Author: WarHorse72
Description: Twilight always knew the military wasn't wanted by most ponies. But it takes a trip to Stalliongrad going wrong for her to realize just how much they kept order and safety in Equestria regardless.Guardians (All Links)
Additional Tags: Deeper look at the world
[Grimdark][Shipping]
Description: Six months after the Battle of Stalliongrad, the world is in chaos. As the nations prepare to go to war, Ponyville falls straight in the crosshairs. Can Twilight help turn the fight for Equestria, or is the Kingdom doomed already?Ceasefire (New Part 8!)
Additional Tags: Sequel to my story Guardians
49 kommentaari:
Stalliongrad
VastaKustutaOh this is nice.
VastaKustutaMind: blown. Marine ponies. Sure, they call themselves the army, but...
VastaKustutaAnyway, this is just weird. Not really fitting for the original universe, but good nonetheless.
Very Well Written! The different pony universe took some getting used to but definitely enjoyable. Please keep updating!
VastaKustutaVery well written thus far,
VastaKustutaTwilight feels a tad bit out of character at times, but you know, the whole war thing.
Stalliongrad? I mean there's puns, and then there's just... sweet Celestia on a solar sandwich. Stalliongrad. Oy....
VastaKustutaTwilight seems oddly passive. She's faced danger before and has a heck of a lot of magic to burn... it seems off that she's not really doing anything. Also, shouldn't she send an update to Celestia? Dragonfire can't be jammed. ;)
VastaKustutaI do believe this is an awesome story. Great Job. I do ever so enjoy the diction style and especially the setting.
VastaKustutaTo address Twilight's passivity, I would think it makes sense. She's never been exposed to this sort of danger and carnage before hand. It should take time for her to adjust.
Keep Going Warhorse72, this is awesome!
No one appreciates the armed forces. Except the Dutch.
VastaKustutaNeeds moar chpaters
VastaKustutaWow, Chapter 4...
VastaKustutaJust great.
By far the best chapter so far.
Some small grammar errors here and there.
but the whole pacing, emotion everything interplayed fabulously.
Its hard to take it seriously when Spike keeps making wise cracks.
VastaKustutaFix please.
Great story otherwise
I'll let the others point out your mistakes. For me, I don't really mind because this story is well-written and descriptive. Keep up the good work
VastaKustuta"And just like that, Spike did another about-face with his mood, his shoulders slumping and his brow dragging down."
VastaKustutastraight from chapter 1..
I don't think many people here know what an about-face is. I do, but I was just sayin'.
annddd I think it should've been Magic Corps instead of army..just sayin'.
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VastaKustutaChapter 5 was a bit of a disappointment. Not all too long and it ended with a bit of a slap to the face. If you're overly stressed or cant think of anyway to continue it it'd suggest to write a rough copy of chapter 6, then come back to it and look it over. That usually helps me.
VastaKustutaHarold Coyle meets Ponies. *AWE-SOME!!!*
VastaKustutaFics like these are a bit rare... Grimdark but not to terribly gory and overdramatic, and at the same time not failing to make clear the gravity of the situation... Good work, can't wait for the next part.
VastaKustutaIt's like today is Seth's shipping story day. This has to be the tenth story with shipping posted since 11 AM.
VastaKustuta@Logan Warner
VastaKustutaBut it has no shipping!
Well, at least, not really.
I mean, if you squint. A lot.
Twilight and Short,
VastaKustutasitting in a tree
K.I.L.L.I.N.G.
@terrycloth I think I love you.
VastaKustutaI am loving this! Thank you, WarHorse72!
VastaKustutayour getting really good, Chapters 8 & 9 bad me tearing up a little bit, very good writing.
VastaKustutai cannot wait for the next chapter when it all starts hitting the fan, confound this fandom and it's awesome authors & artist >_>
FINALLY,
VastaKustutaMore chapters.
yey update!
VastaKustutaOoh, I like this. The story's a beauty; it has a coherent plot, back story, and it just makes sense in context!
VastaKustutaBut the more I read, the more I feel like I'm a bad person for enjoying it. D:
it's a bit hidden with Season2 starting and all, but I like this fic. I wish if I could draw something for this but I'm no good.
VastaKustutaIt's pretty interesting, I think Twilight and Short are very cute... but things like this happen in combat situations, stress makes us...horny?
VastaKustutaAnyways, I appreciate your military knowledge, and if you ever need any help with air force type stuff (like rank system, organization, various jargon) I'm more than happy to help as I know the air force is vastly different from the army and marines.
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VastaKustutaA must read! Y U NO 7 STAR?
VastaKustutaI just wish the chapters were longer.
VastaKustutaThis is, by far, one of the greatest stories I have ever read. And there is going to be a sequel?! AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
VastaKustuta@Timber
VastaKustutaAgreed! far to short, i always end up screaming "NOOOOOO!" in my head when i reach the end of the latest chapter. cant wait for the next one as well as the sequel, so keep up the good work WarHorse!
Odds there's a bunch of bombs on the ship, which now only has a skeleton crew on board?
VastaKustuta.... you are evil and I'm going to cry for that cliffhanger was the most heart wrenching on I have read in a long time
VastaKustutatruly riveting story WarHorse72 :D
VastaKustutai cant wait for the epilogue and crossfire, keep up the great work!
R.I.P. Gunn =,(
Wow...
VastaKustutaI usually find it hard to really get into a war story. I can count the number I actually liked on one... well, hoof, actually.
Which is the reason that I am awed that I ended up reading this story in three days, even chooslightly slightly left behind by Fallout:Equestria (one of my absolute favorite stories from this fanbase).
WarHorse, I salute you, for all that's worth from a meager Boy Scout. You have put together a great story, one that I eagerly look forward to seeing continued. Hay, I've even considered doing a little side story for it...
I also would like to wish you luck while you serve our country. I have a deep respect for our armed forces, for having the courage to risk themselves for the safety of the country.
Sorry for the wall of text...
In summary, great story, eagerly looking forward to more, and good luck.
I have no idea why, but ponies and warfare seem to go together really well. The upcoming war mentioned in the epilogue would make a good basis for a real-time strategy game.
VastaKustutaThis story is freaking badass. I tried writing an MLP war story myself, but I'm starting with a MW@ crossover instead. I noted this is your only story so far. Keep up the outstanding work!
VastaKustutaA huzzah for Ceasefire! Also, excellent art of Private Short Stop, sorry, Sargent Short Stop (alliteration intentional?).
VastaKustutaYou have obviously been playing way too much COD. And that's awesome. Because this story is awesome extremely awesome. So awesome that you need to HURRY UP AND POST THE NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!
VastaKustutaRead this in one go. I have seen it updated before but never tried it. I am sorry it took me so long to. Good story. Very fitting use of the characters. Can't wait to read part two. Keep up the good work.
VastaKustuta^^There was CoD element in this? I didn't notice. (Oh, I just read rest of comment, i see) It's nice to see a fan-fic that updates quite frequently. It's gonna be good reading.
VastaKustutaEquestria definitely needs a standing army of Russian ponies.
VastaKustutawhat the, I didn't know there was chapter3 update!? gotta read'em all
VastaKustutaGreat fic! I've only gotten through Guardians, but I really like your characterizations. I'm usually on the fence about OC ponies, but yours are absolutely wonderful. Love Azure!
VastaKustutaOh my God, this finally got updated!
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