Description: "Twilight Sparkle practices Dream Magic, but an uncivilized pink pony messes it all up. Is three in one dream a crowd?"
Oh this is so getting b&. There's no actual Trixie in the story... And you didn't hear that.
I haven't read it yet, but I'm really, really hoping that Pinkie Pie has a line in it along the lines of. . . "Twilight! It's like the layers of a delicious cake! We need to go deeper."
It's slightly confusing to get what's happening, but on the other hand... This IS a dream after all.Also, *GASP* : *Spike with Pinky Pie* ? ...quite sure this is unprecedented !Buuuut... All things considered, it wasn't so bad. It was ''fine''.
What.What....WHAT......W...H...A...TThis is incredibly confusing and silly
@SlyWit The original title was "My Little Misconception" (awwwkward). However, the fic itself doesn't have much to do with Inception, so... No references.Great idea though. Maybe someone will tackle that.@nova_25 Danke. Being confusing, of course, is the whole point. ;)Actually not: not a single thing in the story is random or indecipherable, it just follows a different kind of logic. Just like dreams do.Also, for this reason, you won't get much at all out of the story if you don't think about what things in the dream actually mean.@Anonymous Mission accomplished then.
"Disturbingly too many adverbs," disapprovingly said the commenter. ;)That said, this captured the disjointed tone and "dream logic" very well. And Pinkie-Spike is a pairing I don't remember ever seeing before!
@Lurks-no-More I definitely have to learn to keep a leash on that. That, and my the a's and the the's.Also, thankyou-thankyou! Very glad to see someone appreciate the "Dream logic", that's pretty much the whole point of the story.
That was hard to read, harder to follow and very enjoyable once you get into the whole dream-logic thing.
Now, this went a bit better than two-stars, didn't it?@Anonymous Thanks a lot!I know I have to work on my style and characters, but I still have no idea how. Having never written a thing before in my life might have something to do with that.
"I wear the cheese, it does not wear me."I loled, I then got all googly when I saw the pair-up.
@Anonymous I KNEW this would noticed more than anything. Probably because it's writing of a much better author: Joss Whedon. Although, to be fair, it's one of his best lines.Ideally, the shipping should become apparent - crawling in your subconscious - long before any cheese. My bad.Thanks!
I cant tell if the author is trolling us or not.gave up about halfway due to confusion. its not the fact that it is all in dream sequences, it is just the way the author wrote it make is so garrishly hard to follow.
@Anonymous That wasn't helpful. Tell me what's wrong, I'll fix it.
Question: Why are there so many article-adjectives missing? Is it part of your style? It kinda feels informal, even in a dream-logic story...LOL at Twilight going bonkers in the dream. It's like she keeps that insanity with her at all times but releases it only when she's under great strees (like the Parasprite episode)!
@The Epic Spammastor of Ponifics Oh wow. That's actually a side-effect of me removing a ton of them: I always use way too many. Thanks for pointing it out!As for insanity: spot on. I really think she's like that.Thanks a ton for the kind words!
You captured dream logic perfectly, but I was expecting Twilight or Pinkie to go lucid much sooner. That might just be personal canon and my own dream experience talking though. I still don't really understand the story and I definitely need to reread it with dream symbolism in mind.
@Malacoda Really great to hear someone understand the whole core of it. Just, awesome. <3There are indeed many moments long before which would tear a lot of people, myself included, out of the dream... But as a rule, not a law.I think it's beyond my capacity as an author to write for a fully-lucid or controlled dream, as much as I'd like to. I strongly doubt it's even physically possible.I tried to make it so all pieces of symbolism should be discernible in the end, easily or not so much; I'll go over it in a second draft to specifically make sure.Thank you!
I'm a little confused I must say- partly because of the style chosen, partly because of things like "rolled his eyes Spike". Are these intentional?
@Anonymous That's dialogue marker. It's a little more free-style or high-brow than "Said/Cried/Whispered character X" but, come on.Everything else is probably my fault. Anything in particular?
Nono, I did get that that was dialogue marker, it was mainly the word order that I found slightly confusing. Sorry if my post appeared overly critical or nitpicky; That wasn't my intention at all.
@Anonymous No offense here either!English is my secondary language, so there should be tons of mistakes, especially in finer details. I do need them be pointed out, thank you.
Amazing MadMax did an illustration of one of the scenes. You should probably check it out.http://csimadmax.deviantart.com/art/the-darkness-205639061
this is the first fic i read, is very...strange, but at the same time, cute and funny.pd. i wonder if pinkie remember the dream with spike
Why isn't this marked shipping?