tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post4676721217577061932..comments2024-03-28T13:36:33.816-06:00Comments on Equestria Daily - MLP Stuff!: Story: Spacegirl (Update Part 5!)Sethistohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03362851157623052522noreply@blogger.comBlogger86125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-69416299826044602422013-07-27T16:36:19.413-06:002013-07-27T16:36:19.413-06:00Am I the only one reading this in 2013? O_oAm I the only one reading this in 2013? O_oAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10294663503204530488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-8764214572704196212012-03-10T21:32:03.622-07:002012-03-10T21:32:03.622-07:00CH.5 :
>Applejack’s hair was beginning to grey...CH.5 :<br /><br />>Applejack’s hair was beginning to grey out some, the once strong and robust mare’s health degraded with her age, and she had fallen sickly the last few years.<br />-Huhhh... the author DOES know that AJ is like, at MAX., about 10years older than Applebloom... not 30-40years...<br /><br />>“Well, the stress of what happened to you got to Applejack<br />-Again... AJ isn’t 30years older than Applebloom ! If AJ is, say, 80Years old, Applebloom would be 70-75...<br />So, no. AJ can’t be as old as it seems to be ‘’implied’’ here, without Applebloom ALSO being old/very old...<br /><br />>Applejack as her condition started to decline a small amount. The wheezing and small groaning had resumed, and she had begun vomiting after eating as well.<br />-Oh for crying out loud ! It’s annoying how MUCH the age difference is wrong in this story... and now we will get a dumb death by ‘old age injury’... with a pony BARELY 5-10Years older than the CMC !<br /><br />>The orange pony’s bedding was wet with the secrete from Apple Bloom’s eyes and nose<br />-...charming... Couldn’t use dictionary to find more proper words here ? I don’t know... TEARS! And really, what’s up with the ‘booger’ thing ?<br /><br />>“I-its not your fault.” She coughed, slinking into a long, awkward coughing fit.<br />-Yeah, she’s right... It’s all the fault of that *weird* time-relativity anomaly that made her 30-40 years older than her little sister...<br /><br />Seriously... Applebloom go to ‘Primary School’ in the series, she about around 10 years old... AJ, as stated by Laurent Faust, is a ‘young adult’, thus about 20 Years old...<br /><br />-----<br /><br />Better written than CH.4, that’s for sure, but... and here this is only my opinion (plus basic mathematic...)... the idea, to seemingly make AJ a LOT older than she should reasonably be considering the small age-difference with her sister Applebloom, was a bit of a crappy one.<br />It’s like... since the ‘original’ members of the apple family (AJ, Applebloom, Big Mac) apparently didn’t have parents (in the series, so far), that the author decided to have AJ die... as a substitute for a tragic mother’s death cliché...<br />I don’t know... it just look cheap.Nova25https://www.blogger.com/profile/05422996587377021690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-41316868439127829552012-03-10T21:21:56.401-07:002012-03-10T21:21:56.401-07:00Weird... I could swear I read the first 3 parts, a...Weird... I could swear I read the first 3 parts, and my bookmark is at #4... yet, no comment by me ?<br />*shrug* All I remember is that it was an ‘ok’/interesting story... and it has been a LONG time. Let’s see now.<br /><br />-----<br /><br />CH.4 :<br /><br />>The male watched >The male put his larger hooves >She was infatuated with the male<br />>standing up with the female >He took queue and led the female to the door >took two spoons, passing one to the female.<br />-...ok, a bit bland with so MANY uses of the same generic-sex term...<br />Here’s some perfectly acceptable and correct terms used for male and female ponies, as seen in pretty much every single stories made :<br />Adult male in general : Stallion.<br />Adult female : Mare.<br />Adolescent / Young *adult* male : Colt.<br />Baby/pretty young female / Adolescent : Filly.<br />Baby ponies in general / Pretty young male : Foal.<br />...And, I don’t think it would be a bad idea to use ‘her/him/she/he/and their names’ a bit more often, as a substitute for male/female.<br /><br />>assuring herself her would soon arrive.<br />-‘’he’’ (small error)<br /><br />-----<br /><br />From what I remember of 1-to-3, and what I just read from 4 (and later, 5)...<br />A relatively original idea, the ‘writing’ itself was a bit mild/generic, but not that bad... (later : the ''writing'' does seem to get better at CH.5).<br /><br />At some point, it started sounding like a familiar idea I heard somewhere before ?<br />...‘‘Female/Male character with dream to go to space.. goes to space, but something happens... Male/Female lover think the other is maybe dead, but she/he miraculously survives, and there’s an emotional reunion’’...<br />A movie, maybe ?Nova25https://www.blogger.com/profile/05422996587377021690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-85169869617273857112012-03-03T21:51:00.735-07:002012-03-03T21:51:00.735-07:00I want to love this. It's Spacegirl! The story...I want to love this. It's <i>Spacegirl</i>! The story itself coming back from the grave is fantastic! A true triumph, and I <b>am</b> glad that it is back.<br /><br /><br />And yet...<br /><br /><br /><br />The last chapter... just, why? Leaving aside the fact that if Scoots is in her mid-late 20s as the story seems to imply, AJ shouldn't even be older than 40, what purpose did killing her off even serve? I don't like asking questions like this, because the author usually has a plan and I'm made to look foolish, but <i>why</i>?<br /><br />It just seems to add cheap drama in a story that already has more than enough justification for a Sad tag as it was. It just makes me so frustrated to see it pop up like this.TenchiFreak5https://www.blogger.com/profile/17540465689043145661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-13838836793322513652012-02-14T17:09:09.079-07:002012-02-14T17:09:09.079-07:00@Melodia Yes, both my eyebrows rose considerably ...@<a href="#c5425907999417117292" rel="nofollow">Melodia</a> Yes, both my eyebrows rose considerably at the serious age discrepancy. Granny Smith, from what we can tell from the given canon, is nearly 100 years old. And Lauren Faust has given the ages of the Mane 6 as being somewhere between 16 and 20. Assuming Scootaloo is the youngest CMC and AJ is the oldest of the Mane 6, about 12 years is the largest allowable age difference. Even if AJ had some chronic wasting disease (not stated, would help tremendously if it's the case), all other time indicators in the story mean she couldn't possibly be older than her early 50's at this point.Alondrohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03723139379439204852noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-54748650612740731432012-02-13T22:59:44.833-07:002012-02-13T22:59:44.833-07:00This fic is really sad... definitely needs some ma...This fic is really sad... definitely needs some major sad tags. It's triggering my chronic depression.Luminoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03705697361919782074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-54259079994171172922012-02-13T21:57:43.695-07:002012-02-13T21:57:43.695-07:00Um....seriously? Killing all suspension of disbeli...Um....seriously? Killing all suspension of disbelief here. Apple Jack is, at most MAYBE about 12 years older than Apple Bloom, and that's stretching it. Even if you discount Granny Smith's obviously large age (founding of Ponyville and all that) to describe AJ as so old is utterly ridiculous. <br /><br />That's just one problem. I could go on, but won't.Melodiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06468168804024784370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-16406894654725593082012-02-11T19:05:34.951-07:002012-02-11T19:05:34.951-07:00....ok? Kind of an odd tangent the fic seems to be.......ok? Kind of an odd tangent the fic seems to be taking.Melodiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06468168804024784370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-20914781670644875912012-02-11T01:41:54.550-07:002012-02-11T01:41:54.550-07:00Sorry about such a long wait guys!Sorry about such a long wait guys!PonyCraft Bloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09630476015592907771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-33689428714713231522012-02-10T21:09:13.413-07:002012-02-10T21:09:13.413-07:00"Scoot for the stars!"
Oh my goodness th..."Scoot for the stars!"<br />Oh my goodness this quote is PERFECT.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-80834181050517879942012-02-10T20:48:16.331-07:002012-02-10T20:48:16.331-07:00DUDE! So happy to see this one back! I'll have...DUDE! So happy to see this one back! I'll have to re-read it, it's been a while, but that is SO AWESOME!lesserpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10501141570160735519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-19452568134255181552012-02-10T19:51:10.250-07:002012-02-10T19:51:10.250-07:00Oh man, how old is this one? First Silly Species S...Oh man, how old is this one? First Silly Species Swapping, now this?<br /><br />Suffice it to say, will get a full reread. I remember really liking this one.Melodiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06468168804024784370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-9143316704287297392012-02-10T19:26:41.845-07:002012-02-10T19:26:41.845-07:00I thought it was abandoned!I thought it was abandoned!TrivialBoyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10620607227605926531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-69303088803879929592012-02-10T17:49:48.753-07:002012-02-10T17:49:48.753-07:00Surprise, it updated!!! :DSurprise, it updated!!! :DWierdplatformerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15125598550123573314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-6073791535486013012012-02-10T16:04:30.700-07:002012-02-10T16:04:30.700-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.O. Hindshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08695811773429678183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-11861322919903126622011-12-09T00:34:28.843-07:002011-12-09T00:34:28.843-07:00Winston's gonna be taken aback at first but re...Winston's gonna be taken aback at first but realize that he loves her. Or pinkie pie bakes him into a cupcake. Whoever wrote that story needs to be shot for being a sick bastardRevanShaanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08339839826365418197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-40453018578670268612011-11-22T16:41:03.001-07:002011-11-22T16:41:03.001-07:00PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!RevanShaanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08339839826365418197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-23557599689073319152011-08-17T22:00:49.585-06:002011-08-17T22:00:49.585-06:00Mmkay, quote from Sunshine Smiles dated August 12t...Mmkay, quote from Sunshine Smiles dated August 12th<br /><br />"I know, that latest chapter was a bit rushed, and chapter 4 is somewhat done making it more emotional"<br /><br />http://www.fimfiction.com/story/200/rainbow_dashhaganbmjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04516074686214636152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-28383474598619876072011-08-17T21:58:12.511-06:002011-08-17T21:58:12.511-06:00q.q Hope you're right on part four still being...q.q Hope you're right on part four still being in the works Anonpony!haganbmjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04516074686214636152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-24633764648112302012011-08-15T01:11:34.872-06:002011-08-15T01:11:34.872-06:00Well thank god its not dead. I've been waiting...Well thank god its not dead. I've been waiting to see the end of this for over a month.Sam W.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-48538896055015973092011-08-09T03:44:52.614-06:002011-08-09T03:44:52.614-06:00Confond these ponies they drive me to manly tears....Confond these ponies they drive me to manly tears...Of MANLIENESS!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-69603628848010559752011-08-08T20:08:26.455-06:002011-08-08T20:08:26.455-06:00Confond these ponies they drive me to manly tears....Confond these ponies they drive me to manly tears...Of MANLIENESS!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-85051275834066052572011-08-04T10:55:10.648-06:002011-08-04T10:55:10.648-06:00this is NOT dead. I can testify to this. (Seeing a...this is NOT dead. I can testify to this. (Seeing as I am looking at the fourth part)Anonponynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-90885741679418354602011-07-23T17:17:20.715-06:002011-07-23T17:17:20.715-06:00More please!More please!Avogadrohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18159290427780727413noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-58190950291191008232011-07-23T04:12:46.517-06:002011-07-23T04:12:46.517-06:00Gosh darnit, what happened to this story? I was so...Gosh darnit, what happened to this story? I was so excited to be able to see rocket ScootalooDdude28https://www.blogger.com/profile/03232468578009580411noreply@blogger.com