Monday, January 9, 2012

Story: The Steadfast Sky (Update Part 49!)


[Adventure][Friendshipping] Remember when stories used to have witty blog author or pre-reader quotes to go along with them? Yeah, me neither.

Author: The Grey Potter
Description: The tyrannical Shadow Stallion oppresses Equestria, coating the land in a thick layer of clouds, tightly controlling the population. Three children, the unicorns Celestia and Luna, along with a Draconequus, Discord, must live up to their fate. They must find the Elements of Harmony and take up their rightful place as Equestria's new gods and saviors.
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 1
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 2
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 3
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 4
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 5
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 6
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 7
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 8
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 9
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 10
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 11
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 12
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 13
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 14
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 15
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 16
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 17
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 18
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 19
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 20
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 21
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 22
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 23
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 24
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 25
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 26
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 27
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 28
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 29
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 30
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 31
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 32
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 33
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 34
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 35
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 36
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 37
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 38
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 39
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 40
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 41
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 42
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 43
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 44  
The Steadfast Sky Interlude
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 45
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 46
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 47 
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 48
The Steadfast Sky: Chapter 49 (New!)

Not Quite Hearth's-Warming Special

Additional Tags: Speculative Equestrian History, First Person Introspection, long

Media:
Audio Book
Theme Song

Fan Art:
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98 comments:

mellinbee said...

Sounds interesting ;-)

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mrjmac85 said...

Oh Hai there Phoe!

Tyranoman said...

@mellinbee
Keep spamming that publish button!

AzuNyan said...

So, is this complete or not?

Token T said...

That's a really cute picture

Greenf0x said...

I dont remember that either Phoe

CTVulpin said...

Well, this is off to an interesting start. I eagerly await more.

S008 said...

Friendshipping? What trickery is this?

3WhiteFox3 said...

Is this complete or incomplete? It's lacking either tag and I don't want to get into a new incomplete story just yet.

MoreX25 said...

A very good start, I will wait eagerly for the next update.

Joystik said...

Looks like a winner

iisaw said...

Why the urge to retcon Discord into a good guy? I can see it's wide-spread but I just can't get into stuff that directly opposes what the show sets up as cannon.

Tin Can said...

By Celestia, Discord as a.... colt? Infant Draconaquis? Whatever, ULTIMATE D'AAAWW

DPV111 said...

Eww. The only concept that irritates me more than Tyrant Celestia is benign Discord.
Not saying I won't read... Butwhy

The Grey Potter said...

@iisaw He really has no past in the canon, so its easy to just fill in with whatever. And a fallen hero is way more fun to write than some force that appears and is evil for kicks. At least... in a story focuses on him.

And as a general reply, this is very, very incomplete. Length currently estimated to be 20-40 chapters

The Grey Potter said...

Honestly... I dont like it when he's in full-on crazy god mode, and then still has a sympathetic side. That's just silly to me. If Discord is making chaos everywhere, then he does not screw around.

cpbrony said...

That title image..... Where is my insulin!?!

Nykkes64 said...

The Prequel to the My Little Pony Story line.
It can be the old testament for Ponies!!! ^_^

Princess Luna said...

Good times back then...I'll read this when I have time, more paperwork to do right now...

Victory Star said...

Me gusta. Re-reading. O________0

WizardWannabe said...

I liked it! I'll definitely keep reading more.
I like Discord as he is in show and in other fics, but I also like how he is here. I guess I can stomach different interpretations.

Dantes_Grill said...

That's such a cute pic, I might read this one 0o

Princess Luna said...

Hmmm...alternate from how my foalhood really went, very well-written though.

Rainbowlova said...

That little Discord is just to much cuteness.

mycutiemarkisagun said...

@iisaw

@DPV111

Why not? Discord being a very very old friend that went off the deep end a very very long time ago is a hell of alot more interesting than "Hurr Durr, he was born a evil tyrant, this concludes our origin story". What, ya'll think he was a evil baby, like The Omen or something? C'mon. Hannibal Lecter....Darth Vader....even Sauron....I repeat, COTDAYUM SAURON....*started off* good before going all WCW Bash At The Beach 96 on errybody after ish hit the fan. Hell, that's The Joker's whole driving philosophy as described in The Killing Joke - "You're just one bad day away from being like me."

Practically every other fic "opposes what the show sets up as canon" in some major fashion. It comes with the territory in the Shipping and Grimdark genres.

and y u no love Tyrantlestia meme DPV111? its just an expression of anti-government angst. :p

browncoatbrony said...

this is my first pony fan fic and so far so awsome keep it up@

Gwriterk said...

Do like this (kinda) so far.

DPV111 said...

@mycutiemarkisagun

I dislike benign Discord because he is the best villain and it detracts from his epicness.

Also I dislike and tend not to read fanwank origins.

Also in my headcanon he's not a normal being with super powers, he's the elemental embodiment of chaos and disharmony. He is a force of nature, a wellsping for cosmic novelty and does not take his actions because he is evil, but because he exists.

I hate Tyrant Celestia in MOST CASES. But then I disdain 90% of the memes surrounding the fandom. Mostly because one of the 3 most traumatic things I have read in this fandom was a Tyrant Celestia moment.

iisaw said...

@mycutiemarkisagun

Well, if you think fannon is "...a hell of alot more interesting...: than cannon, there's not much I can say to that... except, I don't.

Victory Star said...

Looks at pic*
Cutegasm*

mycutiemarkisagun said...

@iisaw

Hey. Buddy.

Please point me to the canon info that clearly states that he was ALWAYS evil, from birth.

I'll wait.

Chibi-Sama said...

D'AAWW! I'm gonna continue reading this story! It's so awesome! XD

Matthais123 said...

Discord, how do you go from group hugging to being evil enough to be turned to stone?

Hyperstripe said...

this could be turned into an episode

Foxridley said...

Why is it that I picture young Luna as having Sweetie Belle's voice?

Godofchaos said...

''It was creepy, that’s what it was. A creepy, valuable, probably evil rock in the shape of a butterfly.''

Made my day!

Eva said...

Words can't describe how much i'm in love with this story. It's well written, it's heartwarming and heartbreaking at times (well, when you remember what happens after, if this doesn't turn out being totally AU) and baby Luna is the CUTEST THING EVER. I love this story ♥

Jayfeather741 said...

The seem in chapter five when Celestia jokes about using the elements of harmony almost seems cruel... :D

DoctorWhooves said...

haha re-reading it again awesome story!

nick said...

@The Grey Potter

hey when will you be making more of the story?

The Grey Potter said...

@nick
Just got back into school, so editing has been a little slow. The next two chapters should be up before Sunday.

Multiversity said...

@Princess Luna It happened somewhere. There's more than one future, so why can't there be more than one past?

JackInASphere said...

I'm really enjoying this story so far. I really like how your leaving the little seeds of future events in the story, like Celestia joking about using the elements of harmony on Discord, and mentioning to him that he doesn't want to help and just wants to go on an adventure for his amusement.

banjo2E said...

NO STEVEN MAGNET WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT

The Grey Potter said...

Whoop, link to 11 seems to have been exploded. While it's down:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CLnu7hBj1GhNZLLnliuigEJ6r1C5DC_kIcuPbqQCgDo/edit

Avi said...

This is really good!

Conor Rice said...

Is chapter 11 not working for anyone else..?

Booger and Dork said...

@iisaw
I disagree. I think it fits the canon just fine. Sure, he's chaotic, but evil isn't really the word. He loves chaos and...well...discord. It's just his thing. We gotta love and tolerate him just as we would anypony else.

JackInASphere said...

Chapter 12 was absolutely wonderful. I can tell you had a lot of fun writing it.

Linkfan197 said...

this should totally be submitted to FIMfiction. i think it would get a great reaction there.

TwinkiePinkie said...

@The Grey Potter

I must say, the alternating perspectives in the story are one of the aspects of this story that I'm really fond of.
Out of curiosity, which character's perspective do you like writing from the most? Also, which comes the easiest?
Also, I must say that you're doing a fantastic job with this story so far. The actual plot is developing at a nice pace, and the characters all have unique voices that are believable. This looks like its going to be a very long story, and that is anything but a complaint.
I apologize for the jumpy nature of this comment, but it is 4 in the morning as I write it. Next time I comment, I'll try to make it sound more coherent.

The Grey Potter said...

@TwinkiePinkie

Somedays, I adore writing Discord. Other days, I can really immerse myself in Celestia. It's like a see-saw, favoritism depending on how much I examine them and their mindsets.

And yet, Luna is the one who comes the easiest to me. She's just so... straightforward. Not second guessing herself makes her very easy to write.

Glad you like the story, and thanks for the comment =D

The Grey Potter said...

Oh! For those interested, the story is now up on FimFiction

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/11495/The-Steadfast-Sky

Zachary D. said...

@Foxridley idk I also thought of her like that as well

metapsionic said...

Oh, big city troubles! This won't end well, sounds like a very authoritarian place! Can't wait to see more.

EDIT Chap 18 & 19: Called it. I really don't like this place. Especially Luna's "prison". Hope they can get out of there soon

metapsionic said...

Yay resistance! It's just a rag-tag group of underage colts, but it's something, and I'm glad to know that their leader isn't completely jaded or cold-blooded! Thanks for sharing!

Ricky said...

Chapter 21: I'm sensing darkness rising in Discord. I like

metapsionic said...

Poor Dircord. At least he's treated well, despite the shackles

The Grey Potter said...

@Zachary D. Whoops, probably should have made that more clear XD She's a Sphinx (wingless version)

Boog J said...

My god I can't stop reading
An absolute wonderful piece, WORTH YOUR TIME

metapsionic said...

Clever Luna! She got her necklace back, with some subtle help from that Applebark fellow? I can't tell if he's an ally or not. But I'm eager to find out!

EDIT chapter 23: So close! They saw Luna's light, and Discord is just a day away from being free…if only Tia can hold things together. Is she really going to end up having control of the Ravens? She's too naive for that.

Sean Allen said...

Catching up; "hug or I'll scream" is a really great line, and I'll probably steal it. :p

Zachary D. said...

I hate pith so much in chapter 23

metapsionic said...

YES! Discord is free! FREE! Hahaha, I'm so happy for him!

Now he just needs to find Tia, or go straight for Luna, although that's dangerous. Things are looking up!

Zachary D. said...

Yay there all together again... But discord where ya go buddy?

Zachary D. said...

@The Gre Potter
Thanks! Now I have a better picture of the scenes now!

metapsionic said...

Woah. I guess Luna just straight teleported out? That's really something. But I really hope there's no bad blood between them and Discord. They need to stick together.

Thanks for sharing, I hope you write more!

metapsionic said...

YAY! They're all back together, finally! I'm so happy for them! ^_^

Lightningwolf said...

Goddamnit keep writing! Write like the world will stop if you stop writing! PLEASE!

metapsionic said...

Poor Luna, she's might take a while to get over this :-(

jtfroh said...

Who agrees that they need to meet, befriend, and find an element with Chrysalis. There are six elements, but they only have three ponies (or two ponies and a draconequus). They need to find other ancient ponies from the show, and Chrysalis would be AWESOME to have in the story, even if you had her before she was a changling. Just saying.

The Grey Potter said...

@jtfroh Going to nip this in the bud and say no. No Crysalis. Her appearance would be no different from shoving an OC in the group. It would be incredibly forced and self-indulgent.

jtfroh said...

@The Grey Potter Good point and understood. As I said "Just a Thought."

jtfroh said...

@The Grey Potter I'm just trying to think of other, non-OC characters that would have been around back then, because our heroes only have a group of three, and the Elements need each other to work fully. With six elements, that would require either each using two elements, or more ponies to help wield them. I feel one pony (or draconequus) wielding two would be impossible, because the amount of magic would either kill them or... I just realized what your trying to do... give them vast magical capabilities. But I guess we'll find out... Though a Chrysalis cameo would be nice, if possible.

metapsionic said...

Not my favourite latest few chapters, but they're getting moving again and making progress, that's good.

Sawkinator said...

"Back to Canterlot in the morning."

...Well that sucks for them xD

metapsionic said...

Update latest 3 chapters: Woot, they all have an element now! Things are getting interesting. And it's about time Discord comes out with him being a carnivore. I feel so bad that he had to starve for so long.

Eager for your next chapters, thank you :-)

Lightningwolf said...

You know who this needs as the element of magic? StarSwirl the Bearded. It makes perfect sense!

aceofmuffins said...

@Lightningwolf
I thought in one of the chapters it said StarSwirl created the elements or something along those lines

metapsionic said...

Oh, Celestia's ambitious! I wonder when she'll realize that you need wings to go back there >_>

The Grey Potter said...

@aceofmuffins
For clarity, Starswirl was the first to use the original five Elements, and by doing so, he created Magic.
Soooo, yeah, Starwirl being the original element of magic? Made sense to me too ^^

Lightningwolf said...

@The Grey PotterActually, in the Luna Eclipsed episode, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JHmy7OoxRfg&feature=related (at 8:47) Luna talks about StarSwirl as if she met him, not as if she heard about him. It would be canon if StarSwirl was the Element of Magic in this fan-fiction.

metapsionic said...

Wowzers...for a moment there, Celestia was acting REALLY crazy. And more immature than all the other kids. Let's not let a sense of duty consume you beyond all careful thought.

I'm so glad Luna's there to soothe things out. I hope the group can stick together a little bit better in the future.

The Grey Potter said...

@Lightningwolf
"Starswirl the bearded... commendable costume, thou even got the bells right"
That's all she said... I mean, because she knew who Starswirl was, it implies the age of her knowledge. But it doesn't tell anything about whether or not she knew him.
And... well, have you reached the chapter where Starswirl's mentioned? XD He's pretty much long gone in my fic...

MonochromaticJelly said...

You're doing a fantastic job on this fic, I can't say that I have any complaints. Keep it up!

This latest chapter was especially good. The suspense was done well, and I think the confrontation itself actually made my heart race a bit.

metapsionic said...

Omg...so much suspense, so much tension and fear, superbly executed! I felt for them the whole way through.

And they are SO in over their heads it's ridiculous. They're almost back at square one now. Except wounded and with a better grasp of magic.

Can't wait to read more!

metapsionic said...

I cannot believe that Draconequi still fall for Discord's act. But it plays in the heroes' favor. Good job on this chapter, I can really see the horror of being trapped inside the city walls, AGAIN.

MonochromaticJelly said...

Aww...the interaction between Ruin and Discord in this chapter was quite heartwarming. I'm afraid that this is the last we'll see of Ruin, though...

metapsionic said...

Discord is best good guy. He's pragmatic, but he has a heart of solid gold. I love how you portray him!

metapsionic said...

I've got to say I lost interest in this fic as of late. I'm in it for the adventure, but lately it's more been drama and intrigue. I'm eager for them to get back on the road...and for Celestia to get off her high horse, so to speak.

jtfroh said...

I stopped reading this a while ago, waiting for it to finish, because I got tired of waiting for each chapter. It's a year later, and it's still not finished. How long is this going to be. I REALLY want to read this.

The Grey Potter said...

Didn't realize people were still reading here. I'm up to chapter 60 over on fimfiction: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/11495/the-steadfast-sky

And every estimate I give has been pretty crappy, so let's say it has about twenty chapters left. Probably finished before the start of its second year.

jtfroh said...

@The Grey Potter I was excited when I saw you first put it on FimFiction.net, but I still didn't pick it up again. Not yet. I'm waiting for it to be a LITTLE closer to done. I've been waiting since around chapter twenty. Keep up the hard work. /)

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