We also told him to continue it, so feel free to do that in comments as well.
Author: Cereal Velocity
Description: Luna and Trixie both want Twilight Sparkle gone. Will teaming up solve their problem once and for all?Accolade
Additional Tags: Trixie Trixie Trixie Trixie Luna
75 comments:
Description bothers me because they want Twi dead. This is ponies. Wth.
ReplyDeleteLuna and Trixie? It's not gonna end well.
ReplyDelete>I agree with anon 1
ReplyDelete>not bad; mine are certainly worse
>SCOOTS IS THE BEST PONI
Luna killing Twilight? Maybe.
ReplyDeleteTrixie killing Twilight? Not a chance.
Do Trixie shipping stories exist that aren't comedies? Not that I'm complaining. I just don't think I've ever seen one.
ReplyDeleteAnd reading this now.
>Comedy
ReplyDelete>Trixie wants Twilight Sparkle dead
hahahahaha that is funny
so ponies eat bacon and eggs
ReplyDeleteIt was informative to know that ponies eat bacon and eggs. Now I will never see them the same way again.
ReplyDeletesilly Cereal, Trixie doesn't want to kill Twilight she want to turn Twilight to her sex slave.
ReplyDeleteone of these days there will be a lunaxtrixiexcelestia shipping story wuth a jealous twilight on the sidelines
ReplyDeletelolwut? Just all of that story in it's entireity: lolwut?
ReplyDeleteCereal? WROTE A FIC? RUN FOR YOUR LIVES... RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!!!
ReplyDeleteI've written tons of fics!
ReplyDeleteThe pic far outshines the fic, though. Sorry, Cereal. -_-
ReplyDeleteYou're still an awesome writer.
That was actually really good. Your trollestia was in top form.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I really think they should have been trying to banish Twilight to the moon or something, instead of killing her. And bacon?
Anyways, excellent work.
Sweet Apple Acres has pigs.
ReplyDeleteYou don't keep pigs for milk. Or their cute little tails.
You do the math.
-Cereal doesn't want to write shipfics.
ReplyDelete-Writes REALLY long shipfic that may continue.
Why does that make it seem to me like he really wanted to do this?
Okay, I take it back, the fic is better than the pic. -_-
ReplyDeleteSorry Mr. Artist person. You're still an awesome drawer.
I usually avoid shipping stories, but I make an exception when they're by authors I already enjoy. And another chance to read about your Trixie again? Yes please!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed it; particularly the characterisations of Trixie and Celestia and how they bounced off of Luna.
Well... that was a surprise ending. Kinda. Maybe.
ReplyDeleteI may have seen it coming...
Haha, what a story mark.
ReplyDeleteI love the dialog in this. So many great Trixie lines.
ReplyDeleteTeh Spoilerz:
And I love the implication that I got that Celestia was doing all that on purpose just to undermine them in the end.
Oddly enough, this is the fic that has made me hate Celestia, even more than the grimdark fics!
ReplyDelete@chinlamp
ReplyDeleteBecause we broke him. We broke him hard.
That was some awesome Celly.
ReplyDeleteI smell plothole
ReplyDelete*SPOILERS BELOW*
despite trixie leaving without luna's plan she is still now a match for twilight whats stopping her from attacking her anyway?
Please Cereal, we will PAY you with thousands of plates of *ahemmetaphoricalahem* cake if you continue this, tis quite funny.
ReplyDelete@bobbin the unicorn That clearly leaves room for a sequel.
ReplyDeleteLol, that was the epitome of Trollestia.
ReplyDelete@Phoe
ReplyDeleteThink we can break him enough to ship Rarity with someone other than him?
CELESTIA LIKES TO WATCH
ReplyDeleteThis is the best Celestia fic I have ever read. I'm in tears, dude.
Oh my gosh, I'm laughing like no tomorrow. Trollestia is best Celestia.
ReplyDeleteLovely work, Cereal. I absolutely adore your writing Luna as the type of person to be extremely paranoid, and have afterthoughts. I especially loved the parts when Luna was thinking that maybe Celestia was planning to do both.
ReplyDeleteI honestly don't like Evil Luna, but I enjoyed your implication that Luna is a great actress and still seeks to overthrow Celestia. It really throws a great continuation to Luna's little murderous tantrums against her sister's disciplinary action.
I was kind of saddened by the lack of continuation with the Twixie. It was hilarious when you had Trixie's speech and thought be so pompous and self-flattering, and the point where she rebuked her ever thinking Twilight's eyes were delicious was absolutely hilarious.
I died when Celestia left a good-willed treat in the library. So like our Celestia to screw around with her sister and be nice at the same time.
I died again with the clop-fiction.
Your describing deadpan tones and the like was excellent. I always have an issue with "completely deadpan" coming after the dialogue, but now I realize that it works. I should really start mixing descriptions and moody dialogue again.
Great ending with Trixie getting the wrong idea. I skipped most of the semi-clop stuff, because it's just not my thing, but I enjoyed the major whiplash with Trixie just up and storming like that. Excellent ender, if I may say so myself.
Brilliantly, hilariously done! Every bit was fantastic, aside from the semi-clop stuff but I just skipped it. And that ending was hilarious.
ReplyDelete@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteI've also never seen a Twilight-centric fic where she didn't screw up the magic getting her and the gang into daily crazy shenanigans.
@Dave
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately I have played my part in perpetuating that particular story archetype.
Twilight screwing up her special talent is fun to write.
Oh please do write more. This was just too hilarious .. it's like imagining tom and jerry antics .. except tom and jerry are Luna and Trixie and both want the same filly dead.
ReplyDeleteUltimate Trollestia. Not a huge fan of the cloppish stuff, but I laughed my ass off throughout the rest of it.
ReplyDeleteHeh, when the cloppy stuff rolled around, I half expected a "STOP RIGHT THERE CRIMINAL SCUM"
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteI wasn't too sold on this story at first but when I got to the end I couldn't stop laughing...Classic Trollestia
ReplyDeleteWow Trollestia can be quite the horn-blocker.
ReplyDeleteI now understand what force caused Luna to transform into Night Mare Moon. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLaughed a LOT, still smiling. I'd have liked to see this continued. I had to keep looking away just so I could contain myself so I could keep reading.
ReplyDeleteI was laughing the entire way through. I didn't know you had it in you Cereal, that was one of the funniest fics I've ever read, and the way you depicted Luna was golden -- very different from the norm. You better continue this, a second part would be SO AWESOME!
ReplyDeleteFukkin' loved this.
ReplyDeleteOh man. This was freaking great. Trixie was golden, and although I don't particularly like vengeful Luna, it was a nice change of pace and well written, so I'll roll with it.
ReplyDeleteThen it got to the cloppy parts. Not sure why I'm okay with it, but damn. I really have no complaints about this story outside of a general distaste for vengeful Luna and the fact that it ended far too abruptly. Write more!
Smiled the whole way through, even if it was slightly more "evil Luna" than I care for.
ReplyDeleteAnd now, for some *completely inexplicable reason* I want to draw Luna hitting her head to a wall in frustration. ;)
mfw Trollestia knew everything all along
ReplyDeleteIt would be just as funny if Celestia REALLY thought the two were trying to be, well, an item... I've known a couple of dedicated shippers (one, sadly, a yaoi maniac) and they CAN be that obsessive.
ReplyDeleteIt's only homosexual if the horns are touc--
ReplyDeleteOh, Mollestia... I see what you did thar~
If only Luna's hornblowing skills weren't rusty whit 1000 years of celibacy...
ReplyDeletenow that was top tier Trollestia, great story.
ReplyDeleteAlso "The Celestia-pult" best revenge plan EVER.
@Phoe
ReplyDelete/r/ing Phoe's ponysona and Seth-cube "breaking in" Cereal's ponysona.
Oh man, this was way too entertaining, I was pretty much laughing throughout the entire thing.
ReplyDeleteI love vindictive Luna AND out-of-touch snarky Luna, so having them combined in one story was just fantastic. And, of course, I love Trixie, and all of her boasty bravado. Giving her a crush on Spitfire was pretty funny, I enjoyed that bit.
If you do plan on continuing in some way, I'm curious what Trixie plans to do with all of that magic she's learned now that Luna's no longer backing her.
Anyway, thanks for the story!
ok well heres what i think
ReplyDeletetrixy killing/twilight = 1,000,000%
luna killing/twilight = -1,000,000%
reason isif you read "the spark" you would know why
One of the funniest stories I've read in a while! Lovely characterization, too, and Celestia was in fine form. :)
ReplyDeleteThis story has Luna, Trixie, Trollestia, and bacon. What more do I need?
ReplyDeleteMaybe another story from cereal velocity?
A pony's diet, I should mention, is completely vegetarian.
ReplyDeleteThanks to you, I now love Trollestia. And even kind-of-evil-Luna.
ReplyDeleteHope you're happy.
Luna + wall, as promised: http://i244.photobucket.com/albums/gg23/FoxOfWar/LunaHeadbang.jpg
ReplyDeleteAlthough now I wonder if Luna actually does have a wall exactly for that purpose?
@FoxofWar is that an abacus I spy in the emergency case?
ReplyDelete@FoxOfWar
ReplyDeleteHeh. Love the abacus on the wall. And the pic in general, though I still think you do noses a bit weird. That's just me though.
ooooooooooooh how cute
ReplyDeleteLuna following her sister´s steps
She is just a troll like Celestia
Poor Trixie LOL
I love it! Can I use tha as the OP image for the story?
ReplyDeleteSure you can - I'd be honored, really :)
ReplyDelete@Andrew
ReplyDeleteAs far as drawing noses go, I'm well aware it's not exactly MLP:FiM style. But it's very hard to shake the knowledge of how horse muzzles work when drawn realistically, it kind of bleeds over without even thinking about it. :P
Put in perspective: I've drawn the FiM ponies for maybe month and a half. I've drawn equines in general for maybe eight years...
Please, we GROVEL AT YOUR HOOVES TO CONTINUE CEREAL!
ReplyDeleteBut being less dramatic, I'd love to see more bacon. And horn blowing. And Trollestia. Oh yes, more of her. More vindictive, slightly-snide Luna. It ended so masterfully, yet so abruptly. T'honestly a damn shame if you ain't continue it.
Do you see this fic? It is now rainbows. And there must more rainbows.
The best was the final part, while Celestia was watching Trixie and Luna doing something weird. I felt sad that Trixie said to stop it. Yeah... i like yuri stuff written very well. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDelete@Miyajima No but I always though that they were raised to find truffle in equestria. Also, if Celestia always acted like that toward her little sister, it is not a wonder that she ended becoming Nightmare Moon.
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteWell, luna really has no reason and The (not so) Great and (not so) powerfull trixie would never have a chance...
ReplyDeleteWhy is there no part two? And really Luna why couldn't you just pretend to want some 'alone time' with Trixie and just yell at Celly to stop intruding on your private time!
ReplyDeleteAlso Luna+The (now more) Great and (now more) Powerful Trixie would make a great match against Twilight+Celestia!
Cereal you do an interesting Luna and love the confident but still shy mix of Trixie! Trixie doesn't want to lose her bits to Luna before giving them away to Twilight! XD
Don't let it end there!
ReplyDeletePretty please?
This was brilliantly hilarious. I loved the implication that Celestia was doing this on purpose to undermine the plan to do Twilight Sparkle in. You simply MUST continue this epic and delightfully funny story!
ReplyDelete