• Story: Your Best Shot (Update Part 2!)

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    Author: Potato Joe
    Description: A Mishap with the Elements of Harmony leave Twilight and Discord with each others powers.
    Your Best Shot (New Part 2!)

    Additional Tags: Body and magic switches suck.
    Sunday, December 11, 2011 op
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    47 comments:

    1. TenchiFreak5December 11, 2011 at 1:02 PM

      I'm glad to see this one up. I saw this on FIMFiction and gave it a look. Quite a fun little read.

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    2. AnonymousDecember 11, 2011 at 1:02 PM

      I've read this before. It's good, but Pinkie tends to beat you over the head with her medium awareness whenever she talks.

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    3. SuperGiantRobotDecember 11, 2011 at 1:10 PM

      Oh THIS can't bode well...

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    4. Rodrigo OsorioDecember 11, 2011 at 1:13 PM

      Sounds like the beginning of an awesome story.

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    5. Dr.Dͪ͊ͦḮ̘ͯS̔̐̓C̹̔Ò͓͙̫R̀͠͞D͙̫December 11, 2011 at 1:13 PM

      Let the Chaos Ensue

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    6. XeddriefDecember 11, 2011 at 1:13 PM

      *hipsterglasses* I read this before it was on EQD.

      Seriously though, its a fun concept and well written. Curious to see what he'll do with...ah, sorry. No spoilers...

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    7. UnknownDecember 11, 2011 at 1:17 PM

      Interesting. Even if I already have TONS of more fabrics to read with so little time. XD

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    8. Party FavorsDecember 11, 2011 at 1:21 PM

      Found this on FiMFiction the other day. A nice piece to chortle over, as are the other works he has going.

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    9. AJDecember 11, 2011 at 1:24 PM

      Oh, cool... glad to see this made it to EQD. It's such a fun premise and the first few chapters have been a kick. DiscoLight makes such an adorable monstrosity.

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    10. CassiusDecember 11, 2011 at 1:33 PM

      This story is fairly solid with some exceptions, grammatically speaking, although you have a particular tendency to abuse the dash. The dash is a powerful piece of punctuation; use it with restraint. I have issues with the phrasing occasionally, but this does not detract from the overall piece. I feel the biggest failing of this piece is its inability to keep me interested.

      If you wondering why this story is ranked so low, having a somewhat interesting premise, it is because it has a horribly written synopsis. A synopsis is supposed to be an eyecatch for any prospect reader, and the readers here love judging based on premise and synopsis rather than actual content.

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    11. Municipal EnginesDecember 11, 2011 at 1:42 PM

      If Twilight has Discord's powers, and Discord is a shapeshifter, then couldn't Twilight just shapeshift back to her original unicorn form?

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    12. AshtonDecember 11, 2011 at 1:43 PM

      Absolutely adding this to my 'watch' list. Sounds great but I'm gonna wait for it to finish first.

      >>Cassius said...
      >>...tendency to abuse the dash...

      On this site, that sentence puts very different thoughts in my head... *huggles abused dashie*

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    13. UnknownDecember 11, 2011 at 1:44 PM

      Oh hey, nice to see this one come up to EQD!

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    14. AnonymousDecember 11, 2011 at 1:53 PM

      Seeing the comments, I'm gonna have to read it. Also, I've read enough grimdark fanfics so far...

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    15. kawolineDecember 11, 2011 at 2:00 PM

      does fimfic hav more stories than eqd?

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    16. smokeydops2December 11, 2011 at 2:04 PM

      I loved this before it was on EQD *hipster*

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    17. TheMagisterDecember 11, 2011 at 2:05 PM

      It's about time this one appeared here.

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    18. AJDecember 11, 2011 at 2:06 PM

      @Municipal Engines

      Perhaps if she can ever figure out how to control them, she will be able to.

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    19. DPV111December 11, 2011 at 2:06 PM

      @karrotline

      Anyone can post their story on FimFiction, FanFiction.net, Pony Fiction Archive, etc.

      EqD is a blog where submitted stories are first vetted for "quality" and content by a group of select pre-readers before being approved for posting.

      So yes, there are many more stories out there than on EqD, but usually the ones on EqD are the better ones.

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    20. DPV111December 11, 2011 at 2:08 PM

      Anyway. Great story. I'll give it 5 here, but rated 4.5 on FimFiction due to Pinkie being really really annoying in this.

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    21. ToonNinjaDecember 11, 2011 at 2:09 PM

      Wow. I'm actually really digging this. More please.

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    22. Ben GibsonDecember 11, 2011 at 2:23 PM

      Oh this is pretty good! i like where it's going!

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    23. Admiral SparkleDecember 11, 2011 at 2:40 PM

      This story is amazing, and Discolight is waaaayyyy cuter than she should be.

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    24. MuffinsforeverDecember 11, 2011 at 2:42 PM

      It's pretty interesting so far.

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    25. AlexReffandDecember 11, 2011 at 3:05 PM

      Where's the pinkie pie fourth wall tag? It happens enough to warrant a warning int he tags.

      Good story so far.

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    26. Phoenix QuillDecember 11, 2011 at 3:54 PM

      Cool that it made it to EQD,
      Been following this one for a while, and Im simply waiting for the next chapter to come out.

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    27. crris14December 11, 2011 at 4:25 PM

      in a way...i expected a fanfiction like this to happen...IM-A READIN

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    28. Spikely WhiplashDecember 11, 2011 at 4:37 PM

      I was turned off right at the beginning. It seemed to be a pretty half-assed reimagining of Return Of Harmony Part 2. Rainbow Dash shows up, still discorded, even though she should have been completely drained of any desire to leave "Cloudsdale". Also, Celestia shows up to save the day, despite establishing that she is unable to lend assistance to the Mane 6 in Part 1.

      Do I really want to read any further if the author isn't going to bother with consistent characterization?

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    29. AnonymousDecember 11, 2011 at 4:55 PM

      Lol this story's already open on an other tab!

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    30. karimDecember 11, 2011 at 5:16 PM

      To be honest, this is quite a decent fan fiction. At first, I thought it might not quite make it, but as I continued on, I realised it was in fact really interesting, albeit rather unrealistic.

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    31. AlondroDecember 11, 2011 at 5:27 PM

      @Tast

      *Scotty appears* Aye! This is just a wee problem, lads! All yeh need ta do is reverse the polarity of the Heisenberg compensators and amplify the negative flux on the transporter pads!

      *Bones attempts to analyze Twilight with a tricorder, which goes all wonky near the chaotic magic* Dammit, Celestia! I'm a doctor not a magician!

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    32. AlondroDecember 11, 2011 at 5:29 PM

      @Tast

      He also threatened to kill Pip. That means his evil has now kicked up a notch from 'sly trickster' to 'psychopath'. AJ, hit him REALLY HARD with that mace. But not on the head. That's too easy a way out. Right between the hindlegs, if you get my drift. >:3

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    33. ArmageddonDecember 11, 2011 at 5:29 PM

      @Spikely Whiplash
      for fun? Isnt that why anyone reads fanfics?

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    34. BryanDecember 11, 2011 at 5:52 PM

      @Alondro

      He may simply be desperate now. He could afford to be merciful when he had godlike powers, but now he's got to get stuff done the hard way.

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    35. TundraDecember 11, 2011 at 6:48 PM

      I'm an anonymous user and what is this.

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    36. SightlessOneDecember 11, 2011 at 9:22 PM

      Okay, this is a pretty good story. The concept is unique enough (well, actually I don't think its ever been done before) to make it interesting.

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    37. Wanderer DDecember 11, 2011 at 9:52 PM

      @Spikely Whiplash Yes, because fan fiction is all about "What if" not "The series dictates"

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    38. PikariDecember 11, 2011 at 11:39 PM

      I can't say I appreciated some of the early humor ("Dust this *****!", "made a quick check of her..."). Pinkie Pie's breaking of the 4th wall seems a little too extreme (mature rating? websites?), and her behavior seems a bit odd, even for her. But the concept is very interesting, and the storyline itself looks solid. Overall, a good fanfic.

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    39. TenchiFreak5December 11, 2011 at 11:47 PM

      @Spikely Whiplash

      When you make such scathing criticisms, be sure to actually be accurate about them. Posing a what-if scenario, which is basically what this story does, is not even remotely the same thing as desecrating a character's personality in the story.


      Discorded Dash showed up. By the time the Mane Six went after her, she had stopped worrying about Cloudsdale. To assume the possibility existed for her to wonder on the scene at the time Twilight was attempting to fix things with "THE NEW RAINBOW DASH" is not inconsistent characterization.

      Celly helped save the day (more or less). Nothing in the episode outright stated that she was incapable of helping with the fight against Discord; which means it is also not inconsistent characterization.



      What you are actually looking for is "I don't like the premise," which is fair enough but not at all the same thing as "this story has major problems" and is more along the lines of "this is your problem rather than the author's."

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    40. DPV111December 13, 2011 at 7:43 PM

      New Chapter!

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    41. CelestiaDecember 13, 2011 at 8:54 PM

      *Spoilers*

      I must admit, I didn't like this. Pinkies characterisation seemed very off to me and some of the humor just didn't fit what I like and though the premise interested me i'm not sure I like the direction it's going.

      while Discord may have been more desperate I can't see him acting like that, he went a bit far and I really didn't expect what happened to Trixie (and I don't even like her much)

      I don't think it's badly written it simply doesn't suit me at all, I found it hard to keep interested.

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    42. DPV111December 14, 2011 at 9:27 PM

      I will say that I love all the stuff with Twilight.
      All the stuff with Discord is just... meh.

      It's almost like 2 stories.

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    43. Ultra The HedgeToasterJanuary 5, 2012 at 5:10 AM

      ** TWO NEW CHAPTERS! **
      ...well, more like one and 0.02 chapters. :/

      *also, SPOILER ALERT!*


      I didn't quite get the "WHAM" joke, despite considering myself quite literate when it comes to internet culture.
      Also, I "read" fanfics by converting them into audiofiles through text-to-speech software.
      That last chapter had about 6 minutes of "WHAM WHAM WHAM WHAM" in it, so that seemed even more pointless. *rolleyes*


      Concerning Trixie, as I'm certain several people before me have stated, that seemed a bit ...extreme.
      Well, alright, you DID set the stage for Discord being more than merely a "meany-mean-pants" this time around prior with the scene of him threatening to throw an innocent child off a cloud, so it didn't come COMPLETELLY out of left-field.
      (Although there seems to be a lack of "dark/grimdark" tag up there, which is somewhat annoying for people who just want to read a quick MLP-fic to lighten their mood, and then bump into stuff like that. -_-)

      Obviously, still, I'd prefer for nopony else to be brutally murdered.
      Also, he SO totally has to PAY for his crimes. >:-[

      But again, as for Trixie... well, I don't know enough about magic to say if you can recover from being ripped into pieces like that even if Discord was to lose his new-found powers. o___o;
      Just one thing: Make sure her fate is known.
      It would be a rather sad and especially cruel death if noone ever even found out what happend. :´(
      (maybe don't tell the poor townsponies, they'd be traumatized for life... just, say, have Discord spill it out himself while trying to intimidate the others or something)




      But generally, I find the story/concept interesting and am looking foreward to further chapters. Well, just please don't wack your readers with a hammer for 90% of a chapter next time, 'k? ;)

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    44. AnonymousFebruary 16, 2012 at 5:51 AM

      I gotta say with this newest Chapter Seth would probably love this story

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    45. terryclothFebruary 16, 2012 at 10:31 AM

      Twilight gets the powers of the spirit of discord and becomes completely ineffective.

      Discord gets Twilight's powers and is suddenly a major threat instead of a joke.

      This is why 'OP' is her middle name.

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    46. BugsydorFebruary 16, 2012 at 11:35 AM

      Oh man, dat Wham Episode...XD

      You, sir, are a Troping Champion!

      I like how Discord is kinda taken care of now. And the scene with the book pit was genius. I wonder what Twi's mosh pit was like? Was it filled with Twi clones rocking out to a good Beethoofen?

      Keep up the awesome, PotatoeJoe!

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    47. SleipnirFebruary 17, 2012 at 1:16 AM

      Discord was wham-ed exactly 598 times. Sheesh

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