Thursday, March 3, 2011

Story: Derpy's Quest

[Normal] Thank Celestia for a normal story! Written by Poultron
Description: Derpy Hooves is forced out of her house by her mother under the claim that she is worthless. She must now set out to find her true calling. However, bad luck and misery seems to follow poor Derpy Hooves wherever she goes.
Derpy's Quest

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

3 sentences in and I already wanted to stab Derpy's mom.

Will Day said...
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Poultron said...

@Anonymous

Hah, yeah. I'm sad I didn't really characterize her more, but I kind of want to save that for future chapters. Someone on /co/ suggested characters that start out unlikeable and gradually get likable throughout the story. I'd like to try that with Derpy's mom.

Anonymous said...

@Poultron
Yeah but you gotta be carful about that. See those characters are created by limiting the readers information of them, thus creating a misconception.

See if you have a character (or the reader) not privy to certain information about another character, you can use that ignorance to draw those other character to be strict or cruel; only to later reveal their past, and thus explain the causes that shape those behaviors.

For as overrated as Amy Tan might be, The Joyluck club was very good example of creating domineering mothers who, though she didn't outright defend, she none the less explained the uptight behavior of. That way, though their daughters didn't subscribe to their mothers views, they none-the-less could make peace with their mothers.

Thankfully the movie is good enough that if you want to skip the book it wont be a huge loss.

Poultron said...

@Anonymous

I'll have to check the movie out. It might help me write the character better. And you're right, I do have to be very careful - it's hard to ride the line between likable character and outright bitch with this sort of thing.

Zarkanorf said...

A pretty sad story you made here, Poultron. Thinking about continuing it?

Poultron said...

Yes I am, but the writing is going slow. I wrote a journal entry about it here:

http://poultron1.deviantart.com/journal/

La Barata said...

Congratulations! You've created a contender for the single most hated character in MLP!

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