Wednesday, May 18, 2011

Story: Twilight October

[Comedy] And then Twilight Sparkle was a submarine.

Author: uSea
Description: Can the Twilight October evade the clutches of the Equestrian navy and bring glory to the motherland?
Twilight October

Addiitonal Tags: Silly, Light-Hearted, Comedy, Submersible

[Comedy]  Part 2!

Author: uSea
Description: The ponies are at it again. But the game has changed. Can the Twilight October survive in these troubled times?

October 2nd Google Docs
October 2nd Deviant Art

Additional Tags: Silly, Light-Hearted, Comedy, Submersible

71 comments:

Windchaser said...

Adorable and wonderful! Although Fluttershy got a bit too excited to go "toot toot" XD

Anonymous said...

Very cute and funny. A great little fic.

Albatross !!z0yT7Pqnr+y said...

I lol'd.

Good stuff.

Anonymous said...

''Then what were you doing underwater?''
''that is where the fish live''

Oh, man. i laughed out loud

Anonymous said...

HNNNNG

Lucres said...

I have no natural defenses against cuteness of this magnitude!

Commander Python Monty said...

Rocket Propelled Pillows, FIRE! (doesn't work)

The heatseaking ability on those pillows didn't work... PLAN B... launch the mattress! (some guy puts a bag over his head and promptly steps into a tub and starts singing)

Sandman said...

This is really funny, Spike's dialogue was seriously awesome.

For some odd reason while I was reading this I could not stop thinking that they have a LOT of pillows.
Damn it, I want enough pillows to play search and destroy.

MasterMask said...

I am but a simple fisherman!

Then what were you doing under the water?

That is where the fish live.

~Gack~ Cuteness overload...

Anonymous said...

Okay, someone has to tell me

How is this NOT shipping?? Twilight is clearly on a ship...

catherine-puce said...

@Windchaser

Fluttershy nake a cute Q-ship but still... A Q-ship make from a tugboat will have some difficulty to sink that submarine like the twilight october.

MasterMask said...

@Anonymous

Not a ship, you fool!

A submarine! Quite the difference.

Silly filly thinks a sub is a ship....

Zarkanorf said...

This is the best thing, guys. The best thing.
Goodness, someone help me with my giggling!

Anonymous said...

Oh god can't stop loling at this. This was adorable overload.

Cereal Velocity said...

I don't even care about the grammatical errors! I'm laughing too hard!

This needs to be featured or something. It is so incredibly cute.

Anonymous said...

This ties with the D&D fic on the "my favorite story of the ponies being silly and using their imaginations" category. Looooove it.

Anonymous said...

Great read, someone should write a Rainbow Six one.

Prominence said...

Awesome stuff. Love these kinda silly and innocent stories.

Anonymous said...

Oh god, cuteness overload.

Daffodil said...

Freakin' adorable.

Anonymous said...

dasvidaniya pony.

this easily makes my top five favorite pony fics

Anonymous said...

five red stars for the motherland!

uSea said...

Thank you for the positive comments (they feed me).
This was, of course, based on the Twilight-is-a-submarine discussion in a thread several weeks ago (sadly it never received the general image so it was lost) along with the drawings based on the subject by Caluriri and a few stand-alones by anon's.

I welcome you to point out any errors (grammatical or otherwise), else I simply won't learn.

Anonymous said...

This was BRILLIANT!

Stahi said...

@uSea

This is absolutely wonderful. I'm the one who screamed "A TUGBOAT HAS NO PLACE IN THE COMBAT AREA" in that thread and it's fantastic to see a fanfic from that thread finally completed.

I have some of the Fluttershy Tugboat pictures if you want them.

Jim-San said...

this was better then what I could imagine when we had this convo, I must now have a picture of Spike as a Simple Undersea Fisherman

Mads said...

A wonderful and funny story that simply has to be made mandatory reading for anypony new to fanfics. Two solid thumbs, will read again.

Why hasn't anyone made a propaganda poster featuring Spike wearing a ushanka yet?

Anonymous said...

That was a mighty fine read. I wish for a continuation of this...

Anonymous said...

What is "Twilight October" of which you speak? I am but simple underwater fisherman. And underwater is where fish is.

Pseudo Faux said...

I'm going to have to red this now. I forgot what I came across a while back that I was suddenly thinking ponies and red october...

McGack said...

haha this is awesome stuff

Anonymous said...

CUTIE MARK CRUSADER COSMONAUTS, YAY!!

SomeGuy said...

This was very funny and sweet. Good Job.

Tiroth said...

Okay, I officially love this fic. Are we gonna get a part three?

Anonymous said...

I thought Twilight was a blimp

I just made a reference to an image from an old Drawfriend post. And I have no regrets.

Anonymous said...

@Anonymous

Er, that's in reference to the "And then Twilight Sparkle was a submarine." thing at the top of the page. Forgot to mention that.

Andrew said...

ROFL. I love this. Cute, fun and completely in character. The kind of thing that could be in the show-The best kind of MLP fic!

Anonymous said...

@Anonymous Regret nothing! That story was hilarious and this one is cute overload material.

If anything Twilight will probably be a formula 1 racer next.

Marrock said...

So funny, I needed this today, thanks uSea, very much.

Shade said...

First rule of pillow warfare: Always have Twilight and Pinkie on your team.

Anonymous said...

That was awesome. :)

Did anyone else get 40k vibes from "strike from the skies, comrades"?

Anonymous said...

How cool would it be for this to become part of an episode in season 2?

It would prove that wherever ponies are being discussed, Lauren is watching you.....

halofan01 said...

Next stop: the destruction of the super-destroyer, codename "BIG MAC"

NinesTempest said...

My god this is so adorable.

Chris said...

First Twilight was a blimp. THEN she is a submarine. What next? Twilight Sparkle as a Tank Engine?

Say, that's not such a bad idea...

Be right back, gonna write a small fic...

Kjh242 said...

The second is just as LOLwut as the first.
of course, this is not to say was bad, this is to say was very entertaining. be keeping up the good works, comrade.

Anonymous said...

This is perhaps the best fanfic i've read so far :)

Dave said...

Absolutely phenomenal.

5 stars!!

Anonymous said...

5 stars! Sieg Zeon@

Anonymous said...

Oh lawd, this made me giggle harder than I have in a long time. I'd love for this to be made into an episode.

Anonymous said...

I'm positive that cute of this magnitude is banned by Poneva convention (sorry for terrible pun attempt, I just could not resist).

Из России с дружбой.

Yuri said...

"STRIKE FROM THE SKIES COMRADES!" is the most awesome line Twilight has had so far.

Also the shark reminds of me of this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=skYRZ_-RXtk

(I always knew they could control the animals!!!!j THeyre spying on us from the tresss, with the squirrelss! pass it on!)

Yuri said...

DON'T CLICK THE ABOVE LINK!! IT IS A TRAP!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=66hen6sf1Xs&feature=fvsr
This is what I meant!

Anonymous said...

I NEED MOAR. MAKE MOAR.

Seyren said...

It takes something special to be able to break me out of a funk quite like that.
Brilliant work, comrade!

Anonymous said...

"'RAWR!' she said, in precisely the way a shark doesn't."
Channeling a bit of Douglas Adams there, eh?

Anonymous said...

By Celestia's beard! Part 2 is even better than part 1!
Now please a part 3! Maybe with Fluttershy and some of her birds as an aircraft carrier?

Tosxychor said...

I giggled, I laughed, I d'awwwwwed, this fic has it all. Great job uSea! Those 6 stars are totally deserved. ^^

maskedmustelid said...

First I guffawed. Then I d'awwwww'd. Then I went just couldn't stop. Why can't I vote six stars on this, dagnabbit?

Steel said...

I have but one thing to say to this.... BWAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! Oh LORDIE!

Colin said...

Pt.1: Hehehehehe, cute.

Pt.2: Pinkie-shark. Nothing else needs to be said. :-D

Silfir said...

Toot, toot!

Read it exactly like the latter part of "You rock! Woo hoo!" You will die of Fluttershyness.

Yes, I have replaced the word "cute" in my English vocabulary. Clearly it was just a placeholder put in there for centuries to prepare for the arrival of the true embodiment of the concept.

Just gotta practice now. Man, that little kitty in that picture sure is fluttershy. With a gruff voice, the cop stared the criminal straight in the eye. "Don't get fluttershy with me." Oooh, oooh, today we will earn our fluttershyiemarks!

Camb said...

"That is where the fish live."
Why, oh why can't I stop thinking about MST3K - The Touch of Satan...this fandom is awesome.

Captain_Waffle said...

*squee*

Captain_Waffle said...

*squee*

DPV111 said...

ROFL that was incredibly awesome. I wish I had that many pillows now.

MuffinShy said...

This was a cute read.

Equine-nox said...

I enjoyed that read. I thought it was very cute. Then I read how poor Applejack got taken out, and had to laugh out loud (I never do when reading fanfics). Fluttershy was being adorable as well with the "toot toot". I just noticed Part 2. I will be reading that tomorrow night.

zaptiftun said...

That was brilliant! XD

Susano said...

This was absolutely hilarious.

cheezesauce said...

so sweeeet! and the writing style is very simple are clear so it doesn't get in the way of the story.

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