Sunday, January 15, 2012

Story: Adored

[Shipping] Twixie- getting star bombed, just ignore the rating. 

Author: Earl Grey
Description: The Great and Powerful Trixie finds herself in the Canterlot Arcane Market when a mysterious merchant offers her a chance to seize the power she's always wanted. In her haste, she accepts and casts a spell to make every pony in Equestria love her. She should, however, be careful what she wishes for.
Adored

Additional Tags: One Shot, Long, Slice of Life, Romance, What If?

73 comments:

Sunset Sprinkles said...

Sounds like Everypony Loves Dash.

Sirrus said...

So like that episode of Buffy? :P

The Numberman said...

Twixie is best ship.

I wonder if Seth has any personal favouites.

Mazzyrazzy said...

Looks promising. I'll get around to reading it some point today

KRODERSERK said...

Already read this one, it is good IMO. :)

Sethisto said...

@The Numberman

Twixie of course

I 5 starred this one

BruteForceFTW said...

Appledash is clearly superior

Princess Luna said...

@Sunset Since you're in my Lunar Cabinet now, read this to fill yourself in on...information.
http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/01/pinkie-piggy-piggy-dance-remix.html?commentPage=2

wackypony said...

i will never understand Twixie, but whatever.

The Mike said...

Just to clarify things, that story was posted BEFORE the season 2 started, thus, before "The Return of Harmony", so, guess who's that incoming old enemy defeated aenos ago....

MCXD said...

I find it amusing but also terrible that the first load of comments on any shipfic are people complaining that's not a different shipfic.

Hmm.

wackypony said...

also, why do i see a lot of fics that never indent their goddamned paragraphs? it's basic formatting, folks.

The Numberman said...

@Sethisto Well I'll read this one post haste then! And other phrases meaning soon.

Any others you'd recommend then?

Sunset Sprinkles said...

@Princess
So we're getting our own blog?

BruteForceFTW said...

@MCXD
I had a chance for first post and I panicked.

vehlek said...

@wackypony Because indentation is primarily for clarifying paragraphs when they're pushed together, like in your standard novel format. When there's a space between every paragraph already, it offers no service.

wackypony said...

@vehlek

i think it makes it look a bit more professional, but i might be asking for a bit much from fanfiction...

62835fdc-3fb1-11e1-9fc6-000bcdcb2996 said...

@wackyponyTrue, but double spacing between paragraphs is not so much so, and thus for some people it is a case of one or the other. I know that personally I usualy dislike when a story uses both spaced and indented paragraphs.

vehlek said...

@wackypony Professional, definitely. Perhaps looking a little less like a novel is what makes it easier to read, though. Long works can be intimidating to people who don't read them much.

duskdrake said...

so, this fic just getting three stars b/c it's a shipfic? No negative comments regarding anything other then lack of indentation that I can see.

Really need a better comment system

Princess Luna said...

@Sunset Yes. and we're still talking, so come on back and bookmark the page, you'll need it for now for us to meet formally.

wackypony said...

@vehlek

I'd be more apt to read a novel length fanfic formatted like a novel than say... how Past Sins is.

wackypony said...

@duskdrake

we need a better rating system. this one is easily abused.

Lord Pimpington said...

Of course, the ideal rating system would be way to complex, so instead we'll have to READ ALL THE FICS!

Also, I usually like Twixie. I like ApplePie more, cause I think it'd actually work, but whatever.

Ragneki5880 said...

@wackypony
A rating system where people need to post their thoughts on it to be included in it. That's what I'm thinking.

Sethisto said...

Something like that would be pretty difficult to implement, and still exploitable. That's the problem with ratings of any type, they can all be bombed. Hell we raid polls all the time :p

Honestly we might not even need the system. Every story posted on EQD goes through the pre-readers, who are beyond selective. I'll look for an alternative though.

wackypony said...

@Sethisto


Seth, just see if you can a rating system that allows one vote per IP.

One can vote bomb now from multiple browsers.

wackypony said...

can find a rating system*

oops.

Cameron said...

@Sethisto

Just disable ratings for the first hour or so. Most people wouldn't have read it in that time for an honest rating anyway.

Travis Smith said...

My retort to the first comment


Ew, shipping
Lyra: Ew, pony's
Wait how did you get here?

wackypony said...

@Cameron

won't stop a vote bomber from swooping in. it literally changes next to nothing. except less people will rate, likely.

Sethisto said...

@Cameron

It should be based on ip/account.

Cold in Gardez said...

Every author gets boned by the rating system at some point. Either you write the wrong ship, or you write a sad/dark/grim fic, or you write about the wrong characters, or someone just happens to be trolling that day. The more stories I write, the less I care about the star rating system.

Commenters like BruteForceFTW are the ones I'm talking about, in case it wasn't clear.

Present Perfect said...

@wackypony:
We need a new site, that's all there is to it. If even Sethisto is recognizing what's going on...

Derpmind said...

I was enjoying this until I realized how freaking huge it is. Saving the super-Twixie for later.

wackypony said...

@Sethisto

I agree. This current system is too exploitable.

@Cold In Gardez

I have to agree. though, i think that Brute was just trying to think of something to say other than first. Personally, I'll either abstain from reading a fic or I'll read the first few lines if it isn't something i normally read(which is anything other than shipping), or a pairing i find to be... eh(like Twixie).



as for this story, I read the first 30 or so lines. It's okay, from what i can tell. I'd be more apt to read it if I didn't have homework and another long, popular fic looming over me.

Cameron said...

@wackypony

You're not going to stop a dedicated vote bomber, but that's not what you're dealing with. It's just people who see content they don't agree with on the front page and give it a reactionary down vote. If that early window was gone, they'd ignore it and move on.

wackypony said...

@Cameron
yeah, you won't stop single vote bombers. what you will stop is large scale vote bombers who utilize multiple browsers/accounts to vote bomb.

Kits said...

@Sethisto
It's a shipfic, all shipfics get star bombed on EqD. At least for the last two months or so.
I watched a story get 20 1 stars in a row (mathematically, it could have been 19 1's and a 2) and drop from 4.7 to 3.7. In about 10 minutes. Same author had his other fic drop from 4.8 to 4.6 and gained 30 new votes that night.

Sethisto said...

@Present Perfect

We have fanfic sites. EQD just spotlights.

Cold in Gardez said...

@Present Perfect

I'm quite happy with EqD as a place to submit fanfics. The fact that its rating system isn't entirely perfect is no reason to abandon the ship.

On a side note, I'd like to apologize to the author of this particular fic for filling his story's comment string with completely unrelated discussion.

Lance Banson said...

>One-shot
>complete

Far from it. This story ended abruptly with nothing that even approached resolution or closure.

Pegasus Rescue Brigade said...

@Seth and the rest in this argument.

I really don't think we should abandon the rating system entirely; everything that gets on this site is good, but ratings can help us seperate the good from the Really good.

I've read interesting sounding stories from all genres, but let's face it, the 5 and 6 star ones are for the most part better than the rest.

Obviously, I have no bearing on the decision, but I think we need to remodel the rating system rather than remove it.

Sethisto said...

Lets stop bombarding this poor story's comments with this discussion :p

The Numberman said...

Gonna ignore Seth and continue discussing, but why don't pre-readers also assign a separate rating for the stories? That way you can balance user rating against the pre-readers rating and decide whether the story is worth your time.

Seems a simple enough solution to me.

ShadowCell said...

This story doesn't seem complete. It never resolves a lot of stuff, like Trixie's trial or the curse, which aren't really things you can just leave up to the reader while achieving any form of closure. And a lot of stuff remains unexplained, like Celestia sending Luna away; was she really kicking her sister out of the castle or was she just influenced by the spell?

also, lol at everyone so busy gravely discussing how to rate fanfics that they apparently can't be bothered to read the fanfic about which they are gravely discussing rating

Calpain said...

@Sethisto
Sounds like we may have found a topic for a new discussion post!

gamblinpony said...

This is pretty good...
...
...
DO THE DISCORD SHUFFLE!!!(music begins to play in the background)
Im sexy and i know it

cheezesauce said...
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Stryke said...

Now I'm a massive Twixie fan, massive but this I found barely readable at best. I'm leaving it unrated but as desperate as I am for more decent Twixie fics to stand up with Out in the Cold or Ballad of Twilight Sparkle I'm not going to rate a fic highly just because it had Twixie in it.

Earl Grey said...

Please, discuss on, I'm enjoying this xD

Taliesin said...
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Taliesin said...

Link to the original picture:

www.taliesin-the-dragoon.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d4b86lk

Earl Grey said...

@Taliesin

So you're the original artist? Awesome, I just found this somewhere and thought it would make a good image header.

I intended for it to be a metaphor of sorts. Trixie facing her "Ursa" which represents the dark stage of her life, and overcoming it, but not without some struggle.

LasloFreeman said...

Hmm...Star-bombed...
Is that a pun?

DashXColt said...

Let me make a clear, related comment:

The story is interesting (Twixie FTW), the events are fun to read, the formatting is fine, the end is open for interpretation or possible sequel, and it has The Great and Powerful Trixie being loved by all. Why are you not reading this? Five stars! Which technically it should be 6 stars, but since the limit is 5 stars, I'm going through an unnecessary run-on sentence to explain that I can only give 5 stars.

I mean... Seth rated it 5 stars. Last time I checked, once he approves something himself, it becomes immediately needed to be looked at. Since I've been here, he's never been wrong.

... I'm late to the party ,aren't I? Awesome story Earl! Truly inspired myself to write!

Baree said...

Yeah, this really feels unfinished. And why would you end a one shot on a cliffhanger?

Luna feels a bit odd too. Surely she can visit her sister? I dont know, the story just leaves me hanging. Or so it feels.

Earl Grey said...

@Baree

Of course she can visit her sister. I never said she was banned from Canterlot or anything. She just needs to reconnect with Equestria after one thousand years on the moon.

And for the people saying it feels incomplete, that's probably because I did plan a sequel, but I decided against it as this story isn't my personal headcanon and I decided to write another story which is.

Taliesin said...

@Earl Grey

oh it's perfectly fine, actually I'm flattered my piccie has been chosen as a fanfic cover art ^_^

Just thought it'd be fair to give the link to the original pic, eheh :)

iloveMLP said...

I am the all Powerful Trixie!!!

Worsh said...

To be honest, I really didn't enjoy this story. Don't get me wrong, I don't mind shipfics (I quite enjoy them, in fact) but there were just too many punctuation errors to overlook for me. The story also lacked the depth I was hoping for.

I'm normally one to enjoy long stories, but I honestly lost interest in this one long before it ended. If people say it will increase dramatically after the restaurant scene, perhaps I'll pick it up again, but... for now, no.

Kits said...

@Sethisto

Tis a lie!

This story was dictator posted by you Seth :P

cheezesauce said...

@Worsh
i kind of lost interest as well. I think the story needs more foreshadowing. Give us more hints that something interesting is about to happen, force us to continue reading on.

I was a little confused from the first to middle bits of the story. I didn’t really get what’s going on, because a lot is left unexplained till much, much later in the story i guess.
Why does the spell work on the Princesses? These are goddesses of the Sun and Moon. And they are deceived by an old spell? I find this hard to believe. Anyway, if that is the case, then surely such a powerful spell should be like... locked up with a lot of security? After that, Celestia quickly dismisses Luna. I don’t think Celestia would ever do that. We’ve seen how much she loves her sister and cares about her feelings. I’m assuming this is part of the effects from the spell. I’m not very sure about this because it wasn’t explicitly explained in the story. (until later)
Later, Twilight somehow feels attracted to Trixie. Is this from the spell too? If so, why doesn’t everyone else get attracted as well? And why does Trixie like Twilight?

I’m sure all this would have been cleared up by the end. Only because I read the page of spoilers. Judging from that, it’s quite a decent plot. But while I was actually reading the first half of the story, I didn’t like it.

TenchiFreak5 said...

It's a shame that this story ended on such a blatant sequel hook with so many (fairly important, no less) bits unresolved, because once it got past the slow-burn that it had in the start it really became an enjoyable read.

LordOfTheWrongs said...

I lost interest at the restaurant scene. Twixie shipping out of nowhere (at least on Trixie's part), and it's written more like a script than a story -- just a long list of quotes and actions, without any hint of what's going on inside Trixie's head. Booored.

Mashed Banana said...

This is so silly...

"I'm a doctor! I earned my doctorate in friendship!" :D

Ha.

Shantara said...
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Shantara said...

This fic was star-bombed, so let me explain why I gave it a low rating.

There's no feeling of character development for Trixie. It's as if she was just replaced by a nicer pony at some point of the story.
Poor Luna was sent away from Canterlot and her night was taken away from her based on a word of a pony her sister met for the first time in her life. After the mess is over Celestia did not change her decision like it was the right thing to do. WTF?
The consequences of Trixie's actions are not explored. The court is mentioned, but is never shown.
The fic has no ending, text just abruptly ends at some point.

I love Twixie, but cannot rate this story higher than 2/5.

metapsionic said...

I found this fic to be rather lacking, both in 'what's going on in Trixie's head' and in explaining what's going on. Twixie shipping was a bit out of nowhere, it never got explained when it crossed the line between the spell's mind-control and genuine affection. And the abrupt ending is a big deal. This was some juicy material you skipped on, the fallout of the spell.

All the same, a nice effort, and thank you for sharing :-)

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