• Story: Through The Eyes of Another Pony (Update Redone 5-6 Chapters!)


    [Human In Equestria] [Comedy][Adventure]

    Author: CardsLafter
    Description:
    "So yeah, I'm a human.  And now I'm a pony.  No, that's not a joke, though I would laugh if it were.  All I did was party at my place and pass out, only to wake up in Ponyville.  Now you must be thinking I had one too many, and I'm right there with you.  But no drunken hallucination lasts this long and whatever the case, The Nightmare seems to have a problem with me.  A big one.

    So now, armed with my cigarettes and some cool unicorn magic, I have to fight off The Nightmare, my own Fanbronyism, and try to find the time to let the ponies give me a name.  I know, I suggested getting a pony name first, but they're pretty excited about that.  Not sure why.  All of the ponies in this town are crazy."
    All Links after the break! 


    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 1
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 2
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 3
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 4
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 5
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 6
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 7
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 8
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 9
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 10
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 11
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 12
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 13
    Through The Eyes of Another Pony Part 14


    REVISED EDITION:


    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 1
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 2
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 3
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 4
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 5 Part 1 (New!)
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 5 Part 2 (New!)
    Through the Eyes of Another Pony Part 6 (New!)

    Additional Tags: Humans Are Not Monsters, Okay? Emotional Roller Coaster

    4,597 comments:

    1. two thougths I got after reading the fourth chapter:
      1) where/when in the world of Equestria do you think there is/was slaves? I mean Celestia knew the meaning of the word, so the concept must (have) exist(ed).
      2) Absorbing the entire internet, That can't be good for you! and not just because of the bad stuff you would get, but due to the sheer scale of information about everything, I mean it basically contains the combined knowledge of humanity. And if this magic goes past passwords and stuff there's even more information out there what with all the books and posts and stuff available through it.
      Even an Alicorn brain may be unable to deal with so much information all at once.

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    2. Also, IF someone were to absorb the entire Internet into their brain, the massive amount of information might drive them temporarily incoherent, but eventually they'd be okay. You see, there's a cut-off point on how much info a mind can coherently take in at once. after you reach that point, anything beyond becomes gibberish. Once Luna had a good long sleep and quality downtime, her brain would purposely discard most of the useless information, leaving only vague impressions and disturbing emotional backlash in its place. Being an alicorn, I'm sure she would remember a lot, but certainly not even a fraction of the entire Internet would be available to her memory.

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    3. Damn that sucks for No-name's Atrix 4G, Hope he gets it back otherwise just his cigs by his side wont be enough for his calm sanity :D

      oh and very awesome made story. I wana read MOAR...of what happens next of course :3

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    4. Luna obsorbed the entire internet, therefore she must have gotten the very worst like gore and shock sites. #_# oh Jesus I almost don't wanna know what happens in the next chapter

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    5. "The savage yet technologically advanced warrior race!”

      Anyone else thought about Klingons?

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    6. Poor Luna, poor poor, poor Luna, I wouldn't wish what she did on my greatest enemy.

      @Jake
      Nah, that is only gonna create a FANFICCEPTION.

      Amazing work still, Lafter. I really liked how you kept the naivety in Celestia, and the dimension-hopper Luna spin was really something.

      What I didn't like were the comments in upcase. They were kinda hard to read, and they broke the reading flow. IMHO, it would be better to just leave them at standard font, between brackets, and if you really wanna differentiate them from the rest, then I'd suggest italics, or better, using a slightly smaller font, so to keep readability while making it obvious it's that kind of text.

      But really, another amazing chapter. Parts I liked the most (that I remembered to take note of:
      It was unnerving. I’ve never had that feeling before in my life. I hear about it all the time in books and stuff, but I just thought it was a plot device or something!
      “This thing holds knowledge and secrets! Terrible ones! Things that would drive you mad! Crazy, even! Just look at me!”
      “I feel a slight undertone of racism setting in,”
      “Children. Focus. Thank you,”
      Awww! Thanks, Celestia. =3 You’re pretty cool, too.
      Then she poked her bottom lip out. By Celestia’s beard, it was adorable.
      she gave a wing shrug (jealous)
      “Yeah, go work. Do celestial stuff. Keep the circle of life rolling,”
      Storm Trooper syndrome, anyone?
      We’re talking the sword of Celestia in the form of pony!


      Can't wait for ch5, keep it up Lafter! You're doing awesome ^^

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    7. I'm actually gonna search how much data does the internet have... wait... that's just impossible. YOU SERIOUS LUNA? She's like a genius now... even more... actually, isn't the internet abtract? Like doesn't it change and update it self every second? Wonder if she gets updates too.

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    8. I'm actually gonna search how much data does the internet have... wait... that's just impossible. YOU SERIOUS LUNA? She's like a genius now... even more... actually, isn't the internet abtract? Like doesn't it change and update it self every second? Wonder if she gets updates too.

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    9. @RainbowDat

      Don't worry, Dat. I got this. ;3

      Have a little faith, I've got it all taken care of, I've got the general idea laid out, it's just all going to come down to writing it out, making it funny, and having a good time while doing so.

      JUST TO REMIND EVERYONE, THERE ISN'T A GRIMDARK TAG ON THIS STORY! :D

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    10. ♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

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    11. It's quite good this will remain a comedy, because in the hands of another writer I could easily see chapter 5 as the beginning of the apocalypse in Equestria.

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    13. I really hope there was a safesearch filter on Google at the time...

      Also love the new fanart. The mane and tail colors are reversed tho...

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    15. @Vegetalss4

      It doesn't necessarily imply that ponies themselves had slaves. I'm thinking they may have encountered the concept from some of their neighbors, the diamond dogs, possibly.

      I'm having technical issues! LUNA!!! Stop messing with my internet!


      -Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria

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    16. What I'm really concerned about is the Internet being mostly porn.

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    17. @Lafter
      Luna absorbed WHOLE internet, yet there is no grimdark?

      Maybe he had his mature filter on?

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    18. Luna absorbed the internet. Can she read our comments now? Btw hi luna

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    19. Luna just saw of of the Luna games.
      She cannot unsee.

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    20. @DPV111
      Maybe I shouldn't be the one to correct this, but the art shown in the chapters are correct, as far as coloring. The front page image art color was unfortunatly swapped.

      I'll hopefully have a simple sketch n color done up for every chapter, and if not it'll prolly show up later.

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    21. Another thought: I do rather enjoy Wreks' cutie mark design though, If I could do that with colored pencil and make it look just as good I would.

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    22. Maybe... Just maybe... it was all a bad dream?

      (If I'm right, I hope I won't get shot for this by the author)

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    23. I love your Smart arse Luna she's loads better than Sad Luna.

      Also, pretty ace OC.

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    24. @Ice Storm

      Yeah I was referring to the frontpage one. Not detracting from the awesome, just a color swap...

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    25. One of thee best fan fiction that I have ever read! This makes me want to jump for joy!!

      I can't wait for chapter five! :D :D :D

      And the Fox "News" reference also won the author (not sure if these comments on this website should be addressed to the author or the viewers of the story) a plethora of brownie points!

      This story definitely merits an epic brohoof!

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    26. This story is hilarious and just took a turn for the very serious.

      Luna absorbed the internet. Screw HER innocence. Nevermind 1,000 years with the nightmare, that was a toddler's timeout compared to what she just did.

      Oh god...I need more! Please write more! I want to see how this plays out...and I want to laugh like only your stories can make me laugh!

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    27. Luna just absorbed the internet.

      Well, we've got one shot at preserving her sanity. Here goes nothing.

      *ahem*

      Hey Luna, just to let you know, 4chan and those other places people are mentioning? Those are effectively foalish pranks by people who are old enough to know all about sex and the other really bad stuff that Nightmare would do. It's all in good "fun" and most of us ignore it anyway. Also, we're kind of young as a species; we evolved from a tribal, violent species of omnivores and only gained sentience less than 100 thousand years ago, so if you'd cut us a bit of slack we'd really appreciate it. Especially considering that in the last century we've been making really great strides in peacefulness and general not-sucking.

      Also, kick Noname in the face for me. But not too hard, he's quite funny.

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    28. @banjo2E

      Er, wait. Did I just imply that sex is evil? Because it's not, it's just this thing that we do. I'm sure ponies do it too, unless you're like Pinkie Pie and retcon yourself into existence or something.

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    29. How does one subscribe to a story on Equestria Daily? I don't want to miss chapter five! :D

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    30. If its THE WHOLE INTERNETS then Luna is fu><0r3d. I mean hell, at least a third of it is just ads and scams and squatters and pornography anyway. So instead of just um, surfing Wikipedia to "learn about humanity", she embeds shock sites, MLP Rule 34 content, /b/ channel, Stormfront, Jihadi beheading videos and God Knows What Else into her brain? Ouch. I wouldn't do that....would you?

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    31. LOL LUNA READ CUPCAKES & SWEET APPLE MASSACRE

      ENJOY DEM NIGHTMARES ABOUT PINKIE PIE & BIG MAC HOMEGIRL

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    32. I told myself I wouldn't read anymore unfinished fics. WHY did I do iiitt?!?! Need more NAOW!

      Seriously though, this is awesome. For all the people that whine and moan about OC characters and self-inserts, they haven't read this. I don't even know if this IS a self-insert (nor do I care, btw). This is pure pony entertainment, and I love it.

      I like all the fanon references, most of all. Just out of curiosity, is the absorbing of the internets in any way a nod to Arddun Lleuad? I'm guessing it is because of another reference I spotted, in which a certain name is screamed out in all caps. If not, still hilarious, can't wait to see what unfolds!

      I couldn't help but notice something that is a bit of a spoiler in the way it was written. It may not be but just to be safe:

      **[POSSIBLE SPOILER]**
      "Invisibility was never something I got used to. I’m fairly certain it accounts for at least three lost years of my life in heart damage."

      So apparently 'No-name" is writing/telling this story after the fact, and from the way this is written you can assume he is still in Equestria after/while writing it(the only place I know of where invisibility can happen regularly), so he either never goes home, or ends up being able to visit often. I hope that fact isn't supposed to be a surprise or part of a cliffhanger, because this sentence kinda gave it away for me.

      But who knows, maybe you'll suprise me! I hope so!

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    33. @Kahrn

      I will say this, I purposefully have avoided using sentences like that in future chapters. They implicate things that I may not mean.

      Every chapter I'm told I'm getting a little better and I hope I stick to that. But the chapter is finished and is coming out, so you can make that call yourself in just a few hours. :3

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    34. @Tosxychor

      actually inception is defined as the creation of something so its fanficreation?

      P.S. im sorry if a pooped on your comment.

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    35. It's good. really good. Make more!

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    36. Well, we're allowed to edit. Change that :X

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    37. Denied editability! >:o Also, derp.

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    38. You know, Luna has actually hit ponies before. Not only did she have a shoot-out with her sister before getting banished, but she decked several royal guards when she came back. And that's just what we know about.

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    39. @640x480
      And from the sounds of the end of Chapter 5, consequences will never be the same.

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    40. Well, I think I'm relieved that Luna's not quite as screwed up as I thought she would be. Hmm... I see Equestria getting some massive technological advancements in the next few centuries.


      -Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria

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    41. And thus my day has been made from reading this at 12:27pm thanks CardsLafter keep up the good work
      NeverKnown

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    42. @SingForTheMoon
      next few centuries id put it at the next year :D

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    43. I was in the middle of a League of Legends game and I checked EqD on my phone.

      >> Saw this story was updated
      >> holy crap
      >> drop everything, immediately leave my LoL game
      >> I must know what happens to Luna!

      >> begins chapter 5

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    44. @David Johnston

      Aha, but speculate! Was that her? Or The Nightmare!? *ominous thunder* o.o

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    45. So apparently it's gonna take till chapter 6 before we find out the extent of Luna's knowledge.
      Did she get the whole internet or just the local memory? And just how much has she retained?

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    46. Unfortunately, the plural of 'hypothesis' is actually 'hypotheses'.

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    47. @nemryn

      Damn it, that was a Freudian slip, not a misspelling, I promise you. >.<

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    48. Oh wow, and here I thought my day would've gone without my daily dosage of pony fun! Great timing on this update CardLafter, and you're doing a positively awesome job with the story line!

      I hope Celestia doesn't stay too angry at the poor colt. I mean, he really does seem like he's doing his best to keep the corruption of the human world out of Equestria...

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    49. @Sebiale

      Unless No-Name (yes, I'll give it a day before I spoil it for comment readers) is fluent in "a t... thousand d... d-different languages", i doubt it's the local memory.

      Also, Mr CardsLafter Pony, I hope you don't mind, but in the Fanfic I'm writing, I'm purposefully putting in references to other Human-In-Equestria fics. I was wondering if I could borrow Stoic's brother for a mention (as in, in-story Lafter)? Thanks in advance for reading this, as well as writing this fic. Just letting you know that you are personally encoraging me with this story.

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    50. @Guywithpasta

      Yes, of course. :3 I'm flattershy'd!

      For all others reading, please just toss me an email at Lafteroth@hotmail.com for questions like this so I don't have to reply in comments to every single one. n.n

      I don't want to ignore anyone, you see, but I might miss it if it's in here.

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    51. Pinkie is gonna have a conniption fit when she realizes he just got named.

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    52. I have to say the optimism and positive attitude in this fanfic is a breath of fresh air--- No, it's a lounge chair on the beach in a Caribbean breeze, with crystal white sands, dazzling waves rolling over your toes and a tall cool glass of tea in your hand. Two thumbs up!

      And yay, I guessed his pony name! :D

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    53. You know, she absorbed the internet. Which means she absorbed things like 4chan, and Goatse, and all those horrible websites out there.

      But she also got
      this http://immd.icanhascheezburger.com/
      and this http://www.givesmehope.com/
      and this http://youtu.be/kIdbroOLvhw
      and this http://youtu.be/V1bFr2SWP1I

      ....that's gotta count for something.

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    54. Read 5, need 6 nao. I will wait.

      THIS CHAPTER WAS SO AWESOME I CAN'T EVEN NOT SMILE.

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    55. Another amazing chapter. Well-paced, awesome writing, and good dialouge. The scene where he meets Flutterhy is adorable and hilarious.

      I'm curious as to what the side effects of Luna's exposure to the internet will be, and what Celestia will do if Luna tells her.

      Great name, by the way.

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    56. Storm wing is such a show off. also, nice save job breaking it hero.

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    57. MOAR!

      The amount of material relevant to my interests is insufficient to meet my personal required needs.

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    58. Oh dear Celestia...Luna knows of the Holocaust....Sweet mercy I hope she didn't find E621! D= (If she did I still can't stifle a snicker, I'm so terrible X3)

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    59. Well, that was enjoyable. Thoughts on ch5:

      -Very curious as to how Luna turns out. I can see it won't be as Grimdark as it seemed like it inevitably would become, which is good. But yea, quite curious about how much Luna remembers and how much that is going to change everything.

      - The dialog b/w the Nightmare and no-name was a bit hard to follow as to who was saying what. Just the nature of the scene I guess, but I had to read that page like three times to really get that scene.

      - The naming scene was very well done. I didn't think you could name him, figured the running joke would be he still didn't have a name. But you pulled it off and its a pretty solid name too. And yea, loved the dialog there. Luna's mannerisms and way she informed him of his name flowed very naturally.

      Great writing style and great story. Get back from your vacation soon!

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    60. I gotta say this story so far has been pretty cool. You've made an Original character come off as genuine and have good plot so far. I also think this fic some good satire on the fandom itself. We all need to learn to laugh at ourselves sometimes.

      Keep up the good work.

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    61. >first time i saw this here
      >ugh
      >as it updated, getting more votes
      >fine, ill give it a chance
      >givesitachance.jpeg
      ....
      5 stars
      continue whatever it is your doing, this is pretty damn awesome
      also, it may be weird, but im hoping this ends with him staying in Equestria

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    62. All of my stars. All of them. Seriously, you made me stay up past 4 in the morning, in my apartment, reading this from the beginning. This is my favorite kind of fanfiction - smart, funny, and well aware of its insanity. I love it, and I will be following it closely. * brohoof *

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    63. Firewall. Ba-dum-tish~
      Fun story. Giggled more than a few times. Looking forward to seeing more.

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    64. This is going into my Golden Hall of fanfiction.

      Anyway, our protagonist now has somebody who will get human jokes, eh?

      Besides that, we still haven't seen Rarity. I wonder what his reaction will be on her...

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    65. Happy September. Have a great vacation.

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    66. im really hoping this fic goes on for a long time, first fanfic ive actually laughed at
      not chuckled
      not giggled
      not grinned
      fucking guffawed bro

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    67. Luna has seen the porn
      ALL of the porn

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    68. FFFFIIIIIIIIIIIIIRRRRRRRREEEWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!

      Congrtulations! You, Lafter, have done exactly as I'd hoped! This fanfic has just done a Sonic Fanboom as it shatters the barrier between Really Good Fanfiction and EPIC FANFICTION!!!! Oh, and the guy who came up with Firewall should totally get a prize. I'll have to search through the old comments to remember who that was. (Much as I'd love to take the credit, it wasn't my idea.)

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    69. Hmm... Can't seem to find the original reference to Firewall as a name... If you know who it was, shout it out. That guy is a genius.
      Great job on settling up all those questions at once! In one scene, you provided the answer to how he got to Equestria, the Nightmare's motivation for bring him there, gave a description of Luna's reaction to the Internet, and (very smoothly, I must say) finally gave the protag a pony name.
      *wipes away tears of joy* I'm so proud of you...

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    70. NOOO I just read all 5 chapters for the first time and oh dear I can't stand having to wait for the rest of it which Pinkie Pie says I can't just make appear, but I need it to appear...RIGHT NOW! /applebloom

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    71. @UnknownCorrection: Luna accidentally the WHOLE Internet.

      "See ALL the things!" XD

      "See ALL the things?" 8(

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    72. Little story idea for ya, maybe for a second story after this one: we now have the Lightning pony, Storm Wing, and the Fire pony, Firewall. Let's have a pony for ALL the Elemental Magics!
      I won't charge you anything for the use of this idea. ; )

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    73. *It just keeps getting better and better and the updates never stop*

      Please continue this amazing thing cause I find it hillarious and a good read. :)

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    74. My god. Luna knows everything about everything.

      EVERYTHING. ABOUT. EVERYTHING. From quantum mechanics and string theory to 4chan and meatspin!

      I can't wait to see what you do with this.

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    75. ask Celestia why she isn't a queen

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    76. Hitting Prince Blueblood LOL.
      Captain Storm Wing has Eletromagicfield, wait if he can sense people doing stuff nearby doesn't that make him the Blind Samurai Pony/Colt.
      Also I think he knows that the Rainboom exists it bothers him that he wasn't the one to perform such feats.

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    77. I'm still fairly new to reading pony fan fics, but out of the ones I've read this is definitely my favorite. Can't wait for the next update.

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    78. Luna has seen my profiles. ALL OF THEM! umm...

      @ Lafter
      I guess you blew my "beefy pegasus" theory right out of the water, huh? 'Sok though I like ol' sparky there.

      Enjoy your vacation, and look forward to more.

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    79. Hey, Luna, don't forget how easy it is to forget stuff. Or you could try making a spell to undo that "learn stuff" spell. Whatever works?

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    80. LOVE IT :D...need more....more..... mooooooreeeee :)) ...

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    81. Sorry about this but I feel I need to put my plot in this hole I found in the story. The hole being how can he read Equestrian? As you may remember ponies write in what appear to be Wingdings. =/ Still love the story, but I'd like some kind of answer to this phenomenon. =3

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    82. He never read a single thing. He cast a spell. :3 he absorbed the book and map. It never said anything about him actually reading anything...

      I'm full of crap, also... o.o I totally forgot about that.

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    83. This is hilarious and amazing. I suppose I am kind of easily pleased, as I find this awesome on only the 1st chapter, but I was honestly making up a story in my head about a human in Equestria (Although the human would still be a human, as other stories have touched on humans turning into ponies)

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    84. @Lafter

      Actually, if the spell is based more on translating the meaning of the words into thought rather than literally shoving the images of the words into his memory, that explanation makes a lot of sense. I say go with it.

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    85. Take my money... ALL OF IT!! Your No-Name's reaction to Fluttershy(I'm not gonna spoil anything). It was too darn adorable. And blueblood got what was coming to him. I couldn't stop laughing at that part. Also, I want pictures of Captian Storm Wing, Cause he sounds pretty badass.

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    86. I have to say, I started out wary of this story, but as I progressed through it, I was pleasantly surprised that the style of humour never once dropped off or stagnated, but continued to remain fresh and interesting throughout. Great job on it so far; keep it up!

      Two concerns though:

      The fact that Twilight is presented as being absolutely amazing at magic is belied by the fact that she did not recognise the absorption of knowledge spell. I would suggest that either it is prefaced by Luna as some ancient knowledge, that seems to have been lost, or that Twilight does recognise it, but is surprised rather by the fact that he can perform it at his level (though of course, that is the same thing as what Luna did, since fire magic is his focus).

      Also, I felt that the Nightmare was outmaneuvered too easily by Firewall in their verbal match. I mean, while I understand that it is presented as some sort of rambling, almost incoherent conglomeration of a whole general sort of mish-mash of negative thoughts, I was left unsatisfied by the way the scene ran through. Perhaps that wasn't the best way to have him face it, if logical argument is one of its weakest areas.

      I have to say, however, that the rest of the scene was brilliantly executed though. Great story progression. His name is great too; it fits him perfectly. I can't help but wonder, though, just how telling of his fulfilled purpose in Equestria it is, as a sort of firewall to protect against the corruption of the Nightmare.

      Keep up the great work with this! I can't wait to read from you again.

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    87. Here's a uick feedback for last chap, sorry I didn't post it before! :P

      Thank you for changing the comments format! ^^ I appreciate the new location very much.

      Gotta admit, the first fight scene (or lack thereof) left me a little disappointed. Since it was pretty short, I'd have appreciated if you actually showed the action, esp since it seems you had a pretty good idea of what moves they used on each other.

      I absolutely LOVED Celstia in this chapter. Showing how fearsome an alicorn such as her can be, especially regarding her sister, yet cool enough to provide assistance.

      Blueblood - oh lawd, I admit that was a good call. Rarity fans, rejoice!

      The whole Fluttershy scene - Damn perfect. I laughed so much at your reaction, possibly because I'd do something very similar, should I be in your horseshoes. Plus, it was very well written altogether.

      Also great ending scene with Luna and Nightmare! It flowed very smoothly ^^ Plus yay Firewall! Giving him a name so far in the story seems only appropriate now, given the cracked jokes and the anticipation that have passed.

      All in all, you're doing a great job (especially with the humor)! Awaiting the next chapter trepidantly :D

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    88. @Lafter

      Ponies are speaking english right? I mean, it's parrel universe based on the show, which is originally made in english. So we may as well have parrel Equestria with ponies speaking in spanish.

      I think it's that easy. Stupid, but with magic and parrel worlds we can afford anything.

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    89. Firewall is actually a bigger plot than Storm Wing :P
      Now really, very nice writing. I would highlight some good/bad points IMO, but hay, its 3am here and I can barely write.

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    90. Well now! I love how part 5 ended! Good name! *snrk* Can't stop laughing at how he remembered Pinkie at the end.
      Also, extremely reasonable reaction to meeting Fluttershy. Avoiding the temptation to give her a hug would be waaaay too hard for me.

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    91. Happy birthday to me, every pony! I'll try to get some chapter done tomorrow!

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    92. I don't see what is so wrong about killing the essence of pure evil, AKA the nightmare.

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    93. @Lafter

      Happy birthday then pal! And take your time, there's no rush!

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    94. Happy Birthday Lafter! We should throw a Pinkie Pie Party.

      @Zalasin

      I have two drawings done of Storm Wing. Well, one is actually sittin in Lafter's email. The other still needs to be colored. I have an idea of a third drawing that has both Firewall (or Wallfire lol@lafter XD) and Storm Wing in it.

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    95. Damn it, I love this guy! He's like a more extroverted version of myself that smokes. Also, a fire unicorn rather than a wind/electric pegasus.

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    96. @Lafter
      Happy b-day. Now UPLOAD THAT CHAPTER!

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    97. Can't wait for new chapter!!!! To pass the time, I listen to the Trans Siberian Orchestra and Austrian Death Machine.

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    98. The image of the pony on this story sucks ass, the artist should be ashamed of himself. Cleary not even worth wiping your own arse with.

      The story itself is great...

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    99. @Wrek:

      Well gee, if YOU'RE such a kick ass artist, then why don't YOU make the art for it? If you can't, then just shut the buck up! It's completely rude to insult somepony else, when you can't even do as well as they can!

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    100. Happy belated, Lafter. Keep on buckin.

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    101. @Wrek

      Trevor... XD He's the artist that drew that pony. He's being a self-depricating doofus. XD

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    102. @Lafter:

      I honestly hope to God that you know just how hard I'm laughing now! XD Oh gosh! It just makes my comment THAT much more... XD *Dies laughing*

      (Sorry, I'm still giggling as I'm typing this, TBH! I get VERY tipsy when I'm tired, so... XD If I said or am saying something stupid, big surprise! xD (Though I hope that everypony knows that I wasn't TRYING to be offensive earlier... I worded it poorly. If I was REALLY trying to insult him, then you'd know on no uncertain terms, so if I DID insult you, Wrek, I apologize...)

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    103. SOMETHING FOR THE AUTHOR:
      Unicorn's horns are made out of a mythical substance called: Alicorn
      Yeah
      No joke

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    104. @The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor
      hey its cool trevor, its exactly the set of responses i was expecting ^_^

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    105. @Wrek
      You... You little bugger! You got me good, I was about to join in with Trevor. X3

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    106. I was going to write out a long-winded paragraph how I enjoyed your story and such, but I'm tired...

      So... I enjoyed it. Fun OC. Fun story.

      Yay!

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    107. So I'm rereading this story and I just reached chapter 4. I had a sudden epiphany: How does Celestia know what Slaves are?

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    108. @Cador_2004
      Well, she IS over a thousand years old, a lot can change in that time.

      @Wrek
      WHY YOU LITTLE!

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    109. I almost thought you were talkin about mine Wrek. I was really shocked at first. Then I realized what you were doing. *brohoof*

      ALSO! It is nearing the end of Vacation time and I for one can't WAIT.

      To make everypony else "jelly?" *really jelly? what kind of slang is that?* I got me two pony shirts in the mail of Rainbow Dash and Vinyl Scratch!

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    110. I'm sorry that ruined it for you! D:

      But the phone was meant as a plot device and but am integral part of the story itself... Hopefully the newer chapters will have something for you that you will enjoy just as much!

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    111. Sorry, but I need more. Also, You will be receiving a bill for a laptop, which broke when I threw $ALL OF IT.00 in pennies at the screen.

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    112. So is Luna going to turn into Freakazoid when she finally processes all of the internet? I'm pretty sure that's his origin story.

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    113. I havn't seen Freakazoid in FOREVER! I'ma see if I can't find/watch that now.

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    114. I keep throwing money at my monitor but part 6 isn't there.
      Wat do

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    115. Love this fic. Hoping for an update soon. :D

      5/purple

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    116. You're in luck. Chapter Six is in the Queue already~!

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    117. This is why he hasn't continued it so far. Luna might as well be dead from all the info on his phone. He doesn't know how to continue it.

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    118. @Nicolas
      Very doubtful. Figuring out how to continue the story? Maybe, writer's block is a *bleep*. But Luna dying through absorbing the phone and in essence the internet? Rather doubtful, dazed for a while as she processes it, but dead? She'd have hit the floor the moment she absorbed the phone then.

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    119. Painful having to wait for it when you know its in the queue q_q

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    120. I'm all the way over here on the east coast, three hours ahead of you guys... By the time EqD is done updating for the night, it'll be 3 AM over here! GRRR!! That means I'll have to wait till TOMORROW to read it!

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    121. You change that image and I forget whether or not I read this....

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    122. Woo! Update during a POS Bash! Time to read!

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    123. Dammit, I had the idea of a human getting sucked into Ponyville, but it would have had references to Past Sins, Story of the Blanks, and *shudders* Cupcakes.

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    124. this story makes me so god damn happy
      i ask that you continue it for a very long amount of time
      and you can have all of my joy

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    125. Haha! Update six! Can't wait to read this.

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    126. I'm so glad I could help with this story. It's turning into quite an adventure!

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    127. As the chapters increase, so does the awesomeness! Thanks for writing this!

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    128. BAH, Cupcakes reference. Damn you, Lafter, damn you!

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    129. I'm loving this story. Kinda wishing you'd lay off the references to Cartoon Physics, though. For me it's the equivalent of flicking the reader on the end of the nose and yelling "NONE OF THIS IS REAL, BY THE WAY."

      Remember in 'The Princess Bride' when the grandfather interrupted the movie in mid-shrieking-eel attack to tell the kid "She does not get eaten at this time?" I hated that.

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    130. I have to say one thing there are three story's i look forward to updating the most these in order include 1.fallout equestria project horizon 2.fallout equestria and third but not least 3.Through the eyes of another pony i almost died when the image of two guards walking in on two pony's burning books in the royal library. anyways keep up the good work im looking forward to reading more of how Fire wall some how has still avoided s getting destroyed by celly with all the things exploding at his touch :D

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    131. As always, INSANELY funny! XD Jokes were well-timed and not that forced! XD

      (I just DIED when I read Bromance! XD I've been WAITING for SOMEPONY to use that term! XD)

      XD HAHAHA-NO! THat wasn't a joke! (Unless you laughed)

      Okay, One is going to stop doing that, or one will end up quoting half of the bloddy story! XD

      CARAMELLDANSEN! 8D *Starts singing* (One lied. One does that! XD)

      XD A spell for everything! (Yes, even that!) O.o

      8D ONE ALSO WELCOMES OUR NEW PONY OVERLORD! ALL HAIL AZURE FLORA!

      (XD Bucking STRAIGHT I'm jelly! You glomped Trixie?! First Fluts, and then Trix?! I could KILL you from pure jelly overload!)

      Awesomeness embodied, period! RD would be SO bucking proud of you, mah Brony!

      ~ Magical Trevor

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    132. Seth will be so jelly of Firewall if he ever reads this. I think an invasion being stopped by a glomp is the best way ever. :D

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    133. Semi-random fact: 80% of pictures on the internet are of naked women.

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    134. Prediction Time: I submit that Firewall will become to Luna what Storm is to Celestia

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    135. This has got me going to the point of wanting to shout MORE! MORE! MORE! Even though I know these take time. I'm just laughing as I re-read it over and over. Excellent job once again Lafter. I'm really enjoying this! MUST. GO ON. ABOUT AWESOMENESS OF THIS... Heh, the But moooom part had me going big time.

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    136. Firewall is currently turning every single brony here into jelly. Chilling with Fluttershy, kicking Blueblood, glomping Trixie... Lucky bastard.

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    137. People think a little logic. Firewall is telling the story as if it happened in the past (if you notice, there are parts where he talks as if he already knows what's going to happen in the future) meaning that when Luna absorbed the internet this story didn't actually exist.

      My Celestia... you guys gotta think better! Lafter is a freaking genius he wouldn't make some stupid mistake ^^

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    138. @RHJunior
      I personally enjoy the physics bits, because I'm ALWAYS wondering "How the devil does that work?" And each time he does it, it helps me with that. X3

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    139. How did trixie got there?
      This will eat until the next chapter.

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    140. Azure Flora? Who? I guess we'll find out...

      Anyway: hooray, shipping! At least I THINK it's shipping. I'd just feel silly if it wasn't. (You know who I'm talking about here, right? Of course you do.)(What? I'm talking about LunaWall, who are YOU talking about?)(No, that's crazy: Apple Bloom hasn't even been introduced in this story!)(You are sick. You know that, right?)

      ANYWAY! Whether I'd feel silly or not doesn't detract from this story at all. It's still VERY awesome, and I look forward to the next installment, and the one after that, etc.

      Also, HA! I've created a Portmanteau Couple Name! It's now officially a ship! <>

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    141. I'm actually feeling some romance between Luna and Firewall. To be honest, I've felt it from the very moment they've first met. And the moment Luna said that she would smoke every time he will... I almost ripped my eyes out from what I've read. Serious seriousness is happening here guys... seriously. Garh... I need more Firewall and Luna stories. MORE.

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    142. EBWOP: Grr... tag thingy didn't work...

      It was SUPPOSED to say "Insert Naval/pirate jargon here" at the end...

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    143. Made my week like always.
      I lost my shit at the end. That's OK though. I did not really want it anymore, and I hope whoever finds it can make good use of it.
      I'm guessing Firewall can relate.

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    144. Heh, Trixie is invading. Oh snap, didn't see that coming at all. But the glomp? That was expected. God, I love this story.

      Excellent work, still.

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    145. As I read these chapters (and laugh harder than I usually do when reading anything to be honest), I can't help but ask myself "How can a Human-In-Equestria story, with a protagonist who is technically a self-insert of the author, work so well, be so funny, and gather such a large following of fans?"

      I think it lies down to the narrative and style. The whole time we're being told the story through the author's perspective - he's "lived" it, after all. While he tells us the story, he often butts-in on himself to break from the story and add hilarious and perfectly timed comments.

      It is also obvious that he knows what makes people angry with OCs, Human-In-Equestria stories, and characters who are essentially the author's ponysona. And so he actively avoids the biggest 'no-nos' (which is common sense), navigates the grey areas with his sense of humour, charm, and focuses as much attention on the other characters as possible. The latter is probably the most evident in that he took several chapters just to name his ponysona, and every time it came up in the story, he dodged the subject with realistic, in-universe actions. He's been so focused on crafting an excellent story that piles on the humour, funny interaction with other characters, and a main plotline that has potential to be awesome (in it's own right), that the protagonist has been denied a basic part of his character, and ultimately named by those who commented possible names after reading the fic. Hell, probably another good reason why Firewall is so well-received is because the author has been up front about him from the start. We know from the very beginning that he is the author in pony form, so we're obliged to not give a flying blueberry muffin about the technical self-insert part. I've noticed that 99.9% of the worst fics featuring a self-insert character have had the author trying to hide the fact that the self-insert is really the author. Sometimes, it pays to be honest with your potential readers, it seems.

      So, what can we learn here? A story that combines three elements in fan fics that usually spell disaster individually, and therefore total annihilation together, can actually become a massive hit among readers IF the author focuses on the fundamentals of a good story, and avoids the things that often wreck a fan fic. In other words, it's not terribly difficult, when compared to writing any other type of story, to write a story that has things that normally throw up huge red flags in people's minds - and make it good.


      Anyway, random musings aside. I really like this story. I actually failed to keep track of it after Chapter 3, so when it updated this evening I had some catching up to do. The main storyline (Luna, The Nightmare, fate of the multiverse, Firewall trying to RMA a pile of ash to get a new phone) is more than enough to keep anyone intrigued in the story. However, most of us aren't here for the "plot" (Dohohoho! The irony among some of us!), and are instead here for how you've nailed the characters we're familiar with, and created personalities for brand new characters (and characters who are pretty much up to fanon when it comes to characterisation, such as Luna). And we're here for the brilliant style and excellent sense of humour. The amount of meta in this fic is insane, yet it doesn't make up half of the jokes in the story. Keep writing this 'til it's finished, it's gold!

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    146. Yay Trixie! :D

      By 'azure flora' does she mean to say she's harnessed the power of poison joke to attack Canterlot somehow? Cause that'd be cool. Especially if she thought it was some sort of powerful curse thing when it was a joke.

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    147. Ha, another great chapter! :D I love how things are coming together and the plot is developing, all while the humor continues and flourishes XD

      I mean, things like
      - The awesome carriage of awesomeness

      - Luna's sets of influential eyes, from the "happy abyss" kind to the "AWFUL EYES OF SORROW AND HEART WRENCHING PAIN"

      - The "sweetheart in agony", and "passing out like a champ" later

      - The friendly rivalry between FW and Stormwing

      - Not to forget the PHILOSOPHICAL MUSINGS OF FIREWALL!

      It's all amazing, really. Easily the most consistently humorous story on this site, all while developing a story, and that's saying something.

      Wish you all the good in the world, Lafter! Make each chapter more awesome than the one before ;)

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    148. @Mattatatta

      Wow, you... actually got all of that subtext... ... I'm...

      You've no idea how thrilled I am to read this. I seriously teared up a bit.

      Thank you for giving it the chance that so many before you wouldn't. I get tells and emails saying this should already be 6-Star and that HIE/Self-Insert Haters are just low rating it.

      But with readers like you guys... :P I'd suffer over 9k trolls!

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    149. @Lafter That's because it really does deserve 6-star! It's hilariously meta, parodying bad fanfics by using their setups for the forces of good, and the interplay between the characters makes it impossible not to love and rate 5 stars >_>

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    150. @Mattatatta
      I'm going to have to save this for when someone asks me why I like this story.

      It's character driven, and along with everything else you've said, I tend to believe that the mane are RIDICULOUSLY in character. It helps the story a lot that the characters are written so well.

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    151. Finally part 6 ^_^ I love this story, keep it up!

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    152. @Mattatatta
      Bahaha! And with this review, you have rendered each and every minor comment I posted, even if it's one line, null and void. Bravo!
      Seriously though, damn fine review and it pretty much nailed it dead on. Like NinesTempest said, gotta save this review for when I'm asked about this fic.

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    153. I only leave the Fanfics on because I'm either too lazy to click the button, or like to look at the pretty pictures on their title cards.

      But something drew me to actually read this one for some reason, and I do not regret it. It is very well written and entertaining!

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    154. @ Lafter

      I'm glad to see you back at it, and I'm absolutely thrilled at how this continues to both get better, and keep me hooked!

      Every time I think I have a piece of the story figured out you throw in this wild variable that completely makes me second guess myself. I'm loving this fact. I'm also loving how you keep seamlessly putting references (and not just the typical ones) from the show and other random sources into your chapters. What can I say, I'm sappily nostalgic and amused by such things.

      I, for one, have never had a much of an issue with OCs. I think it's more important that a story be told well, than who it's about, specifically. I also think that Firewall is a very believable character and it's easy for the reader to relate to him, especially considering his origin. He's never overinflated, though, and you very tactfully keep him so with your style of writing.

      On the whole: I'm still loving this a lot, thanks for a great read, and keep up the good work!


      -Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria

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    155. Chapter 6's ending might've possibly been the cutest Trixie moment ever. :D

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    156. I wish I would dream about Pinkie Pie making cupcakes out of me(Just kidding)

      The GREAT AND POWERFUL TRIXIE is coming in the next chapter.

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    157. Confound this fanfic. It drives me to insomnia.

      I'll be saying "One more chapter" all night 'till I reach the latest.

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    158. @SingForTheMoon

      Nah, the military is where doofy pegasi like Dumbell and Hoops go when they bomb Flight School or get snapped making too many trips into the Everfree Forest to check their seedlings.
      Derp.

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    159. This is amazing. One of the funniest stories I've ever read.

      I'm loving the interaction between FW and the princesses.

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    160. You sir/madam, have done a great job. This is the third pony-fic I've read, and the absolute first to make me howl out in laughter.

      5 stars for you.

      Keep up the good work. I expect to see more of this wondrous work of yours.

      /Leo

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    161. 50000 bucks says Storm Wing is Celestia's son.
      I'm callin' it right now.

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    162. 500000 Bucks says Storm Wing is Celestia's son.
      I'm callin it right now.

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    163. @Muppetz No, better he is the father of Rainbow Dash.

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    164. Lafter, you are my literary hero. I cannot hope to write something this funny and charismatic in my lifetime. Since Mattatta already summarized all the reasons why I love this story, I won't go into detailed analysis. But know that if ever in my life someone compares one of my stories to this one, even if unfavorably so, I will be amazed and unspeakably flattered. Keep on keepin on.

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    165. I would also like to say that the motherly/ big sister attitude that Celestia takes when dealing with Firewall and Stormwing's confrontations is adorable and very funny.

      Also, good call on having Firewall be apprehensive about Luna's attentions rather than flattered. It's much more realistic that way, and you avoid the parasprite infestation at the same time.

      ....But please, don't make us wait a whole nother week for the next chapter. I may die of anticipation.

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    166. Okay.
      So.

      Anybody could explain that "PHILOSOPHICAL MUSINGS OF FIREWALL!" thing to me? Prereaders got some funny reactions on it, but I DON'T GET THE JOKE.

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    167. Did Seth steal the story at the end of Chapter 6? But in all seriousness I am liking the story and I eagerly await more.

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    168. @FredFredNineNine
      FredFredNineNine:"Prediction Time: I submit that Firewall will become to Luna what Storm is to Celestia" i second that prediction that would make this story even more epic :D

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    169. I thought the story was ending, but now i see it can go on for a long time. I hope you keep up the good work.

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    170. First, get out of my head

      Second, I would accuse you of being in love with yourself, but this is so close to what I would do/write (with certain key differences somewhere I imagine) its like your in love with me, which is a bit wierd seeing as we've never met. Wierdo

      Third, Self referencing humor? Hell yes.

      Fourth, wow you really put your heart and soul into this, didn't you?

      Fifth, Chapter 5 ending, again get out of my head, and the naming? That's too awesome on many levels to be annoyingly narcissistic, I can't stand it!


      Here, have a handfull of stars.

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    171. @Zephyr

      Oh, and chaper 6 is also very good.


      This... is suprisingly deep for this style of fic. There's plenty of tounge-in-cheek humour, self-referencing and character development mixed in too!

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    172. Inb4 "Screw Captain Storm Wing!" becomes a new catchphrase

      I think I should call it before its too late xD

      I'm amazed that people responded so positively to my random essay. All I really did was sit down and answer my own question (which was pretty much "How does this work?"), and then proceeded to click "Post Comment"

      Lol not really, I wrote the comment to give feedback, and partly because I wanted to answer my own question coherently. Still, glad I could be of service

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    173. @Mattatatta

      I wholeheartedly agree with your review on September 11, 2011 8:17PM. I want you to know that I just sent an email to Seth with that review copied into it, completely unchanged or edited. It is ponies like you who make working on ponyfics like this such a joy! I thank you very much.

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    174. @640x480
      I was commenting on the fact that I was unsure that my brains would be capeable of dealing with what "Philosophical musings of Firewall" would be. Have you ever tried looking into the mind of a pony-crazed genius before? I would reference Pinkie Pie in some way but I am not sure even that would do it justice

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    175. You know what? I thought I would be against it when I saw hints of it earlier on, as I usually am, but I will be truly disappointing if the author does NOT expand on the self-insert shipping he has hinted at.


      TL;DR: Shipping? imokwiththis.jpg


      (FirewallXLuna OTP o god did i really just type that)

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    176. Mattatatta,

      I just recieved a very cryptic email from Seth, it said, "Good! glad it didn't explode then!"

      I just hope it isn't capeable of exploding twice. Can it do that?

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    177. Very enjoyable new chapter overall.

      That strange presence Firewall felt after coming back to Canterlot? Intriguing. And funny in how sharp his replies became while in pain ~_^

      Luna's troubles while sleeping? Beautiful, thoughtful, and sweet.

      Trixie ripping off the roof and making a grand entrance in the royal palace, while Firewall's cheering? Could have done without that part. Sounds unrealistic and over the top. And a fan of Trixie I am not :-P

      Keep up the good work!

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    178. There are definitely magazines in Equestria. Remember Photo-Finish? Although Luna may be sufficiently out of touch that she doesn't know about them...

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    179. I swear, this is the only fanfic I actually enjoy reading. Everything else seems either copied, or just plain weird. But I can REALLY relate to this fic, and for that. KUDOS! But, please don't throw yourself off of your groove.

      User 669. (Or something like that... From the google docs chat?)

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    180. I LOVE THIS STORY MORE THAN FIREWALL LOVES RAINBOW DASH!!!

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    181. Photo-Finish does photos of dresses and style, I wouldn't call that much of a magazine.

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    182. So, read this fully, and... hm. I wanted to like this. Unlike most "homo equestrius" stories I've read, this one actually had good prose and good dialogs, and kept things interesting.

      That said, the protagonist very much reeks of a Mary Sue. Let's see: unusual powers (including the oh-so-convenient ability to shrug off mental possession... shoehorned awkwardly as a fire-related power), becomes the center of interest of the entire main cast (and one of them even begins flirting with him), excels at magic (pulling off something that, in known history, only two godlike rulers managed before), has access to the internet and to his favorite cigarettes in Equestria.

      The protagonist's attitude is also annoying. By the third chapter, I downright hated him--he's smug, acts like he owns the place wherever he is, and chats with everyone--including venerable guards and godlike rulers--as if they were his good old pals. And, of course, he gets away with it all the time. That gag where the guy makes some joke comprehensible only to humans, much to the ponies' confusion, gets old quick and makes the guy look even more obnoxious and self-centered (or just utterly clueless).

      On the other hand, it feels as if the author does have some understanding of Mary Sue traits, and tries to offset them by having the protagonist comment on them snarkily, or by having him become the cause of a calamitous peripety... but it's not enough. Sorry.

      The overabundance of internet slang and pop-culture references is quite grating as well.

      On the plus side... The plot does seem interesting, though the story could use some snipping of unnecessary parts (did we really need to know what foods exactly the hero was preparing, or how he prepared them step-by-step? What did this have do to with the rest of the story?).

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    183. @redskeleton

      While you are allowed not to like the character, calling it a writing flaw is a little unfair. I personally quite like him. He is as OP as twilight though, I will give you that, but not quite into mary sue territory yet. That is something the author should watch for though.

      The fic is a bit of light fun with some compelling story thrown in. You shouldn't go into it expecting it to hard hitting or even realistic.

      I like the bits when he cooks.

      I like how he doesn't care about talking candidly to a goddess.

      And finally: I for one hope he gets with Luna and I don't give a flying fluttershy what the unwritten rules of writing say about that.

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    184. can I get a page starter?
      Of course I can. Check 'em.

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    185. @RedSkeleton

      Firewall is not a mary sue for many reasons, but I will list the big ones:

      1: While his powers are impressive compared to most unicorns, he is actually not more powerful than the other main characters.
      2: He is not automatically liked by everyone, nor does he tend to always do the right thing.
      3: He only gets by as well as he does due to his being from beyond the 4th wall.
      4: this is a COMEDY FIC, not a dramatic shipfic.

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    186. I was hesitant to read this story at first... and I'm glad I did only because it allowed me to read five chapters in one go!

      I am thoroughly enjoying this story! I want more!

      @Curebores Yeah, I'm with you, I wouldn't mind the OC getting Luna in the end, it's pretty cool.

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    187. @RedSkeleton

      Brutal and honest! :) I like it.

      I will admit, there is a lot of Mary-Sue to Firewall. However there are plenty of Non-Mary Sue traits about the guy as well.

      I won't argue for you to like him, he can be pretty obnoxious at times. I would know, I based him a lot off myself. I will be the first to admit that neither I nor Firewall are perfect.

      And the writing style is DEFINITELY not for everyone. I can tell you're a brony that feels more towards a realistic setting, but this isn't that fic. This is fun. And meant to be an emotional roller coaster.

      I hope you like it in the end, because I'm not stupid, nor am I a one-trick brony. ;) Everything in a story has to continually change for everything to feel constantly fresh.

      All I ask is that you keep reading and hopefully I'll throw you a curve that you can't help but love. ;) We'll see!

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    188. @RedSkeleton

      I think that is one of the first good negative critiques of this fic.

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