Friday, December 9, 2011

Story: My Gift


[Dark]

Author: SoundofRainfall
Description: Luna's mental breakdown before trying to bring forth eternal night, as told from her point of view.
My Gift

Additional Tags: Madness, Arrogance, Equality

20 comments:

Gypsy said...

I like to believe she was raped in the day

OtterMatt said...

"Madness, Arrogance, Equality"

Sponsored by the NAACP?
/rimshot
/I kid, I kid

Sigil said...

Very interesting.

karrotline said...

@gypsy

lol, WHAT!!!!???

Warden said...

This was intriguing.

Maquabra said...

Sounds cheesy. Has anyone here read it already?

moocow1452 said...

Usual Stream of Consciousness rant, nothing special really.

Corky64 said...
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Klice said...
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Klice said...

Nice story ! I really like the concept.

I don't know where else I could ask, so I'll do it here : Is somebody knows where to find a nightmare moon fight story in Celestia's point of view ?

Thanks in advance and sorry for polluting the comments.

Cloudhammer said...

Very dark and menacing, I like it so far, will keep an eye out for sequels

Gypsy said...

@Karrotline

well ya see you don't turn into some freakin' evil version of yourself because you got jelous of ponies fuckin' sleeping and shit, no, for that crazy mofo it had traumatizing to get what she had. So I'm like she probably got raped in the day so because of that experience she got trauma

Maquabra said...

@Corky64:
Well, this idea is actually overused. After reading a few dark/grimdark fics, I must say that they are pretty much repetitive. What's worse, when I was trying to write my own one, I was finding along the way fics with my "original" ideas o) Don't want to write the same shit for the 100th time so I need to come up with more ideas before I continue... Time to go totally off-canon.

Sleepingcobrox said...

I will say that this story of Luna's perspective really works here. I suggest you all read through this story to the very end

Wolfietreehollow said...

Well, you already got my review on FF dot net, but I'm still going to comment here anyways~ (: This story is breathtaking; perfect example of why you'll always be my favorite author!

Pokeball 2525 said...

I must say it is decent a decent fiction, grammar

Pokeball 2525 said...

I must say it is decent a decent fic, grammar was good flow was good but it felt like an unbalance in the atmosphere,too much head-cannon and not enough cannon from the mind of the princess of the nigh.The nicknames that Celestia gives her the way she acts when she running and most of all the Luna's monologue to herself doesn't feel like something Luna would say.Granted Luna doesn't have much screen much less the royal family and time and your head-cannon will be your head-cannon but all the same I felt my immersion constantly being ripped away from me whenever I started to read Luna dialog or your narration of her inner thoughts. But it's also your competing with great stories like upheaval:breaking point and heavenly turmoil casting some pretty big shadows on your work and shaping the communities view on the possibilities of the royal family mentality. Some decent works on Luna as the a character would be Night's favorite child and a few other but keep doing what your doing it's great work.

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