• Story: An Imaginative Performance


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    Author: Bob From Bottles
    Description: It's once again time for Ponyville's annual school play. This year's performance is 'The Trials of the Hero' with Apple Bloom as the lead. Production values may be low, but with a little imagination, it'll be a night to remember.

    An Imaginative Performance

    Additional Tags: Cheerilee's students perform a musical

    24 comments:

    1. Author of Worst Bakers. Comedy. Automatic read. Right. Now.

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    2. Bob From Bottles?
      Comedy?
      School Play?
      Appleboom as lead?

      There goes the rest of my day...


      You know, today seems to be a really good day for fanfics. I have no complaints about this.

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    3. talking of which, did worst bakers ever get finished and i missed it?

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    4. aha, the answer is yes!

      goes to download and send to kindle, along with this...

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    5. I'm going to be so late for class because of this. Wonder if my proff will see reading a story as a legitimate excuse.

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    6. This is hilarious, and it feels so very authentic. Whoever did this has to have some experience with school plays.

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    7. It's fantastic! Very droll, but never silly - it's realistic comedy with a great conceit. Well done.

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    8. @Vimbert the Unimpressive
      Yep, it made it. Thank you again for your help with editing.

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    9. > Cheerilee's class performs a play with Applebloom as the lead
      My first thought was, "Cheerilee's Garden is tame enough for Equestria Daily?!" Then I realized it was a different fic.

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    10. This story was very well done! Wow, I'm really stunned.

      I don't normally comment on stories, but when I do, they have to be really good.

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    11. Laughter, happiness, giddy smiles, and breaking into fits of excited clapping were had as I read this story! So adorable and cute, it is one great work of art! Thank you Bob from Bottles for writting it!

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    12. This is one of the best things. I loved this whole story. I'm going to put this in my favorites. So many smiles and laughter from this story, so very happy that I gave this one a chance and read it.

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    13. This...

      Wow. The comedy is so well done in this story. The pacing is good, the story itself is commendable, and the humor derived from the reader's understanding of the connection between the 'imagination' side of the story and what was actually happening on stage is phenomenal.

      I only had one problem with your writing: TOO MANY PASSIVE VERBS! You use 'began to' and the many forms of 'to be' WAY too often; I found it distracting. Otherwise, this is 5/5 gold, and the fact that it currently only has 38 ratings appalls me.

      By the way, the Majora's mask reference had me rolling.

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    14. @Corejo
      Thanks for pointing that out. I'll go through my story again tonight and fix that.

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    15. @Bob from Bottles

      I could see this as an episode right out of the series! It fits perfectly!

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