• Story: Origins: Rainbow Dash

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    Author: The Owl
    Description: We all know who Rainbow Dash as a top athlete, but what made her that way? A tale of loss and self-discovery.
    Origins: Rainbow Dash

    Additional Tags: Short, family, battle, action, death
    Saturday, July 16, 2011 op
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    22 comments:

    1. GypsyJuly 16, 2011 at 2:01 AM

      FIRST...

      my life is now forfeit

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    2. AnonymousJuly 16, 2011 at 2:01 AM

      Second

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    3. AnonymousJuly 16, 2011 at 2:13 AM

      third

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    4. Dave Mustang, the cynical BronyJuly 16, 2011 at 2:14 AM

      For a second I read this as "A tale of Fear and Loathing". I thought I was finally about to get my Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas crossover fic. :(

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    5. MrTanokkiJuly 16, 2011 at 2:14 AM

      c-c-combo breaker!

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    6. leaflet757July 16, 2011 at 2:15 AM

      definately has potential but i think its a wii bit underdeveloped...

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    7. XortbergJuly 16, 2011 at 2:16 AM

      Nothing amazing, but decent. I'd really like to see this get reworked to be more descriptive and better paced. As it was, I couldn't really get as emotionally invested as I should have been.

      Solid entry, though.

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    8. TamarJuly 16, 2011 at 2:16 AM

      @Dave Mustang, the cynical Brony

      So write your fear and loathing fic!

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    9. AnonymousJuly 16, 2011 at 2:16 AM

      Brought a tear to my eye, good sir. I can't really find anything wrong with the story; you did an excellent job.

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    10. WhiteoutJuly 16, 2011 at 2:18 AM

      @Dave Mustang, the cynical Brony

      That could be amazing, but I don't think I'm crazy enough to write it.

      Great image of Pinkie in a bucket hat and aviators floating around somewhere, though.

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    11. Dave Mustang, the cynical BronyJuly 16, 2011 at 2:18 AM

      @Tamar
      I have better things to do, like going to San Fernando and joining a Psychedelic Band.

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    12. Dave Mustang, the cynical BronyJuly 16, 2011 at 2:19 AM

      @Whiteout
      If the guys who writes it with Pinkie, they're going to have to explain how somebody kicked their boy-parts through the internet.

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    13. LilyJuly 16, 2011 at 2:38 AM

      @Whiteout

      what image of pinkie? THAT i gotta see.

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    14. markocezarJuly 16, 2011 at 3:21 AM

      NAYC!!!

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    15. Doc SteedlyJuly 16, 2011 at 6:49 AM

      My Favorite Rainbow Dash picture!!

      I can't wait to read this story, but their is a Que list before it I have to plow through LOL

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    16. TenchiFreak5July 16, 2011 at 7:22 AM

      The story moved along too fast. It really could have used more expansion, especially in the first two chapters. As it was, the story was basically dragged through the events that took place rather than flowing smoothly from one to another.

      It got a bit better in Chapter 4 and the Epilogue, but it was still moving a bit too quickly.

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    17. BronyboyJuly 16, 2011 at 8:50 AM

      @Tamar
      We can't stop here! This is Pony Country!

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    18. AnonymousJuly 16, 2011 at 6:17 PM

      why does everything have to be so sad!??!?!?! :C

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    19. The OwlJuly 18, 2011 at 4:57 PM

      Thank you so much for your feedback, everybody! I've noticed that a lot of you are saying that it's very fast, and that's because I am (to be frank) *not very good* at describing actions. You'll probably notice that in almost all of the story, the character being followed (At first Blue Bolt and then Rainbow Dash) are on their own a lot... I wanted to try and tell a story which didn't rely on conversations to succeed. Turns out it's harder than I thought, ha, which is why they're talking to themselves a lot. I might re-visit the plot once I'm better at writing, I quite like it.

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    20. bronydashAugust 4, 2011 at 5:31 PM

      That was beautiful. I'll admit it, I cried.

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    21. RevanShaanNovember 7, 2011 at 11:52 AM

      So this looks interesting, but i'm torn on if I should read it or not. Sad rainbow dash makes Revan sad.

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    22. RevanShaanNovember 7, 2011 at 12:18 PM

      K, I read it. And I loved it.

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