[Adventure]
Author: Croswynd
Description:Unmarked (New - 21 and Epilogue!)
Purpose. In Equestria, where purpose is defined by the mark on your flank, it is often taken for granted. Yet Novell has grown to adulthood without a single explanation of where he fits in. It’s not until a chance meeting with a particular Professor that he gets the opportunity to explore the world and find out exactly where he belongs. Of course, adventuring has a host of its own problems, as this blank flank is about to find out!
Additional Tags: Long, Adventure, Blankflank, Ancient Evil
Fan Art
50 comments:
First :3
ReplyDeleteFirst! And about to read!!!
ReplyDeletedammit x)
ReplyDeleteYou guys have no pride. This is a fanfic.
ReplyDeleteAnother OC story eh?
ReplyDeleteO.o
ReplyDeleteThose are some nice OC's- OHMAHGAWD WHAT IS THAT THING IN THE BACKGROUND?!
ReplyDeleteMONSTER!!!!! URSA?
ReplyDeleteWow, this looks pretty goo-
ReplyDeleteDAMNIT! NOT ANOTHER DEAD MAN'S HAND!
Oh, I get it now. The description/image combo has reeled me in
ReplyDelete@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeleteWhen you see it...
My "to read" list is getting, well very long. To say the least.
ReplyDeleteSounds interesting, i'll have to find some time to read this soon.
ReplyDeleteYou guys suck. :p
ReplyDeleteNot just any regular Sethisto....
ReplyDeletebut Sethisto XTREME!
*Manly grunts abound*
3 First comment entries in a row? You people should be ashamed of youselves.
ReplyDeleteAs for Applebloomismywaifu, you don't even belong in this website if you just come here every post to be first.
I want more of this story. It's off to a good start, even if being a bit cliche.
ReplyDeletePosted by Sethieto XTREME. Now I have to read it.
ReplyDeleteFunny that the Unicorn is an obvious blank flank but you can't tell whether or not the main character is.
ReplyDeleteNice job getting posted, Croswynd. Great to see Unmarked finally up! :D
ReplyDeleteThe reworked prologue definitely works well. And the chapter illustrations are finally showing up for me, so that's a relief.
@Peter
Heh, yeah. I'll talk to the cover artist about those saddlebags. He and the author were a bit stubborn about them being in the image.
An Evil defeated by Discord? GO DISCORD YA!
ReplyDeleteHey, I had no opinion on those saddlebags, Wiz. Shake just drew 'em.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, everyone. Expect the next two chapters in a couple of days. :)
>_>
ReplyDeleteDon't be talking 'bout mah saddlebags, though.
I really like the fact that people enjoy the cover art. It took a while to draw. Nice to see that it's well received.
I know that my opinion doesn't matter, but this is a good story. I don't much like the author... >_> ....but the story is good.
Great job getting posted, Cros. I really hope this takes off.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, the story's great and excellently written. Please, anyone thinking about it, take the time to read it.
Lovely writing style. I breezed through the chapters quite quickly. I wonder what those half-pony half-ice monsters are? It's so dangerous that they make ponies forget about them so easily. I'll be anxiously checking for chapter 5 to see what's up with this mysterious, ice-themed stallion. :)
ReplyDelete@Draycros Well let's face it, the canon Discord is quite the bully and delights in making ponies unhappy, but he'd draw the line at a creature planning on killing them. After all, if the ponies are all dead, who'd be left to play his games? His reasons were almost certainly totally self-serving, but at least the ponies survived.
ReplyDeleteSome of the fan-fiction Discords would probably join in the slaughter. And prolly eat half the ponies alive after mind-and-bodily raping them. I dunno about some of these writers sometimes... >:|
"Novell has grown to adulthood without his mark..."
ReplyDeleteHis mark was purchased by Attachmate.
@Ironlenny
ReplyDeleteHaha! I see what you did there.
The plot thickens.....
ReplyDeleteA nice story and a cast of well thought out and totally insane characters, loving the Professor and his monologuing habits and Whisper and her snail straightman/pet/ornament.
Definitely looking forward to what you have planned next.
Am I wrong in assuming a slight crossover with Dangerous Business?
ReplyDelete@RinellaWasHere
ReplyDeleteFrom what I understand, Croswynd drops little references to Dangerous Business from time to time. But that's about it.
Soooo... maybe?
Not a Crossover, but it references it a few times. I don't mind. Dangerous Business was amazing.
ReplyDeleteWtf -___- A snail on her head xD? That's it I'm reading this now...
ReplyDeletePretty good so far
ReplyDeleteWhisper is amazingly awesome. I'll be one sad panda if she gets hurt...
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ReplyDeleteAaaaah! Creative conundrums! We must go forward!
ReplyDeleteTo the above comments, yes I do drop a bit of Dangerous Business in here and there. The ideas Jetfire put forth are genius and make sense in almost all cases, so I use them in my own story. Still, nothing big! Wouldn't want to take everything in his story.
Thanks for the comments on how the story's going so far. Hope I can get some constructive criticisms, too! I know I'm far from perfect, so anything you guys can tell me helps! :)
To writing!
So many puns... must resist suicide...
ReplyDeleteI liked it ... until the last couple of chapters (7 & 8). A certain pony BETTER come back or I will just HATE this story for making me love that pony and then taking that pony away!!! =[ The last two chapters got boring. To much thought description, not enough action, like the nightmare which was sooooo long that it killed the suspense for me. Overall it is a great story, and I think the next chapter will be good. I could say more, but this minikeyboard is annoying. I meant what I said about that certain pony!!! =(
ReplyDeleteSo Havoc looks like what everyone THOUGHT Discord would look like. Okay then.
ReplyDelete"Havoc and Chaos; you come and try to stop it when,
ReplyDeleteYou see just who you're messin' with; These boys are reppin' Twenty Ten"
Mic the Mic's lines came to mind when you mentioned Havoc as an element of Chaos. Liked the Dangerous Buisness racial features you threw in there (although I suppose it's a good thing I read that first).
Pretty neat so far, although it's too bad that Novell lost the moonstone even if it was for a good cause. Swirly's reminding me of Gary from Spongebob in his highly intelligent snail-like ways. Looks like they're on a cannon collision course with the mane cast (although as of the prologue that's already happened. Literally.)
This story reminded me quite a bit of "The Vagabond", except not quite so dark. I like where this is going!
Pony back.
ReplyDeleteMe happy! :)
Finally got around to reading some more. This story is great. To anyone reading this comment that has not read this story yet, READ IT NOW!
Can't tell who I like better. Whisper of the Good Ol' Professor. Hm...
ReplyDeleteThat was a damn good chapter.
ReplyDeleteAlways knew Scrolls was a Guido....
Liking this story more and more.
ReplyDeleteAnd now we're all caught up. So what, is it the same color as his coat, or is the lankness itself the cutie mark?
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ReplyDeleteCpt. Crash is contending Whisper as my favorite character. And she's only had one chapter!
ReplyDeleteIf anyone's interested, this story is up on FimFiction, should you prefer its format of reading over Docs: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5108/Unmarked
ReplyDelete@Croswynd
ReplyDeleteWow !
Thanks for bringing link to fimfiction!
It is much more comfortable for reading, much easier to track stories for readers as well as communicate...
And thanks for the story !
I really like it :)
Good story with live characters.
While main theme is adventure such things as Novell realizing his care for one insufferable mare really enlighten story and makes reader care for characters much more.
I hope Novell and Whisper relationship will develop through story and grow to something more than friendship in the end.