tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post8247351910199325042..comments2024-03-25T01:23:13.554-06:00Comments on Equestria Daily - MLP Stuff!: Story: Maiden FlightSethistohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03362851157623052522noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-58840904623072028782012-03-08T20:29:43.907-07:002012-03-08T20:29:43.907-07:00read rainbow factory it mentions this story and it...read rainbow factory it mentions this story and its kinda creepyPenumbrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04827413871337310672noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-18057789228635153812011-09-20T21:36:27.237-06:002011-09-20T21:36:27.237-06:00That was an incredibly sweet story. Very IC the wh...That was an incredibly sweet story. Very IC the whole way through.<br />Only thing I didn't like was using the word "garish" to describe Dash's mane. That's not how you spell awesome.DPV111https://www.blogger.com/profile/01437920503784386649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-49580445443581149652011-07-06T20:37:57.339-06:002011-07-06T20:37:57.339-06:00I loved this so much.
5/5I loved this <i>so much.</i><br /><br />5/5TenchiFreak5https://www.blogger.com/profile/17540465689043145661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-35199799611339427682011-07-05T15:47:43.431-06:002011-07-05T15:47:43.431-06:00Rainbow Dash has a lot of knowledge about flying, ...Rainbow Dash has a lot of knowledge about flying, obviously, and being ''her'' also means that she often jump a lot of security measures, of course. ;)<br /><br />Feels like there was maybe a bit too much focus on RD, instead of Scootaloo, not sure.<br /><br />Minor detail, but... I wonder what happened to that ''friend'' that 'day' ?Nova25https://www.blogger.com/profile/05422996587377021690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-46415707888419440002011-07-05T15:25:44.321-06:002011-07-05T15:25:44.321-06:00This was the cutest thing ever. I had a longer res...This was the cutest thing ever. I had a longer response, but it got eaten.Present Perfectnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-23108836117342318822011-07-05T02:31:23.321-06:002011-07-05T02:31:23.321-06:00A good story to end a good day.A good story to end a good day.RocknAnakinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02649624904245403973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-55159382016681302032011-07-05T00:34:40.629-06:002011-07-05T00:34:40.629-06:00>Additional Tags: >Not-Scootabuse
-It bette...>Additional Tags: >Not-Scootabuse<br /><br />-It better be !<br /><br />Now, reading...Nova25https://www.blogger.com/profile/05422996587377021690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-67837572444556220412011-07-04T22:48:22.732-06:002011-07-04T22:48:22.732-06:00This is EXACTLY how I imagine RD as a flight teach...This is EXACTLY how I imagine RD as a flight teacher.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-17969917569513988212011-07-04T22:12:31.927-06:002011-07-04T22:12:31.927-06:00Very well done short story! Very much in character...Very well done short story! Very much in character, and short enough to enjoy in a short amount of time!<br /><br />As for the technical jargon mentioned earlier, I actually really enjoyed it. As a pilot, I admit that many of us don't know much more than flying our planes, but we'd talk about the basics (four forces of flight, density altitude's effect on performance, the altitude/airspeed relationship, etc. found in the story) as casually as RD did. And even in the real world, all the book-learning in the world won't give a student the confidence or the hands. Impressively done, obviously well-researched, and a fun read overall!AFBluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03332755740870529591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-82018814582513343852011-07-04T19:56:59.949-06:002011-07-04T19:56:59.949-06:00Fun little read that didn't out-stay it's ...Fun little read that didn't out-stay it's welcome and brought a little smile to my face. What more did it need than that?<br /><br />Only thing that caught m off guard was being surprised that Applebloom and Sweetie Bell weren't noted around her for her first flight, surely they'de not miss it? But then, it didn't really need them either, so I'm not considering this a criticism so much as an observation. ^^Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-88526923843237892572011-07-04T17:39:26.519-06:002011-07-04T17:39:26.519-06:00This was really a nice story, you portray the char...This was really a nice story, you portray the characters well and it really creates a "feel-good" story. thanks for sharing, I really liked it!20percentcoolerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00665628028994455845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-87596336912690204492011-07-04T16:03:36.043-06:002011-07-04T16:03:36.043-06:00@Torrential Rains And yet you failed to notice ...@<a href="#c328046633207611287" rel="nofollow">Torrential Rains</a> And yet you failed to notice 'Sortalove' in your own post. Muphry's Law strikes again!nemrynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05567528569551474414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-57625009789388567532011-07-04T16:01:22.465-06:002011-07-04T16:01:22.465-06:00@Luke 'Palpated' is the one that stuck out...@<a href="#c4311168099686098832" rel="nofollow">Luke</a> 'Palpated' is the one that stuck out for me. Now, Twilight would probably use that word, and giving the narrative voice the same style as the viewpoint character is certainly a good stylistic device, but I don't think that's what the author was trying to do here.<br /><br />(Although, I'm not sure that it's actually used correctly, as palpation usually involves fingers.)nemrynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05567528569551474414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-3877486216741398462011-07-04T14:36:56.927-06:002011-07-04T14:36:56.927-06:00I feel like someone should make a flash movie feat...I feel like someone should make a flash movie featuring clips of Dash abusing Scootaloo interspersed with clips from the show of her being a good person and flashes of text on the screen that beseech Scootabuse authors to take a good hard look at themselves, all set to Bruno Mars' "Grenade".Triariihttp://triarii.deviantart.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-67236805691567417372011-07-04T14:33:17.113-06:002011-07-04T14:33:17.113-06:00@Luke
I disagree.
6starz!@<a href="#c4311168099686098832" rel="nofollow">Luke</a><br /><br />I disagree. <br /><br />6starz!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-22527476916432207942011-07-04T14:05:10.371-06:002011-07-04T14:05:10.371-06:00Nicely done. Good job.
I particularly like that &...Nicely done. Good job.<br /><br />I particularly like that "taut" is used properly. I still don't believe how many people substitute "taught". I know, it's only a single word out of probably hundreds, but it's nice to see it being the right word.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-3280466332076112872011-07-04T13:56:04.990-06:002011-07-04T13:56:04.990-06:00@Anonymous
Smart anon is smart@<a href="#c652387040980036860" rel="nofollow">Anonymous</a><br />Smart anon is smartTorrential Rainshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17008397459380477013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-6523870409800368602011-07-04T13:54:54.487-06:002011-07-04T13:54:54.487-06:00@Kits and Anon 12:52
TR is pointing out that Seth...@Kits and Anon 12:52<br /><br />TR is pointing out that Seth misspelled "Scootalove." Notice the lack of a C.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-54965039400274965602011-07-04T13:52:47.723-06:002011-07-04T13:52:47.723-06:00It's the opposite of Scootabuse, which is the ...It's the opposite of Scootabuse, which is the terrible habit of many fanfic writers to portray Dash as a uncaring sadist around Scootaloo.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-88599039106561076872011-07-04T13:49:32.053-06:002011-07-04T13:49:32.053-06:00@Torrential Rains
I think it's short for &quo...@<a href="#c4486310927808752237" rel="nofollow">Torrential Rains</a><br /><br />I think it's short for "RaInbow Dash and Scootaloo in character, d'awwwwww" or something like that.kitshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06232879663468695543noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-44863109278087522372011-07-04T13:44:39.270-06:002011-07-04T13:44:39.270-06:00Seth, quick question...
What's Sootalove?
Is...Seth, quick question...<br /><br />What's Sootalove?<br /><br />Is that a mispelling of Sortalove?Torrential Rainshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17008397459380477013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-15996787875882572722011-07-04T13:36:25.251-06:002011-07-04T13:36:25.251-06:00Yeah... I liked it. Not much to add. Just a nice s...Yeah... I liked it. Not much to add. Just a nice short story.Bareehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14996014070731481935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-77416558559927061842011-07-04T13:17:37.778-06:002011-07-04T13:17:37.778-06:00Such a heartwarming fic. 5/5.Such a heartwarming fic. 5/5.Benschacharhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09877183629232880513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-54127207356090973612011-07-04T13:10:55.369-06:002011-07-04T13:10:55.369-06:00Lovely bit of Scootalove, this one. It was a joy t...Lovely bit of Scootalove, this one. It was a joy to read and I didn't even catch any spelling error (surprisingly rare in a fanfic). It was both sweet and funny, I chuckled out loud involuntarily a few times.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-43111680996860988322011-07-04T13:03:23.899-06:002011-07-04T13:03:23.899-06:00One bit of constructive criticism; some of the &qu...One bit of constructive criticism; some of the "big words" used throughout the story are rather groan-inducing. It's not that the use of those words is bad, but using so many of them, even when used properly and in a way the readers can understand what they mean, makes it look like the writer is trying too hard, and it gets annoying fast.<br /><br />It's still a good story, and I gave it 5 stars, but my real rating would probably have to be 4.5 because of the word abuse alone.Lukenoreply@blogger.com