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Author: Potato Joe
Description: A Mishap with the Elements of Harmony leave Twilight and Discord with each others powers.Your Best Shot (New Part 2!)
Additional Tags: Body and magic switches suck.
Description: A Mishap with the Elements of Harmony leave Twilight and Discord with each others powers.Your Best Shot (New Part 2!)
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I'm glad to see this one up. I saw this on FIMFiction and gave it a look. Quite a fun little read.
I've read this before. It's good, but Pinkie tends to beat you over the head with her medium awareness whenever she talks.
Oh THIS can't bode well...
Sounds like the beginning of an awesome story.
Let the Chaos Ensue
*hipsterglasses* I read this before it was on EQD.
Seriously though, its a fun concept and well written. Curious to see what he'll do with...ah, sorry. No spoilers...
Interesting. Even if I already have TONS of more fabrics to read with so little time. XD
Found this on FiMFiction the other day. A nice piece to chortle over, as are the other works he has going.
Oh, cool... glad to see this made it to EQD. It's such a fun premise and the first few chapters have been a kick. DiscoLight makes such an adorable monstrosity.
This story is fairly solid with some exceptions, grammatically speaking, although you have a particular tendency to abuse the dash. The dash is a powerful piece of punctuation; use it with restraint. I have issues with the phrasing occasionally, but this does not detract from the overall piece. I feel the biggest failing of this piece is its inability to keep me interested.
If you wondering why this story is ranked so low, having a somewhat interesting premise, it is because it has a horribly written synopsis. A synopsis is supposed to be an eyecatch for any prospect reader, and the readers here love judging based on premise and synopsis rather than actual content.
If Twilight has Discord's powers, and Discord is a shapeshifter, then couldn't Twilight just shapeshift back to her original unicorn form?
Absolutely adding this to my 'watch' list. Sounds great but I'm gonna wait for it to finish first.
>>Cassius said...
>>...tendency to abuse the dash...
On this site, that sentence puts very different thoughts in my head... *huggles abused dashie*
Oh hey, nice to see this one come up to EQD!
Seeing the comments, I'm gonna have to read it. Also, I've read enough grimdark fanfics so far...
does fimfic hav more stories than eqd?
I loved this before it was on EQD *hipster*
It's about time this one appeared here.
@Municipal Engines
Perhaps if she can ever figure out how to control them, she will be able to.
@karrotline
Anyone can post their story on FimFiction, FanFiction.net, Pony Fiction Archive, etc.
EqD is a blog where submitted stories are first vetted for "quality" and content by a group of select pre-readers before being approved for posting.
So yes, there are many more stories out there than on EqD, but usually the ones on EqD are the better ones.
Anyway. Great story. I'll give it 5 here, but rated 4.5 on FimFiction due to Pinkie being really really annoying in this.
Wow. I'm actually really digging this. More please.
Oh this is pretty good! i like where it's going!
This story is amazing, and Discolight is waaaayyyy cuter than she should be.
It's pretty interesting so far.
Where's the pinkie pie fourth wall tag? It happens enough to warrant a warning int he tags.
Good story so far.
Cool that it made it to EQD,
Been following this one for a while, and Im simply waiting for the next chapter to come out.
in a way...i expected a fanfiction like this to happen...IM-A READIN
I was turned off right at the beginning. It seemed to be a pretty half-assed reimagining of Return Of Harmony Part 2. Rainbow Dash shows up, still discorded, even though she should have been completely drained of any desire to leave "Cloudsdale". Also, Celestia shows up to save the day, despite establishing that she is unable to lend assistance to the Mane 6 in Part 1.
Do I really want to read any further if the author isn't going to bother with consistent characterization?
Lol this story's already open on an other tab!
To be honest, this is quite a decent fan fiction. At first, I thought it might not quite make it, but as I continued on, I realised it was in fact really interesting, albeit rather unrealistic.
@Tast
*Scotty appears* Aye! This is just a wee problem, lads! All yeh need ta do is reverse the polarity of the Heisenberg compensators and amplify the negative flux on the transporter pads!
*Bones attempts to analyze Twilight with a tricorder, which goes all wonky near the chaotic magic* Dammit, Celestia! I'm a doctor not a magician!
@Tast
He also threatened to kill Pip. That means his evil has now kicked up a notch from 'sly trickster' to 'psychopath'. AJ, hit him REALLY HARD with that mace. But not on the head. That's too easy a way out. Right between the hindlegs, if you get my drift. >:3
@Spikely Whiplash
for fun? Isnt that why anyone reads fanfics?
Ah wtf, Celestia. Treat Discord like a monster but still love Twilight? Discord would be furious.
@Alondro
He may simply be desperate now. He could afford to be merciful when he had godlike powers, but now he's got to get stuff done the hard way.
I'm an anonymous user and what is this.
Okay, this is a pretty good story. The concept is unique enough (well, actually I don't think its ever been done before) to make it interesting.
@Spikely Whiplash Yes, because fan fiction is all about "What if" not "The series dictates"
I can't say I appreciated some of the early humor ("Dust this *****!", "made a quick check of her..."). Pinkie Pie's breaking of the 4th wall seems a little too extreme (mature rating? websites?), and her behavior seems a bit odd, even for her. But the concept is very interesting, and the storyline itself looks solid. Overall, a good fanfic.
@Spikely Whiplash
When you make such scathing criticisms, be sure to actually be accurate about them. Posing a what-if scenario, which is basically what this story does, is not even remotely the same thing as desecrating a character's personality in the story.
Discorded Dash showed up. By the time the Mane Six went after her, she had stopped worrying about Cloudsdale. To assume the possibility existed for her to wonder on the scene at the time Twilight was attempting to fix things with "THE NEW RAINBOW DASH" is not inconsistent characterization.
Celly helped save the day (more or less). Nothing in the episode outright stated that she was incapable of helping with the fight against Discord; which means it is also not inconsistent characterization.
What you are actually looking for is "I don't like the premise," which is fair enough but not at all the same thing as "this story has major problems" and is more along the lines of "this is your problem rather than the author's."
New Chapter!
*Spoilers*
I must admit, I didn't like this. Pinkies characterisation seemed very off to me and some of the humor just didn't fit what I like and though the premise interested me i'm not sure I like the direction it's going.
while Discord may have been more desperate I can't see him acting like that, he went a bit far and I really didn't expect what happened to Trixie (and I don't even like her much)
I don't think it's badly written it simply doesn't suit me at all, I found it hard to keep interested.
I will say that I love all the stuff with Twilight.
All the stuff with Discord is just... meh.
It's almost like 2 stories.
** TWO NEW CHAPTERS! **
...well, more like one and 0.02 chapters. :/
*also, SPOILER ALERT!*
I didn't quite get the "WHAM" joke, despite considering myself quite literate when it comes to internet culture.
Also, I "read" fanfics by converting them into audiofiles through text-to-speech software.
That last chapter had about 6 minutes of "WHAM WHAM WHAM WHAM" in it, so that seemed even more pointless. *rolleyes*
Concerning Trixie, as I'm certain several people before me have stated, that seemed a bit ...extreme.
Well, alright, you DID set the stage for Discord being more than merely a "meany-mean-pants" this time around prior with the scene of him threatening to throw an innocent child off a cloud, so it didn't come COMPLETELLY out of left-field.
(Although there seems to be a lack of "dark/grimdark" tag up there, which is somewhat annoying for people who just want to read a quick MLP-fic to lighten their mood, and then bump into stuff like that. -_-)
Obviously, still, I'd prefer for nopony else to be brutally murdered.
Also, he SO totally has to PAY for his crimes. >:-[
But again, as for Trixie... well, I don't know enough about magic to say if you can recover from being ripped into pieces like that even if Discord was to lose his new-found powers. o___o;
Just one thing: Make sure her fate is known.
It would be a rather sad and especially cruel death if noone ever even found out what happend. :´(
(maybe don't tell the poor townsponies, they'd be traumatized for life... just, say, have Discord spill it out himself while trying to intimidate the others or something)
But generally, I find the story/concept interesting and am looking foreward to further chapters. Well, just please don't wack your readers with a hammer for 90% of a chapter next time, 'k? ;)
I gotta say with this newest Chapter Seth would probably love this story
Twilight gets the powers of the spirit of discord and becomes completely ineffective.
Discord gets Twilight's powers and is suddenly a major threat instead of a joke.
This is why 'OP' is her middle name.
Oh man, dat Wham Episode...XD
You, sir, are a Troping Champion!
I like how Discord is kinda taken care of now. And the scene with the book pit was genius. I wonder what Twi's mosh pit was like? Was it filled with Twi clones rocking out to a good Beethoofen?
Keep up the awesome, PotatoeJoe!
Discord was wham-ed exactly 598 times. Sheesh
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