Wednesday, February 1, 2012

Story: The Moony Maiden


[Comedy][Random]

Author: Dubs Rewatcher
Description: It's been more than a year since Princess Luna's return to Equestria, and she is making great strides in her language skills. And along with this come a slew of new writing skills.

However, Celestia may have a few objections once she finds out just what Luna has been writing...
The Moony Maiden

Additional Tags: Books, Pen names, secrets, socks

45 comments:

ponydoraprancypants said...

It's exactly what you're expecting based on the description. And it's very funny!

Brawl and Megatron's Beak said...

Sounds funny, Luna Fics are awesome.

Arcanon said...

I read this not too long ago. Definitely recommend.

Tom said...

That is such a cute title image, i think i might just have to read this one right now.

KRODERSERK said...

Read this a few days ago, definitley worth reading.
And it's really funny too!

Masquerade said...

Wow, that description matches what would happen with me if people knew I write MLP fiction.
Wow, that image is from the AskMolestia Tumblr.
Wow, this seems interesting.

I should read this.
Wow.

Val Yuni said...

I read it last night, it's definitely a great read.

Detoxicity said...

Damn.. That Luna image gets me every time.

brony and proud of it said...

read it just yesterday.
it has some fun stuff and it's luna, so it's good.

Cesar said...

That image + That description = I just might read this one.

also socks.

Tom said...

DAT LAST LINE
HAD ME ON THE FLOOR

SticktheFigure said...

Oh Luna, you so silly.

killingspreedoom said...

picture alone makes it a 5-star for me

Cesar said...

That image + That description = I just might read this one.

also socks.

Screwball said...

I read this on FiMFiction a few days ago, glad to see it made it on here!

stringtheory said...

wow, I read this just a few hours ago, and now it get posted here

Vargras said...

A rather hilarious and light-hearted Luna and Celestia fic. Definitely nothing wrong with that.

DarkApostleMatt said...

Read this a few days ago,apparently along with everyone else...anyways, this piece of fanfic is amazing!

Gray Paint said...

Will read just for the socks tag

TechnoTrot said...

HAHAHAHAHA BUCKING AWESOME.

"Do you take commissions?"

I died.

pixelkitties said...

That was an entertaining, cute, and well-characterized little story! Well done!

Johuotar said...

Hmmm...
SOOOOCKSSS????!!

Blaze said...

Read it before now. I loled even rereading it

Twifight Sparkill said...

Hee hee, good stuff. As Lyra would say, "thumbs up"!

MasterContinuum said...

picture by..... JOHN JOSECO!

Niels Olof said...

Silly ponies are best ponies!

Nolim said...

Meanwhile, the Mane 6 are wondering why everypony is acting embarassed around them.

Ryunosuke said...

After reading this, I have two reactions that are similar

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u2ALsvU50wQ

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v3cRWJcZjW4

Cesar said...

I want to read Celestia's commission now.

Dubs Rewatcher said...

THANK YOU, EVERYONE! You have no idea how much your comments mean to me.

Heartmend said...

I loved this story! It was very cute and silly! The smile I'm wearing is certainly testament to that.

I love stories about Luna and Celestia.

itsme said...

This is one of my favorite fics ever

Xplayer said...

Great fic. Silly pony is best pony. 5/5

Night Light said...

As soon as it said "Element of lust" I don't know whether to continue reading or not... like I don't want something dirty like that one fic of R.D and that wonderbolt Soarin, Celestia that was horiffic!

ZKPony said...

*puts on fake glasses*
I read this before it was on EQD.

Night Light said...

I couldn't help but say it when I read:

"The SEL was one of two things in the world she would never understand(the other being magnets"

F***ING MAGNETS? HOW DO THEY WORK?

Yours sincerely said...

Feels like it could have used another round of editing. The general consensus for thought formatting is:

[i]This is supposed to be Luna’s job[/i], she thought./"This is _," she thought.

where one uses either italics or quotation marks, but not both. A space is needed after ellipses (...). Even so, those are minor details.

Celestia's impatience is dubious, more on the edge of fanon, and the dessert scene stretches disbelief a little more. Her yelping/outburst raises an eyebrow. The Lavender Unicorn Syndrome - "the white alicorn", "the [colour] [type of pony]" where the colours really don't mean anything to the plot, was niggling.

Luna forgoing her duties for smutty writing, though, and all the fanon pandering...

The style of writing's certainly alright, but I couldn't finish it. It aims to be fun and fluffy, which it is, to an extent. I guess my canon nazi-ism got in the way.

DPV111 said...

It was good in a silly way.
Only problem I see is that she REALLY should have changed the names.
The Elements are going to KILL HER.
That's the difference between writing about fictional characters vs writing about actual individuals who know where you live and wield the strongest force of magic in the world...
At least the story sounds like standard erotica without any of the grimdark shit our elements get put through in our fics.

ultra8 said...

Read this on Fim, nice to see it made it's way here.
An excellant story, plenty of fun, laughs and embarassing moments.

Nova25 said...

>Celestia honestly believed that role went to dessert.
-Ah yes, the famously well known love of cakes of Celestia ;)
>was the most beautiful crème brûlée she had ever seen
-Wait what ? De la ‘Crème brûlée’ ? She’s ‘’addicted’’ to cakes specifically, not ‘that’, everyone and pony know this.

>A wooden abacus sat on her left, propped up against a pillow.
-Oh dear Abacus... hadn’t heard of ‘’him’’ in a while. :)

>Twilight blinked. “Research.”
-I’m sure there’s supposed to be something funny here, but... I don’t quite see what ?

>she was subject to it’s power
-‘’its’’ (small error)

>The SEL was one of two things in the world she would never understand(the other being magnets).
-Ooooooooook... talk of one heck of a bad joke ? Seriously.

>It just so happens that the one you read is my most popular.” She held a hoof to her chin and looked thoughtfully at Celestia. “I have always found that strange.”
-*roll my eyes* ... *cough* ...Humm, I wonder why...

>“Luna, I wanted to ask you one more thing.”
>“Do...do you take commissions?”
-Honestly had a quick laugh, when reading those 2 lines. ;)
...mmh. I wonder if the first commission would be about a certain purple unicorn ?

ItsTheWhinyGuys said...

This was hilarious. Now I wish I could commission Luna... XD

Praetorian_Pony said...

I just read this though it has been in my queue for a while. It was great. Good job!

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