• Story: Moldbreaker (Update Story 2 Part 1+2+3+4!)


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    Author: Ryo242
    Description: When Celestia ends up causing a star to fall just before Nightmare Moon's return, the future changes upon its arrival in Equestria.
    Moldbreaker Chapter 1: Arrival
    Moldbreaker Chapter 2: Rumors
    Moldbreaker Chapter 3: Uncontrolled
    Moldbreaker Chapter 4: Prophecy
    Moldbreaker Chapter 5: Apples
    Moldbreaker Chapter 6: Meetings
    Moldbreaker Chapter 7: Surprises
    Moldbreaker Chapter 8: Darkness
    Moldbreaker Chapter 9: Judgement
    Moldbreaker Chapter 10: Meetings
    Moldbreaker Chapter 11: Dawn

    Additional Tags: Shooting Star, NoShipping, Magick, Alternate Timeline, Mystery

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    Description: Spike enlists the aid of a friend to gain Rarity's attention, but the spell has unpredicted side effects.
    Unwanted Attention Part 1 (New!)
    Unwanted Attention Part 2 (New!)
    Unwanted Attention Part 3 (New!)
    Unwanted Attention Part 4 (New!)

    Additional Tags: Lolshipping, Spike, Ray, Episodic, Comedy

    45 comments:

    1. No shipping tag? Also first(?)

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    2. Why do so many people hate shipping?

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    3. I get an error message on chapter 2 and 3

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    4. For some reason I don't have permission for chapters two and three.

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    5. Aww, for some reason I can't access chapters 2 and 3. But I'm filled with questions and want them answered naaaooow! ;)

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    6. Yep, 2 and 3 are derped... I keep getting the google docs sign-in page.

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    7. I'm on it sirs! Ohmigoshohmigoshohmigosh

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    8. the first chapter was great but it wont let me access the next two it said i needed permission whats the deal

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    9. I think it was some weird error, I hopefully got it fixed now.

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    10. Woooooo!
      Glad to see that this fanfic is on here now.
      -PG

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    11. MOLDbreaker? Falling star?

      *remembers a particular song* I see what you did there. XD

      I'll be sure to check it out a bit later.

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    12. read 2 and 3 great chapter's how long until Ray meets Twilight i'm guessing he's going to ponyville with her i can't help but wonder how his first meeting with his mother will go since Luna created the stars and Ray was a star i think that makes her his mother could be wrong anyway good story looking forward to seeing where this goes will you be pairing Ray with anypony just wondering

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    13. @Anonymous

      This guy is also known as "The Non-Punctuator". Fear his power!

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    14. After so much work, glad to see Moldbreaker finally up on ED, Ryo.

      I feel honored to have proofread the whole story and hope they enjoy it as much as I did.

      Again, I loved how I was able to compare the different situations that changed, if not little, everypony's reactions while still holding faithfully close to the original.

      @Gallant Vision

      Smash Mouth I presume?

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    15. Rather an interesting story, so far...

      I must say that the ''NoShipping'' tag made me reconsider reading, for a moment... I don't really care that much if there's shipping or not, but to go as far as to especially put a tag ? Well... I had my doubts.

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    16. Awesome you finally got onto ED, SSG
      It was a good read proofreading your work
      Can't wait for more chapters

      Now things have been mentioned since I last read it
      Glad to know you've taken the route of a temporary injury; to each his or her own way of expressing 'fics

      Just still a bit concerned how Rarity did put here beauty concerns ahead and a lil' less smack from AJ considering what those two been through in Fall Weather Friends.

      But what's done is done, continue on OwO

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    17. Oops sorry wrong fic
      ~Geo

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    18. @Geoberos

      >: I'm not SSG. Silly Geo.

      For all my semi-adoring fans but mostly all the adoring fans, I'm working on getting the rest of the chapters up. Yes, I like the "NoShipping" tag, because it makes you go: "So I don't have to read about Rarity getting paired up with an OC? Finally!"

      Though really, without Dash-anything, it's not truly a fanfic... :3

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    19. @Ryo242

      Sorry Sorry I had both y'all's fic up in my browser and I posted in the wrong one TnT

      Anyways I did leave a comment for you two comments before the SSG one.

      Yeah NoShipping tag for those who need not be surprised by suddenly shipping. Then again, those with shipping do have Shipping tag, so if it doesn't have that tag, so it shouldn't even have it at all?

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    20. lolwhatismydrawingdoingherenoponyevenaskedme
      i still don't get what does it have to do with the story so far XD
      i like the story btw. whyisraysocute

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    21. @ohhaii'lljustleavethishere

      I don't think the picture really has to do with the story, it's sorta one of those: "Well this story and this picture could go together.." plus I'm waiting for someone to draw me a picture of Ray. Then I will "suggest" that picture instead.

      Why is he so cute..? o.o He is?

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    22. seriously under rated

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    23. @Ryo242

      Did you ever find somepony to draw Ray? I could push back a few of my works if need be.

      'Course Ray's mad ador'bs. Might I remind you to give him apples?

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    24. No "everybody loves Ray" reference?

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    25. As one of the bronies who hates shipping, I can tell you it's because it's almost always something lesbian. We get sick of the greatest cartoon characters ever conceived by human imagination being portrayed by supposed "fans" as being lesbians.

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    26. I don't even... how is this simply a star-4? Ya know what... just. just take all of my stars.

      Great OC pony AND a masterfully written twist on the pilot episode? Love it!

      @anonymous 9/14/11 11:26
      omg, agree. This fic is def. underrated. Keep up the good work and I'd love to see more about Ray :)

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    27. @RainbowDat
      Me personally have no problem with shipping. I have trouble seeing why people hate it so much. I mean, clopfics take it a bit too far sometimes, but for the most part, it's nice to see relationships grow between characters. Whether it's background ponies or the Mane 6, relationships add another level of character that most likely would never be canon for obvious reasons. This is fiction and fiction is the realm of imagination. It's your opinion but try not to be close-minded about it.

      With that said, a NoShipping tag really? I'd think the absence of a shipping tag to begin with is enough lol. But to each their own I suppose. Seems like overkill to me though.

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    28. @RainbowDat

      Eh I think the old phrase, "familiarity breeds contempt" is what at play with the noshipping issue. I could also be that the author is forming relationships that don't have to be romantic because the protagonist really doesn't understand that yet. Sufficed to say not every story needs shipping but every story revolves around relationships.

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    29. Loved the story btw very innocent and I enjoyed reading it.

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    30. great chapters, and love hoe it flowed, I also was kind of suprised, I was actualy expecting ray to be some sort of 7th element like the element of bravery, but you completely suprised me with the direction you took

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    31. Well. Yeah. That was an enjoyable story I guess. I skimmed the chapter for the most part that was basically a retelling of the episode. The ending was ok I guess. To be honest, I am not sure if I agree with the decision to leave Ray in Ponyville, even if he visits Canterlot occasionally. Clearly, Luna liked the idea of havng someone keeping her company during her night, and I am sure Ray would have loved to do that. Not sure why you would hint at that if you then don't let Ray go back with the Princesses.

      Well, minor point, really. All in all, was fun enough to read.

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    32. I'm glad everyone is enjoying my story. I was mistaken in thinking that there would be more of a fanbase for Penny, but that's how it happens.

      As for the ending, I thought it would be similar to how Twilight is allowed to stay to learn life lessons and things that could not be learned through palace life. Ray, having learned much during his time, now has friends with which to experience life... etc etc.. SPOILERS EVERYWHERE.

      But seriously. ^-^ I never expected it to be this popular. Now I want to write more...

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    33. Well, I got that much, but I also feel sorry for Luna :P

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    34. @Baree

      Don't make me have to go write another few chapters of him and Luna. The fan-bronies will kill me. T_T Unless... I KILL ME FIRST!? Besides, he'd keep his promise... ARTISTIC SPARK. Will add-on a bit.

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    35. Haha. Well then, I'll be looking forward to that. Really though, it was just the little scene where Luna perks up when Ray says he will stay up all night. Hadn't that been in the story I wouldn't have cared. Strange... That really was just one sentence wasn't it, yet it had an impact on me I guess :)

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    36. Well here's the drawing I finally finished of the story's epilogue, Ryo

      http://geoberos.deviantart.com/art/FicArt-Moldbreaker-Sunrise-258321387

      ~ Geoberos

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    37. @RainbowDat
      "As one of the bronies who hates shipping,"

      Love and tolerance.

      "I can tell you it's because it's almost always something lesbian."

      Well any ship between the mane cast will by default be F/F since they are ALL FEMALE.

      "We get sick of"

      Should be "I"

      "the greatest cartoon characters ever conceived by human imagination"

      Should be "my favorite cartoon characters of all time"

      "being portrayed by supposed "fans" as being lesbians."

      A portrayal is just a portrayal. You are not forced to embrace it so why are you taking it personally. You have absolutely no right to speak on whether someone is a fan or not when your only qualifier is your personal taste.

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    38. For those interested, a second story is in the final stages. It will be a continuation and more original storyline!

      Must keep a heads up for my endearing fan(s)!

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    39. M-M-M-M-MOLDBREAKER

      Keep up the great work! That truly was a pleasure to read. Can't wait for part two!

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    40. Ryo, I got the first sketch for Unwanted Attention up.
      http://geoberos.deviantart.com/art/FicArt-U-A-Hi-Spike-265453936
      The wondrous many mares, but sadly too lazy to fit all of them in. And then there's Spike. . . and Ray.

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    41. o.o Wasn't expecting it to go up like this, but SWEET. ^_^d Okay, part three is already thought out but not written because of current work loads.

      Also Luna went from being slightly bigger than Ray to being much larger from "Luna Eclipsed" -.-

      I did panic quite a bit when "Zero Lesson" came out too.. @__@ There was much back-writing to make things work. I hope you guys enjoy it.

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