tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post4527740435082023727..comments2024-03-25T01:23:13.554-06:00Comments on Equestria Daily - MLP Stuff!: Story: The Struggle for Power (Update Chapter 8+9!)Sethistohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03362851157623052522noreply@blogger.comBlogger72125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-76343385215392324552011-10-12T21:10:57.027-06:002011-10-12T21:10:57.027-06:00@Cátsy
I actually still have internet, sorry. I h...@<a href="#c8894353314847598934" rel="nofollow">Cátsy</a><br /><br />I actually still have internet, sorry. I have two more chapters ready to be typed up, however I have kind of abandoned this specific story because I will be rewriting it. Same characters, though perhaps with small twists, same basic ideas of a mirror world, just different specific events and progression. I'll introduce Seren earlier so people realize he's the bad guy and whatnot.<br /><br />I could still release the two extra chapters if you want, and I will do the new story sometime soon. I'll make a reference in the description saying it's a re-write of this.Scribbleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03900767654408975167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-88943533148475989342011-10-10T11:26:34.310-06:002011-10-10T11:26:34.310-06:00Been wondering if this was ever going going to con...Been wondering if this was ever going going to continue. It was an interesting ride but I'm going go continue avoid reading 8 and 9 since there hasn't been any updates in months =/<br /><br />I take it scribbles still has no internet? If this story continues nice, if now then well a pity really.<br /><br />I never commented before since I never saw the need for such things back then but I been following the story since Ch.1 was put out on EqD and since then each chapter has been one weird twist after another. I don't know what people are complaining about with the villain you introduced, and honestly not going to bother finding out if this isn't going to be getting any more updates.<br /><br />This story was reaching good heights and well shame it seems dead in the water these days. Perhaps I'll return to this one some day when it has a complete tag. For what it's worth I had enjoyed this story a lot, some parts less then others but the Griffon war part and the 'real' Gilda and their story was interesting =3<br /><br />Rarity doctor was a plus who'd thought! but made so much sense!<br /><br />P.S. I hope everything going well for you scribbles and if you do work on this story again I promise to give it another chance if I see 2 more chapters at least ;3Cátsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16646254602614333549noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-15202155283644253782011-09-20T18:57:52.461-06:002011-09-20T18:57:52.461-06:00Nope, I'm not a liar. It's in the last two...Nope, I'm not a liar. It's in the last two paragraphs of chapter two, for anyone who wishes to check it out.Codename: P^2https://www.blogger.com/profile/07038387409630755028noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-90662094171947910022011-09-20T18:52:16.318-06:002011-09-20T18:52:16.318-06:00Sorry L, but I'm known for my burns, not my pr...Sorry L, but I'm known for my burns, not my praise. If you wish you can blame it on your characters' dark thoughts.<br /><br />The story contains quite a few spelling and grammar problems, there seem to be more of them in the latter chapters. I don't blame for this, even fully published books have mistakes.<br /><br />I'll go back and check, but right after Twi and the others left through the mirror, didn't it say that 6 ponies in this "Dark World" were watching and left? I figured that was the Dark Main Six (I'm not all that into pony lingo), but latter you said that Pinkie already had hers. We know it wasn't Luna, so is it an error, my mistake, or an unknown pony? Like I said, I'll go back and check that it actually said that, I refuse to be a liar.<br /><br />Those are my main complaints, and they are minor. I'm interested on what the future holds for our heroes, if, in fact, they are heroes.<br /><br />One last thing to end this: FINISH THE STORY. You managed to hook the "fish" and keep it on the line, don't throw the pole overboard. Catch my drift?Codename: P^2https://www.blogger.com/profile/07038387409630755028noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-50836866933219532182011-09-13T14:58:46.664-06:002011-09-13T14:58:46.664-06:00@Godot-17
Actually, what's going on here is I...@<a href="#c6964840754019331794" rel="nofollow">Godot-17</a><br /><br />Actually, what's going on here is I'm revising it, while keeping the most interesting elements. I'm trying to get everything written out all at once so it can be released on a truly regular basis.<br /><br />Now, I do have two more chapters already written up for this, if you guys want...but I have more or less given up on this specific story.<br /><br />Don't worry, much will remain the same with the re-write, mostly just the organization and specific events are changing.Scribbleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03900767654408975167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-69648407540193317942011-09-13T01:27:25.901-06:002011-09-13T01:27:25.901-06:00And over one month later... Potential 6-star is Po...And over one month later... Potential 6-star is Potential no more.Godot-17https://www.blogger.com/profile/00380514272238573052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-28416610447029411782011-08-03T17:29:20.386-06:002011-08-03T17:29:20.386-06:00@everyone
Okay...Scribbles's internet connect...@everyone<br /><br />Okay...Scribbles's internet connection went down, so I'm filling in for him as far as comment addressing goes (by way of telephone communication between the two of us).<br /><br />He says to say that he is "working on the next chapter, and due to the concerns, [he] will take extra care to explain it and [he'll] get back to the other characters soon. Also one of the major themes in this story is who really is the bad guy, but for all purposes yes that is Seren for now. Also thanks for your patience with [him]."<br /><br />I'd also just like to say that I understand the time paradoxes perfectly (we're not going to mention that I also came up with some of them) so if you weenies think that these ones are bad you should go read anything from <a href="http://www.mspaintadventures.com/" rel="nofollow">MSPA</a> and then what you've seen so far here will look easy to understand in comparison.<br /><br />Excitedly not a brony,<br />The devoted assistant scribbler,<br />PawnStarPawnStarnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-64071864807337176102011-08-03T01:11:25.575-06:002011-08-03T01:11:25.575-06:00I have a low tolerance for drawn out or wierd stor...I have a low tolerance for drawn out or wierd stories, but this one works very well, and is intelligently paced. <br /><br />So... In the opposite alternative universe they look into the past where the actors are aware that they'll be looked at so they look in the past again (BWOOOOONG), where a being not yet created in the first memory time travels to threaten the actors when they were younger, placing their parents in a double bind that forces them to always resolve the inevitable paradox so that... OK I understand it perfectly up to there and it's explained very well. I mean, I lose interest and can't follow simple fics if they're not well writte, and this one certainly is. Just make sure to explain the motivation and results of these actions clearly.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-26519780968101171072011-08-02T19:54:12.395-06:002011-08-02T19:54:12.395-06:00@Anonymous
"Um... okay? "Celestia! You ...@<a href="#c4492357320237328040" rel="nofollow">Anonymous</a><br /><br />"Um... okay? "Celestia! You will pay for your horrible crime of... um... not stopping my manipulative boyfriend from doing exactly what he's doing again right now, when you were completely powerless. Buh?"<br /><br />I don't get how either memory bubble was supposed to present the people presenting them in a good light. They both seem to disprove the things they're supposed to be proving."<br /><br />^this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-70320486685303389552011-08-02T14:12:45.758-06:002011-08-02T14:12:45.758-06:00I'll withhold final judgement of this fic unti...I'll withhold final judgement of this fic until it is finished (gracious of me, I know). I cannot help but feel that the story has taken too much of a turn for the surreal though. The plot is looking quite convoluted after this last update, and I'm wondering if the story can fix this. The addition of time travel to any story is a plot-breaking element. Memory bubbles are fine, but allowing characters to travel in time at will breaks almost all stories. I'd love to see you pull it off, but I must express my doubts about it at this point. <br />One other thing: you may want to consider pacing the new little devices you add to the story. You added the memory bubble: good. You add a memory bubble within a memory bubble in the same chapter as we first see into the memory bubble: getting dicey. You add the existence of time travel to the memory bubble inside the first memory bubble in the same chapter: readers either develop a brain aneurysm or start to lose interest in the convoluted plot. Just consider this if you see it for the next update.TwinkiePinkienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-29583456586626023372011-08-02T13:15:09.993-06:002011-08-02T13:15:09.993-06:00I'm sooooooooo confused! Who the hell are the ...I'm sooooooooo confused! Who the hell are the good guys? So Seren/Quicksilver is evil?Silent Solacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16319530911546998005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-48884756249429495192011-08-02T13:04:07.399-06:002011-08-02T13:04:07.399-06:00There is just too much exposition and too little m...There is just too much exposition and too little meat on the story atm. or atleast that is my humble oppinion.Damhoofnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-51601295750573758152011-08-02T13:02:02.447-06:002011-08-02T13:02:02.447-06:00didnt really like how this turned out. I like the ...didnt really like how this turned out. I like the alternate dimensions and all but i still think if twi wouldnt have killed them 30 gryphons unless something nudged her in the berserking kind of direction first. <br /><br />Im sure you thought everything trough, with all the cameos and all but its just too streamlined and because its unfinished and because i havent done more than read it once i can just say there are instances where i considered to stop reading or my suspension of belief was shattered.<br /><br />The encounter with Derpy being one, twi killing gryphons and the following aftermath being the second. The elements of harmony are too silent and i realise its hard to play off multitude of characters but that there is probably where your biggest challenge lies.Damhoofnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-92077428170420036332011-08-02T12:40:25.322-06:002011-08-02T12:40:25.322-06:00lol at the progressively grimdark tag, I have neve...lol at the progressively grimdark tag, I have never seen that before.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-79800952831205251672011-08-02T10:43:56.405-06:002011-08-02T10:43:56.405-06:00I´ll wait for further updates before commenting on...I´ll wait for further updates before commenting on these two chapters. It´s too incomplete right now.<br />But it does seem that there is a certain self fullfilling circle here.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-11848570927606999382011-08-02T10:10:01.106-06:002011-08-02T10:10:01.106-06:00...
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MEMORYBUBBLECEPTION!...<br /><br />...<br /><br />MEMORYBUBBLECEPTION!Esmelthienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12635232007780296807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-78256394408486426202011-08-02T09:25:56.540-06:002011-08-02T09:25:56.540-06:00lul? [Progressively Grimdark]lul? [Progressively Grimdark]Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-70330300904900072952011-08-02T09:22:34.965-06:002011-08-02T09:22:34.965-06:00HOLY UPDATES BATMAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!HOLY UPDATES BATMAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-44923573202373280402011-08-02T09:00:16.771-06:002011-08-02T09:00:16.771-06:00Um... okay? "Celestia! You will pay for your ...Um... okay? "Celestia! You will pay for your horrible crime of... um... not stopping my manipulative boyfriend from doing exactly what he's doing again right now, when you were completely powerless. Buh?"<br /><br />I don't get how either memory bubble was supposed to present the people presenting them in a good light. They both seem to disprove the things they're supposed to be proving.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-13454111536584479402011-08-02T07:33:46.010-06:002011-08-02T07:33:46.010-06:00So that's what the bubbles are for. Interestin...So that's what the bubbles are for. Interesting.DreadedCandiru2https://www.blogger.com/profile/15561460498807276057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-29285943369572188432011-07-29T07:40:41.846-06:002011-07-29T07:40:41.846-06:00Seren is by far my favorite character in this stor...Seren is by far my favorite character in this story. I can say that truthfully because if he's who I think he is then [SPOILER ANTICIPATED AND BLOCKED] and he's just gonna be awesome.<br /><br />If he's not who I think he is, then fine...I would be wrong at that point, and I'd have to wait another few chapters for the one I'm thinking about to come around.<br /><br />But seriously, some people collect swords or trinkets from those they have slain, Seren collects their fallen titles as he murders them in cold blood. Each new title is an honor and a reminder from his previous "jobs".<br /><br />Keep it up, 'cause if not you'd have a lot of disappointed persons.<br /><br />Excitedly not a brony,<br />Your devoted assistant scribbler,<br />PawnStar<br /><br />P.S. <a href="http://notch.tumblr.com/post/8208212863/the-psychology-of-the-reticle-and-the-feeling-of" rel="nofollow">Notch just posted about new mobs</a>! They look like they're gonna be scary, but I'm still sure that with three swords and a pile of string I could best them.PawnStarnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-38811020305433055262011-07-18T12:34:07.213-06:002011-07-18T12:34:07.213-06:00@Brony Tom: Due to popular demand, I will change T...@Brony Tom: Due to popular demand, I will change Twilight's snapping-out of it, expect the change by the time the next chapter gets posted.<br /><br />I'll address the over-hearing ponies thing in the next chapter as well. Mistakes happen, sorry everyone. But hey, sometimes mistakes can be good plot-points to, eh? We'll have to see where I go with this...Scribbleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03900767654408975167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-75163348008812001662011-07-16T23:32:50.561-06:002011-07-16T23:32:50.561-06:00I lol'd at chapter 3's titleI lol'd at chapter 3's titleAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-33350006004878983662011-07-16T20:33:25.012-06:002011-07-16T20:33:25.012-06:00I've been avoiding this story for quite some t...I've been avoiding this story for quite some time now, The incomplete tag keeps me away from good stories it seems from the comments. I'll give this a shot, be back tomorrow with a response.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1865775941337421610.post-63550825987480553672011-07-16T13:10:09.215-06:002011-07-16T13:10:09.215-06:00Well, at the end of part 6 it seemed like Twilight...Well, at the end of part 6 it seemed like Twilight was absolutely heartbroken after killing 30 griffons. I really thought that was a nice touch, and I was looking forward to Twilight getting a nice talking-to from her reflection about life/death/etc. So when Twilight just all-of-a-sudden snaps out of it, I was kinda disappointed. (But the part about Dusklight being a conniving back-stabber type was awesome).<br /><br />Also, when Gilda is talking to Rainbow Dash in the cart, wouldn't the other ponies be able to hear them talking? I would think that they would do something about that.<br /><br />Still, though, I enjoyed the read.Brony Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12755575741711906872noreply@blogger.com