[Adventure][Grimdark] After over a year it's finally complete! Imagine that.
Author: AestheticB
Description: Long ago, in the magical land of Equestria, there lived a powerful King and his dark Queen. Immortal and ignorant, their end came at the hooves of their daughters, Celestia and Luna, who sought to build a better future for ponykind.All links after the break!
Now ponykind’s old gods have returned.
Twilight Sparkle is trapped inside her own mind, slave to a cruel and impulsive consciousness built from everything she is not. Powerless and voiceless, she must find a way to stop the being that calls itself Nihilus from destroying everything she holds dear.
Luna is tasked with assembling the remaining Elements of Harmony in hopes of freeing their leader. For if ponykind is to have any hope, it is in Twilight Sparkle. And if Twilight Sparkle is to have any hope, it is in her five friends.
Facing her father in mortal combat, Celestia must do everything she can to ensure that ponykind has the tools to survive before she falls. With inevitable defeat bearing down upon her, she makes the first move in the oldest and deadliest game known to creation.
Ponies make War Part 1
Ponies make War Part 2
Ponies make War Part 3
Ponies make War Part 4
Ponies make War Part 5
Ponies make War Part 6
Ponies make War Part 7
Ponies make War Part 8
Ponies make War Part 9
Ponies make War Part 10
Ponies make War Part 11
Ponies make War Part 12
Ponies make War Part 13
Ponies make War Part 14
Ponies make War Part 15
Ponies make War Part 16
Ponies make War Part 17
Ponies make War Part 18
Ponies make War Part 19
Ponies make War Part 20
Ponies make War Part 21
Ponies make War Part 22
Ponies make War Part 23
Ponies make War Part 24 (New!)
Ponies Make War Alternate
Additional Tags: Action, Long, War, History, Horror
312 comments:
@Tast
ReplyDeleteWell, like the other things I quoted, it requires some metacontextual knowledge--it won't be laid out if you're just relying on the story to explain, I'm afraid.
Of course, I could be completely off-base here, but I've spent plenty of time lurking in TTG to recognize names >_>
@AestheticB You know, with the vocalic that Harbinger utilizes I can totally see that in Titan.. speaking in absolute confidence and control in all things. My favorite speech so far is probably the "not boasting" speech he gives to Esteem, and crossing it with that example helps a lot. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteMan, I would love to re-create an audio project on this story (sorta like what they did with FO:E) with voice acting, etc, but there's so much action it wouldn't do the story justice! >.<
@Tast Don't feel bad, I think I totally missed it too >.>
@Drakmire
ReplyDeleteI can live with that. I read stories as shallowly as possible so as to make as many twists as surprising as possible. If I read to deep I start to predict things; can't have that.
@Drakmire
ReplyDeleteWho is he then? Discord :?
@Freezey
ReplyDeleteIf the author wants to out him, I'm sure he will. It's not a big deal, it's just one of those "Oh. I see what you did there." moments.
Part 14 is definitely the best one yet. You did a good job of not going into excruciating detail over the combat, which was the one thing I didn't like about this fic. Gratz on getting it perfect.
ReplyDeleteHi, may name is what? My name is who? My name is *chicken-chicken* Twilight Sparkle.
ReplyDeleteThis was, in base terms, glorious. In more complex terms, I found it to have an excruciating amount of build-up and a highly satisfying climax. Very good, Mr. B... But regarding Twi and Celestia's relationship now... Yet another complication, and it promises an intriguing story even after the action is over!
-Fanboy squeak-
I too hated the "It was a nice night, and then OC alicorns came and ruined everything!" feel of Chapter 1. The new version is WAAAAAAY better and I'll gladly read the rest now. ^_^
ReplyDelete@Riesz
>No worries, personal business takes precedence over a silly story
Word. Fuck a fanfic in that scenario.
Right, okay. Breathe.
ReplyDeleteThat episode... hell, let's call it that now. These aren't chapters, they're fucking EPISODES. And they're EPIC. And in this one, Twilight Sparkle finally gets her head together again.
Esteem is one fucked up pony. He turned his daughter into a weapon... well, almost. He engineered the war that's going on right now. He's basically the author of this whole chaotic situation.
I'm hoping Rarity gets to kill him in epic single combat, if she ever gets that good.
Well as for Celestia...
I FEEL SO BAD FOR HER. I mean, I know she has a plan, but she's getting screwed with too! I mean, come on. Every time she goes through one thing or another, it's heartbreaking to watch.
You wanna know what you've done with this story? You've done and made it into a part of Equestria. A horrific, grim, realistic part of Equestria filled with desperation and horror, but also with hope and victory. A place where the Mane Six can be more than what they started as. The heroes of the resistance and the utter bastards that make up the villains will stick with me for quite some time.
I have a feeling I'm going to write something a lot longer than this when the story ends. So I have only one question...
WHEN IS THE NEXT EPISODE COMING OUT?
"General" Esteem is clearly an idiot. An Army must work as a cohesive whole to accomplish its goals. All this BS about "you can't count on anyone but yourself" flies in the face of basic military doctrine. An army isn't made up of individuals, it's comprised of units. Everyone works in a unit, and those units are all interdependent. He may be a superb fighter, but as a general he is a failure.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget completly disregarding one of his primary duites, STAYING ALIVE!
One lucky shot or hit is all it takes to kill. Then who will lead his army?
I don't hate Esteem because he's a villain. I hate him because he's an idiot. He's a thug who fancies himself a solder.
Maybe the author has written him that way to contrast with Twilight's leadership. I hope so, cause I start grinding my teeth every time he shows up and starts spouting all that lone wolf crap.
I never would have considered that a person could be addicted to a story, but then I read Ponies Make War.
ReplyDeleteThat sounded worryingly like an 'arrow to the knee' joke =\
*finises 14*
ReplyDeleteOh fuck, ha ha, front row seats to an unparalleled ass-kicking, coming up!
Dear Celestia! I nearly froze from these goosebumps at the end of chapter 14! MUST CONTROL TIME TO GET TO NEXT WEEK FASTER!
ReplyDeleteThe voice that i see as being Terra's is the voice of Nocturnal from the elder scrolls 5: Skyrim. Heres a video that shows her. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y8Ux9b_Ukf4
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qaLvcM-u4ns
ReplyDeleteThis is what the ending of Ch. 14 reminded me of :P
"My... name... is Neo!"
Dat ending.
ReplyDeleteTwilights gonna be kicking some flank next chapter for sure.
Agh! Finally, you reunited her! =)
ReplyDeleteI have to say AestheticB, your Fic is by far the best I've ever read - and I've read a few already (yes, including Fallout:Equestria).
The way you descibe the thought processes of your characters, how the changing environment shapes their personalities, their internal struggles - let alone the fighting scenes! Brilliantly written.
Also, I liked how you transformed the atmosphere of despair in the story into one of hope and resilience once Nihilus was eliminated.
I don't know how you keep track of all the different brenches of the story while writing, do you have a dashboard where you keep track of them or something? ^^
Anyway, I'm looking forward to every new chapter of yours. This fic deserves definitvely at LEAST five stars.
@Tyranoman
ReplyDeleteYou mean TWILIGHT SPARKLE! There´s no more Twilight or Sparkle, she accepted both sides of her and is now THE pony to destroy them all, to rule over them, all shall love and despair, etc and etc. XD
Anyway can´t wait to see Titan´s reaction when thinking *Did she just broke the fucking chart? HER POWER IS OVER 9000!!!*. XDDDD
I'd like to thrown in a somewhat cooler comment than those above (as in less warm). See don't get I do like this story, and I do look forward to updates and to contiue it, yet there is room for improvement, if you'll hear opinion given in good intention. I'm not seeing much criticism in the comments, so bear with me as I bring down a slew of them. (in a nice way.)
ReplyDeleteMore and more as the chapters progress the combat feels like reading a fight scene from DBZ - with all the yelling, glowing, throwing, exploding and general landscape redecorating, and it keeps coming down to, each single time one single issue: Who's got the biggest reserve of mojo to burn. Especially since you've made it clear that the abilities of earth and pegasus ponies operate on a style of magical expenditure, ...?, profit!
Maybe there's just a little bit too much choreography script reading when there could perhaps be a little more character/thoughtful/emotional investment instead.
For example (I'm writing on the fly) something like:
"Esteem struck with a lightening fast overhead swing Rarity only just managed to catch. In that instant, three shards of Carsomyr detached and shot straight past her to Pinkie Pie"
-could- be done as :
"Carsomyr bit down hard into Rarity's guard and she grit her own teeth against the shock of impact. The slightest imperfection in her bladecasting was being meted out the harshest punishment Esteem could manage. -I can take it- she thought darkly, her focus shaped and honed as finely as Vorpal. Nothing he could do could match what he'd put her through already, nor what she'd forced herself through in her training with Luna. She would beat this monster if it cost her everything.
With a glint of sharpened teeth Esteem grimaced at her with sadistic glee. Yet another mistake to correct in his daughter's poor form. A brush of nostalgia rippled through him for the hours gone by teaching his daughter perfection. Being a grown mare now simple pain just wouldn't cut it anymore, and there was still so much of Rarity that needed to be cut and honed, like the gems that adorned her cutie mark. From within her guard three fangs of Carsomyr broke away from the whole, lunging at Pinkie Pie with predatory precision. It would be good to tear out his errant daughter's heartstrings and retie them into a stronger knot than that of these pathetic ties of dependency she called friendship."
They both say the same thing - that Rarity parries a strike, and then 3 shards go for Pinkie. One rushes through the action, is a little hard to follow, and feels mechanical. The other gives the character's their involvement and that paces the action ,,,er, I'm overstepping myself here, I think. I'll leave it at that.
I did quite like the part where we got to meet a live pony soldier of the new order who wasn't off the deep end of the sinister boat or a characterless second avatar of war known only as the cadet. 'Twas a nice moment to compare and contrast the ideaologies.
I'd be more than glad to lend whatever help I can as I can, and prereading is a pleasure of mine.
I may have put my email in a prior comment, am not sure. (hint hint, I'm happy to contribute) [email protected]
That... Was a very well thought out, and very well explained. Also, it's a good point, loathe the I am to admit it. I enjoy the story as it is because I read on a shallow level, more for enjoyment. However, the fights do seem to be a whole lot of "mane 5 + Luna melt everyone" scenarios. Luckily it will be mane 6 + Luna now. Maybe as more true pony soldiers join it will change. Yet another reason the updates can't come fast enough.
ReplyDeleteWell, except for the Esteem fights. Those seem to be stacking more hate up for Esteem than anything. They're doing a good job of it too, in my personal opinion.
ReplyDelete@ambion
ReplyDeleteI'm sending you an email. Far be it from me to deny you after a fantastic critique like that. As much as I love praise, criticism helps me improve. Thanks!
yay! I'm glad to hop on board asap and do what I can. Plenty of common elements (about six, *insert puntastic face* to be precise) with a "little" story I've been working on for a few months.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to get started.
Twilight Sparkle: Determinator reunified!
ReplyDelete@AestheticB
ReplyDelete"chapter 15 will be released Wednesday."
-checks story at 12:05 just for kicks-
O_O it's there already!?
But seriously, this piece is amazing! You've managed to do something that very few fics have for me, you've created a sense of inclusion. The world you created feels right in it's being so wrong, the flow of battle, the tone of the story, everything.
I think that the greatest strength of this story is it's shifting styles between different perspectives. You've nailed every personality in a way that is not only fits what we know as cannon, but the beautifully twisted world they've all been thrust into. Subtle hints such as "Titles are important," add so much to the story and your attention to such fine details in 14000 word weekly features is astounding. Wrong shook me. Pinkie's confrontation with Wrong hurt me. Nihilus' end had me cheering. It's a roller coaster ride and I'm loving every second of it.
This is not to say that the fic is perfect, for that would be more a curse to you as a writer than anything. I've only been reading this for four days, but judging from the comments your skill as an author has improved greatly and will likely continue growing.
In brief, wow. Just...wow...
This fic has won it's place in my heart with 'Cross and Arrow,' 'Storm,' and 'Dangerous Business.' On to the new chapter!
P.S. Sir Unimpressive is best pony
Dat cliffhanger........
ReplyDeleteCANT WAIT ANY LONGER! POST IT POSTIT POST IT POST IT!!!!! lol.
ReplyDeleteSweet! Chapter 15 is already available!
ReplyDeleteChapte 15 is available? Where?
ReplyDeleteI can't see it!
IS THIS SOME KIND OF CRUEL JOKE!? D=
@Mr_ChaosIt's linked at the end of fourteen. Typically all the chapter updates get linked sometime before midnight. The more you know!
ReplyDeleteWhile the story just seems to be getting better as it goes along (dat chapter 15), there is one detail that gets more bothersome to me as time passes, that detail being Spike.
ReplyDeleteWhile it's probably safe to assume he was killed shortly after Twilight's corruption, I don't believe it was ever implied Twilight knew one way or the other, and you would think his status would be one of the first things she would want to confirm at Canterlot.
Other than that, good stuff. Absolutely can't wait for the next update.
Woha, cruel cliffhanger. ;A;
ReplyDeleteHOLY CRAP
ReplyDeleteDid you just... I mean... HOLY CRAP
I need to see the next one.
Not to sound evil, or anything, but was I, Photofinish, the only pony who actually wanted Twilight Sparkle to lose? She just seemed like she needed to be knocked down a few pegs, with or without having realized that it was stupid to have held out on her other half. Comparatively small inner turmoil, and infinite power-this can only end painfully predictably-or so I thought.
ReplyDeleteI was somewhat pleased that Esteem didn't die, but he seemed positively insane during those last few paragraphs, despite him being my 2nd favourite character. I know it's silly, but I keep thinking to myself that he'll go into good dad mode, and save his daughter from certain doom, earning her approval, which he so actively seeks. I wish he was only moderately evil. *sigh*
Good chapter though, and I loved the beginning. "alcohol is like a massage for the soul" as well as the "final" battle between the Cadet and Sir Unimpressive, who is really quite impressive, and also my favourite character in this story. I have a habit of getting attached to OCs. For the sake of your image in the media, Do not kill these two off. this is all
@AestheticBAgain, I beg of you, please throw us a bone here. The Dragon. What's become of the dragon!? He may well be the most important part of the story, and we haven't seen him in 1...2...3...(divide by 2, carry the one...bagel, x!\4 katang /0) ever! we demand closure!
ReplyDelete... This is possibly the best fanfiction I've ever followed. Coming from seventeen out of twenty-four years of writing them, reading them, and combat roleplaying.
ReplyDeleteI love this, so much.
Mr. B, If I tell you I have a life threatening disease will you let me read the next chapter early? I don't, but I feel a cliffhanger induced cardiac arrest coming on.
ReplyDeleteWe meet again, cliffhanger, my arch nemesis. Man I hate that guy.
ReplyDeleteSomehow I feel like Spike and this other dragon Titan was "subduing" are related. >> *incoming sarcasm barrage*
As I sit here after reading the latest chapter (15) I feel nothing but awestruck. Your chapters are loaded with detail, character development, intrigue, sharp wit, suspense and humor. Damn it I want to find something to criticize!
ReplyDeleteSigh. Very well. My only critique to offer is that the story is so far off base from the canon that it feels like a completely different world from the real Equestria. I SHOULD lose my immersion because of that. But ya know what? I don't give a shit. I am far to engrossed with this piece of fan fiction to possibly let that ruin my enjoyment of Ponies make War.
OMC, such a fantastic resolution to Twi cliffhanger at the end of chapter 15.
ReplyDeleteI'm happy about the break. As much as I like this story, I'm even more interested in seeing another short story developed.
ReplyDeleteAt this point, it's not the resolution that holds my interest. Twilight's confrontation with Nihilus, wonderful as it was, made it pretty clear where this story is going. It's the character moments that grab and hold. I really enjoyed Twilight's return to Canterlot and the ensuing mental manipulations. The depiction of Pinkie Pie is ever so bright and shiny. Rainbow Dash's internal conflict was exciting too. Having it closed out so quickly, just so the plot could proceed, was a bit of a downer.
So I'm eager to see another story with this depth of character. And if a break inspires some more great flourishes for this story, all the better.
Ho ho! I've been rooting for Discord to have a role in this fic since chapter...something or other! Can't wait to see more of him.
ReplyDeleteUntil then though, have fun on your break.
I really hope that Esteem was lying about Spike as a final slap in the face to Twilight. Otherwise it would be a complete waste of a character.
ReplyDeleteBesides that, this story is awesome.
@Jimperator
ReplyDeleteI -hate- this right here. FANFICTION IS NEVER CANON. It is never MEANT to be canon. It should never be mistaken FOR canon. Canon means the ORIGINAL SOURCE MATERIAL. Everything, EVERY LITTLE THING that any writer or artist comes up with, is anti-canon. Your immersion should never ever be based on canon works, but the artist's work in question itself!
Augh, I hate how people keep doing this, it's like they're new to the whole concept of a fandom. Nothing particularly aimed at Jimperator, I just keep having to see this fifty times a day and it's getting on my last damned nerve.
That said. This is bucking amazing. I love Ponies Make War so much it's hard to describe. Each chapter released makes my day, without fail.
When I saw the sundae, I was like, "Huh, I suppose Celestia is rewarding Twilight for saving her? Seems like an odd- waaaait a second..."
ReplyDeleteKept reading. Saw tHe JaRbLeD cArD.
Thought, "Oh, buck YES."
As for the break, take as long as you need =D As incredible fanfic this is, don't want you to feel like you're bleeding yourself out over it - and moreover, that'll no doubt have a negative impact on the story itself, too! Rest up, take time to recollect yourself, and we'll be here, (im)patiently awaiting your return ^_^
I almost never actually comment on stories. especially this late in, because i don't think anyone will see it. but this time, i don't care. there will probably be spoilers so be warned.
ReplyDeletethis story is incredible, it has captured my attention and whipped it into a frenzy. while i read this i forgot about my little pony: friendship is magic. sure i remembered the characters, sure i remembered the little jokes. but you have managed to bring them to life in a way i have never seen before.
what amazes me the most, is that you can write about earth shattering power, literally, and yet i can relate to it. i feel swept in by the overwhelming divinity that has emerged from each character. normally i can figure out what the next step of the story is, even in the most complicated story, but the plot of this fic strides above my awareness like a giant stepping over a hill.
and yet as i am consumed by such beautifully crafted images of ultimate power. I find myself falling more in love with the characters every second, every single one of them. from esteem's delicious cruelty, to unimpressive's lovable "just want to punch him in the shoulder and grab a beer with him" attitude. from twilight's ability to rip apart the seems of logic itself, to Titan's refusal to even acknowledge such rules could ever apply to him.
you are amazing. don't ever stop writing. because someday i will see your newly published book on a shelf. and when i read it, it will remind me of an amazing story i once read, from the middle of the day into the darkest hours of the night.
that is all.
When -he- showed up I literally squee'd and immediately had to go listen to Super Ponybeat's song dedicated to him.
ReplyDeleteI don't care how long it takes you to get it updated, I'll wait months if I have to, the next chapter is going to be simply amazing.
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ReplyDeleteWhen the hay did they or Twilight freed Discord? Also shouldn´t her second consciousness have gone mad with all the oppression, insanity and horror thrown at her so that her first could focus to free herself and the others of Titan´s magic?
ReplyDeleteNonetheless, fucking epic! Loved it, though i hope we get to see some more struggles of our Mane6 to return to *normal* once this is all over. Especially Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash will be interesting to read if you intend to do this detailed.
@James Rye
ReplyDeleteDiscord was freed after they failed to beat Titan with the Elements. The 'twisted and knotted cord' that was pulling power away from the Element of Magic was maintaining the petrification.
And regarding the second mind going insane, it seems like you can discard a mind created through a mindsplice. Celestia used the same technique to endure Terra's torture.
Fantastic chapter. I would be lying if I didn't say.a little part of me is disappointed that the post are going to be further spread out( seriously, getting a new chapter of PMW was like getting a new show episode in the middle of the week for me)
ReplyDeleteThat said, you enjoy however long of a break you need to recharge those batteries and pump out the epic ending that this story deserves.
I've been where you are in the past, finish line in sight and no motivation for that home stretch. Happens to almost any writer who takes on such an ambitious project.
Rest up and get your focus back. Until then, ill be waiting with bated breath.
In addition, I just had to comment on the
ReplyDelete*MAJOR SPOILER ALERT*
demise of Esteem. His last words were cruel, poignant, and completely in character for that sick bastards. Good to see some just desserts for him. I was dumbstruck by his callousness and fearlessness in the face of demi-god Twilight. Almost a perfect end to a great OC.
its very interesting and has a good story line
ReplyDeleteOnly three things:
ReplyDeleteDiscord's arrival is quite a twist. A great way to lengthen this already epic-scale story, and add even more intrigue, lore and character development. I think I speak for most of us when I say I lick my chops at the prospect.
Two: I Hope Esteem sinks to the lowest pits of Tartaros. That said, he was a fantastic villain for his part.
Finally, and this relates to the second one, I can only imagine the emotional strife Rarity must be going through. You didn't play it here, and instead bore the burden on Twilight - which makes sense. But surely the concept that Rarity's disowned (and deservedly dead) father murdered and consumed Spike MUST be heavy on her heart. Spike who ever only showed the truest and fondest of love for the mare. So tragic.
But in the supposed words of Plato: Only the dead have seen the end of war.
Enjoy your hiatus, which I hope gives a well deserved break, AB.
@Kayriel
ReplyDeleteI think you mistake my words for your pet peeve then.
I in no way suggested I want it to "feel" like it's canon. And while you are right that nothing a fan can do can make something canon, the fact is that the whole point of fan fiction is that it's rooted in the base material.
I merely comment that there are times I almost feel the story may come completely detached from it's source. Now, if you're alright with that sort of fan fiction, then by all means. Enjoy it. But I personally like to feel the evident roots of a fan fiction.
Plus this was a poor critique, as it's the only thing I can offer the author. The reason it's poor is because it doesn't bother me; the story does not fully detach itself from my canon-sensibilities.
Okay, epic story is epic. I put off reading this one for far too long but I'm glad there was so much material to catch up on.
ReplyDeleteThe very first chapter blew me out of the water. It doesn't "get better," it STARTS better. That's a good sign. And it only built from there.
This is the kind of story I like, and it does pony fanfiction right. Gods, magic, imaginative equine combat (the bladecasting is my favorite bit), it's all there. There is not a single bit of this story I can find that feels neglected or half-spun. And damn is it exciting.
Sometimes you go on too long and drag things out a bit much. But since this only happens rarely I'm not going to hold it against you. And the war itself is very well written. It's not thousands of ponies lining up on two sides and then charging at one another - everything I've read so far fits within the deep rules the story has established for itself. The framework you've built has made the war that much better.
And bringing Discord into the mix? Oh ho ho, that was awesome too. It felt a bit... deus ex machina, but I think I missed the explanation for how he broke free of his stone imprisonment.
Either way, your villains rank very high on my 'best fanfiction villains' list. Titan is ESPECIALLY good, as he should be. Reading him is an experience. And I'm going to be honest - I didn't anticipate the twist that Terra was his daughter. I'm good at guessing twists. Not great, but good enough that most fanfictions never trick me. You did, which means that you're doing *something* right. I really should have seen it coming when Titan called Celestia "the second daughter."
Yeesh, alicorns are as weird and creepy as they are insanely badass.
So, I found myself listening to music while I read "Ponies Make War." I do this for just about everything I read, time permitting. Eventually I'll stumble across a song or two that helps to define the story I'm reading in my head. Or the story defines the song. For 'Fallout Equestria' it was "Kiss the Rain." For 'Name of the Wind' and 'Wise Man's Fear' it was Lana Del Rey's "Born to Die." Weird stuff like that.
In the case of 'Ponies Make War' I listened to several songs. Shinedown's "Devour" fit especially well, as did Dopethrone's "Dark Foil." Both felt like to me like they'd suit a trailer for 'Ponies Make War' if the story were a movie of some sort.
Overall, I'm a big fan of this story after finishing chapter 16. Any fanfic that inspires me to write is a win in my book. And when I have to suppress the urge to incorporate elements of that story into my own work, well, that's a pretty damn good story.
Anyway, looking forward to chapter 17, sorry for the essay, and good luck.
its been a few weeks. any news of chapter 17 coming this month?
ReplyDelete@TOM the ROCK (FiM)
ReplyDeleteHe's on indefinite hiatus, he sort of burned-out on the last chapter. Probably best to just let him recover - the next chapter will arrive when it arrives.
The way I see it, he's produced excellent chapters so far - don't want to spoil any future ones by rushing them =)
@Scherzando he said that the next chapter will be out in a couple of weeks
ReplyDelete@Wisdom Thumbs I hear what you're saying with the songs. I do that sometimes too. A song that I find went well with Fallout Equestria was "You're gonna go far kid."
ReplyDeleteI wish there was an update on this one... faster :I
ReplyDelete@Sigurd Mjøllnersson
ReplyDeleteI'll assume you don't follow this on fimfiction.net. He took a little break, school started up for him again... I mean, I think it was school... I know he's in some kind of college thing, but I think he said it was becoming a chore so he decided to stop for a bit so he would enjoy it again. You know, like soda. After weeks of drinking it you just do it out of habit, but if you stop for a month... It's like gold, man, liquid GOLD.
@Fifrein
ReplyDeleteAlso, he said he's back to writing, he's just getting all his things straightened out.
@Admiral Sparkle
ReplyDeleteYeah, yeah, I know that stuff. I haven't said I don't know it, not really. I just said I wished to see the final chapter, you know what addiction is, don't you?
I know that he's in some kind of school :L
@Sigurd Mjøllnersson
ReplyDeleteChapter 17 comes out a little less than a week from now, on the 2nd of May, at midnight. If you check the end of chapter 16, there will be a link. Believe me, I know what it's like to have to wait. Every party involved would rather things get done faster, rest assured.
@AestheticB
ReplyDeleteThis comment was posted on my birthday =O
BEST INADVERTENT BIRTHDAY PRESENT EVER =D
@Scherzando
ReplyDeleteHappy B'day! And happy 2nd May to me! :D
@Sigurd Mjøllnersson
ReplyDeleteHaha, happy birthday to us XD
IT RETURNS! *feverishly begins to read*
ReplyDeleteHm, i hope that at least ONE of her friends will come after Twi. Leaving her alone now isn´t the best of options even if she wants to and ordered it herself. :/
ReplyDeleteWow.
ReplyDeleteI wont post a long comment, people far better than myself have done exemplary jobs of praising this work of art.
So I will simply say that this story is beautifully brilliant and I eagerly look forward to the next update.
Oh, and I hope the name change will work as the author intends and encourage more people to read this.
It's absolutely worth it.
@Nambuk
ReplyDeleteWell, I for one can attest to the name change's effectiveness. Before, I wouldn't give this fic the time of day because it looked to me like Twi just randomly turned evil and is working for some old tyrants.
Now, with the name change and the updated description, I am anxious to read it. (As soon as I read something non-grimdark to cleanse my pallet, that is. Give me a break, I just barely caught up reading FO:E Heroes.)
I... wait, I don't really get what just happened.
ReplyDeleteOh well, this has happened once before with PMW, and the solution has, invariably, been thus: keep reading.
So I suppose I'll just have to wait impatiently for the next chapter =P
It's the 17th of May now here.
ReplyDeleteWhere's the next chapter? I NEED MY FIX!!
@Mr_Chaos
ReplyDeleteIt's linked now. It's still 9pm here, which means I turn 21 in three hours.
Thanks! Teriffic writing, as expected; interesting to get some background on how Terra was "created"...!
ReplyDeleteOh, and Happy Birthday! =)
Heh, I rescind my previous comment; as expected, it's all coming together again =D
ReplyDeleteHell yeah, new chapter! And new, better title ^^
ReplyDeleteToday evening is gonna be fanfic evening 4 me :)
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ReplyDelete^ Lol, my comment derped 9_6
ReplyDeleteOh MY, next chapter will be called "The Immoral Game" titled Sex Toys and Chocolate. OH MY?
ReplyDeleteThis Titan is such a insane fu**er. Hitler feels like an angel if compared to him. He at least cared for man of his own stock. Titan just want to depopulate them all! What a bloodthirsty bastard :(
ReplyDeleteBTW; poor Terra, didn't know her story would be so sad :`(
What time will the next chapter be out?
ReplyDeleteOk, new question, is it even going to be out today. I noticed the footnote about the release date for the new chapter is gone
ReplyDeleteLet's just say no, no it won't:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.fimfiction.net/blog/31971
so is there a new projected release date for the new chapter because the suspense is starting to kill me
ReplyDeleteYAY, the new chapter finally released. I really liked that Fluttershy made sure Terra was spared. It is so in character and it could make a good sequel (HINT HINT). I cannot wait for the final chapter where Titan gets his ironic defeat by mortals in his so called Immortal Game
ReplyDeleteVery interesting story so far. I noticed that you have a thing for Baldurs Gate 2 but that is fun for me considering how much I like that game. I like how some characters work with each other particularly Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash who I think work very well. I also want to know more about these alternative ponies like Pinkie Pie and I hope you can fit that in somehow.
ReplyDeleteI also laughed when Pinkie said "Gee Dashie you sure know how to show a mare a good time". They get some of the better banter (and it is also fun looking for a relationship that probably isn't there but it is fun to think about anyway)...
ReplyDeleteThose last few paragraphs of Titan's musings were long, convoluted and a battle just to read through.
ReplyDeleteThey were also amazingly poetic.
And that's why I love this story ^_^
Does anypony know any fics similar to this one I really like what's here and want to read something else like this.
ReplyDeleteDoes anypony know any fics similar to this one I really like what's here and want to read something else like this.
ReplyDeleteWhoa! Just noticed this has the Star-6 tag. Big congrats, about time this story got the credit it deserves!
ReplyDeleteFor the last few weeks, I've incessably craved for the last part.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is epic. When will you deliver the final piece to this awesome saga?
Yesssss, I have waited patiently for this =D
ReplyDeleteUGH! FINALLY a new one comes out and I finish it and have to wait AGAIN for the ending! : / Any ETA's?
ReplyDelete@Drakmire
ReplyDeleteBull, Reveal your secrets!
@Armageddonon FimFic, he has said that chapter 22 will be released on Wednesday and 23 on Friday. So the end is in sight.
ReplyDeleteOh Molestia, another chapter already, my body hasn't recovered from the awesomeness of the previous chapter yet D=
ReplyDelete“And for a single night,” she said softly, turning back to the charging army, “it's my way too.”
ReplyDeleteShit just got real.
Though my favourite part from this chapter, far and away, was this:
"She was Astor Coruscare, reaving through living flesh as easily as one might part a cloud of mist. She was Princess Terra, rending her foes apart to protect her own. She was both of them in combat but neither of them in mind, because she was Princess Celestia, callously thinking to her next move as she executed a single play. She killed them, and she felt nothing, because she was King Titan, and they were nothing before her."
HOLY CRAP, literally the next day-ish another chapter?!
ReplyDeleteI love you.
BRAAAAVO! WoW. One of the best stories I've ever read.
ReplyDeletePlease tell me there's an epilogue. Rebuilding, Terra's adjustments, and maybe a dialogue with Discord?
Whew... my body has survived three consecutive hits of "Awesome", but I don't think it can take much more! Just enough for an epilogue, I think =3
ReplyDeleteHmmm... very, very well made. A very well made finale. How do you come up with stuff like that? I mean, how do you envision all those moves and tiny details, and keep the plot and themes so changing yet coherent?
ReplyDeleteI'd LOVE to see your storyboard for this fic. Must be beautiful chaos at work. ;P
I commend you for your efford and generosity to let us enjoy your work (legally) for free. It was a tremendously enjoyable read, and your narrative for epic DBZ-Style fighting is excellent!
(The only minor citique I'd have is a bit of a Deus-ex-Machina syndrome in your story - quite often, when everything seems lost, magic and friendship come along and beat the unbeatable, kill the unkillable, vanquish the most dangerous threats imaginable - and this a few times in row, throughout your narrative. While it gives you a feeling of continuity, it also feels just the tiniest bit repetitive. I hope you'd appreciate this review more than just pure praise. ^^')
However, this is the only fic on this site so far that made me come back every few days or so and check for updates. You really did an awesome job.
Anyways, an epilogue would be nice - also, whatever happened to Discord? I'd love to have these questions answered! =)
Keep it up!
Awwww, such an awesome fic. I really enjoyed it, and yet, it's kinda pity it's finished.
ReplyDeletePS: I hope Terra would turn to her old self and befriend mane 6 ;P
I feel I'm missing something... is there going to be an Epilogue? It feels as though it ended very suddenly, and I don't recall seeing a "Story Complete!" update, so I'm assuming there's more to come...?
ReplyDeleteThis is one of the best stories ive read Rivaling Fallout Equestria in sheer Epicness PLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASE post more soon :D
ReplyDeleteThis is one of the best stories ive read Rivaling Fallout Equestria in sheer Epicness PLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASE post more soon :D
ReplyDelete"it just ends too abruptly" Exactly. I agree with you.
ReplyDeleteBtw.... We needs more fics with THIS level of awesomeness.
"it just ends too abruptly" Exactly. I agree with you.
ReplyDeleteBtw.... We needs more fics with THIS level of awesomeness.
Alicorn OCs? BULLSHIT! We all know there's only 2 Alicorns in Equestria! To state otherwise is to completely contradict Lauren Faust (blessing and peace be upon Her) and her vision!
ReplyDelete*struts out of comment thread*
And so, at long last, "Ponies Make War" is complete. I can't believe I first commented on this over a year ago, back in my LoL heyday, haha.
ReplyDeleteVery glad we got a bit of closure on this, and strangely enough, the way you finished the story has actually given me an unfamiliar sense of optimism about the upcoming season finale =P
Congratulations on a very well-written fic. I only wish it received more attention than it did, but no matter - the story is nonetheless excellent, and will always be in my "Classics" of pony fiction =)