@Anonymous What's wrong with a FlutterMac ending? Personally, I think that Ponyville's shrinking violet and Sweet Apple Acres' titan make a nice couple.
I don't have anything against it. It's even tagged shipping up there in the summary... and still, it feels out of place with the rest of the story. There's no leading to it, no hinting, it's just... there. It comes out awkwardly of the blue, and makes it feel like a last-minute addition.
Ending was a little weak. What? 5 Star - Fluttershy pranking failures. 5 Star - Fluttershy spiraling depression. 3 Star - Resolution.
This isn't even about shipping, the end is just too cut and dry. It's like it was finished up in the middle, and a different part happens where everybody hugs and the three's company theme kicks in.
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Sounds like my idea, except Fluttershy terrorizes the Cutie Mark Crusaders.
Yes, the worst fan fiction writer in the world is still shadowing Equestria Daily.
It was all going well an interesting... and then the ending.
Pregnant twilight.... Wut?
Some parts are just silly
@Anonymous
After Mare-Day Gras ended with pregnant Twilight. This is a sequel. First was drunk pony flashback. This is sad pony flashback.
@Anonymous
What's wrong with a FlutterMac ending? Personally, I think that Ponyville's shrinking violet and Sweet Apple Acres' titan make a nice couple.
@Anonymous
I don't have anything against it. It's even tagged shipping up there in the summary... and still, it feels out of place with the rest of the story. There's no leading to it, no hinting, it's just... there. It comes out awkwardly of the blue, and makes it feel like a last-minute addition.
Sorry if this is a stupid question, but who's Madame R?
@Anonymous
Reference to 'Love of a Mule' a while back.
@Roy G. Biv
Alright. Thanks.
@Anonymous
I'm not the only author who gives that shoutouts. A few other have nodded to 'Madame R'.
that was adorable. You certainly captured Fluttershy's personality in the prank attempts. reading again
Ending was a little weak. What?
5 Star - Fluttershy pranking failures.
5 Star - Fluttershy spiraling depression.
3 Star - Resolution.
This isn't even about shipping, the end is just too cut and dry. It's like it was finished up in the middle, and a different part happens where everybody hugs and the three's company theme kicks in.
cute :)
Haven't read the story yet, but wow, that artwork is adorable! Kudos to the artist!
Ok, is it odd that I find the idea of a pregnant Twilight to be mind-numbingly adorable?
Awesome.
Like I said in my DA comment, this was great.
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