypse or something?
ReplyDeleteGreat comedy. Can't wait for part 4 :D
ReplyDeleteAlso, there should be art of Mort by now. The picture on top doesn't fit Mort D:
@Alex
ReplyDeleteSip already did some art of Mort.
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6000692/
I'm perpetually impressed with just how well realized this fanfic is. It's one of the few fanfics I've allowed myself to read that don't have the "Complete" tag, even though that always leaves me hungry for more when I run off the end of what's been published.
ReplyDelete@Sir Leadhead I hope you mean "Moist von Lipwhicker".
ReplyDeleteAs to the story itself: Excellent. Just what I'd expect if Pratchett were writing about a Death from an extremely idealist universe.
Hmm. That opening reminded me of "Dead Like Me". Anypony else ever watch that show? I think it had like, two seasons and a movie. It wasn't half bad, and had some really nice black comedy. And some of the best ways to die and the victims' reactions were often priceless. I half-expected a Graveling to give the final push to that support rod...
ReplyDeleteGreat read, BTW. I hope you get around to finishing this!
Death's actually quite a nice guy, once you get to know him.
ReplyDeleteAnd everyone gets to know him, sooner or later.
This is absolutely hilarious. I can only imagine where it goes from that massive cliffhanger.
ReplyDeletetwo of my 5 most favorite storys just had an update?! LOVIN IT TODAY!
ReplyDeleteCLIFFHANGER!!
ReplyDeleteI respectfully request that you write faster.
ReplyDeleteHe destroyed the dress, didn't he?
ReplyDeleteI love this so much.
ReplyDeleteTo paraphrase an earlier comment I made
ReplyDeleteMOAR!!!111111ONE
This is the best story I have read on this site, and I mean that.
ReplyDeleteGAWD DAMN CLIFFHANGER!!!!
ReplyDeleteomg...i need to read more
ReplyDeleteThis story does not have a "story" tag, ergo, it doesn't appear in the fanfic section.
ReplyDeleteCan anyone fix that?
The wait was worth a longer chapter.
ReplyDeleteAnd freaking Rarity! She deserves to see him all skelly...and such
Oh, excellent. I was hoping this would happen. Now I really want to know what happens next.
ReplyDeleteHehehehehe..."Mort" is quite an interesting character, and I find the story to be one of the better ones on this site. Keep up the good work, AnonymousMaterials!
ReplyDeletedidn't someone draw a picture of a mort that fits the description of this one moreso than the current picture?
ReplyDelete@Wanderer D
ReplyDeleteFrom what I've seen from this story so far?
nope.avi
The suit probably just looks really good on him. It's not a very subtle cat scare...
Note to self: refrain from reading this late at night; laughter is liable to wake the rest of the house.
ReplyDeleteAnother amazing chapter, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI wonder if there's an orangutan somewhere. It'd be hilarious to have Twilight and the , er, Librarian together, in the same library.
"Take this! My love, my anger, and all of my HUNGER!" *Laughs like if there is no tommorow* HAHAHAHAHA, You got me with this one. Bloody brilliant.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, just read the whole thing and must say this story is very good. I can't wait to see what exactly Rarity saw in there.
omygoshomygoshomygosh ... i can't wait for the next chapter...VERY well written... i could hear their voices the entire reading :)) ... they could REALLY make a few episodes with this as a scenario.
ReplyDeleteHoly crap 2 chapters? MUST READ NOW SCREW SLEEP
ReplyDeleteJust perfect. Two new chapters of one of my top 5 stories and it's 3 in the morning. It's a hard choice to have to make, but I'll see you in a matter of hours, Mort.
ReplyDeleteTWO CHAPTERS!?
ReplyDeleteDear Princess Sleepestia,
Go fuck yourself.
Your faithful Student,
Twilight Sparkle
Ha! I picked the exact right day to start reading this: yesterday! And now I get double updates today. :) Thank you, instinct! (Also, thank you, author, for making a prod-buttock good story)
ReplyDeleteMy mouth hurts. I could not, for the life of me, read this without a huge grin plastered on my face.
ReplyDeleteIt was just so... enjoyable! The transition, so smooth and vivid! The characters, spot-on! The humor... I was sleep-deprived, now I feel I could run a marathon while laughing my way to the finish line!
But seriously, good on ya, mate. The next chapter could not come sooner... and it better be, or Mort will be paying a visit to you.
He's gonna bring Candy Mountain.
I DO feel as if this image is rather...unfitting. Perhaps it should be replaced with a portrait of Mort?
ReplyDeleteSimply beautiful.
ReplyDeleteLOVED THIS! I screwed myself over since I started reading this really late, and finished a 4am, but I slept in until 10am, and 6 hours is enough sleep, right? RIGHT?
ReplyDeleteI cannot wait for the next chapters! Awesome job, and Mort is super cute! I love him xD
Ohmygosh Ohmygosh Ohmygosh Ohmygosh!
ReplyDeleteDiscworld! Terry Pratchett! My favourite comic writer! With ponies!
Am I in love?
Oh my God, this is the best fanfic. 5 stars. Please write more words Mr. Author.
ReplyDeleteWhen will this wonderful, wonderful fanfic update again?
ReplyDeleteExcellent!! I've never read Discworld though, still thought it was great.
ReplyDeleteAnonymousMaterials, love me.
ReplyDelete~AppleTank
ReplyDeleteIf anyone n=manages to knock his cloak off, he's gonna cause a pony stampede. And Mort will be paralyzed in fear for the entire ordeal. I really want to know how Mort deals with this, he's so cute. :)
That Doctor reference. Oh, did I laugh. Brilliantly done.
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing!
ReplyDeletePlease continue!
What's taking so looonnnnnggggggg
ReplyDelete:(
~AppleTank
All in good time, but sometimes that time is so very long. Great work so far, can't wait to see more.
ReplyDeletePLease Sir may I have some more?
ReplyDeleteSo, erm, how long do you think it will take for the next one to come out?
ReplyDeleteGood lord, this is one of the longest waits I've had for an update for any fanfic.
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ReplyDeleteI'm really Loving Mort's story so far
ReplyDeleteI've always enjoyed the concept of death being just as clueless to the universe us the rest of us.
The opening of the story reminds me of Dead Like me, By any chance Did that help inspire you with the story?
Really looking forward to the next update. I can't wait to see how this all plays out.
Also deleted the last post because I believe this one was better thought out. Probably wrong
:<
Sweet can't wait for an update! But take the time you need to get it right, no need to rush :-]
ReplyDeleteLike everyone else, I want MOAR! :)
ReplyDeletenb4 Update. Chapter 7 is up on Deviant art!
ReplyDeletehttp://anonymous-materials.deviantart.com/art/FiM-Mort-Takes-a-Holiday-7-254335591
Part 7 was pretty great, yeah. I just want to see more Mort...
ReplyDeleteHoly crap! I LITERALLY just started reading this an hour ago. That's a weird coincidence.
ReplyDeletePart 7 was great. But I want to see Mortt.
ReplyDeleteUpdate soon,please?
I really want to see how this goes down, yo.
ReplyDeleteLove it. Love it. Love it.
ReplyDeleteThough I miss posting as anonymous, I will make an account to say how good this is(first of many that I will say this to.)
More Mort! More Mort! More Mort!
ReplyDeleteOh dear sweet Celestia THE SUSPENSE! MOAR is in order here!
ReplyDeleteDat look into the next chapter. Want moar.
ReplyDeleteBah, this is hilarious! Need next chapter now!
ReplyDeleteNote- I felt that in chapter four, Twilight was running a brothel o.O
How do I get a hold of a mod to tell them to come give this story a 'story' tag so we can see when it updates in the story section?
ReplyDeleteMort is so fucking adorable
ReplyDeleteI am DYING for the next chapter! Haha!
ReplyDelete...
NO SERIOUSLY I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER IT IS GOING TO BE SO AWESOME AND MORT IS SO CUTE AND AAAAAAAH!
Sorry about that. One of the best fics I've ever read. Keep up and awesome work and please update soon! <3
Update... You can come out now. It's Ok, don't be shy. I have cake. You like cake, don't you? Then here come and get the cake, and I can read you while you have your cake, and then we'll both be happy. Won't that be wonderful?
ReplyDeleteJust discovered this story.
ReplyDeleteI enthuciasticly await more
If you don't update this soon, i'm going to eat your parents.
ReplyDeleteAnd then suddenly, 2 new updates. Let the reading begin!
ReplyDeleteHE'S BACK HE'S BACK HE'S BACK EEEEEE
ReplyDeleteerm... reading now...
When Twilight and her friends find out what Mort really is, that is going to be one awesome scene.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait, this is pure writing gold.
Yay! The update! Here, have the cake while I read.
ReplyDelete-gives story cake-
An update! YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!
ReplyDeleteAn update and with TWO chapters?! YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI think I'm beginning to see a pattern here. I feel bad for Mort, but I guess being DEATH entails having a bad luck aura around you. Hope things work out in the next chapter
ReplyDeleteThis is sooooo entertaining! I can't wait to read more! Please! :-D
ReplyDeleteAmazing story. It's easily in the top three fanfiction stories I've ever read. I hope there'll be more.
ReplyDeleteWell, cake coaxed out the update last time. How about... Lemon squares? They're all delicious and fresh and covered in powdered sugar. And they're all yours if you come out.
ReplyDeleteIt seems you're not a fan of those lemon squares... How about some fudge brownies... Does that sound nice???
ReplyDeleteIf those aren't your taste, might i suggest an ice cream sundae? With your select toppings of course.
ReplyDelete@Crimson Valor
ReplyDeleteI agree.
for anyone who hasn't read "Mort," It's Fantastic. Seriously, read it.
I don't think another update is ever coming guys.
ReplyDelete@Drake_075
ReplyDeleteWell, he uploaded a journal entry on DA on April 23 saying he finished some rewrites, so MAYBE. Not getting my hopes up though. Looks like this is doomed to the unfinished fanfic graveyard.