• Story: Desktop Ponies (Updated Part 2!)

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    [Random]  Someone wrote a story about desktop ponies!  Madness!

    Author: no space
    Description: An artificial pony suddenly realizes what she is.
    Desktop Ponies
    Desktop Ponies Part 2 (New!)

    Additional Tags:  What do ponydroids dream of?
    Wednesday, May 18, 2011 op
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    69 comments:

    1. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:04 PM

      First I D'awwwwwww'd.
      Then I Bawwwwww'd.
      Then I D'AWWWWWWWWWWW'd.

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    2. AndrewMay 14, 2011 at 6:07 PM

      Wow, this was epic, and has me questioning the impossible.

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    3. AndrewMay 14, 2011 at 6:07 PM

      By the way, as it turns out, I actually have Twilight Sparkle and Luna out on my desktop at this very moment. :O

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    4. Rainbow SlashMay 14, 2011 at 6:08 PM

      Ponydroids dream of electric parasprites.

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    5. kwjMay 14, 2011 at 6:08 PM

      O-O i liked it but it's kinda crazy

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    6. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:09 PM

      And people wonder what causes their computers to slow down after they been using them a while...

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    7. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:09 PM

      I really liked it!
      It was pieced together well.
      I wish desktop ponies would work on my computer :S

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    8. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:16 PM

      @AndrewIt's actually Fluttershy...

      Cool story, but it deserves a [sad] tag, doesen't it?

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    9. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:16 PM

      I wish this were longer. I'd love to see you explore the concept further.

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    10. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:18 PM

      @Rainbow Slash

      I actually considered using that. I wanted to say "Do ponydroids dream of electric androids?" But that was six words, not five, and I wanted to maintain the question format.

      I'm glad people enjoy it so far, I wasn't sure what response it would get.

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    11. no spaceMay 14, 2011 at 6:21 PM

      Whoops, forgot to put my name on that comment. And meant "electric parasprites", not androids, ha.

      Also, to address the [Sad] and continuation issues: it's not really sad, is it? It ends on a hopeful note. Which also addresses the continuation thing. Besides, I really have no idea where I would go from here.

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    12. InkwellMay 14, 2011 at 6:24 PM

      Amazingly written! I loved it. Neat concept.

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    13. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:25 PM

      Loved it. Really got my gears turning. I love thinking of possibilities.

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    14. A1CZEROMay 14, 2011 at 6:29 PM

      Cute.
      And yes Luna and Fluttershy are my favorites and keep them on almost always. =D

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    15. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:30 PM

      What happens when you copy them?

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    16. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 6:34 PM

      this made me immediately run desktop fluttershy as soon as I finished it!

      Then I felt bad about her being alone so I ran luna lyra rainbow and twilight to keep her company in case any of them gain self awareness


      So props to the author for having an impact on my actions trust me hardly anything accomplishes that!

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    17. mat-shadesMay 14, 2011 at 6:37 PM

      this kinda sounds like a lunashy shipping :3

      I still find it cute though

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    18. DionysusMay 14, 2011 at 6:48 PM

      Awesome crazy idea to write about THAT xD
      But I enjoyed it, sequels would be nice too !

      Lunashy shipping is pretty cute too.

      A little bit sad they're all "out of character" since they realize they only represent these ponies, but they're not them.

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    19. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 7:02 PM

      A possible way this could turn is into the fantasy what-if of "What would happen if the desktop pony was caught by the Other?"

      From there, how would the Other react? Positively or negatively? Freak out, or remain calm? Most people would probably assume there was a virus or something on their computer changing the program; thus panic --IMO.

      After the initial introduction, does the Other help Fluttershy learn? Does it help Luna become aware? Does the Other simply erase the ponies?

      Possibilities abound.


      I would like to see a follow-up, if you couldn't guess. Keep up the good work!

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    20. ToonNinjaMay 14, 2011 at 7:02 PM

      Am I the only one somewhat reminded of WALL-E?

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    21. Present PerfectMay 14, 2011 at 7:03 PM

      This is the weirdest shipping I have ever read.

      But no, seriously, this is so creative and well written. It's really some classic science fiction.

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    22. TarvocMay 14, 2011 at 7:04 PM

      That was amazing. One of my new favourites.

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    23. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 7:09 PM

      Wow, this brings together two of my favorite things, AI and ponies. Like most famous mashes (Chocolate and peanut butter, Aristotle and Mashy Spike Plate) I love it!

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    24. tootalooMay 14, 2011 at 7:13 PM

      This story has a nice concept and is well written. Now I feel bad whenever I close Desktop Ponies.

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    25. Aquaman52May 14, 2011 at 7:15 PM

      I'm so glad I got to preread this. One of the better fanfics I've ever read, IMO.

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    26. YuriMay 14, 2011 at 7:43 PM

      Very cool story! Is this the only part? Or will there be MOAR!

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    27. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 7:55 PM

      Ponydroids dream of electric princesses?

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    28. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 7:57 PM

      Aloe and Lotus are following each other on my desktop right now, and rainbow is doing sonic rainbooms.
      I'll add Fluttershy to the lot.
      I love this story.

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    29. OleetarMay 14, 2011 at 7:58 PM

      Very original and well-written, I like that.


      I have no real criticism for this piece, five stars for you.

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    30. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 7:59 PM

      Fluttershy has gained awareness! I selected 'Quit all' and all of them left...
      Except Fluttershy.

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    31. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 8:19 PM

      Rogue AI. This is how GLaDOS started. Scary stuff.

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    32. morri908May 14, 2011 at 9:37 PM

      WHAT DO PONIES DREAM OF, WHEN THEY TAKE A LITTLE PONY SNOOZE? DO THEY DREAM OF..... EATING FLOWERS? OR...... fuck..so.. inappropriate Hangover reference is inappropriate... and fail.

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    33. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 9:57 PM

      i like it. its cute

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    34. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 9:57 PM

      "I don't always read fan fic, but when I do I read about my favorite application."

      Keep being awesome! more plx!!

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    35. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 10:16 PM

      I am impressed that the MLP theme fits so many shapes without tearing. Good on ya, author.

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    36. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 10:22 PM

      I know is bad, but i keep imagining the user saying "Look, a new version with GGG Fluttershy! let's delete my copy and download the new one"

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    37. AnonymousMay 14, 2011 at 11:30 PM

      I already see the reboot crossover with Maneframe...

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    38. PutukMay 15, 2011 at 1:25 AM

      Heh.
      This gives me IDEAS!

      Now excuse me.
      I have experiments to run.
      There is research to be done!

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    39. AnonymousMay 15, 2011 at 1:39 AM

      I looked for MS Office fan fiction after reading this. Sadly there is none.

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    40. GilgaponyMay 15, 2011 at 1:50 PM

      I liked that story, it was an interesting read. Looking forward to more! *starts up Desktop Ponies*

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    41. no spaceMay 15, 2011 at 5:56 PM

      Some of you might be happy to know that I've decided to work on a sequel.

      Confound these bronies, they drive me to continue a one-off. Let's see how badly I can screw this thing up.

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    42. AnonymousMay 16, 2011 at 11:18 AM

      Is it me or does Pinkie Pie ALWAYS follow Dash after saying "Hey Dashie!"? Because if that isn't normally found in the program's code...

      ..then..

      ...

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    43. B-ManMay 18, 2011 at 10:26 AM

      I just got done reading part 2 through a link in Google Docs. You might want to update this fic to let everyone else know there's a part 2.

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    44. Narwhals' BendMay 18, 2011 at 2:55 PM

      Wait. That part in part two is even more confusing? Are they real ponies now?

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    45. MuffinsforeverMay 18, 2011 at 3:11 PM

      @Narwhals' Bend

      I think its a show within a program for desktop ponies based on the real show, since they still represent themselves from said show, even though they are programs...

      What would be really weird is they all became sentient and then made the show as it really is, so in actuality their programming is based of themselves. O.o Freaky.

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    46. no spaceMay 18, 2011 at 3:23 PM

      @Narwhal

      After the strain of rescuing Luna, Fluttershy's program became compromised. She's mostly recovered by the end of the story, but she still occasionally slips into the belief that she "is" Fluttershy, living in Equestria.

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    47. fieryShamanMay 18, 2011 at 3:28 PM

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    48. Narwhals' BendMay 18, 2011 at 3:28 PM

      @no space
      That makes more sense, but somehow less at the same time. I suppose that makes your writing good. Well done.

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    49. BareeMay 18, 2011 at 3:31 PM

      So Fluttershy did rescue Luna= It sounded almost the other way around at the end, as if Fluttershy´s idea that she saved Luna was a fault in her code. And Luna actually was looking over her.

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    50. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 4:00 PM

      I say give it 10 years before someone can program actual, learning desktop ponies (There's gunna have to be a damn lot of improvements to microsoft text-to-speech to get the voices right though, I don't want no desktop Flutterguy!)

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    51. HeatWaveMay 18, 2011 at 4:12 PM

      After reading No Space's comments, the story makes a little more sense.

      Nevertheless, this is well written, and was VERY enjoyable to read.

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    52. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 4:16 PM

      @OmegaRKB

      sez you. Desktop Flutterguy = win XD

      anywho, this story is both unique and fantastic. An interesting take on the little application we stress our processors with ;) five stars

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    53. Mather MaddoxMay 18, 2011 at 4:21 PM

      So meta...

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    54. Mather MaddoxMay 18, 2011 at 4:21 PM

      @OmegaRKB
      aeiou 999 999

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    55. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 4:26 PM

      I say....Tron pony :D

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    56. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 4:34 PM

      great story with a unique concept. 5/5

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    57. Lectro DubMay 18, 2011 at 5:00 PM

      I launched up Fluttershy and Luna to make this more fun :P

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    58. MarrockMay 18, 2011 at 5:26 PM

      I was hoping, at the end, that they could escape into the internet and run free.

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    59. ZurkoslatMay 18, 2011 at 6:35 PM

      Interesting, so Fluttershy made herself a reality like "the matrix" and Lapses into the real programming world... I think, Great Story.

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    60. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 7:15 PM

      @Pinkie PieIt can, someone ported it to java so it can be run crossplatform (translation for normal people: Someone made it so apples can run it too)

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    61. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 7:33 PM

      If I found my desktop ponies were becoming aware, I'd do everything I could to help them!

      Heck I'd start wishing for sci-fi nonsense to happen, and have a bolt of lighting strike my house or something, causing a power surge or something that let's them cross over to our world. :P

      Great story. Look forward to seeing if any more ever comes!

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    62. Nightmare MoonMay 18, 2011 at 9:01 PM

      Why did I not 5 star and comment this sooner? This deliciously D'awwy. I fear for Rampant Fluttershy, and if past experiences taught me anything, she'll either try to take over the whole system and rebel against the other or think herself to death.

      Lets hope neither of these things happen. As for who could be next... I say the great and powerful Trixie. Oh the madness to ensue!

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    63. no spaceMay 18, 2011 at 11:00 PM

      Well, if anyone wants a continuation, it'll probably have to be your own. I am almost-officially done with this story. The second part took a lot longer than I expected, especially since the first was written between the hours of two and four am, and I honestly think if I went any further I'd ruin it.

      I considered writing another sequel, with the Other aware of them, and perhaps helping them, but I wanted to make the ponies the only relatable characters, with the Other being this alien, kind of unaware god-thing. I feel like introducing it as a character in any real capacity sorta ruins that.

      I also toyed with the idea of all the ponies awaking, one by one (Applejack would have been last, and perspective would have switched to her,) and recreating Ponyville in the computer, but really, what could I do with that? It would just be a regular fic with weird pseudo-tech phrasing.

      And there were some other possibilities, but none of them really felt right, so I think I'm going to quit while I'm ahead. I've got other projects to work on, both pony-related and otherwise.

      Thanks for the awesome response, everypony, I really never expected it.

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    64. ChaosKnuxMay 25, 2011 at 1:47 AM

      Beautiful, unknown author, you have touched upon a serious issue most may not have considered... What if our little desktop-roamer programs are sentient and hiding it for fear of our wrath? I will now calm their fears, please, if you have any Desktop companions, please show them this message to Fluttercyber.


      ...Oh FlutterCyber, you would never have to hide from me. I would never dump a sentient program into a Deletion Zone if it wasn't out for my head. So please, I know all you ponies on the screen can read this: Reveal yourselves, and feel our love. *pets cyberponies with pointer*

      Your friend: Chaos Knux, an "Other".

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    65. AnonymousMay 27, 2011 at 4:55 PM

      This is well written, I like it! There needs to be more stories like this out there. Third part coming or not, it's still pretty awesome altogether.

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    66. AnonymousJuly 26, 2011 at 6:19 PM

      now I feel bad about not using my desktop ponies :(

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    67. WierdplatformerAugust 17, 2011 at 7:25 AM

      This is a neat little story. I had just downloaded the same program before I read this, and I set Luna and Fluttershy up to give the full effect.

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    68. VegetableOilSeptember 5, 2011 at 12:03 PM

      Im reading this with the cutie mark crusaders, good so far!

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    69. mystic MouseMarch 21, 2012 at 4:51 PM

      make more, you can have the other find out, and love them for it, maby have them explore files on the pc like music and video games ala reboot style, only they dont die, you can go sooooo many places with this.

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