• Story: Rest Stop


    [Normal] "Delving into the mind of the best pony" -S

    Author: John Perry
    Description: At a rest stop on her way to Appleloosa, Twilight Sparkle has a rare moment to reflect...
    Rest Stop

    Additional Tags: train of thought, reflection, boredom

    19 comments:

    1. Conflicting edits, y u ruin my first comment?

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    2. I like the tags. More proof to who REALLY is best pony!

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    3. Welll, I just read it.

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    4. I really enjoyed this story. Twilight's stream of thoughts and emotions were very natural and really made me empathize with the characters in the story.

      The only thing I can think of that would have really made this story absolute dynamite was expanding a bit more on the lessons and morals from the show. It's nice that you have Twilight call back to what she's learned with her friends, but perhaps, since she's reflecting on what she learned, she could have discovered something new or gained some higher understanding about herself or others.

      Again, really well done story. Great writing all around. But just including that one big revelation would have really made this beyond great. Keep it up!

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    5. Its a good story, allows you to put yourself in Twilight's shoes (or horseshoes), and follow her thoughts easily.

      The writing was smooth, generally fluid, allowing for the reader to understand what was being said naturally. The story touches on little things like Twilight's parents that many people seem to forget, and tries to explain the origin of her name in a nice, sensible way that reflects the nature of the story.

      Agreeing with the guy above me, the story could get expanded with a little bit more content like her friendship lessons and all.

      I'd have to give this a nice 4.5/5, but I cant do that, so take this 5/5.

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    6. I've been thinking of a ponified version of Galactic Railroad. Looks like I don't even need to bother writing it.

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    7. Wonders if related to Stephen King's Rest Stop or just coincidence.

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    8. A nice, quiet character study; definitely worth the read.

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    9. I think the Steamer Stallions need a fic or two. :D

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    10. Steam locomotive pulled by ponies. No. No, no,no,no,no,NOOOO!!!!

      They corrected that in the new intro. Dont bring it back up >.>

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    11. I like these sort of Trixie stories. This is the kind of Trixie I expect if we ever see her again on the show. Its always leaves me a bit sad though, because they have such open endings more often then not.

      Nevertheless, enjoyed it.

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    12. @Sethisto
      Clearly it comes form a second character popping up that you don't see coming in this awesome fix.

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    13. Clever with not including Trixie as a tag. It was a nice and warmish read. Loved it.

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    14. This story just had a wonderful feel to it. The characters were written in a natural and smooth way, and I even started tearing up there towards the end.

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    15. This story just had a wonderful feel to it. The characters were written in a natural and smooth way, and I even started tearing up there towards the end.

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