Wednesday, December 7, 2011

Story: My Little Hangover (Update Complete!)

[Normal] [Comedy] [Crossover] [Adventure] "This... is freaking beautiful. This right here? This is how you do a crossover."-Pre-Reader with a WoW dragon name.

Author: Mousetrap
Description: It's Twilight Sparkle's 18th birthday, and in time-honored pony tradition her friends have dragged her to Las Haygas, the world-renowned City of Lights. They promise to give her a night she'll never forget. And with the lights, the glamor, and a few shots of Liquid Rainboom, it seems they're poised to deliver just that.

But when Twilight wakes up to a destroyed hotel room, a hangover so painful it leaves her unable to do magic, a missing pony, and a slew of unanswered questions, she is forced to wonder: did they party too hard? Now, the five ponies must clean up their mess by piecing together a night that none of them can remember, all the while searching for a friend that could already be halfway across the desert...

It's a lesson they'll have to learn the hard way. Some ponies just can't handle Haygas.
My Little Hangover Part 1

My Little Hangover Part 2
My Little Hangover Part 3
My Little Hangover Part 4
My Little Hangover Part 5
My Little Hangover Part 6
My Little Hangover Part 7
My Little Hangover Part 8
My Little Hangover Part 9 (New!)
My Little Hangover Part 10 (New!)
My Little Hangover Part 11 (New!)

Additional Tags: Hangover crossover, drunk ponies in Vegas

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PhysicallyPossible said...

Omg yes! so much yes I'm totally reading this

wackyteen said...

hmmm.... i'll read the first couple of pages, to see how good it seems.

amddude said...

lolwut. Drunk Twilight is something I can't see happening.

CoffeeGrunt said...

Oh God...this is tempting my fanfic abstinence severely.

Alexstrazsa said...

As... you can probably tell, I think this is absolutely BRILLIANT.

Melon Hunter said...

Oh, wow. This looks like it's going to be an absolute scream.

(Also, are the snowglobes a reference to Mr. House from New Vegas? Just wondering)

Onej6 said...

MY BODY IS READY, didn't read one word yet, still i will do eventually.

BTW, if it's Twilight that is being the one that's eighteen shouldn't she be missing. i can totally be wrong..again

megantron said...

Yessss also has there been a Bridesmaids x-over, because I would read the shit out of that

Videogame9 said...

Drunk ponies in Vegas?

I'm reading this.

PhysicallyPossible said...

@Melon Hunter
I was thinking the exact same thing

Anyways,
Awesome! Loved it!

James Corck said...

@megantron

I'm trying to figure out how to make that one, but I have no rights over anything so anypony can give it a shot.

However, whoever ends up writing it, please don't turn it into a ship fest. If the author throws some shipping, may it be for comedic purposes.

Dash-Cash said...

Well done good sir/madam!
Need MOAR!

Whitbane said...

Oh Jesus, we really will cross ponies with anything...

James Corck said...

That was a great begining!

I join the legion of bronies asking for the next chapters real soon. I really like the writing style and so far, my favorite one is Twilight. Very well portrayed :D

Perry said...

Best fanfic I've read in a while. The writing is average, but the concept is great.

Municipal Engines said...

Figures that Rainbow Dash would be the one to get married and forgetting it.

John said...

Oh my god, this is freaking AWESOME. This crossover is just so freaking brilliant. All the pony/place puns are awesome, the writing is great, and it manages to capture the characters of the series well while at the same time delivering the sense of inevitable disaster and comedy that The Hangover did. The drunk/hangover descriptions from the second chapter are pretty spot on, I have to say.

Celestia: "Twilight Sparkle, where the heck are you girls? We're opening Season 2 and defeating Discord TOMORROW!"

Twilight: "Yeah...that's not gonna happen."

Slagathor said...

Wow, it was actually good. I was expecting another flop and was pleasantly surprised. Give it a read.

Trunklord said...

Lol! I bet Dash wasn't the only one who did permiscuous things in their blackout of a night.

80and56 said...

@Whitbane

Haven't seen this yet though: Ponies with "Supernatural".

Wouldn't mind seeing that done well someday.

MasterofRoku said...

I'll look into this one later.

Melodia said...

Never even heard of The Hangover but it sounds like this is more of a fusion than a crossover (like the majority of so-called crossover fics for FiM)

Still, love it so far, especially as someone who lives in Vegas.

DPV111 said...
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Whitbane said...

Makes me want to watch the movie again.

But, yeah, pretty awesome story.

Whitbane said...

Supernatural would be quite difficult to do, seeing as how there are only two main characters in that show, and six ponies in this.

But, ponies vanquishing zombies, vampires, ghosts, etc? Something I would definately check out.

bronyguy said...

Oh my Celestia this is amazing. Rarity with a tramp stamp is the best. I lol'd hard.

jay said...

OMG, I didn't even like the movie, but this has me nearly crying with laughter, please continue!

Sandvich Eating Pinkie Pie said...
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Dann The Yoshi said...

The Hangover, Pony Edition?

I saw a trailer for this somewher.... found it!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w3qfoDzIL5E

Dusty the Royal Janitor said...

Yeah, that was pretty fun.
So Applejack lost her hat. Rainbow seems to have had a night of fun with some stallion and may now even be forming babby. Rarity went and got a tattoo. Pinkie Pie... is Pinkie Pie. And Twi's so drunk that she can't use magic properly.

Shaping up to be quite a ride...

Although, I feel the need to mention, I find it really hard to believe that there's no such thing as a tattoo removal spell, or that one can't be invented when Twilight gets her magic back once she's over the hangover. I think Rarity is overreacting. Then again, it's in her character to have a tendency to overreact, so...

Mooch said...

I have seen the Hangover, one of my favorite movies cause it is one of few movies I have to pause cause I am laughing way too hard. And this story hit the nail on the head! Everyone is right on cue with their reactions, I can't wait to see their reactions when other ponies start asking them questions about last night!

Nova25 said...

Drunk ponies ? ''Comedy'' Tag ?

Well, that should be a successful comination once ag... wait a minute ?
Is it REALLY a crossover with ''The Hangover'' movie ?
...oh noes...

Well, let's hope the story is better than what I remember of the movie, which is little.

MoreX25 said...

Is the baby going to make an appearance?

Delichon said...

@Dusty the Royal Janitor

//Rainbow seems to have had a night of fun with some stallion

//Rainbow ... had a night ... stallion

//Rainbow ... stallion

Yeah... Right...

monkeyshine89 said...

LOL! I want more! Though in all honesty it would have been more in line with hangover if Twilight was missing and Celestia was hounding them about getting her back lol.

Either way, shaping up to be alright so far.

Supreme Commander of Brony Mountain said...

Fluttershy is missing? O.O

(completely overreacts and puts the Equestrian Millitary on Defcon 1)
YOU WILL FIND FLUTTERSHY NO MATTER THE COST! IF SHE'S HURT YOU'LL WISH I BANISHED YOU TO THE MOON!!!! D:<

P. Pony Ponyson said...

No! I must resist! Damnit!
I went a whole three years without watching 'The Hangover', but now I could only wait three days because ponies!
Confound these ponies...!

Harwick said...

Heh... I'm loving this story. A lot of great lines and ideas, and the characters are still well portrayed and even get in some touching moments! Excellent job!

DPV111 said...

Part 3. OH SHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII...

Fiery Blade said...

Thanks a lot, NIGHTMARE MOON.

ToonNinja said...

Rainbow the Roller? And the guy's wearing AJ's hat? Sh*t is about to go DOWN, man!

Fawfulcopter said...

Speaking of crossovers with pony people want to read, RENT please.

Melodia said...

Pwahaha, man I love this fic.

Silfir said...

"No, the roof is not on fire"

I burst out laughing. This fanfiction wins.

GWGV said...

Drunk Twilight is hilarious. I hope she really did learn how to dougie.

I've never actually seen The Hangover, but if it's just as hilarious as this fic is so far, I'll definitely make time to watch it.

B. said...

This is pretty ace.

HALOGUNNYSGT said...

OMG I love this! This is in a tie with being the best crossover ever tied right next to Fallout Equestria! I just love crossovers, and this being a crossover with my favorite movie makes it even better!

Nando said...

Never seen the movie, but I'm sure you're doing it justice, because this fic is great! Heck, even if I can't tell which lines of dialogue are from the movie, it does not take away how well written this is.

Looking forward to more!

Xuncu said...

Ruby.... that Ruby? She's technically not one of the Blanks, but still..... O_o

Vladnuke said...

This is SO AWESOME! NEED MOAR!

AlanJCastonguay said...

You do /not/ mess with a pony's hat.

psychicscubadiver said...

Intensely entertaining and very funny. Please write more!

Ledah said...

can i have moar plz? this is brilliant

Quotidian Torture said...

Bwahaha! This is fantastic. Keep writing!

mycutiemarkisagun said...

- the deconstruction of casinos is so on point its ridiculous

- Since Mike Tyson doesn't exist in the MLP universe (lucky for them), they must've stole the Manticore from.....a dragon's cave?

- OF COURSE Fluttershy is the one who goes missing. Check the roof!

- Wait, so where's Mr. Chow? THERE MUST BE A MR. CHOW. I vote Discord.

- What the fuck Dash, relax.

- "Then you started asking ponies to teach you how to Dougie" SPIT TAKE HAHAHAHAHAHA

- Its called Grinding, Figure. Do it with a chick with a nice ass and you'll get a great dry hump. If you wanna know why every shitty rap song you've ever heard on the radio is popular, THAT's the reason.

- Lil' Colt? Is that supposed to be a pony version of Weezy F Baby or Lil Jon? ROFLMFAO. Either way, I need art of this dread-locked, face tattooed pony NOW. *blasts "Megaman"* ONE EYE CLOSED, ONE EYE OPEN, YO CAP GET PEELED LIKE IBPROUFEN

- Oh for FUCKS SAKE Twilight....if Celestia banished every pony that got fucked up doing shots, The Moon would have the population density of Monaco by now.

- Queen-Beyond-The-Wall? HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Yeah, I wonder how many of you got that. I'm not explaining this one to you lames.

- Fluttershy thought the roof was on fire? Good lord. Keep the Cascada & Sean Kingston records away from her, lest she attempt to evacuate the dance floor and call the fire department.

- Oh shut up Rarity. In real life, you'd be the sluttiest drunk of the group.

magnetopony said...

@mycutiemarkisagun
i got the queen beyond the wall. brilliant

Alex Meanberg said...

I can't often wrap my hooves around shipping. But I can make an exception for this story. Nice work so far. I can't wait for chapter 4.

Nova25 said...

Part 1 is good, the various descriptions (of scenes/places) are interesting and not too long.

-----

Part 2:

>Drawn and inked into her haunch, just above her beautiful blue tail.
-Rarity's mane and tail are purple, not blue.
From the story itself, we are informed that she only had a tatoo, and nothing else.

... It was also an interesting part. Only have to address the wrong color for Rarity's tail (details above). Also, giggling Pinky Pie sounds adorable ...

-----

Part 3:

... Nice adaptation of those country/city names ...

>“And that whoever was staying in Room 4653 checked out early this morning.
-Mmh, wait ?
Don't you normally need to give back the card/key of your room, in order to 'check out' in hotels/motels ? ...RD had the key, so how did this 'stranger' do ?

-----

Well... So far, it's quite a lot more interesting than I first thought it might be (from what I remember of it, the movie was 'Meh'.). It seems to be going for a rather enjoyable read ...

Nova25 said...

@mycutiemarkisagun
And would you care to explain what is this ''Queen Beyond The Wall'' thing, exactly ?
(while ''trying'', if you can, please, to not use 'fuck' and other '!!11!1, rofl(insert letters) yo' words)

I would think that not every single person on this planet must know about this specific reference.

mousetrap9261 said...

Hey everyone - author here. I just submitted Part 4, so hopefully you'll all be seeing it pretty soon. In the meantime I figure it's time for some responses.

@MelonHunter: wow, that didn't even occur to me! The snowglobes were just meant to be more Pinkie madness, but I like your version better.

@John: Oh, that would've been perfect. If only I'd written this a month before Season 2...

@Monkeyshine: I suppose it would have, but this is really more of a fusion than a crossover. Besides, I wanted to tell it from Twilight's POV. And I simply can't see Fluttershy drinking, so the only solution was to have her be the one that goes missing

@Mycutiemarkisagun: Glad someone got the Queen-Beyond-the-Wall reference! And Lil' Colt was supposed to be Lil' John, but now I simply can't get the idea of a Weezy pony out of my head. /r-ing it from the artists!

And yes, there does need to be a Mr. Chow...

@Alex Meanberg: Yeah, what shipping?

@Nova25: I guess it's in the eye of the beholder. I see Rarity's tail as dark blue. And I'm sure people lose hotel keys all the time. They probably charge you a fee or something to check out without your room key.

As to Queen-Beyond-the-Wall, it's a reference to the Song of Ice and Fire book series (now an awesome HBO show!) by George R.R. Martin. Anyone else find it funny that my two biggest obsessions in life are an insanely dark and gritty fantasy world where everyone gets raped, murdered, betrayed... and Ponies?

Nova25 said...

@mousetrap9261
Well... officially, she's a mix of : Indigo and Purple to Dark Violet : http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Rarity

And, I suppose they will charge a fee for the lost key/card, yeah.

mousetrap9261 said...

@Nova25

Trumped by the wiki, am I? Very well. A CHANGE IS IN ORDER!

Whitbane said...

But a Song of Ice and Fire is an awesome series.

Oh God, imagine it with ponies...

monkeyshine89 said...

Awesome! Now off to the Maynn. I bet 'Ruby' is the one that Dash spent the night with.

LegatoSkyheart said...

I can't wait for the next installment!

Tyranoman said...

Just finished Part 4, really awesome I especially like the nod towards Discord near the start. Don't take too long for part 5, im loving this :D

John said...

Discord reference FTW.

I am really loving how this is turning out.

Dusty the Royal Janitor said...

You know, I was originally way more skeptical about this story, but it really seems to be growing on me. Especially after Rainbow Dash's gambling thing. That was just priceless :D

DPV111 said...

@mousetrap9261
Fire and Ice series and ponies are a stark contrast yes.
Then again.
My favourite Book is The Talisman by S. King and P. Straub, My favourite manga is Berserk, my favourite RPG is Shadow Hearts, my favourite musical artist is Rammstien.... Basically everything I love is grimdark except ponies.

mycutiemarkisagun said...

@Nova25

Learn to Google and hop off my dick.

mycutiemarkisagun said...

Chapter 4 reactions:

- i want lucky draw fanart nao

- For some reason I think its adorable whenever Twi vomits. *shrug*

- High octane poker action! Dash Crowning Moment of Awesome! Chekhov Gun promise from AJ!

- Implied Sad Dead Parent Backstory for AJ! You know there's at least 1 canon Sad Dead Parent Backstory in Lauren Faust's secret 40 page FIM universe bible...

- Don't worry Twilight, Equestria has Bankruptcy instead of Debtor's Prisons.

Unlike Dubai.

...

Nova25 said...

@mycutiemarkisagun
What a foul language you have ?

I'm saying this politely, when I say that a little 'politeness' would do you good.

There's no need to swear, throw insults, and/or be vulgar when someone is 'talking' to you.

Delta Takahashi said...

Just watched the movie.

Now I'm reading this.

HALOGUNNYSGT said...

More of this NOW!! Especially after making the Discord reference. This story is getting better and better.

Nova25 said...

Part 4:

>Twilight studied the illustration on the laminated card.
>He looked like a mishmash of bits and pieces from a dozen different animals.
-Well... the 'mandatory' cameo, I suppose ;). To celebrate the coming of the new Season 2.

>Pinkie leered. “He’s an evil enchanter, he’ll trick you with banter…”
-Ahh, Pinky Pie and her improvisation talents for making songs. ;)

> “You should see the look on your face. You’re a laugh, Lucky Draw. Too bad we won’t be hanging out some more.”
-Heh, nice recycling of those phrases ;).

Alexstrazsa said...

OH MY GOD. THE PANDA.

This is the best crossover on the site.

Delta Takahashi said...

DAT PANDA.
I'm assuming he's naked, yes?

Link said...

Chapter 4.
Rainbow the Roller /)ಠ3ಠ(\ *dat pokerface*

Chapter 5. <3
PINKIE IS BOSS AS FUCK!
*requesting epic brohoof pic of pinkie and pony eye patch mike tyson*

Chase said...

Need. Part 6. NAO.

Tyranoman said...

Omg the panda bit! I can't wait for part 6, dude your my new favorite author! xD

Fiery Blade said...

YOU GONNA BUCK ON ME?!
OH MY GOD. THAT WAS PURE GENIUS.

Nova25 said...

>Did you just say…” her voice cracked. “Showmare?” >“Yeah, better hurry. You’re on the pole in twenty minutes.”
-Well, I'm not sure what it would be more... Awkward or Interesting. ;)

>“You should know by now that silly things like physics can’t get in the way of a good time!”
-She does have a point... Well, a Pinky Pie-point, that is ;).
They are worth 10 normal reality-points.

> “The boss<’ said her escort.
-There's a < instead of the ' ...(small error)

>“No, I didn’t find it funny.”
>“I found it hilarious!”
-Pulling a 'Rarity' (aka: No. I love it !), I see ? ;)

>The Hotel Pinque. Streamers and balloons and color, color everywhere. Candy bowls in the lobby. >A chocolate buffet!
>Pinkie’s eyes gaped open. “…I think you’re my hero.”
-Heh :), quite funny, yeah.

>Maybe their fortune was finally beginning to change.
-As they say : Fortune is a capricious Lady.

>The panda bear yelled a ferocious, “AAAEEEEEEEEEOUUUUUUU!” and bolted
-Wait...? Is that a reference to... well, that one strange video ?
Also, humm... I don't quite get the Panda thing ?


... A relatively good part again. The best section was of course with Pinky Pie :).
''How can I thank you ?'' ''Build that Hotel !''... Well, we all know where Pinky Pie is gonna go for her next vacation in Haygas ;) ...

Nova25 said...

@Nova25 Forgot to indicate : Part 5: ----^

JulienBrightside said...

I find this story strangely enjoyable.

Meganerdbomb said...

@Nova25Isn't it obvious? The panda is the crazy Asian guy from the movie.

Ran said...

Really, really enjoying this. I'm definitely looking forward to part 6!

David-ism™ said...

Okay, so... when is this supposed to be good? When I trudge through all the "telling' and no "showing"? Somebody stick their finger down my throat and help me gag up my lunch, please.

I think I laughed once. At the title.

Nova25 said...

@Meganerdbomb
Well, I saw that movie, like, a very long time ago... once... and I only half-remember it (and what I remember is 'meh').

This story proves to be way more interesting than my memory of the movie, so far.

mousetrap9261 said...

@Nova25

Thanks for catching that error!

Jv9ufxcy said...

How the hell did I not catch the panda - asian guy from movie reference?
You going to buck on me?

Wolfy1328 said...

this is gold. you are definetly my fav writer here. Hurry up with part 6 tho please!!!

jay said...

I didn't care for the movie at all, but this is an absolute trip. Keep on writin'!

The Jack said...

Oh, sweet Celestias beard this is hilarious. xD
It's even more of a noodle incident than the movie! xD

Must. Have. Moar. NAOH! xD

Daxter Galaxy said...

Want to read but I'm to drunk to read... how am i doing this!!!

Hrwking said...

Want more this is hilarious

the bees effing knees said...

umm.... its taking a while.

Richard said...

@Daryll A.

Sapphire Shores and obvious image of Mike tyson, because both black=D
BTW that was damn hilarious.

Tony1695 said...

What did Fluttershy do?

Tom said...

I've never read a fic but I'm considering it in this case.

Tyranoman said...

Haha Dashie with her Tactical Rainuke comment,
And Twi's Song at the end was amazing. This is just great man, if the rest of your chapters are as good as this one then im definitely looking forward to them!

Fiery Blade said...

IT'S ABOUT TIME.
Oh my god. DAT SONG.
Doug, Doug, OHHHH doug, dougy dougy doug doug....

Link said...

reference to the song at the end of chapter 6
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ojkUv4aWY_0

Mike Patton said...

I still haven't read this fanfic, but the synopsis reminds me of: "Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas"....

John said...

The manticore song! *squeals with delight* You sir, have just won the internet.

Love the tactical rain nuke comment. This fandom sure works fast!

GWGV said...

I think this fic just catapulted into my top 5 with that manticore song. Brilliant!

Definitely the best crossover I've ever read.

broniesinarms said...

Yay for tactical rainbooms. And that manticore song was win

Jamanecan Jively said...

That bitch. That. Fucking. Bitch.

HALOGUNNYSGT said...

Oh sweet Jesus that latest chapter was classic. I just love the manticore song part!

Jv9ufxcy said...

I love how relevant you are.
Discord, Tactical Rain-nuke.
im lovin this

Municipal Engines said...

I'm honestly really anticipating the part where we finally meet this Ruby character. Although, that's probably because I have a hunch as to what she is in relation to RD, and the whole thing would be amazingly hilarious if it turned out to be correct.

Mac3030 said...

This looks too hilarious for me to pass by

DPV111 said...

Kind of bothered that SS had RD punched by a guy... Less that she was hit by a guy, more that she was punched instead of bucked. Bucking just seems less aggressively violent to me.

101Volts said...

Another promising chapter. Was expecting it to be a bit longer but I'm fine with it.

ReignbowDash said...

One of my favourite fanfics!

DPV111 said...

One quick mention. Ponies do not lift their tails to pee. I swear I thought you were gonna have her take a crap in the pool for a sec. If that had been the case I would have punched her myself. And you.

Melodia said...

o/~Everybody kung fu panda....doo doo doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo...o/~

Edwin B. said...

Hey Im Mr. Chow whats up motherbuckers, that was epic

mousetrap9261 said...

@DPV111

Oh good god no! This thing is plenty raunchy and over-the-top, but I'm trying my hardest to keep it from crossing the line into DIRTY. Avoiding cursing and all that (except with Chow, because a Chow who doesn't curse is no true Chow).

Yeah, I would've punched myself too.

JusExcon said...

After reading the end of chapter seven, I do have some sort of suspicion now.

The Jack said...

Nice chapter update! =D
Anyone else but me thinking that those snowglobes are a reference to Fallout: New Vegas? xD

FictionFan said...

Oh, god. Need more. This was awesome :D

mycutiemarkisagun said...

where to start...

- Donkeys as illegal Mexican immigrants. HA! Nice. And I srsly hope they never show a Mule on the show again. The Unfortunate Implications are too strong.

- Pinkie Pie legal advice XD

- Come on, you knew Rainbow peed in the pool. lol @ "ponies don't lift their tails to pee" ummmm yea they also don't talk, perceive death, use tools, OR F***ING FLY AND USE MAGIC. Wats ur point.

- Those ponies? Whoa! Shouldn't the Suh-thern ak-sent pony be the one talking like that? XD

- "magic of intoxication" XD

- CONFIRMED: ITS CHOW TIME BABY *happy Twilight clapping gif*

DPV111 said...

@mycutiemarkisagun

Dork.
I wasn't complaining because of why they don't lift their tails. I was complaining because of why they do.

Darkforce2K said...

Soooo many lolz
And an ad on the side of the page is for the Hangover 2...HMMM?

Jv9ufxcy said...

cannot contain excitement.
you are my favorite author of all time ever
must wait.

General_Rex said...

I couldn't stop laughing, if only they could make this into an actual MLP FIM mini movie =P
great cross over

Jv9ufxcy said...

So this was that week where he said he'd be busy.

Tyranoman said...

Ah damn you don't dissapoint with these chapters, that panda is a complete gangster.
If the story is completely relevant to the actual movie then im gonna take a guess thats not Fluttershy in the back of the van and is probably Ruby.

Mooch said...

Oh my god, it took me so long to read this because I had to stop to catch my breath from laughing so hard!

Dusty the Royal Janitor said...

Twilight's taken on an Ursa Minor.

Her magic is more powerful than perhaps any other unicorn alive.

...Why didn't she just fry the panda and his cronies with lightning borne of righteous fury the second she heard he was holding Fluttershy hostage? ESPECIALLY seeing how she was right there next to them! The search would have been over! They could go home with no hassle! No jury in the world would convict given how the spell would be used defensively against a violent antagonist! Why is Twilight being such a pushover?

Seriously.

dinodude0091 said...

@Dusty the Royal Janitor Because she has a hangover so bad that she can't use her magic. This was, like, the first thing in chapter 2.

marioandsonic said...

Why is it that I imagine that panda sounding like Jack Black?

ToonNinja said...

That panda is f*cking amazing. Also, who's the pony in the trunk?

mycutiemarkisagun said...

Seriously tho, I'd pay good money to hear Mike Tyson sing "Giggle at the Ghostie".

mycutiemarkisagun said...

- CHOW TIME MUDDAFUCKAZ. ("oh noes! profanity!" HAW HAW HAW)

- “Oh, stick a pussy in it, fillyfooler.” XD author nailed Chow, holla

- “Hahahaha! It’s funny because she gay.” XD author nailed Chow, holla

- I would expect nothing less from CHOW TIME MUDDAFUCKAZ, but dayum Pinkie you snorting lines in this universe? word...?

- Boy, I can't wait to see Twilight's reaction when she realizes that "Fluttershy" is actually a black man.

The Commander said...

This story just gets better and better!

Moar pleez.

John said...

Ah, but it's not Fluttershy, is it? It's Ruby! Whoever that is...

Jv9ufxcy said...

dammit i gotta wait another week for the next one. keep em comin mouse this is hilarious

Wolfy1328 said...

don't get me wrong here mousetrap, this story is amazing, and probably one of the best i've read. Your great at writing and I will probably keep up with you if you wrote more stories.

But i mean comon...RainbowDash in part 8 was pretty expectable. I was hoping you were gonna incorporate a stallion, but i guess not. unless your planning something...?

DJ Ale said...

This fic is so amazing! I can't wait for more! Today I saw The Hangover and The Hangover Part II and I was so disappointed! This fic is so much better!

Travis Smith said...

I'll say I've been enjoying this since I first read it, and congrats on being pretty detailed in this to the movie.
When the word PANDA came up I knew it was Chow,
Only thing is I was hoping to avoid the Dash shipping in this, it's just way to overused. So hopefully there's a twist in that, can't wait for more

Hachiro2 said...

When's the new chapter looking to be put ut? I'm way too excised for it!

Teteros said...

Can't wait for the next chapter!

marioandsonic said...

Where's the new chapter?!

Jv9ufxcy said...

The longer we wait, the better the chapter.

Tyranoman said...

Three updates at once!?!? HAY YES.

Avi said...

Sweet ending :)

Krystal said...

Somehow this makes me think of the movie"dude, where's my car?"(hated the movie) and tends to make me not want to read it...though i still might just to see if I'm right or not.

Timber said...

I hope that collaboration happens!

BR-MaxtWolf said...

You spin my head right round, right round, when you go down, when you go down down!

Sothalic said...

Nice ending, the references were great, and that collab ought to happen. One of the few crossovers that actually does work, what an amazing job!

DXLelouch said...

its settled then this will be the first fanfic i read of MLP

Tyranoman said...

Oh man this was amazing, I really hope that Art collab happens, im sure a lot of the content for it would make for a great Drawfriend.
Also, Twilight should seriously consider going for the Apprentice Stone, that magicka regen sure helps a lot! ; )

corey1971 said...

Will there be a Shappire Shores's Ursa Minior in the bathroom?

Forderz said...

I loved the shit out of this.

Vash said...

Lol loved the Skyrim reference! I too want to see the Colab PMV

Teteros said...

Yay! finished the story and I loved it. I also think that the colab PMV is a good idea.

80e17ad4-2140-11e1-949a-000bcdcb8a73 said...

And here I thought I would never read any fanfics ;)
Enjoyed reading it, references to bronie-memes and the Hanogver movies were greatly tied in. Though there is a little plot-hole if I got everything right,

[spoiler]
at Saphires Mansion they discussed wether or not Rarity's tatto was good or lame, but later Ruby said that they found Rarity at the tatoo-shop right before bringin everyone home, so technically she shouldn't have had it at Saphire's...
Not very important, though^^

Jv9ufxcy said...

Mousetrap.
You have single handedly made my most favoritest of all fanfics ever, Thank you.

DPV111 said...

HOLY CRAP. 3 CHAPTERS = LITERAL SPIT-TAKE!

Travis Smith said...

I agree with the credits, I can't believe I made from start to finish. The ending sounds cool but please keep out any Dash shipping okay

DPV111 said...

@Travis Smith

So. Travis. You seem to really dislike RD shipping. Everyone has their personal preferences (I know there are a lot of things in the fandom I'm not too fond of myself) but you go above and beyond to complain about this one issue over and over again in a wide array of story posts.
This is as good an opportunity as any, so care to actually explain why you feel so strongly against this?

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AppleDash said...

The one and only fanfic I've ever gotten into... and really, really, really liked. Such a satisfying ending, and very-well written. I'm glad I stuck around. Thanks for writing. :)

Travis Smith said...

@DPV111
It comes from mostly the fact because I'm obviously a hardcore RD fan, and I just really don't like the way a lot of people pick on the subject, I was raised where that sort of thing really wasn't a good conversation piece to use, also the fact that as a fan if multiple other shows, it always seemed that the character I liked best was always the joke the fandom used, as a guy with a lot of problems from the past that I won't talk about, i found things that made me happy but soon others just corrupted it that it became dead to me. A lot of my friends and girlfriend tell me not to take the fiction stuff to seriusly, its not cannon.Otherwise I just don't know why it does.Other shipping I just ignore but it seems RD ones just gut me, that really is my best excuse as to why I don't like it. But I'm just one person who is just sick of this world and what it has become. Maybe that's why, because I stay in my own world that I want nobody to mess with.

HMorris73 said...

Yes thanks for writing, I enjoyed this one a lot! ^_^

DPV111 said...

@Travis Smith

You know, I understand you completely.

I see it both ways myself.
I dislike the CONCEPT of shipping in general because it's a silly and forced fan-tasy and at baseline I like to heep these characters' distilled and pure to the original.
But I also do enjoy reading shipping because it's honestly adorable and squee-worthy and a totally guilt-free pleasure. Even a little clop. It's also ironically amusing to honestly have an opinion on the fan crafted romantic relationships of cartoon ponies. I'm readding a mushy scene and suddenly I'm all like "Hah! There are ponies, lol."
I always get a kick out of that.

Then again I honestly feel NOTHING can ever ruin one of these characters for me. My image of the canon versions is not wavering, my grip on the heart of what the fandom is (the show) is not tenuous.

I am dismayed that shipping alone disturbs you so deeply. I have read and seen things related to this fandom that, far above shaking my love of these characters, had cracked my faith in humanity; things that have caused me such emotional distress I have suffered physical pain as a result. I hope you never come across these things.

Travis Smith said...

@DPV111
Well I recently broke my leg in two places but that's unrelated.
I'm glad you see it from my view
I try not to just remind my self that it's not real, as well I have been trying to get around, I actually am now reading chapter 3 of Silent Ponyville 2 and crisis Equestria which has surprised me a lot then what the description says.

AaronTenebrae said...

I loved this. SO MUCH.

Things like this literally make me grin ear to ear to be a brony. I love this community.

DPV111 said...

@Travis Smith

Woo. I've never had the pleasure of a a broken bone myself. I'd spend a lot of time in the water if I did.

Just remember that 90% of the stuff you don't like about the fandom is still done out of love. Just different people with different interests and personality will express themselves in different ways.
It's OK to dislike something, but you don't have to feel bad about it or label it as wrong.
Just like everything else in life.

Dancing Lotus said...

This is the best thing ever! I kinda want to see a my little hangover 2 XD

this is something I would probribly re read

Dancing Lotus said...

@Dancing Lotus

Scratch that: DEFINITLY reread

Fathead said...

just finished reading it and this has to be my favorite crossover involving ponies i have ever read!! it's hilarious and yet in keeps to the theme of the show, my hat is off to you Mousetrap and if i could draw at all i would submit picture after picture for that collab idea.

MasterContinuum said...

Great story, just one thing. rarity talked about her tattoo during the shores tape, but later ruby says that they found her at a tattoo parlour after the incident. easy to overlook though, and keep writing, cause it was a pleasure to read.

The Commander said...

In case you need some music:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CcCw1ggftuQ

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7JHilPxh03w

iastfan112 said...

I wonder what Celestia's reaction would be....

Princess Celestia said...

@iastfan112
Dear Twilight,
The legal drinking age in Equestria is 21.

Regards,
Princess Celestia

jazman71092 said...

Great story man
BUT
here's an interesting thought;
HOW CAN A PONY BE A STRIPPER??????????? THEY DON'T NORMALLY WEAR CLOTHES....

RazgrizInferno said...

I really hope that art collab happens. It's the most epic idea I've heard in at least a month.

Twifight Sparkill said...

Just loved the ride. Couldn't get enough. Hangover 2 looms! YEEHAW!

Lightning Crash said...

You have no idea how long I've been waiting for this >_<

Vash said...

Just reread the last chapter you have Flutershy listed as a Unicorn in her second to last speaking part.

THEjetking said...

This was really entertaining, seeing as I tend to really be into fics that redefine characters without changing what is already proven about them.

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