[Adventure]
Author: Mysecsha
Description: There was nothing left for Spitfire in Cloudsdale, just an uncle who hated her and painful memories of lost loved ones. The Pegasus Search and Rescue Corps offers her a chance to get out of town, see the world, do some good - and one day maybe have a shot at the Guards or the Wonderbolts! She jumps at the opportunity - and six days later, she limps into training camp.
Doesn't matter: she made it. The world can beat her down, but it can't keep her down. The friendships she forms here will get her through everything training has to offer. Will they also see her through the dark clouds on the horizon?
Wild Sky Yonder (New Part 12)
Additional Tags: Origin Story, Pegasus Military.
84 kommentaari:
Author first?
VastaKustuta@Mysecsha
VastaKustutaI seriously once thought of submitting a story and trying to get a first on it, you just beat me to it:P
Seems like an interesting story, wish I didnt have to go to work though.
VastaKustutaI've read a couple Spitfire origin stories, and they've all been pretty good. I'll give this one a look.
VastaKustutammmmm Spitfire. I Shall read It ASAP!
VastaKustutaIt's quite good so far, and we've been waiting for a good Spitfire and Soarin' origin story. I'll eagerly await your next installment.
VastaKustutaYeah yeah Seth. I'd be surprised if this image wasn't already a poster on your wall ;)
VastaKustutaOkay. I got around to reading it a lot sooner than I thought.
VastaKustutaSPOILERS:
Liking it so far, loving the sarcasm! I can't wait for more. Spitfire + Fetish Torture Suit..... Someone get on this!
Not bad so far :). Ill keep up with this one to see where it goes.
VastaKustuta@Mysecsha I think that this is the only time when a first is acceptable, lol
VastaKustutaOh, I REALLY liked this so far. I will be watching this for updates SO hard.
VastaKustutaIt's pretty good so far. I appreciated the approach of Search&Rescue over actual military operations.
VastaKustutaI like the snark too, though I feel that we could have gotten a bit more of Spitfire's thoughts on why she was snarking. I'm going to have to wait and see how it progresses before I can say whether it's four or five star though.
Autor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustutaThat was pretty good, could have had more....everything, kinda short but its only the first chapter
VastaKustuta4/5*
Ooohh... Another for the long list of stories in my backlog!
VastaKustutaYou guys pump out too many good stories. >_>
*reads comments*
VastaKustutayep, I shall read this tonight! sleep is for foals.
@ Desert Rose
VastaKustutaYeah, it feels short to me, too. This was the only good break point before we meet the rest of the team, and that scene is huge and still growing - in fact, it's currently too long. Needs trimming. Not ready for primetime. And I really want to get it right, because ultimately the quality of the whole story will depend on how well I handle these four characters and that begins with first impressions.
This is great. I gotta watch this one. It's pretty easy and interesting to read, and SpitFire one of my fave ponies^_^
VastaKustutaSurprisingly well-written and engaging for a character than I normally dismiss out of hand. Agreed that it felt short, but part of that is just for wanting to read more. I'll be keeping an eye out for updates on this one.
VastaKustutaI enjoyed this :)
VastaKustutaMy namesake? I shall read this.
VastaKustutaGood so far, will watch
VastaKustutaMe gusta. 5/5.
VastaKustutaalso, this could potentially need a comedy tag. but we'll have to see where the author takes it in later chapters
I aim to add as much humor to it as it can handle without sacrificing tone or quality. That said, I would prefer that it not get a comedy tag. The humor is subordinate to the story, and it's there because real life is humorous. everypony uses humor to bond, to cope, to entertain. These ponies will do their best to make each other smile. Sometimes just for fun, sometimes to drive away the tears. Sometimes, hijinks will ensue. I happen to think that the early draft of chapter 2 is the funniest thing I've written to date, but I still don't think of it as comedy.
VastaKustutaI liked it. I haven't looked in awhile, but there is a sore lack of Spitfire fics. Good to see her getting more representation.
VastaKustutaJust curious, but is this your first fan-fic? Even if it's not, I'm impressed with the quality. Reminds me of Penstroke in some way. Can't wait till the next update.
VastaKustuta@ Rookie, as a matter of fact, the first piece of long-form fiction I ever wrote with any intention of showing to anyone was a terrible, awful, dreadful piece featuring emo-Soarin' lamenting the good ol' days and then, as a pre-reader put it, "making googlie eyes at the mane six."
VastaKustutaThat was followed by a first draft of this chapter which was very different (and also boring), and then by this.
@Mysecsha Wow, authors like you are seriously making it tough for me to hold to my 'write no fanfiction whatsoever' vow. Authors, how do they work?
VastaKustutaI have to say, I am liking the hell out of this story so far. The dogfight (or is it ponyfight in this case?) at the beginning really had me glued to the screen, and the humor is tastefully done without detracting from the focus of the story. I'll definitely attempt to keep up with this one, especially since, (like others have said) there seems to be a lack of awesome Spitfire fics or fics featuring Spitfire in a leading role.
@Mysecsha
VastaKustutaMysecsha, do you have any pre-readers? If so, please, just give me a trial run and let me show you what I can do. What you have here is a brilliant idea and I would like to see it go far. Please give me this opportunity and I will not let you down!
Thanks for your time mate!
Wow. Is this the only chapter of it so far? I'm sorry to hear if that's true, because this was pretty damn funny. Usually you don't catch me laughing or crying while reading stories, but the "fetish torture suit" comment made me chuckle for a while after reading it. I'm very excited to see where this will go, it's got good humor. Like someone else said, if you go in the direction I think you're going this will definitely need a [Comedy] tag.
VastaKustutaFor only 1 chapter, definitely 5/5. If you keep the story interesting and the jokes rolling in this is definitely a 6/5.
YAY!
VastaKustutaMany many thanks to my pre-readers.
Loved chapter 2. Only confusing part was when you used Red's name/handle before she had actually introduced herself. That was a bit confusing, but nothing too bad.
VastaKustutaOther than that, man, I loved it all. I'm really looking forward to knowing more of Spitfire's backstory and how she and Firelight manage to not murder each other.
FTW. 'nuff said.
VastaKustuta*facepalm*
VastaKustutaOtter, do you mean when Soarin' says it, or is there one in the prose?
I thought I caught them all.
I missed two-o-dems. FIXED.
VastaKustutaOkay, seriously. This story deserves serious memtion for a six-star. I mean, what's there not to like? Origin story, semi-important ponies, lots of action and humor, and Soarin' being... Soarin'.
VastaKustutaNeed moar. Make moar?
MOAR COMING. when it's good and... good. When it's good. Not sooner.
VastaKustutaHhm... It's good but I think Spitfire's personality comes off as a bit bland, it lacks the laid back personality that she showed in 'The Best Night Ever'.
VastaKustutaSpecter, part of that is intentional. Laid back and happy is the destination. If it's also the starting point, this'll be a short trip.
VastaKustutaGod, I feel so greedy for demanding longer chapters, but dammit, I need MORE! I love it! I know only the first hit's free, but I'll do anything for more chapters! I'll kill all your enemies, I'll build you a palace, whatever you want!
VastaKustutaLoving this story so far. Keep up the good work!
VastaKustutaI like a good military story. I need to start searching for Adventure tags more often! Six-star just doesn't cut it!
VastaKustutaJust finished. Need more!
VastaKustutaGeez, I need a freakin flow chart to keep track of all these OC ponies and relations! Thank heavens they are all so wonderfully written for and the dialogue isn't lacking, or this would be a mess to wade though. So many names...
VastaKustuta@Risky
VastaKustuta>.< I'm sorry if it's confusing
I suppose I could make a spreadsheet if you really want one...
My little story just bumped up to a rating of 4.8???
VastaKustuta/)^3^(\
omigoshomigoshomigoshomigoshomigoshomigosh!
Oh god, the waiting is killing me...
VastaKustuta;_; the inability to put out a ch 5 I'm happy with is killing me. I'M SO SORRY UNKNOWN.
VastaKustutaI agree with the unkown. This fic has probably pulled me in faster than any other fic. Or, well, for those characters I don't really care for. You took characters I don't really care about and gave them a feel that I love. Thank you for that And take your time to get it right. It may kill me now, but if it comes out rushed, I will be dead and disappointed.
VastaKustutaThat was longwinded. So yeah, keep up the good work. :)
I have made moar, just for you. Enjoy!
VastaKustutaI feel genuinely sad when each chapter ends. Congratulations, only one other fic has elicited that reaction from me.
VastaKustutaAutor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustutaIs it a good thing that Red reminds me of Rogue from the X-Men?
VastaKustuta@Gaarathedancingpanda
VastaKustutaOne time Red forgot to turn her swag off... she woke up covered in stallions!
but in all seriousness, Rogue might not have been my first thought but saucy southern belle fits the voice in my head.
@Ten
VastaKustutawho is Seth?
@brony boy 6000
VastaKustutaSethisto, Seth for short, is kind of a big deal around here. He sort of... runs it. All of it. EQD is his.
Lovin' this story, keep up the good work. ;D
VastaKustutaYay moar!
VastaKustutaYay moar!
VastaKustutaSweet Harmony.... There are almost no words...
VastaKustutaWild Sky Yonder
Chapter six, a dose of one of the grim realities of being a member of the SAR. Thanks Mysecsha, for another sample of that literal bounty.
Hi all! In addition to chapter 6, I posted a dramatis personae here.
VastaKustutaOn to less-fun news: the mobile version of chapter 6 is accidentally footnoted from hell to breakfast. I don't know why, since there aren't any comments. I'll try to get to the bottom of it.
On a paranoid note, gdocs says chapter 5 was last modified by an unknown user, but there isn't a new comment... hmmmmmmmm....
Oh well. If problems persist I may have to turn off comments in gdocs. There's always this post, FIM, and my gmail as avenues for feedback.
Okay, it just got serious.
VastaKustutaIf this is what we're gonna expect from this story, I can't wait for the other chapters. SOMEONE SIX-STAR THIS BEAST.
@0ne d3ad pon3
VastaKustutaI don't wanna say that I... neurotically did the math because I'm a math person and also neurotic,
but I did. My pre-readers can verify. They've seen the spreadsheets. He he... heh.
and... we're several dozen perfect 5 votes away, with no corresponding low votes.
That's upwards of several votes away.
I would LOVE to earn me one of those pretty, shiny, beautiful six stars. But I want it honestly. So I'll wait and see. And keep on doing my best.
Also have I mentioned lately that I love you all?
That was an intense cliffhanger. But I guess we'll have to wait a few chapters for Spitfire to actually fight...
VastaKustutaAnd by the way, I just 5-starred this on two different computers. You're welcome!
HOLY BUCK! Dee is Ditzy?! Little Dee is Dinky?!
VastaKustutaOmgomgomgomgomg...! Wait. Hold up. Hold up one second. If T-Bone is the absent father, does that means he dies?!
Mister Llama, are you familiar with the acronym RAFO?
VastaKustutaIt stands for "Read and Find Out," and I'm giggling like a school girl that I have an opportunity to use it ^.^
Hey Mysecsha, could you possibly make a family tree?
VastaKustutaAll these names are starting to confuse me. You don't have to, but it would be greatly appreciated.
@Bocajlebouf
VastaKustutaSee the Dramatis Personae!
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/12913
Wow. I guess having fighting for a special talent really lets you put the beat down on bullies.
VastaKustutaTbh I miss the wet spitfire pic
VastaKustutaOh lawd. Dose questions.
VastaKustutaOh, dear. That's not... That's not a good thing, is it, Sunshine?
VastaKustutaI miss the old pic.
VastaKustutaRead chapter 8 while listening to Dream Theater's Live @ Budokan album. I dunno if you can have an awesome-gasm, but I damn near did. I'm going to reread your story so many times...
guys, guys
VastaKustuta>old pic is right here
for you to enjoy, forever.
but, several things:
1) I was a noob and didn't ask permission to use it (Bad mysecsha! BAD! NO COOKIE FOR YOU!)
2) the new one fits the story better
3) I maked it myself and um I am proud of it... though it is a Frankenstein's monster of screen caps greyscaled and colorized.
Oh wow. S*** just got real. And thank you for finally giving us the opportunity to see Spitfire in a SERIOUS fight
VastaKustutayou guys keep saying "shit just got real"
VastaKustutaYou might want to hold off on saying that until, you know, it actually does *wink*
Holy...wow, she actually made somepony bite it and this STILL isn't where things get real?
VastaKustutaD and d make me squee! I was absolutely not expecting them to appear, and d's rules of engagement are too adorable for words!
Mysecsha, if I could get (slightly) creepy for a second: I would be honored to bear your children.
Wow, I seriously love this story, I can't wait for the next chapter!
VastaKustutaAnd where's my rating system so I can rate this story to infinity and beyond? A six star rating would be appropriate.
I miss this story! Please update.
VastaKustutaumm I mean if that's okay with you ...
@cody4375
VastaKustutathere there, Cody. Next draft is finally in revisions. It'll all be OK soon.
YUSSS!
VastaKustuta*6-star happy dance*
VastaKustutaSo... ok, there goes "sleep" tonight. Just caught this story, and let me just say it deserves it's 6-star rating. I would pay money to buy this book. Even though I'm not usually one to WonderShip (I'm normally a SoarinDash guy), this one has me leaning in that direction now. This is one of the greatest compliments I know, please take it as such.
VastaKustutaAs I work on writing my own fiction, I read works such as yours and realize just how far I have to go. Thanks for setting me a goal.
Arg update already i cant wait any moreeeee!!
VastaKustuta