• Story: Soaring through Fire

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    Author: Mixup
    Description: On an uninteresting day, a certain Wonderbolt makes an interesting decision.
    Soaring through Fire

    Additional Tags: First date, Wonderbolts, shipping, light humor
    Tuesday, October 11, 2011 op
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    36 comments:

    1. HanselOctober 11, 2011 at 12:01 PM

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    2. AnonymousOctober 11, 2011 at 12:02 PM

      SoarinxSpitfire? nice screwup Jelfes

      Stupid school system, troubling me with not letting blogger work right.

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    3. HanselOctober 11, 2011 at 12:02 PM

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    4. AnonymousOctober 11, 2011 at 12:03 PM

      god dang it, i screwed it up too...

      >=(

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    5. HanselOctober 11, 2011 at 12:04 PM

      Ewww, hetero shipping! Naww I don't care, Spitfire is much like Dash, can be shipped with everypony! I wonder if this'll be another story that has Soarin' going crazy for pie again. Time to read.

      AHHH, WHY MUST I DERP SO?

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    6. DasOctober 11, 2011 at 12:06 PM

      good read loved it, hope to read more from author

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    7. AnonymousOctober 11, 2011 at 12:06 PM

      I would read it but I need to finish that TwiDash fic from earlier.

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    8. GTG12ificationOctober 11, 2011 at 12:12 PM

      Oh yay, i know Mixxy! He has like, 3 or 2 more fics, but they aren't here. But it's still okay!

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    9. HanselOctober 11, 2011 at 12:20 PM

      "...or at least wait ‘til it’s raining so you can stand at his door, crying in the rain!” They do realize it can't really rain in Cloudsdale, right?

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    10. Magical TrevorOctober 11, 2011 at 12:37 PM

      Whaaaaaaat?! A Spitfire ship that isn't Dashie?! Is that even allowed?!

      XD All joking aside, it was nice! It was left open enough for more chapters, but wrapped up well enough to be a one-shot! If there are more chapters, Trevor is certainly going to read them!

      ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

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    11. Ragneki5880October 11, 2011 at 12:37 PM

      Great read

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    12. statooseOctober 11, 2011 at 12:44 PM

      Sounds interesting. Gonna have to read this one.

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    13. StahiOctober 11, 2011 at 12:45 PM

      Speaking of apple pie, I've haven't seen a Spitfire/AJ ship as of yet.

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    14. HanselOctober 11, 2011 at 12:46 PM

      Good read, though some of the dialogue was said very awkwardly.

      “Indeed,” Doc replied, turning to face the mare beside him, “would not be, were it not for Lightning here.”
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      “Quite. So, we are now even, yes Soarin’?” Doc inquired.

      The awkwardness of the text only being amplified by the poor punctuation. I'll give it a 3/5.

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    15. MelodiaOctober 11, 2011 at 12:51 PM

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    16. KiziOctober 11, 2011 at 1:09 PM

      I liked it, short and sweet.

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    17. NämahsOctober 11, 2011 at 1:20 PM

      Dat plot shot

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    18. RiskyOctober 11, 2011 at 1:33 PM

      Cute, short, sweet. Not a lot of content but anything but bad. 3/5, but good things from the writing, I predict.

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    19. TheBlackBaronOctober 11, 2011 at 1:39 PM

      It's kind of odd you don't see this ship more often. I suppose everybody's too busy shipping the both of them with Dash (at the same time, even). Or with AJ, in Soarin's case.

      Anyway, into the "to read" pile. Gotta finish the Sparkledash fic from last night.

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    20. MelodiaOctober 11, 2011 at 1:47 PM

      Cute but kinda pointless. I mean, there wasn't much to the story and it's about a pair of chars who are just few-liner backgrounds. It's not bad but...I guess it just kinda feels unnecessary, in a sense.

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    21. Greenf0xOctober 11, 2011 at 1:51 PM

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    22. CloudstreamOctober 11, 2011 at 1:56 PM

      Dat plot.

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    23. DetoxicityOctober 11, 2011 at 1:59 PM

      5/5 for the plot shot.

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    24. nemrynOctober 11, 2011 at 2:27 PM

      So, what do we call this ship? I vote for Spittin'.

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    25. OctaviaOctober 11, 2011 at 2:37 PM

      Okay, I was reading the comments and didn't see any plot comments on the pic for a ways down... was starting to worry about you guys. ;)

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    26. Autumn WindOctober 11, 2011 at 3:22 PM

      That was a cute little shipping fic. Not much content there, I'll concede, but it was nice for a feel good moment.

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    27. kitsOctober 11, 2011 at 3:25 PM

      @nemryn
      SoarFire?

      3/5. If I could 2.5 I would. There's not a lot here. I mean, it's decently written, but the characters are just... handed to us. There's no real character development going on.

      Writing OCs (most BGs may as well be OCs) means you have the extra burden of establishing a character. Neither Soarin nor Spitfire have more than the barest essence of what could be called a character canonically. So to have them fall in love is mostly unmoving. Using a BG/OC pony is easier because you don't have to worry about cries of "Out of Character!". At the same time it's harder because you have to completely build the character in order to really make readers care.

      When shipping the mane 6 you HAVE a fully developed character. The difficulty is, you now have to move that character from her canon personality to one where she's actually date/kiss/sleep with/marry etc the other one. This is a lot harder to do with a mane character because you MUST stay in character or people will call you on it.

      I must say though, even if it had been two mane characters, there's not much more to this than "One pony likes another pony and hasn't told them. Then something happens and one pony confesses love. Other pony returns love."

      While short and cute, this is what I refer to as a 'February' fic, reminiscent of the types of fics from the earlier days in the fandom. (See most AppleDash fics.) The fandom generally demands a lot more from most fics these days and

      I am totally surprised by the rating here. Perhaps @Detoxicity represents a large majority of readers than I would like to think exist. You're rating a STORY not it's cover image people =/

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    28. iAndsterOctober 11, 2011 at 4:39 PM

      @Kits

      "I am totally surprised by the rating here. Perhaps @Detoxicity represents a large majority of readers than I would like to think exist. You're rating a STORY not it's cover image people =/"

      Or it could be that people think differently from you.

      I liked the story, even without the character development. From all of the other fics I've read starring these two, they developed the characters for me enough to give me an idea on how these two are. Although it's not canon, it still fits in accurately with the writing going on here, and as long as they're not just two characters out of the blue, I don't really give two shits.

      On the other hand, it IS one of those short stories, kind of like the ones you read in collection books? They're meant to be short, sweet, and allow the reader to interpret the characters any way they want given the short amount of context.

      --

      As for the story, I liked it, but it could be a bit longer. 4/5.

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    29. von BoomslangOctober 11, 2011 at 5:04 PM

      Want. More D:

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    30. Cold in GardezOctober 11, 2011 at 5:13 PM

      It wasn't a bad read, but stories like this remind me of junk food. There's ultimately nothing there.

      How would you describe the plot of this story to someone? The conflict? Character development?

      It's pure escapism. People read it and enjoy it because for a few minutes they imagine it happening to them. Junk food.

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    31. InFamous SpartanOctober 11, 2011 at 5:38 PM

      spitfire + shipping = Me gusta

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    32. CottonmouthOctober 11, 2011 at 6:11 PM

      Jesus christ..... 6 months ago this fic would have been 5 stars with most of the comments saying "I cried."

      Now everyone is criticizing

      I was ahead of my time I tell you.

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    33. ScottOctober 11, 2011 at 6:48 PM

      Glad I read it, great job :)

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    34. JocuroOctober 11, 2011 at 9:02 PM

      @Cold in Gardez I agree. But, that's not a bad thing. There's tons of long, quality fics out there. Taking a break for some quick cute-attack-inducing junk-fic is nice sometimes. Especially when time is a factor.

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    35. zaptiftunOctober 13, 2011 at 9:34 PM

      Awww, that was pretty cute if a bit short.

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    36. Fury of the TempestMarch 4, 2012 at 1:12 PM

      I like it. It really is rather cleverly done as well as very funny, with its adorable moments.

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