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I happened to find the Luna google chrome customization shortly before I read that story. I could use a sequel.
it was a cute story.. i think
That poor, poor bartender. This was fantastic, I definitely want to see more of Luna fitting in with the night scene.
Why can't I stop smiling?
Because Luna is simply adorable, and drinking is magic.The combination of the two is always welcome.
Damn that was awesome.Your opening line was very powerful; just vague enough to be efficient yet clear enough that there is trouble afoot.Your scene setting skills are excellent; I adored how you managed to make lively bar scenes and numerous issues of summers past come to life so faintly, like whispers or particularly loud echoes. My personal favorite part of it was how you italicized all the very good bits for extra special delicious effect with the sarcasm and the annoyance.Your official document was hilarious. The wordiness and the extreme amount of technical terms was a joy to read, particularly with how you described how incredibly old it is yet still functional.Luna's smug request for a straw was particularly W00T! It just makes me smile that the little sister can be so smug and sexy at the same time with such an awesome move against the hard-boiled bouncer. The ending line was particularly awesome with its mundane form and incredibly smug pronunciation. Her politeness was just the icing on the cake.
When nine-hundred years old you reach, look as good, you will not... hmm?
I loved this story very much - somehow I didn't see the tweest and laughed hard at the ID. However you put together the dating system it sounded legit!
@ruff1298 "Your opening line was very powerful; just vague enough to be efficient yet clear enough that there is trouble afoot."As a write-y grump, repetition of "the" bothered me. I'd prefer something like, "The trouble started when that filly came through the door." (Dislike 'came in the door' for a couple reasons - first, the words 'came in' bleed together when pronounced, and second, 'the door' is redundant. The act of entry implies the doorway; the act of passage through a space does not.)But that's over-the-top picky editing fiddle-faddle, and I rather liked the piece, so feel free to ignore.
Awesome. Can't stop smiling. The ID, in particular, was a great touch!
@Star Whistle'came in the door' also gives us very immature readers a slight giggle. Hahaha, it's funny because door-clopping. haha.. ha... I'm not funny. :<Awesome story, though!
@ZarkanorfMy joke was bad and I feel terrible.
I really doubt that this poor barman can afford to refuse a drink to princess Luna but Luna should really renew her ID card. This thing is far to old and deserve to rest in a museum or some drawer instead to be still in use. This was a funny and good sory and I hope we will see a sequel soon.
I liked this one!
@ZarkanorfTrue, that. I was originally going to suggest "clopped through the door" >_<And "came through the door" is equally graphic!I suppose 'trotted' works. It's always better to use a descriptive verb if you've got one.
Hah!That got a great big grin and a chuckle out of me.One should never presume to have seen it all regardless of their age.
Yeah i was quite literally laughing out loud by the end of the fic. That was amusing as all hell.
I felt good inside after reading a luna story?! MADNESS
That was cute
Well, I would imagine Luna feels quite smug right now... When you get carded and you are... I presume at least 1513 years old, assuming I read the GLORIOUS ID correctly...Yeah... If I were Luna, and I had that many hears on my hooves, I'd be feeling pretty good about being mistaken for a filly! She'll be bragging about that night to big sister for a century afterwards! XD
^ Derp... That many YEARS, not "hears"