Description: As usual, Rainbow Dash has little thought for the feelings of those around her. Some ponies are just oblivious.In The Rain
In The Rain Part 2
2 possible endings available!
In The Rain Ending (Option One) (New!)
In The Rain Ending (Option Two) (New!)
27 comments:
I thought it was cute. The end sort of paves a path for a second part.
ReplyDeleteGood to see some more Dashx shipping finally, and cute to boot. @Anonymous agreed, hope we do get a second part.
ReplyDeleteDamn, now I have that cowboy bebop song in my head.
ReplyDeleteYou would think that, five seconds later, the pieces would've fallen together for Rainbow Dash.
ReplyDeleteI like this guy. Yet another great work by ebonmane.
ReplyDeleteI really like this! It has a sweet combination of funny and cute. Can't wait for the next part!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThen you should check out Pony Symphony.
TwilightxDash is one of the few ships I really like, and you did it well. The characters were pretty believable, although they must necessarily be somewhat out of character for a shipping fic to work. Given the premise, I can definitely see Twilight doing something kinda pervy and really akward in that situation!
ReplyDeleteAlso, I lol'd hard at "Certain death is my bitch!"
Entertaining! I hope you can finish part 2 soon, can't wait to read it.
ReplyDeletei JUST read ebonmanes 300 word fic before this
ReplyDelete...so good! i was actually just thinking of doing a rainbow dash twilight ship myself, then i read this and it looks like you did it a million times better then my own draft XD
best wishes to you, and i hope to see more to it in the future
Moar?
ReplyDeleteI loved the characterization, can't wait for part 3
ReplyDeleteOoh wow. It quickly became quite dramatic. But I guess I should have expected that since most of ebon mane's stories are like that. I really liked the second part. I didn't like how Twilight just freaked out at some honest confusion Dash had, it Twilight's reaction seemed a little over the top.
ReplyDeleteStill. Its a great story and I look forward to another part! =)
This story has some beautiful descriptive imagery.
ReplyDeleteYay for multiple endings!
ReplyDeleteI thought both of the endings were very good. At first, I kinda felt like the sad ending was a bit short, but upon further thought, realized that you said all that needed to be said and did it beautifully. Overall, an excellent shipping fic!
For future reference, if you ever make alternate scenes again, don't name them "A" and "B" or "1" and "2" or anything that implies a ranking. Nor should you outright say "I would pick this one."
ReplyDeleteBecause canon nuts like me will automatically pick up the one the author prefers (or the one ranked higher in the title) as the "true" ending, and read the other one as just this little side thing that is exploratory AU at best, a bone to throw to some of the readers at worst.
It kind of removes the "you can pick one" aspect, and turns it into "You can read that other ending, but no, *this* is what actually happened."
@AFistfulofApples
ReplyDeleteWould it be easier, so as to clarify your point, to go with some title as "[SAD] Ending" or "[SHIPPING] Ending"?
Because that's what I believed should've been done here.
Better than "A" and "B".
ReplyDeleteWhen I do it, I give them titles.
I can't believe that didn't occur to me.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the advise, I've named the endings.
I like the shipping but the sad ending was written better, which I preferred.
ReplyDeleteTwilight acted pretty out of character. I wish there was more of a build up for Dash's emotions in the happy ending.
ReplyDeletesad ending was pretty epic. but sad endings make me a sad brony.
Definitely prefer the first ending even if it's sad, though it does make me wonder just what Dash does want -- unless she's just too immature for a relationship yet.
ReplyDelete@Escher
ReplyDeleteI'm pretty sure that in the first ending, Dash is straight or asexual. As strange as the idea of straight Dash may be.
Moar Boar wants moar.
ReplyDeleteD'awwwwwww ^^
ReplyDeleteEnding 2 FTW!
They make such a cute couple...
ReplyDeleteAlso, I really liked the setting, and the attention to detail. Good stuff, all around!
The adorable-ness it burns, 5 stars bro, epic cutosterone
ReplyDeleteAdorable. TwiDash ending is the better ending! We all know Dash doesn't fly straight, and neither does Twilight. ;)
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