Author: Lysis
Description: Rainbow Dash has had plenty of time to come to terms with how she feels about Applejack. It's just a matter of coming out and finally saying it.My Dream Mare Part 1
My Dream Mare Part 2 (New!)
Additional Tags: Starts Saucy, Shifts to Story, Wingboners
152 comments:
I don't know why, but it seems as though we haven't seen much of this pairing lately...
ReplyDeleteAdorable story! I read it yesterday :D
ReplyDeleteOh boy. Definitly going on my queue. Might even read it before I go to bed tonight.
ReplyDeleteThis is really quite good, I don;t often read shipping stories. But when Lysis got me to read it and help with editing a bit I found out that good writing can more than make up for content I'm not exactly in to.
ReplyDeleteYes! Good ol' fashioned Appledash. This is the first new AJ/RD story I've seen on the blog since my own!
ReplyDeleteI don't generally read shipping fics, but when i do, it's appledash...
ReplyDeleteor scratavia (or however you would say octavia and vinyl scratch shipping XD)
I guess I'll read this as well.. since there's nothing on my queue
ReplyDeleteD'aww. Appledash is best ship. Adorable and well-written.
ReplyDeleteSince this story's been posted now, I think I'll put the larger image on Ponibooru for everypony else to enjoy at the full resolution.
ReplyDeletehaha, I was just "select all" for copy-paste to read later and noticed hidden white text at bottom. Did anyone notice?
ReplyDeleteloved that story.
ReplyDeletealso, dat white text.
@Atiarotias
ReplyDeleteDohohohoho.
You shouldn't despair at the ending of the fic. It's not really so bad...
ahhhh...very good. i was totally confused at how Applejack just kinda knew what to do to rainbow. But it all makes sense now
ReplyDeleteFirst I read the Fanfic, then I saw the white text and read it by looking at my screen sideways, but then i saw the "complete" tag, i don't know what to think!! It can't end like this! It just Can't!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. I think I'll remember this story for a long time.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the white text advise, this is actually the first fanfic I've read in quite a lot of time and I didn't see it coming.
Ahhhhh...AppleDash. My favourite narcotic...I mean fan fic subject. :D
ReplyDeleteLook forward to reading this.
well this story sure needs to go on...
ReplyDeleteOhooho, crafty ending. I call for a sequel :3
ReplyDeleteGood read. Surprisingly enough the only shipping I like are Flutterdash and Appledash. I don't find any other ships really... Heart-meltingly cute as these kinds.
Twas fun to read this on its first draft... and its final draft! It's definitely one of the better Appledash fics I've read, short and sweet. I'm glad I got to do the picture, too. n.n Twas quite an experience.
ReplyDelete@Half_A_Taco
ReplyDeleteThis ship and this story is my headcanon. It'll be referenced and built upon in other things I write.
I like natural shipping, that happens in the background and doesn't overwhelm the direction of the story.
That was a lovely story! Just shows that no matter how common the ship is, if it's written well, it's always good.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I didn't like is the wingboner thing. I barely like it as an artwork meme, I certainly don't like it when it pops into written works. But that's personal preference, it certainly didn't ruin the sweetness of the story. Much love. :)
I feel a sequel coming on for sure. Can't wait.
ReplyDelete@Lysis
ReplyDeleteNow I'm curious. How you would you define 'natural shipping' and not overwhelming the direction of the story? What examples might you give?
I loved this, of course, but I also find it incredibly hard to write a comment about it. Part of that is because its so hard to do it without spoiling anything, but I suppose it is also just because I'm at a loss for words.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the my Favorite Image Ever, at the very least.
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteI can live with that, but best appledash ive ever read ^3^
@blindredquine
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure if I can give you many examples off the top of my head. I suppose I mean shipping that's a subplot of a larger story. Or, other than that, shipping that takes a while to develop.
For instance, I think I can use Fallout: Equestria as an example of what I mean. The ship is a heavy one, lots of intimacy and all, but it isn't the force that drives the plot.
Another example I think I can use is the Vinyl Scratch Tapes. Its a comedy story before its a shipping story, with the shipping being verbal back-and-forths between Scratch and Octy.
I don't know if this answers your questions at all, but I hope it at least makes my position clear.
Having just now finished it...
ReplyDeleteI feel...
Bittersweet. The story was beautiful, and I love how you recreated the scene from one of my favorite pictures ever, but I really wanted to see their relationship come to fruition (and not in a dream). I think you left off on sort of a cliffhanger.
And if the white text at the bottom is any glimmer of a hint, I don't think we've seen the last of this story.
You deserve all my stars.
Very well executed, I enjoyed it very much. You definitely captured their personalities well.
ReplyDeleteI was constantly being amused by Dash's nervousness, and how flustered she was always getting.
I was enjoying it, though it was a little saucier than I liked, hopeful for at least one really good AppleDash, then I got to *spoilers*
ReplyDelete"Then she woke up."
*facehoof*
And then it was all downhill from there.
@A Weary Exile
ReplyDeleteYeah, sorry about that. I think its a weaker story without that extra twist though.
Like I keep saying, this is my headcanon. It'll be in what I write...or so I'm planning. Hoping, really. I knew I'd alienate readers with this ending, but...Heck, love is never that easy. Even if its mutual.
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteHaven't read those fics but makes it clear enough. I haven't read those stories but it gives me an idea of where you are coming from. And it's a position I certainly understand. Pacing and proper build is certainly a problem with a lot of fics I've read, particularly AppleDash ones that seem to rush into things. It's something I'm deliberately working against in a piece I'm working on (which has caused it to sprawl out in the process).
I suppose it's for that reason that I like where you went with this story and how you've chosen to conclude it (or hopefully this part of it). The bulk of it was certainly effectively executed to dispel any of my reservations about going right into the shipping and was probably the closest I think any fan-fic about cartoon ponies can come to be actually being "sexy." I didn't even notice the tell-tale signs as to why this might have been considered too easy. (Though it also does make sense that Dash would be the more nervous of the two given her stage fright in "Sonic Rainboom".) Either way I'm definitely looking forward as to where you'll be going with this.
@Lysis
ReplyDelete"but...Heck, love is never that easy. Even if its mutual."
Agreed.
Ahh, some good ol' Appledash. This should be good.
ReplyDelete*reads story*
Scratch that: great, no, awesome ol' Appledash! I would have least expected the romantic beginning to be a dream. Then again, it was all TOO good to be true. lol
Well done on this!
Aw this is a nice little stor-
ReplyDelete"And then she woke up."
FFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
@Fleymevas
ReplyDeleteTrollestia is amused.
I like it very much until the mood kill. But still a very cute story.
ReplyDeleteThis is exactly what I needed. A nice, cute, short and sweet Appledash shipfic. Thank you for that.
ReplyDeleteI have just one problem, though. The first and the third hidden images open for me, but the second one requires permission. Could you fix that?
@daBomb619
ReplyDeleteDo'h, thanks for pointing that out. Fixed now.
@paradoxador P0nivia.
ReplyDelete@Lysis Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThree hidden images? Hurm, weird. I only see the one that comes immediately before the white text.
ReplyDeleteHmmm.....
ReplyDeleteI know I sent it in as a complete story, with intentions to continue it in my other works....and I know that I'm still going to.
But I can't help but think a short add on to the ending of this story won't hurt anything. Let me think about it a little more. Consider that 'Finished' tag a maaaaaybe for now, okay? Cause one way or another, this is getting built up on.
@LysisIts your story lysis. But it was nice and i look forward to seeing a continuation.
ReplyDelete@Stephen Cawking
ReplyDeleteHey, I know I'm a slow writer, but that's a low blow XD.
You'll see how I deal with this. I think you'll find a lot of stuff to like about it.
Also, the story is officially incomplete. I've sent the e-mail to Seth asking him to change the description.
I felt bucked in the teeth with the "and then she woke up" line, though I liked the admission that moving that quickly and perfectly into things is unrealistic. I can barely stand it in so many fics when ponies are getting all physical before they've even begun to communicate the idea of liking each other.
ReplyDeleteI wasn't a fan of Appledash shipping, but you have converted me with your well worded argument. ;)
Aww...I was pretty saddened when I read "And then she woke up", but I guess it was too sappy to be true, even in a fanfic.
ReplyDeleteI can see this turning into a really nice clopfic :)
ReplyDelete...what? don't look at me like i'm some kind of perverted freak. If it's a (well written) clopfic, there's more adorable blushing and emotions to read about.
some cuteness is good, more is definitely better :D
ReplyDeletei like it,really good
ReplyDeleteNever read a shipping fic and I never planned to, but I've avoided it long enough, time to see what all this Appledash fuss is about ;)
ReplyDelete@Samuel7897 If shipping fics are well written, they're a kinda more grown-up kind of cute than the rest of the show :D
ReplyDeleteAppledash has to be my fav it just feels normal with those 2 ^^
ReplyDeletewhewf, finally I made sometime to read it.. and I really liked it! was sleeping n all, but I'm perfectly fine with that (actually, RD's thoughts after waking up was far more than understandable to me)
ReplyDeleteSo it might continue after this? Looking forward to it.
I like the writing style. Thanks.
@Unknown
ReplyDeleteI don't think I can actually do a feat like that.. I'm sorry. Now that I've got this first chapter done and the stage set, and determined that there will be more of it directly tied to this, I need to be very careful about how I proceed with this story.
I was so happy that the ending was so sweet.... then she woke up.
ReplyDeleteWHY
But she woke up in a good way. It made me laugh and cry and go AW all at the same time. Although like some people have already said... it was a bit saucier than expected. I was also wondering what Rainbow dash meant by "If you had kept going in a few minutes i would have..."
Anyone want to explain that to me plz?
@Runeplay2
ReplyDeleteUse your imagination.
@Runeplay2
ReplyDeleteWhen an Earth Pony and a Pegasus love each other very much...
The Earth Pony causes the Pegasus to explode. Twice.
But don't worry! She'd be fine after a few minutes and maybe a cold shower.
good story when will we see the second part just read it it was reaaallly good
ReplyDelete5/5, this was reaaaaally good.
ReplyDeleteAlso (spoiler alert)
was the "white text" the footnote the author added at the end, saying an email was sent to Seth to change it from "Complete" to "Incomplete" (and was un-whitetexted)? I pressed "Select All" and couldn't find any white text.
@CitationNeeded
ReplyDeleteDon't look for the white text. It isn't there, because I made it visible. The white text people are talking about is the text right under the picture at the end.
Now...on the subject of when you guys will get a new chapter... I don't know. You'll get one for sure, but I can't give you a date.
I mean, I love AppleDash so much, you have no idea. I really want to do this pairing justice... and make it a paring. Consider the end of this first chapter a... well, hopefully not me trolling. I didn't have intentions of sending this to EqD when I started writing this. I'd just wanted to write some Saucy AppleDash. When I realized I was writing every confessional story ever, I came up with the ending, and decided I'd continue it in my other works.
Obviously not. It'll be continued in this story, and referenced in the other ones... rather than being continued in other ones and having this story be the one that's referenced.
It's actually provided me with an interesting idea. Once you actually get past the confession stage, what happens then? I want to write a fic like that. I'm sick of fics where the readers are screaming OH CELESTIA, WHY WON'T THEY GET IT OVER WITH, YOU BOTH LOVE EACH OTHER.
Then again, it's never that easy, is it?
We'll see if my plans play out right.
there is going to be part 2??
ReplyDelete@Lysis
ReplyDeleteI thought you had made it visible, thanks.
Anyway though, like I said, this was really good, and I'm eagerly awaiting chapter 2.
Celestiaspeed!
ow, why did you make that white text plain text? that was like some little secret that gave me little gasp on hope. oh well.
ReplyDeleteWhat happens after confession - acceptance stage... I wonder...
in other fics I've read, they either went over obsessive and to frustration, or sad/heart warming loss of one. I don't want that happen to this though.
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteI'd like to retract my earlier comment.
Now that I know that this story will have more to it than just "Dash has wet dreams about Applejack." I am cautiously optimistic about where you will take this story. I'd suggest not taking the...sauciness any further though, lest you enter the city limits of Cloptown. ;)
@A Weary Exile
ReplyDeleteI'll gladly strike your comment from my mental record.
I won't let your newfound trust be misplaced.
GAH! The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor can't find the white text! Can somepony PLEASE e-mail me what it says or something?!
ReplyDelete(Also, can't wait for part 2! 8D)
SPOILERSSPOILERSSPOILERS
ReplyDeleteI literally shouted at my monitor on "And then she woke up"
Then it started to fill out again... this needs to continue! It needs to! 10/10 thus far =D
People should make way more AppleDash. It is, in my opinion, the most fitting filly couple.
ReplyDeletei nearly got wood at that one part..
ReplyDelete@The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor
ReplyDeleteThe last line was white and was hidden (I accidentally found it by "select all"ing) but for some reason it's back in plain text, Might have something to do with story continuing.
So there ain't no need for white text fuss around here.
Honestly, "it was all a dream" played straight like that is really pretty lame now a days. It's like they said on Family Guy...
ReplyDeletehttp://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/AllJustADream
Loved it! and i can't wait for the next!
ReplyDelete@Lysis
ReplyDeleteAh just've read this and it's good.
By the way, were you listening to this during writing? If not, try it out. It just goes SO damn well with your fic.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dhfe6uoy6NA&feature=player_embedded#!
Honestly yours,
Chayn
@Chayn
ReplyDeleteActually, I was listening to these:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mLXQltR7vUQ
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4EHCCTAclkA
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7-98uTDzcW0
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hCuMWrfXG4E&ob=av3e
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=se9rfWucgeY
Thanks for the song though. I like it.
@Chaynis that a FAN MADE appledash shipping song? i sir salute you, and so does rainbow
ReplyDelete@Chayn
ReplyDeleteOh, I remember seeing this one a while back. Love that song so much. Although I hope this fic isn't going to sad-direction?
@Atiarotias
ReplyDeleteNope.avi
Remember, I like Happy Ponies. If there's a bit of sadness on the way, that's one thing, but as a theme and a direction? Forget that, man. Everything will end in sunshine and rainbows.
Also, I'm actually close to being finished with the draft for the second chapter. Depending on how I keep writing and my editor keeps editing, it might be finished over the weekend. Might. No promises.
There was a guy a while back who mentioned that he wanted to read the next section before he left for the army, actually. If he wants to read it, he can always e-mail me for it. I'm always looking for pre readers and the like.
Loved it sooo much, I want moree <3
ReplyDeleteIt was so well written, and it made me really happy.
D'awwwwwwwwwww!!
ReplyDeletePlease tell me if this will be continued PLEASE! Mt heart might...EXPLODE!
ReplyDeleteI'm useless at critically reading/judging so won't be that Pre-reader thing
ReplyDelete(I don't even know how it works. is it some sort of quality check, tag selecting or something)
@Reginald Awesomesauce
ReplyDeleteNot an author of this, sorry) But still...it's cool, plain and simple.
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteAlso good to know. ^_^
I hope this will continues soon. Its so good and enjoyable. Cant wait for part2. :P
ReplyDeletePart 2 is drafted now. It's actually longer than chapter one, and it might get extended even longer in the editing process.
ReplyDeleteJust thought some of you might want to know.
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteYay!
Oh Buck yeah
ReplyDelete@Lysis
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that it's in the pipe. I'm excited about reading it.
(And as some working on his own Apple Dash fic I can understand, first hand, the chapter being extended in the editing process.)
Can't Wait For Pt.2
ReplyDeletehope its worth the wait
Part 2 is done.
ReplyDeleteYou can access it from the first chapter if you want to read it.
I just read Part 2 and found it outstanding!
ReplyDeletePart 2 was good. Really good. I loved it.
ReplyDeleteDo you know if there will be a part 3?
@CitationNeeded
ReplyDeleteIt's not a question of 'if', it's a question of 'when'.
And I don't know.
YES, this one is back! a lot faster than expected. it'll be a good reading tonight.
ReplyDeleteThis was ridiculously sweet. These two are definitely my OTP, I'm glad to see more appledash on here, especially one like this. I seriously d'aawwwed throughout the whole story.
ReplyDeletenice pic at the end.. ouwww
ReplyDeleteAppleDash pair is the best..
Thanks again!
One of my favourite fics. I loved that so much.
ReplyDeleteGreat :)
ReplyDeleteNow, since you introduced it, you must write a FlutterMac story as well :P
I'm not usually into Shipping, but this has changed my mind.
ReplyDeleteYEEESSSSSS! Great ending! Loved it. Fluttermac fic next please??
ReplyDelete@Lysis
ReplyDeletePart 3, eh? Hmm... will it be a continuation of AJ and RD's story, or will it shift over to Big Mac?
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteSorry for the *looks up* triple post, but I saw that you are always looking for pre-readers. I'd love to help edit, if you could use me.
Wow, I'm not usually into shipping (or any fanfic for that matter) but this was very well done. It definitely sparked tons of emotion. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteDamn these stories and their ability to make me cry.
ReplyDeleteFantastic follow up chapter this, i love nothing more than a bombardment of emotions and questions. Very well done Mr Author.
@Chayn
ReplyDeleteYou wrote a song explicitly inspired by a My Little Pony fan-ship? And it's GOOD?
You magnificent bastard. ;-)
Interesting choice of musical style. It reminds me of English folk, well specifically psychedelic English folk which I've had more experience with than proper English folk music. (Well that and I've been listening to LA pysch band Spirit this morning.) Specifically the appregiated guitar playing (is it finger picked in this piece?) and the your singing style (even if without the accent) which evokes the ethereal and dream-like qualities I associate with such music. And your vocals do a nice job of creating that atmosphere as well as a sense of longing and wistfulness.
I also appreciate the fact that you're able to reference the inspiration for the song without really specifying. It lends it more of a dream-like quality and a greater applicability outside of their original application.
That was amazing good sir. I'm not sure if you will continue this or not, but from my point of view, it should end here. Great story with shipping done right.
ReplyDeleteGoddamn that was tremendous! Well done, sir.
ReplyDeleteThanks, you guys.
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear I've finally produced something people like so much.
Glorious. Wonderful. Manly tears all over the place. You've managed to do my OTP in a way that I hadn't quite seen before, but still played out fantastically.
ReplyDeleteI particularly liked Big Mac's role in the story, as I don't think I have seen him written in that way before; so you got me thinking about that. How Applejack confronted Dash on the issue also stuck out as being a very "Applejack" way of doing it; and I've always really liked the idea that Dash and AJ knew each other long before the first episode of the show.
I quite enjoyed Part 2. I'm glad you took a different tack in examining Apple Jack's feelings by going at it entirely post-dream and showing the emotional toll Dash's absences have had on her. I also like how you wrote Big Mac in a more assertive role and brought up an objection to the relationship that no other writers seem to have thought of. In a lot of ways Dash can be pretty unreliable, so does raise the question about why Apple Jack is so attracted to her and as well as provide future story material regarding how reliable or mature she'll be in their relationship.
ReplyDeleteBased on your comments earlier on Part I, I admit that I was somewhat surprised that you brought the matter of their feelings to a head this soon, though I can't complain about that in terms of execution. Based on the pacing you set out, and in particular AJ and Mac's conversation, it works perfectly, and you handled it with good humour that's appropriate to both the show and the characters in particular. I greatly look forward to reading Chapter 3 and seeing the sparks fly. (And if you want another pre-reader/editor, I'd be willing to give my feedback.) This is definitely shaping up to be among the best AppleDash fics I've read.
@blindredquine
ReplyDeleteActually, I was the one who wrote the song xD I wish i could say I wrote the fic too, cause It was great.
And it wasn't fingerpicked, though it was written for it (sliced off the very tip of my middle finger at work the night I recorded it -__-). And my favorite band is Pink Floyd, so I'm glad the english folk and psychedelic influences came across.
Again, though, Fucking PHENOMENAL fic! I'm honored I was featured in it xD
Whoops! Well good job nonetheless! :)
ReplyDelete(Sorry to hear about the finger. :( )
You'd BETTER do a MacinShy next, damn it! The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor demands it of you!
ReplyDelete(Please? And did somepony say something about Pre-reading?)
@Lysis
ReplyDeleteWell if you don't know when you'll be continuing this, do you know when you'll be continuing 'The Kindness of Strangers'? :P
That said, I absolutely loved this story, even though I usually avoid shipping like the plague. The Applejack/Big Mac scene in particular was excellent, and I thought the musical insertion was well done. Whatever you decide to write next, I'll be all over it in a heartbeat.
it was such a pleasant surprise to see part 2 of this. Haha I guess I never got the memo that part 2 was even going to happen at all. Great story though. Appledash is one of my favorite pairings.
ReplyDeleteSo so so so so so so good. I was waiting for number two as soon as number one had finished. My god, it's amazing. Thank you so much.
ReplyDeleteI've had comments from people asking to be prereaders for me. That's fantastic, honestly. I'm always in need of pre readers for things.
ReplyDeleteYou can usually find me on the EquestriaDaily or the EquestrianStudy IRC channels. I post there under the nickname "Lysis". To get to the IRC, just click the button labeled "Ponychats" near the top of Equestria Daily, enter a username, and then ping me by typing my name in the chat. If I'm there, I'll usually respond. I'm normally not that far away from my computer.
Now, I don't want to make any promises on KOS right now. I keep developing new ideas to make the story interesting, and I've also got that side story set in Equestria to work with, and now this is also part of my work. Add classes, and I've got my hands somewhat full. There'll always be time for ponies, though.
I don't know if I'll write a FlutterMac, but I know how I'd write it if I did.
The story was great. I don't often read shipfics but ill give a more open mind to the genre now. The only.criticism I can think of is it could have used better proofreading. Other than that, great job :)
ReplyDelete@Samuel7897
ReplyDeleteWhere exactly? Grammatically, this was pronounced perfect by my editor...
If you'd like to preread for me in the future, come onto the IRC and let me know.
PLEASE, don't make a third part D:
ReplyDeleteI really love this fic (was my first fic of all, I don't actually like to read fics -3-) and I think this one is just perfect the way it is :)
I also like the way you redact, is simple but great so keep writting, it's probably that I'll follow your texts ;)
Greetings from Costa Rica :D
it's probable*
ReplyDeleteOk Im Back From Camp, Time To READ!
ReplyDeleteWell, the 'confession' side of this story might be very good, but there are still other stories with this paring that I want to tell. Perhaps they'll go under this one as a "Story 2" or something like that. That way, you can consider "Dream Mare" to be the first two chapters, and you can ignore everything that comes after it, should you so prefer.
ReplyDeleteSpeaking realistically though, there's no reason for me to rush anything. I'll take a while to think it over, make sure things work, and that I'm not making a mistake by wanting to continue it further in the first place.
In any case, thanks for giving this a look.
Overall I enjoyed it, though I must say I was expecting something with a little slower pace.
ReplyDeleteIt was cute and that's what I look for in shipfics (Most of the time) so it's good in my book. :)
This story was great! I loved it :D
ReplyDeleteThe levels of awesome and adorableness are just what I look for in a shipfic! I usually shy away from even slightly saucy fics, but it was so tastefully executed and added to the suspense so well that I can't complain at all. First AppleDash fic I've read, by the way, so so far, so good! Thanks for a great fic!
ReplyDeleteThis was amazing, i loved it and rely hope for a sequel
ReplyDeleteFelt good that part 2 felt like "the" next chapter.
ReplyDeleteThough i wonder how you will handle part 3 considering that this part is a definitive ending...
Well, there won't be a 'Part 3'. There'll be a 'Story 2' instead. It was supposed to be just one big chapter, but it got too big. 29 pages of notes right now.
ReplyDeleteI said I wanted to continue the story, and I am. As far as I'm concerned, Shipping doesn't end with a confession, it just begins with one.
@Lysis
ReplyDelete"As far as I'm concerned, Shipping doesn't end with a confession, it just begins with one."
Which makes me look forward to Part 3 even more.
Someone wrote a song about my fic!
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OdzZe-tPOFc
I'm truly honored, Lavender. Thanks so much!
Course, now the pressure is redoubled on me to not screw up. I can only hope the next story is good.
i couldn't help but d'awww...
ReplyDeletemake moar, this is talent right here
***SPOILER***
ReplyDeleteLYSIS! "The story had a great plot (not the flank, but the story line wise). I hadn't expected that Rainbow would wake up from the dream. That was such a heartbreaking moment right there, since it was all a dream. It's certainly a twist in the story that most fics don't have. I applaud you for that. The author really has a nick for writing. Every sentence kept getting me enticed to read more and more. I just had to find out (of course since it's a shipping fic, it's kind of expected what would happen) the ending. This is by far one of the most emotionally engaging shipping fics out there. I even started to tear up a bit at the end (MANY MANLY TEARS)." Keep up the good work, Lysis. I look forward to reading more of your writing. Brohoof /] [\
Really exceptional shipfic, hoping for more.
ReplyDeleteMe at first: Pffft. Another shipping fic. Might as well get this over with...
ReplyDelete*reads fic*
Me: Knew it just another generic fic
*notices music made in honor of the fic*
Me: This intrigues me
*reads fic again with music playing*
Me: ;_;
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@Hivemind
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear that you liked Lavender's music so much. She tells me she's still working hard on the second movement, so I'll be sure to post it here when she finishes too.
Really really good, looking forward to that sequel
ReplyDeleteSequel's still being worked on. Cracked 40,000 words two nights ago. So its coming along slowly, but it's getting written.
ReplyDeletehope you're still on it,
ReplyDeleteim still waiting =)
And I'm still writing. It's not behaving properly.
ReplyDeleteI think the problem is I'm trying too hard. It'll never be as good as I want it to be, and I'm going to catch a lot of flack for taking so long to get to the point - in the actual story. I mean heck, the story is supposed to mostly take place in Manehattan, and as near as I can figure, I've spent four chapters just getting them into the city. Oh sure, it's characterization, and building up foundations, but it's a thankless job that I don't know will be appreciated or not.
In any case, I'm still working on it, so don't worry about it too much.
I remember that day. It was the first day I ever heard of the site EquestriaDaily, and this was the first fan fic I ever read on this site (not my first fan fic, but first one on here).
ReplyDeleteI was scrolling out of boredom through the mass library of shipping fan fiction today and stumbled upon this, and was pleasantly surprised to see that it had updated (not sure when, but I don't care). Loved chapter two! Wonderful job on the story so far, and I can't wait for the 3rd installment.
Where is part 3 gah!
ReplyDeleteWhere is part 3 gah!
ReplyDeleteWhere is part 3 gah!
ReplyDeleteWell... Chapters one and two of the new story are edited. I want more finalized before I do anything. It'll be done enevtually, trust me.
ReplyDeleteIf I'm honest, this isn't the kind of story I can release in incremental chapters, since there's so much that can go wrong. It's the kind of story where I'll need to keep checking on prior chapters to make sure it all comes together. Excuses, I know, but I don't think anyone can blame me for being cautious.
ReplyDeleteThis couldn't be any more perfect if you tried! Totally loved it, well done :D
ReplyDeleteawsome well done
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ReplyDeleteNICE STORY@@
ReplyDeleteThis was a very well written story. Loved it! So sweet, Applejack and Rainbow Dash do make the perfect couple. I don't think there needs to be a part 3, the ending was perfect to me. Great job! =)
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