• Story: A New Harmony (Update Complete!)


    [Sad] [Dark]

    Author: Pascoite
    Description: Twilight Sparkle has defeated Discord, but she lacked the discipline to do a proper job of it. He's ready for a rematch, but he's recruited three ponies to be his unwitting minions, and nopony will know he's behind it until it's too late. Everypony is in for some serious mind games.

    A New Harmony (All Links) (New Chapter 4!)

    Additional Tags: Sweetie Belle, Discord, Conspiracy, Light Humor, Psychological Warfare

    20 comments:

    1. Sad. Dark.

      ..Comedy? How does that work?

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    2. I read the prologue. Not sure if want to continue.

      I think I'll hold out till ratings.

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    3. I was about to make a witty commit about the tags, but I don't have to.

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    4. Spoiler for Chapter 1.


      So, I'm assuming that Sweetie is long conned by Discord into doing his will, but if control over demons is an loan over an innate power, why Sweetie Bell over someone a bit more bitter?

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    5. I tend to discard prologues whenever I read a story. If you can get past that, you're rewarded with a pretty little seed of potential.

      The concept of Sweetie Belle as a demon master intrigues me, and the first chapter has me curious to see where the author will actually take the little filly.

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    6. Come on, demons. Obey me!

      Aww, he said that you would follow my every command...

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    8. And let me assure that the comedy is scattered around in little bits. It's not intended to be a funny story.

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    9. If it's not intended to be a funny story, it should not have [comedy] as a tag bro.

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    10. It'd be hard to have Discord in there without some sense of humor. Maybe try to put some dark humor here and there so there's still comedy but without compromising the grimdark part of it.

      This looks like it could easily shape up to be a very interesting story. I look forward to seeing more.

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    11. Good effort, but I think the characterization of Discord is a bit off. He's a bit too dark for my tastes. Even in the show he wasn't truly evil; he was just mischievous and chaotic. Plus I think he's a little too focused.

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    12. It seems like an interesting story, although I don't like its interpretation of, well, all sorts of stuff. Dark Evil Discord, the elements being less powerful because Twilight sucks, Twilight keeping the tiara under her bed in a box...

      And Sweetie Belle seems a bit out of character, although mostly in the backstory where she's being genuinely helpful to Rarity. Being manipulated into doing dangerous things and stealing is totally IC for her.

      Anyway, um, yeah. It's pretty good. n.n

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    13. I enjoyed reading these two parts. Looking forward greatly to more.

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    14. best story ive read so far keep up the good work. astounding plot and everything. what i like the most is that you kept close to the sarcastic and humorous yet cynical character of discord.

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    16. " After reading the current three chapters from _A NEW HARMONY_, the story so far has been quite entertaining. Although the rating of the story would have a better rating at GRIMDARK and COMEDY. It intrigues me of how the story was stacked with such a mix up of Demon folklore, dark age magics, and above all using SWEETEBELLE as the tragic mane character in this grim-comedy. Its seems to better suit her then any other "My Little Pony" character i could think of. I have so far have been chilled, confused in a slight puzzlement of what was going on, and a tickling sensation of the slight comical acts of the "cheeky devil" DISCORD. I give _A NEW HARMONY_ a 4.4 star. I shall give further word in my next Critic after chapter 4."

      -FoxMane

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    17. @Kabloohey
      No, just overcome by events. The final chapter is about 2/3 done.

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