Friday, December 16, 2011

Story: One Night In Manehattan

[Shipping] Rainbow Pie! What a Rarity.

Author: Whiteout
Description: Flying with the Wonderbolts is everything Rainbow Dash ever thought she wanted, but are her dreams worth what she's missing? One night can change a lot of things...
One Night In Manehattan

Additional Tags: Snuggles, Surprises, Showers, Silly, Shock and D'awww.

35 comments:

DJ-Pinkamina said...

Read it and LOVED ! Dat ending... Dun dun dun!

AestheticB said...

"Shock and D'awwww" Indeed. Good stuff.

MedicShy said...

Picture, you have swayed me to reading this story no matter the content!

Homfrog said...

*is locked in a bathtub*
And the rough got rougher...

Offtopicrainbow said...

On an unrelated note, you lazy fillies need to get over here

http://www.synchtube.com/r/Filly#

Overlong Analysis Cobalt said...

Not bad. The details were pretty good, description and all that. But it felt more like a vignette than a story for most of it - nothing wrong with that, but it's a thing. Also, there was a lot of time devoted to Rainbow Dash thinking about the past, and not a ton devoted to what was actually happening. It felt more like a lot of exposition, and while the ending was nice, there just wasn't a lot that happened.

It was a pleasant story, and I'm happy to have read it.

Grez said...

I remember when Rainbow Pie was just about all there was.
Still my OTP.

Michael Butcher said...

I'm only here because of the pun

gb2matty said...

I liked it a lot. Quite a good short read!

CityFlyer502 said...

Just read through this, and I'm definitely left wanting to know what exactly happened. Nothing to do, but wait. In the meantime, bravo Whiteout.

MasterLuigi452 said...

Shower tag...
Whatisthisidonteven...

Marock said...

Wow those be some awesome tags...

RoboticGiraffe said...

Whiteout, as a new member of the herd all I can say is that I love this so much. Make it longer! Hahaha

Joystik said...

good read, looking forward to the next chapter if there is one. Rainbow Pie ftw

Steel Resolve said...

sugar levels rising, i can see the future, my god its full of ponies...

MedicShy said...

Alright, it was short and adorable, but the time spent on exposition and backstory, no matter how cute the reveal... ugh, I hate to do it, but I'm afraid if the words for the stars are what I must go by, it's a 3: I liked it! Cute and short and fun!

Ink Plot said...

One night in Manehatten, and the world's your oyster~

Allantrius Sol said...
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DPV111 said...

@Ink Plot
New someone was going to make that reference...

Mr.Brony said...

Pretty good, I'm looking forward to the updates.

Whiteout said...

Wow, I wasn't sure this would go up this quickly. :3

Thanks for reading, everyone!

@Overlong Analysis Cobalt

@MedicShy

Yes, there's quite a bit of exposition in this chapter. First rule of fanfiction, if you're going to change the setting from canon, the reader needs to have a clear idea of how things got to where they are.

Don't worry, there's action, silliness, and almost criminal levels of cute still to come.

Phishstrangler75 said...
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Nando said...

Woo! Been a while since I've seen Dashie Pie. Diving in~!

SunsetSprinkles said...

That was adorable. Long live DashiePie!

Nando said...

I realized I've been reading nothing but one-shots lately. Expecting that was it, I didn't realize the 'Incomplete' label.

There's more?! Glee!

Aside from a few notable typing errors, and the exposition that is typical in first chapters; that was pretty damn sweet.

With that ending, I can't wait to see where it goes.

Tchernobog said...

Read this while it was being written. Whiteout's a friend ;)

I do very much love the idea of cutie mark engagement earrings. This idea needs to catch on!

LoganB said...

I was disapointed because I already read this on deviantart. The news of more to come however fills my heart with glee. DashiePie is the best.

Nocciolina Felice said...

Loved it! I'll be waiting for more!

DPV111 said...

That was some of the best realistic relationshipping I've read this side of Romance reports.

MastaMoose said...

Ive read this before it was posted here on equestria daily. HA!

FreezingShock said...

This sory definitely comes highly recommended. It's cute, well-written and already has Dash and Pinkie in a relationship from the beginning, which is rather refreshing after reading so many fics in which they get together.

It hasn't been updated for 20 weeks now, but the author says he's still working on it, so I have high hopes I'll be able to return to this page one day after being linked here from a story update.

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