Saturday, November 26, 2011

Story: Silence is Bittersweet (Update Part 7!)


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Author: Truehearted
Description: The story of a mute musician trying to make her way in a new city. Can she make friends? And can those friends take the time to learn her language... only Celestia knows.

Silence is Bittersweet Part 1

Silence is Bittersweet Part 2
Silence is Bittersweet Part 3
Silence is Bittersweet Part 4
Silence is Bittersweet Part 5
Silence is Bittersweet Part 6
Silence is Bittersweet Part 7 (New!)

Additional Tags: Adversity, Friendship, Music, Life, Hope

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41 comments:

Dublio said...

-waves at Truehearted-

Looks like it made it to EqD after all. Congrats.

Bombedrumbum said...

Sounds like a shoot-off Octavia fic. Will read.



Cereal is posting fics now?? What is this, the Twilight Zone?!

Bombedrumbum said...

@Dublio oh, well in that case.......

Congratz!!

MandoPony said...

D'aww! Musical ponies. <3

*has nothing more interesting to say*

Pinkamina Diane Pie said...

The pony in the pic looks kinda drunk…
Yep, that's all I have to say.

Blackbelt said...

I wanna read more of this.

minty said...

I think the intro could be made to be more attention grabbing, instead of having the character going about doing her daily stuff. But that's just me i guess..

@Pinkamina Diane Pie haha i agree!

elohisa said...

This story is lovely. It's very heart-warming so far. I adore the way you characterized Ray and treated Tiana's lack of speech so respectfully. I'm looking forward to the next part!

Rhe7oric said...

Who is that green maned pony in the picture above? Did she show up in today's episode or something?

Ogopogo said...

I knew someone in a similar situation going up through elementary school. She was deaf from birth and had to use sign language or writing to communicate. I feel that while not the same situation, the writer expressed the hardships of having a disability as such beautifully.

truehearted said...

*squee*

Thank you all for your comments, it helps keep me goin!

@Dublio *waves* muaha! victory is mine!

@minty It was (in my opinion) but was told didnt flow and/or fit right. so this is what the revisions came out with. But in the end, i did want the daily routine feel.

Mr Bronc said...

@truehearted That was a great story. You rock. Whoo hoo. I can't wait to read the next part!

truehearted said...

@MandoPony if your the same feller that made: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DPqsl3SDUr0 than you sir get MY thanks for makins such beautiful sounds that I can but hope to capture in writing.

*brohoof*

Tundra said...

Now this is a story with promise.
Good luck with future endeavors.

Faram said...

Really like this so far, the OC nature of the ponies and the setting is a refreshing change. I like your characters instantly and look forward to hearing more from them.
Couple of niggles- the accent of Ray seems slightly overblown and the nature of Acoustiana's disability is not clear from the outset (admittedly, that is largely my fault, for some reason I had assumed she was deaf and so got rather confused!)
I like the slow start, lets us get settled in her head.
Excellent start, I hope you get lots of readers!

Shimmer Scroll said...

(Since Disqus ate my last comment...)

A promising start. I did have a slight problem with pacing in the beginning – a few scene breaks would have helped – but the genuinely interesting characters did more than enough to offset that. Looking forward to more!

truehearted said...

Seems im gonna have to step up muh game if im gonna get that 5 star rating...

SPIIIIKE! get the shovle!

cheezesauce said...

@Shimmer Scroll
oh yea! this story does need scene breaks now that you mention it.

danabler42 said...

hope to see an update on this story soon

Truehearted said...

Ive already started Part 3, Part 2 is working its way through reviewers to ensure its up to par for my current star rating.

I only want to submit baked goods...no baked bads from me!

Kroqgar said...

Intriguingly different, if a little slow-paced at times. My only other criticism is that everyone seems to be very hung up on manners and decorum, apologising a whole lot. Being polite and civil is good, but don't have it ruin the flow of the story.

Aside from that, I'm enjoying the read! I'm pretty curious about who exactly is going to earn that shipping tag. At first I would have said Acoustiana, but from the looks of things Ray and Pastel are quite close. But are they simply good friends? I suppose only time will tell.

Truehearted said...

eeexcelent...yessssss...(que greedy spike tongue lash)

And yes, I know the dinner scene was...tedious at times...but I had to go over choice points to characters. I can but only ask that you understand it is all for a purpose...albeit obfuscated one

Shimmer Scroll said...

I've been waiting for this one. Very intriguing, and I especially appreciate how you're fleshing out a facet of society that often goes entirely unnoticed.

Shinji Nichida said...

Finnally! The so awaited continuation!

8171a80c-3be9-11e1-b008-000bcdcb471e said...

I relate SO much to this story, Im actually deaf and a brony (damn proud of it). I read through your craft and found it nearly exactly the same things that I have to deal with everyday.

KEEP this great piece of work up :> cant wait for chapter 3!

Truehearted said...

@8171a80c-3be9-11e1-b008-000bcdcb471e

Thank you! I tried to channel what I know some of my firends go through when makin this. Chapter 3 is half done, i took a couple weeks off to enjoy prezzy's and all :D

8171a80c-3be9-11e1-b008-000bcdcb471e said...

I cant wait for your chapter three (this is anonymous from Jan 10's post. *pinkie pie bounce*

Truehearted said...

Chapter 3 is finished being written...now its gettin cleaned by reviwers.

I will note that this delay is mostly due to RL stuff, but I made sure to keep writing. Too much good feedback not too *nods*

8171a80c-3be9-11e1-b008-000bcdcb471e said...

*waves at Truehearted*

This is the guy again :d, Im happy that you're currently working on chapter 3!

You should also post that story here if you want to have more readers and everything-

fimfiction.net

*nods and waves* Love your story and cant wait for chapter 3, toodles!

Truehearted said...

Done and done.

Thnx again for the suport :D

RWC said...

You really need to work on your "where" and "were", other than that I love the story

Androidred0100 said...

A couple grammatical stuff, some scene changes seem abrupt and certain things seem to be assumed and perhaps under developed. I'm sure things aren't being over looked but there are a few instances where there are some leaps of logic (for lack of a better term) that need some reflection to follow which kind of stagnates the flow.

That said, the characters are intriguing and endearing, well balanced and most importantly (in my book at least) human. I'm very curious to see what you're going to do with them.

Here's to continued progress! *raises wine glass in toast*

Truehearted said...

@Androidred0100

moew? I knew there was still some grammer and mechanics issues, im no english major and my helpers didnt have as much time this round. But jumps of logic worries me. If you could be so kind as to point those specific issues out I would be much abliged. To me it all makes sence as I know the ending and all that fun stuff.

Side note, if you refer to the fruit stand scene...it WILL make sence, just gotta keep with it :D hehe.

pirinja03 said...

Really loved it. Cannot wait for more.

Truehearted said...

For those that pay attention, Part 3 has been spruced up, its not on par with the rest of my works

Admiral Stoic "Crusader" Rum said...

oh I was just thinkig about this story and I kind of happy it updated


more than kind of

Yavarin said...

Waterfall in my face.
A really touching story, i love it.

Baree said...

Ah, good to see an update.

Baree said...

Ah, good to see an update.

Truehearted said...

@Baree

never stopped workin on it...but after you read this update, you might get an idea why it took forever...

sooo many things I had to get right...so much research and...well...throbing migranes from channeling my inner girl...she was not please with all the work i put her through and threw many a fit...

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